+提高英语写作水平的方法之多样化某省市市第七中学+

提高英语写作水平的方法之多样化表达某省市第七中学TIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOLTIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOL英语写作多样化表达亟待解决的问题如何在英语写作中实现多样化表达？实战演练——提升英语写作多样化表达为何要在英语写作中实现多样化表达？第一部分第二部分第三部分第四部分学习任务TIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOL第一部分为何要在英语写作中实现多样化表达？一、《普通高中英语课程标准》 （2017年版）对高中学生英语书面表达能力的要求二、英语书面表达评分标准的要求三、学生提升英语写作水平的要求TIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOL内容要点：《普通高中英语课程标准》（2017年版）

对高中学生英语书面表达能力的要求二、英语书面表达评分标准的要求分数档内容语法结构和词汇衔接和连贯整体效果第五档21~25分（很好）覆盖所有内容要点，并有适当发挥。应用了较丰富的语法结构和词汇；表达准确、地道；有个别错误，但不影响对写作内容的理解。有效使用衔接手段，内容连贯，结构紧凑。具备较强的语言运用能力；完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档16~20分（好）覆盖所有内容要点。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求；表达基本准确，些对写作内容的理解影响不大。应用了简单的连接成分，全文结构较紧凑。达到了预期的写作目的。用词的得体性、表达方式的多样化三、学生提升英语写作水平的要求学生在英语书面表达中存在的问题（问卷调查）2.问卷调查结果分析语言表达过于单一，词汇量匮乏、语法错误较多以及句型结构过于简单等方面。语言运用多样性TIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOL第二部分英语写作多样化表达中亟待解决的问题一、写作中的常见问题二、写作中词汇使用的简单化三、写作中句式结构的单一化TIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOL内容要点：一、写作中的常见问题时态错误

1)

MyfriendwinaprizeintheRoboticspetitionlastyear.

2)

Ihemakesomefriends．MyfriendwonaprizeintheRoboticspetitionlastyear.Ihemadesomefriends.2.名词单复数及主谓一致错误Letmegiveyousomeadvices．

2)Everythingareallright．Letmegiveyousomeadvice.Everythingisallright.3.动词形式错误teachedreadeddestroiedgettedplanedwrittingtaughtreaddestroyedgot/gottenplannedwriting4．中国式英语1)Webybuswentthere．2)Thankyourhelp．

3)Iverylikeit．

Wewenttherebybus.

Thankyouforyourhelp./

Thanksforyourhelp.

Ilikeitverymuch.5.词性错误1)LearnEnglishisimportantforus.

2)Weareverysurprise．3)Welivedtherehappy．4)Itisbadforourhealthy．Weareverysurprised.Welivedtherehappily.Itisbadforourhealth.LearningEnglishisimportantforus.6.句子结构错误1)Thestudentsinourschoolisincreasing.2)Seeingfromthetopofthemountain,thecityisverybeautiful.Thenumberofthestudentsinourschoolisincreasing.Seenfromthetopofthemountain,thecityisverybeautiful./Seeingfromthetopofthemountain,Ithinkthecityisbeautiful.7.谓语动词“综合症”1）Therearemanystudentsplayfootballontheplayground.2)Heisstudyveryhard.Therearemanystudentsplayingfootballontheplayground.Hestudiesveryhard.7.Be动词“综合症”Therearesomestudentstalkinclass．2)Heisstudyhard.Therearesomestudentstalkinginclass.Hestudiesveryhard.二、写作中词汇使用的简单化感帮助。 Thankyouforyourhelp. Iappreciateyourhelpingme.Iamgratefulforyourhelp.学好英语十分重要。LearningEnglishwellisveryimportant.LearningEnglishwellmattersalot.我们应当努力去实现梦想。Weshouldtrytorealizeourdreams.Wearesupposedtomakeourdreamsetrue.7.Be动词“综合症”Therearesomestudentstalkinclass．2)Heisstudyhard.Therearesomestudentstalkinginclass.Hestudiesveryhard.4.事实上,你应该多参加社团活动。 Infact,youshouldtakepartintheclubs.

Asamatteroffact,youaresupposedtoparticipateintheclubs.5.我认为这种方法很有用。Ithinkthismethodisveryuseful.

