Unit2TheUniversalLanguage写作之读后续写课件高中英语译林版选择性

Unit2

TheUniversalLanguage译林版2020选择性必修第一册读后续写：与音乐相关读话题写作文高二上

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。12技法点拨

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写作实践

技法点拨：

如何衔接连贯01⑴照应①人称照应：人称照应是通过人称代词（如I、you、he、she、they、him、her、them等）、所属限定词（如your、his、her、their等)和所属代词(如mine、his、hers、theirs等）来实现的。

②指示照应：用于指示照应的词也可以分为3类：名词性指示词：this、that、these、those；定冠词the；副词性指示词：her，their、now、then。

③比较照应：比较照应指使用一些有比较意义的形容词或副词的比较级表达连贯的语义（如same、as、so、equal、such、similarly、differently、other、otherwise、likewise等表示的照应关系）。1.读后续写常用语篇衔接技巧⑵替代和省略①替代：替代是用其他词代替上文提及的内容，这样可以避免重复，达到语言凝练，语句连贯的目的。替代有名词性替代（如one、ones、some等）、动词性替代（如do、does、did、doing、done等）和从句性替代（如so、not等）。②省略：省略的作用同替代相似，省略可以使上下语义联系紧密，强调作者要表达的中心意思。省略大致分为3类：名词性省略、动词性省略、分句性省略。1.读后续写常用语篇衔接技巧⑶连接词连接词指表示能把两个或多个短句衔接起来的表达一定逻辑关系的词。常见的连接词为4大类：增补（如and、also、too、furthermore等）、转折或对比（如but、yet、still、nevertheless、though、while、however等）、原因或结果（如because、for、as、since等）和时间（如first、second、third等）。⑷词汇衔接词汇衔接指通过词的重复、同义、反义、上下义、互补、整体与部分等关系来使语篇语义连贯（详见表1和表2）。1.读后续写常用语篇衔接技巧表1：高考英语读后续写中的衔接手段举例试题句子表达举例衔接手段分析2016年10月浙江卷Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”and

walked

away.照应：she/us连接词：so...that.../and2017年6月浙江卷AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.照应：he/them词汇衔接：as/and2018年6月浙江卷

Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.照应：it/us连接词：and

2020年1月浙江卷Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.照应：there2020年新高考I卷“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”照应：her/his连接词：and/but

2021年1月浙江卷Myexcitementwasshort-lived...

IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle，butitwasnouse."Ican'tgetitout!"Ishouted，myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.照应:my/I连接词：as/and/but

2021年新高考I卷ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.照应：he/his连接词：and/but/then/aswell表2：过渡衔接词举例逻辑关系常见过渡词语表添加信息and,also,too,besides,moreover,aswellas,either…or,neither…nor…,furthermore,inaddition,whatismore,notonly…butalso,worsestill表转折关系but,yet,however,although,ontheotherhand,otherwise,while,rather,still,nevertheless，inspiteof,onthecontrary,whereas,incontrast表递进关系besides,again,moreover,worsestill,aboveall,certainly,furthermore,what’smore,inaddition,importantofall,tomakematterworse表因果关系so,for,therefore,asaresult,because,owingto,dueto,thanksto,therefore,since,thus,hence,onaccountof,consequently,asaconsequence,itfollowsthat…表条件关系as(so)

longas,if,unless,onconditionthat表解释、说明关系actually,infact,suchas,forexample／instance,andsoon,accordingto,afterall,even,indeed,itistime,ofcourse,specifically,truly,namely,thatis,thatistosay,inotherwords,totellyouthetruth,anillustrationof,tobespecific,toillustrate表强调indeed,surely,certainly,truly,especially,withoutanydoubt,obviously,aboveall,Itis…that…表时间顺序关系now,after,afterthat,atfirst,inthebeginning,tobeginwith,later,next,finally,soon,suddenly,before,when,while,as,during,first…second…,then,intheend,afterwards,afterawhile,immediately,allofasudden,atthatmoment,assoonas,fromnowon,fromthenon,meanwhile,not…until,eventually

表空间顺序关系ontheright／left,inthemiddle／centerof／back／frontof,here,there,nextto,ononesideof…ontheothersideof,onthefoot／top／end表结论asyouknow,asfarasIknow,onthewhole,inone’sopinion,inshort,inbrief,inaword,ingeneral写作实践：