AsfarasI’mconcerned,thismethodisprettybeneficial.某省市非常美丽。 Thecityisverybeautiful. Thecityismorethan

attractive.7.Be动词“综合症”Therearesomestudentstalkinclass．2)Heisstudyhard.Therearesomestudentstalkinginclass.Hestudiesveryhard.7.我同意你的观点。 Iagreewithyou. Iaminforofyou.8.我不同意这项计划。 Idon’tagreetotheplan.Iamopposedto/objecttotheplan.9.希望再次见到你。Ihopetoseeyouagain.I’mlookingforwardtoseeingyouagain.三、写作中句式结构的单一化例1：

他们不但要去学校，还要去很多有趣的地方。*Theyarenotjustgoingtoschool.Theyarealsogoingtovisitsomeinterestingplaces.*Theyarenotonlygoingtoschoolbutalsogoingtovisitsomeinterestingplaces.(并列句）*Notjustgoingtoschool,theyarealsogoingtovisitsomeinterestingplaces.(非谓语动词）思考（2019年3月天津高考英语书面表达）假设你是晨光中学的。为配合学校的“读书月”活动，你校英语社团的sRead”为题的征文活动。要求同学们根据个人的阅读体会，从所读过的书籍中选定一种类型，推荐给其他同学。现请你投稿，文章内容应包括：（1）推荐书籍的类型及特点；（2）推荐的理由。参考词汇：科幻小说sciencefiction侦探小说detectivenovel

传记文学biography科普读物popularscience注意：（1）词数不少于100；（2）所选书籍类型不限于参考词汇给出的范围；（3）内容充实、行文连贯；（4）题目已给出，不计入总词数。例2：Let’sReadMarch22,2019ByLiJinInmyschoolthereisanactivityabout“Let’sRead”.Iwillintroducemyforitebookstoyou.Inmyopinion,ScienceFictionismyforitebook.ThebooksofScienceFictioncanappealtoreader’sinterest.Theauthorgivesreadersmuchspacetoimagine.Theauthorofthesciencefictionissocreative.

ScienceFictioncandevelopourimagination.Accordingtotheauthordescription,wecanimaginethesceneinourmind.SoIliketormendsciencefiction.Howaboutyou?Pleaseshareyourforitenovelstous.学生习作：

我推荐科幻小说，因为科幻小说情节很吸引人。*Irmendsciencefiction.Theplotsofsciencefictionareattractive.*Irmendsciencefictionbecausetheplotsareattractive.（状语从句）*Irmendsciencefictionwhoseplotsareattractive.（定语从句）*ThereasonwhyIrmendsciencefictionisthattheplotsareattractive.（名词性从句）思考写作中多以简单句为主；上下文衔接性词汇、高级词汇等使用率很低；写作中几乎没有或是很少使用到复合句、非谓语形式等。写作中词汇、句式使用的多样性是书面表达出彩的关键所在。写作中句式结构的单一化

第三部分如何在英语写作中实现多样化表达？TIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOL一、多用较高级的词汇二、活用较丰富的句式三、巧用恰当的连接词TIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOL内容要点：词性含义简单词汇高级词汇动词/动词短语感谢thankappreciate/begrateful应当shouldbesupposedto/oughttodo重要beimportantmatter/count记住rememberkeep…inmind未能can’tfailtodo意识到realizebeawareof支持agreewithapproveof/beinforof反对disagreewithbeopposedto/objectto决心做……decidetodobedeterminedtodo努力做……tryone’sbesttodomakeefforts/sparenoefforttodo一、多用较高级的词汇词性含义简单词汇高级词汇形容词惊人的surprisingamazing/astonishing重要的importantvital/significant有魅力的beautifulattractive/charming聪明的cleverintelligent/smart/bright开心的happydelighted/cheerful有益的usefulbeneficial/rewarding容easyeffortless困难的difficultplicated疲惫的tiredexhausted沮丧的saddepressed/frustrated/upset词性含义简单词汇高级词汇副词实际上infactactually/asamatteroffact认真地carefullyattentively非常very/verymuchperfectly/extremely/morethan经常oftenfrequently偶尔sometimesoccasionally显然地clearlyobviously/apparently/evidently确定地certainlydefinitely/undoubtedly最终finallyeventually目前nownowadays/atpresent往往alwaysfrequently/beinclinedto含义简单词汇高级词汇上下文衔接词汇我认为Ithink/believeI’mconvincedthat…/AsfarasI’mconcerned…例如forexampletake…forexample/forinstance首先firsttostartwith/forastart此外andwhat’smore/furthermore/besides/inaddition最后atlastlastbutnotleast总之inawordinconclusion/tosumup/inanutshell巩固训练1.除此之外，我兴趣广泛。（2013年天津卷）Besides,Ihemanyinterests.

Additionally,Ihea

varietyofinterests.2.我们都认为这次捐书活动很好。（2015年天津卷）Weallthinkthebookdonatingactivityisverygreat.

Weallthinkhighlyofthebookdonatingactivity.3.你肯定会喜欢上我某省市。(2011年天津卷）Youwillloveourcity.

Youareboundto

fallinlovewith

ourcity。4.我意识到志愿者工作的重要性。(2017年6月天津卷）Irealizetheimportanceofvoluntarywork.Iamawareofthesignificance

ofvoluntarywork.5.我们一起度过了两周，这让我们更好地了解。(2016年天津卷）Wespenttwoweekstogether,anditmadeusknoweachotherbetter.

Wespenttwoweekstogether,whichenabledustoknoweachotherbetter.6.学生们从这次交流项目中学到了很多。(2016年天津卷）Thestudentslearnedalotfromtheexchangeprogram.

Thestudentsbenefitedalotfromtheexchangeprogram.7.我们在同一个教室里努力学习。（2016年天津卷）Westudiedveryhardinthesameclassroom.

Weburiedourselvesinstudyinginthesameclassroom.8.我非常喜欢西方古典音乐。（2019年6月天津卷）Ilike/love/enjoyWesternClassicalmusicverymuch.I

amcrazyabout/veryfondofWesternClassicalmusic.

9.我们的机器人小组包括10名同学。（2018年6月天津卷）OurRobotGroupincludestenstudents.

OurRobotGroupismadeupof/consistsoftenstudents.10.我们可以很容对方。(2016年天津卷）Wecanunderstandeachothereasily.

We’llhenotrouble/difficultyunderstandingeachother.11.我每天花很多时间学习。(2017年6月天津卷）Ihetospendmostofmytimestudyingeveryday.

Ihetodevotemostofmytimetostudyingeveryday.12.我有时会去帮同学辅导英语。(2010年天津卷）SometimesIhelpmyclassmateswiththeirEnglish.

FromtimetotimeIoffertohelpmyclassmateswiththeirEnglish.13.我想邀请你参加机器人兴趣小组活动。（2018年6月天津卷）I’dliketo

inviteyoutojoinintheactivityoftheRobotGroup.I’dliketoinviteyoutotakepartin/participateintheactivityoftheRobotGroup.14.书籍在我们的生活中扮演着越来越重要的角色。

（2019年3月天津卷）Booksareplayingamoreandmoreimportantroleinourdailylife.Booksareplayinganincreasinglyimportantroleinourdailylife.15.很明显，这对于我们每一个人都很有价值。（2015年天津卷）Clearly,itwillbevaluabletoeveryone.

Apparently/Obviously,itwillbeofgreatvaluetoeveryone.我们要好好利用这次机会来增进友谊。（2014年天津卷）Weshouldusethischancetoimprovethefriendship.

Wearesupposedto

makegooduseofthisopportunitytostrengthen/promote/enhancethefriendship.感叹句很高兴收到你的来信。(2017年6月天津卷）I’mgladtoreceiveyourletter.

HowhappyIamtoreceiveyourletter!

WhatabigsurprisewhenIheardfromyou!★★二、活用较丰富的句式某省市略句如果可能的话，我希望你能给我一次机会。（2018年3月天津卷）Ihopeyoucangivemeachanceifyouwantto.

Ifpossible,Isincerelyhopethatyoucouldgivemethisopportunity.★3.

with复合结构在阳光照耀下，公园处处充满着春天的气息，鸟儿也在歌唱。(2012年福建卷)Theparkwasfulloffreshnessandbeautyofspring.Thesunwasshiningandthebirdsweresinging.Theparkwasfulloffreshnessandbeautyofspring,withthesunshiningandbirdssinging.★4.

定语从句1)中国有着悠久的历史，我想你一定会感兴趣。 (2018年3月天津卷）Chinahasalonghistory.Ithinkyouwillbeinterestedinit.Chinahasalonghistory,whichIthinkwillinterestyou.★4.