音乐相关读后续写02阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

WhenIfirstmovedtothesouthofAmericainthesummerholidaybeforemiddleschool,IrealizedthatIwassteppingintoacompletelydifferentworld.NewOrleans,Louisiana,wasunlikeanyplaceIhadeverbeento.IntheFrenchQuarter,touristswalkedaroundallyearwithlongskinnycupsintheirhands,andtherewasapopulargamegoingonthestreetswhichwerecrowdedwithcarsbuthadfewpeople.Whatsurprisedmemorethananything,though,wastheconstantfriendlinessandcompassionofthepeopleofNewOrleans.“WhatcanIgetforyou,sugar?”awaitressaboutmyageaskedmeonmyfirstdayinNewOrleans.Iwastakenaback.Thewaitressdidnotevenknowme,butshetreatedmelikefamily.ShesmileddownatmeasIpointedtoanitemonthemenu.“Isthepastagood?”Iaskedher.“It’snotmyfavourite,”sheadmittedwithasmile.“ButI’mmoreofagirlwhoprefersrice!”Sheshrugged,lettingoutaloudlaughter.Ilookedatherinshock.WhatwasIsupposedtosaytothat?Icouldn’tbelievethatthewaitresshadjustpreventedmefromorderingsomething.Actually,shehadgivenmeherhonestopinion,asifwewerebestfriends.Sheeventoldmehername—Mary.Sheeventoldmethatshejustworkedasapart-timewaitressandthatshewouldbeahighschoolstudentsoon.AfterafewdaysinNewOrleans,Igotusedtokindremindersandpolitegreetings.IalsorealizedhowcomfortingitwastobetreatedlikeIbelongwhereverIwent.AssoonasIsettledintomynewhighschool,Iadaptedmyselftotheschoollife.IwasdrawntothelivelymusicscenethatNewOrleanswasfamousfor.Iwasatrumpet(小号)player,andIwantedtojointheschoolmusicclub.However,IwasafraidthatIwastoopoorinmusictobequalifiedfortheschoolmusicclub.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:Oneafternoon,Iwassurprisedtoseeagroupofstudents,includingMarypracticingjazzintheschoolplayground.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Finally,withMary’sencouragement,myhesitationslowlymeltedaway.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析文章以人物为线索，主要讲述了一个中学生在升入中学前的暑假期间，初次搬到美国南部新奥尔良的生活经历。新奥尔良独特的人文风情和居民们的友好态度给主人公留下了深刻印象，尤其是侍应生玛丽的亲切交流，让主人公感受到如同家一般的温暖。随着时间推移，主人公不仅适应了新奥尔良的生活方式，还在新的高中里被当地蓬勃的音乐氛围所吸引。作为一名小号手，虽然担心自己的音乐水平不足以加入学校的音乐俱乐部，但主人公依然被这座城市独有的魅力和人们之间的善意所鼓舞，在玛丽的鼓励和帮助下，她决定勇敢地追寻着自己的音乐梦想和归属感。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenInthesummerholidaybeforemiddleschoolwhereNewOrleans,LouisianawhoI;MarryWhatMarryhelpedmeandencouragedmetogotusedtothenewlife.WhyIwasafraidthatIwastoopoorinmusictobequalifiedfortheschoolmusicclub.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节①根据一段的首句“Oneafternoon,Iwassurprisedtoseeagroupofstudents,includingMarypracticingjazzintheschoolplayground.一天下午，我惊讶地看到包括玛丽在内的一群学生在学校操场上练习爵士乐。”可知，本段可描写玛丽邀请作者一起加入乐队，但是作者没有自信，对此犹豫不决。在此段续写中，根据技巧点拨，我们可以采用如“herfingers,she,hereyes”等人称照应，以使文章更加衔接紧凑。思路点拨②根据第二段首句“Finally,withMary’sencouragement,myhesitationslowlymeltedaway.最后，在玛丽的鼓励下，我的犹豫慢慢消失了。”可知，本段可描写作者在玛丽的鼓励下，加入了乐队，通过不断地练习，作者取得了进步，增强了自信心。在此段续写中，我们可以多用如“and”等连接词以及“finally,because”等词汇衔接，以使文章表达更顺畅。2.续写线索：邀请加入——没有信心，犹豫不决——鼓励——加入乐队——不断练习——自信心增强——感悟思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点1922第三步：巧用话题词汇、句式完成句子1.Thevibrantnotesoftrumpets,saxophones,anddrumsintermingledunderthewarmsun,___________________________________________________(奏出一曲和谐的交响乐，回荡在校园里).2.Mary,___________________________________________(手指在她的小号的阀瓣上跳舞),noticedmewatchingfromafarandbeckonedmeoverwithaninvitingsmile.3.“Youplay,don'tyou?Comejoinus!”sheshoutedabovethemusic,__________________________________(眼睛里闪烁着真诚的热情).4.Myheartraced;_________________________________(这是我暗自希望的机会),yetmyinsecuritiesheldmeback.完成句子creatingaharmonioussymphonythatechoedthroughoutthecampusherfingersdancingacrossthevalvesofhertrumpethereyessparkingwithgenuineenthusiasmthiswasthechanceIhadsecretlyhopedfor5.Thegroupwarmlywelcomedme,_______________________________(他们的接纳消除了我的恐惧).6.__________________________(在Mary耐心的指导下),Ibegantofindmyrhythmwithintheensemble.7.___________________________________________________________________________________________(通过这次经历，我明白了，有时候，需要朋友的一点推动，才能意识到自己的潜力，并真正属于自己).完成句子theiracceptancedispellingmyfearsUnderMary’spatientguidanceThroughthisexperience,Ilearnedthatsometimes,ittakesalittlepushfromafriendtorealizeone’spotentialandtrulybelongOneafternoon,IwassurprisedtoseeagroupofstudentsincludingMarypracticingjazzintheschoolplayground.Thevibrantnotesoftrumpets,saxophones,anddrumsintermingledunderthewarmsun,creatingaharmonioussymphonythatechoedthroughoutthecampus(衔接句).Mary,herfingersdancingacrossthevalvesofhertrumpet(独立主格),noticedmewatchingfromafarandbeckonedmeoverwithaninvitingsmile(动作链).“Youplay,don'tyou?Comejoinus!”sheshoutedabovethemusic,hereyessparklingwithgenuineenthusiasm(独立主格+神态描写).Myheartraced;thiswasthechanceIhadsecretlyhopedfor,yetmyinsecuritiesheldmeback(衔接结尾句；心理描写). Finally,withMary’sencouragement,myhesitationslowlymeltedaway.Finally,Igatheredmycourageandapproachedtheensemble,trumpetinhand(衔接句).Thegroupwarmlywelcomedme,theiracceptancedispellingmyfears.UnderMary’spatientguidance,Ibegantofindmyrhythmwithintheensemble.Ourpracticesbecameahavenwheremistakestransformedintolearningopportunities,andeverynoteplayedstrengthenedmyconfidence.Throughthisexperience,Ilearnedthatsometimes,ittakesalittlepushfromafriendtorealizeone’spotentialandtrulybelong(主题升华).佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