定语从句2)我的是我的榜样，他影响了我的很多决定。(2012年安徽卷)Myphysicsteacherismyrolemodel.Andheinfluencedmealottomakedecisions.Myphysicsteacherismyrolemodel,whoseinfluenceonmehadalottodowithmydecisions.

★5.名词性从句我很高兴知道你对中国诗词大会感兴趣。

（2017年3月天津卷）IamhappytoknowyouareinterestedinChinesePoetrypetition.

WhatmakesmeexcitedisthatyouhedevelopedaninterestinChinesePoetrypetition.★5.名词性从句2)你的艺术天赋给我们留下了深刻印象。

（2016年天津卷）

Yourarttalentimpressesusmost.

Whatimpressesusmostisthatyouheagift/talentforart.★6.

状语从句1）无论你有任何疑问，我都会尽力帮助你。(2015年天津卷)

Ifyouheanyquestions,Iwilltrymybesttohelpyou.

Nomatterwhat/Whateverproblemsyouhe,Ipromisetohelpyouwithouthesitation.★6.状语从句2)你们来我们学校参加交流活动有两个星期了。(2016年天津卷)Youhebeeninourschoolfortheexchangeprogramfortwoweeks.

Itis/hasbeen

twoweekssinceyoucametoourschoolfortheexchangeprogram.★7.非谓语动词我们将参加你们学校举办的夏令营活动。(2015年天津卷）Therewillbeasummercampinyourschool,andwewilltakepartinit.We aregoingtotake part in the summer camp tobeheld in your school.★7.非谓语动词2)我想成为一名合格的志愿者。我打算读很多和天津有关的书籍。(2017年6月卷）Iwanttobeaqualifiedvolunteer.I’llreadsomebooksaboutTianjin.

Inordertobeaqualifiedvolunteer,IintendtoreadsomebooksaboutTianjin.★8.常见的高级句型：1）I’dappreciateitifyoucould…如果你能接受我邀请我将不胜感激。(2018年6月天津卷）

I’dappreciateitifyoucouldacceptmyinvitation.2）It’swellknownthat…众所是，中国有着悠久的历史。

(2018年3月天津）

It’swellknownthatChinaisacountrywithalonghistory.★★3)It's

my

pleasure/a

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honour

to

invite

you

to...

我非常荣幸地邀请你参加这次比赛。(2018年6月天津卷）

It's

my

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honour

to

invite

you

totakepartinthispetition.4)Thereisnodoubtthat…

毫无疑问的是这会增进中美学生之间的友谊。(2014年天津卷)

ThereisnodoubtthatitwillstrengthenthefriendshipbetweentheAmericanstudentsandtheChinesestudents.★★5)Thereasonwhy…isthat…我竞选英语俱乐部副主席是因为我在英语上比别人有优势。(2013年天津卷）ThereasonwhyIetorunforvicepresidentofourEnglishClubisthatIhemanyadvantagesoverothersinEnglish.★巩固训练：1.Hegotexcitedwhenheheardthenews.→Hearing

thenews,hegotexcited.（非谓语动词）2.Thegirlwenthome,andshewashungryandthirsty.→Thegirlwenthome,hungryandthirsty.（形容词作状语）3.Shewalkedoutofthelabandmanystudentsfollowedher.→Followedbymanystudents,shewalkedoutofthelab.(非谓语动词)

4.Weweregladtoseeflowersingout.

→Howgladweweretoseeflowersingout!

（感叹句）5.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.

→Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.（名词性从句）

6.I will organize some campus activities, suchas “English Evening”. Andstudents can show their Englishinit.（定语从句）→I will organize some campus activities, suchas "English Evening", 

a platform where students can show their English. 7.Iwon’tbelievewhathesays.→Nomatterwhathesays,Iwon’tbelievehim.

（状语从句）三、巧用恰当的连接词关系连接词递进and,then,besides,moreover,what'smore,furthermore,inaddition…转折but,however,inspiteof,despite,afterall,onthecontrary,ontheotherhand...因果because(of),dueto,thanksto,asaresult(of),owingto,therefore,thus,so…目的inordertodo,sothat,forthepurposeof...归纳ingeneral,inbrief,inshort,inconclusion,inaword,onthewhole...Ithasbeenrainingforaweek,so/thereforewehetoputoffthesportsmeeting.2.Thehusbandwantedtogoswimmingbut/whilethewifeinsistedongoingshopping.

3.Hedidn’tetoschoolbecausehewasbadlyill.巩固练习4.Hegetsupearlyeverydaysothathecancatchthebus.

5.XiaoMingwaswalkinginthestreetwhenheheardsomeonecryingforhelp.6.HeadvisedthatIhireacarinorderthatIcouldtrelaroundinthewest.7.Itwasnotlongbeforethepolicecame.8.Assoonas/Themomentheheardthecryforhelp,hejumpedintothewatertosethegirl.9.Wecangodowntownanddosomeshopping.Inaddition/Besides,wecanpayavisittosomeplacesofinterest.10.Eatingsugarisbadforourteeth.What’sworse,itmaymakeusfat.第四部分实战演练——提升英语写作多样化表达TIANJINNO.7HIGHSCHOOL实战演练

2019年（6月）天津卷书面表达假设你是晨光中学的，英国友好校将派教师来你校参加为期一期交流活动。活动期间，英方教师Chris将做一个有关西方艺术的讲座。现就讲座内容征求你校学生的意见。请根据以下提示给Chris写一封电子邮件：（1）你喜欢的讲座话题（从音乐、美术、舞蹈中任选其一）；（2）选择该话题的原因及关于该话题你感兴趣的内容；（3）希望从中有何收获。注意：（1）词数不少于100；（2）可适当加入细节，使内容充实、行文连贯；（3）开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。DearChris,I’mLiJin,astudentatChenguangHighSchool.__________________________此处不能答题________________________Thankyouforyourtime. Yours, LiJin2019年6月天津卷书面表达结构分析：结构主题（电子邮件）关于西

方艺术讲座的意见2.主体

喜欢何种话题；

为什么喜欢该话题3.结尾

希望有收获主题句式词汇关于西方艺术讲座的意见alectureonwesternart;adviceYouwillgiveusalectureonwesternart.Youaskforsomeadviceonthelecture.主体句式词汇喜欢何种话题（音乐、美术、舞蹈）traditional/classicalmusic;jazz;rockmusic…Ilikemusicverymuch.IlovetraditionalChinesemusic.为什么喜欢该话题

？like;love;happy;…TraditionalChinesemusiccanmakemeveryhappy.结尾句式词汇希望有收获hope;learnIhopeIcanlearnalotfromyourlecture.DearChris,

I’mLiJin,astudentatChenguangHighSchool.Ihelearnedyouwillvisitourschoolforaweek

andyouwillgiveusalectureonwesternart.Iknowyouaskforsomeadviceonthelecture.Ilikemusicverymuch.AndIhopeyoucantalksomethingaboutmusic.IlovetraditionalChinesemusic.TraditionalChinesemusiccanmakemeveryhappy.AndIalsowanttoknowaboutwesternmusic,suchasclassical,jazzandrockmusic.Couldyoutellmeaboutit?IhopeIcanlearnalotfromyourlectureandknowbetteraboutthedifferencesbetweenChineseandwesternmusic.

Thankyouforyourtime.

Yours,

LiJin语言运用简单化语言运用简单化语言运用多样化1.Ihelearnedyouwillvisitourschoolforaweekandyouwillgiveusalectureonwesternart.①Iammorethandelighted

tolearnthatyouwillvisitourschoolforaone-weekexchangeandgiveusaspeechonwesternart.②Knowingthatyouwillvisitourschoolforaone-weekexchangeanddeliveralectureonwesternart,Ifeelverydelighted.语言运用简单化语言运用多样化2.Iknowyouaskforsomeadviceonthelecture.①Youaresokindtoaskusforadviceonthelecture.②Howconsiderateyouaretoaskusforadviceonthelecture!③Itisniceofyoutoaskusforadviceonthelecture.语言运用简单化语言运用多样化3.Ilikemusicverymuch.AndIhopeyoucantalksomethingaboutit.①BecauseIlikemusicverymuch,Ihopeyoucantalksomethingaboutit.②Beingamusicfan,Iwonderifyoucouldgiveusalectureonmusic.语言运用简单化语言运用多样化4.IlovetraditionalChinesemusic.TraditionalChinesemusiccanmakemeveryhappy.①IamcrazyabouttraditionalChinesemusicbecauseitcanmakemeveryhappy.②IamfascinatedwithtraditionalChinesemusic,whichcangiveme