IrememberthatIwaswornoutwhenIgothomethatafternoon.I'dhadtobeatthetheatrefortheaudition(试演)atninethatmorning,andthenI'dbeenwaitingaroundforaboutthreehoursbeforethedirectorfinallysawme.IperformedmysongandalmostatoncehetoldmeIcouldgohome.“Iamverysorry,”hesaid,“butyourvoiceisn'tquiterightforthepart.”IthadbeenasimilarstoryatalltheauditionsthatI'ddoneoverthepastfewweeks.IthadbeenmydreamforyearstobeinafamousmusicallikeTheSoundofMusicorMammaMia,soI'dtakenlessonsinsinginganddancing,andhadcometothecitytotryandgetapartinashow.I'dbeenreallypleasedwhenI'dmanagedtosetupnofewerthantenauditions,butsofarallofthemhadgonethesameway.AsIarrivedbackthatafternoonatthelittleapartmentwhereIrentedaroom,IreallywonderedwhetherIshouldbothergoingtotheelevenththenextmorning.ItwasashowI'dhavelovedtobein—butreally,whatwasthepoint?SomeoneIknewhadtoldmeaboutajobatalocalcoffeeshop,andhadsaidthatifIcalledinforaquickchatattenthenextday,I'dalmostcertainlygetthejob.Itmeantmissingtheaudition,butrightnow,itseemedlikeamuchmoresensiblethingtodo.IalwayssingwhenIneedtocheermyselfup,andbecausetherewasnooneelseintheapartment,Islippedoffmyshoes,wentandstoodinfrontofthemirrorandstartedsinging.QuitequicklyIfoundmyselfbeltingout(大声唱)oneofmyfavouritesongs,BridgeoverTroubledWater.AsIfinishedthesong,Isuddenlyheardapplause.Ilookedaroundtheroomthinkingthatmyroommatehadperhapsslippedinwithoutmenoticing—buttherewasnobody.ThenIwentovertotheopenwindowoftheapartment,andsawanelderlywomanstandingonthefarsideofthepavementbelow,lookingupatme.实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Shereachedherarmsuptowardsmewithagreatsmileonherface._________________________________________________________