外研版英语必修第一册 第二部分　第12周　读后续写主题练 助人为乐 教师用书

第12周读后续写主题练助人为乐助人为乐是中华民族的传统美德，也是读后续写常见的故事类型。由于这类语篇非常适合给学生传达积极向上的正能量，颇受出题者的偏爱。2024年和2020年的新课标卷读后续写都是这种类型。助人为乐类语篇在续写中可能涉及家庭、学校、工作、生活等方方面面，写作一般分三步：第一步：困难描写——消极情绪＋困难处境情感表现：焦虑、紧张、恐惧、绝望、难过……肢体动作：心跳加速、手心出汗、双腿发抖……第二步：助人过程呈现(想到办法＋动作链)助他型：发现困境→克服困难→提供帮助他助型：遇到困境→寻求帮助→解决困难第三步：皆大欢喜结局(感激＋感动＋升华)问题解决：欣慰、开心、拥抱、感谢……主旨升华：难忘记忆；赠人玫瑰，传递快乐1．困难描写Inthedarkforest，herphonedied.Panichit—herheartthumped，palmssweated，andherlipstrembled.在幽暗的森林里，她的手机没电了。恐慌袭来——她心跳加速、手心出汗、嘴唇颤抖。Atthebrokenbridge，hislegsshookbadly.Despaircameashecouldn’tcrosstherushingriver.在断桥边，他的腿抖得厉害。因无法渡过湍急的河流，绝望之感涌上心头。Rainfloodedthebasement，soakinghisalbums.Hescrambledtosavethem，handsshaking，stomachtightwithtension.雨水淹没了地下室，浸湿了他的相册。他慌忙抢救，双手发抖，心里也紧绷着。Lockedinthecar，shebreathedfast.Herheartracedwildly，andfearmadeherfumblethestuckdoorhandle.她被锁在车里，呼吸急促。心脏狂跳不止，恐惧让她在卡住的门把手上乱摸。Seeingthedogtrappedintheditch，hefeltsad.Hislegsweakened，andhishandsbecameclammyashethoughtofrescuingit.看到狗被困在水沟里，他很难过。一想到救它，他就双腿发软，手心也变得湿冷。Lostintheendlessforest，shetrembledwithfrightandhelplessness.迷失在一望无际的森林里，她因害怕和无助而发抖。Atthesightofthewolf，Ifrozewithterror，tooscaredtomoveaninch.一看到那只狼，我吓呆了，不敢动弹。2．解决困难Hesawtheoldmanstrugglingwithheavybags，ranover，tookthebags，andwalkedthemantohisnearbyhome.他看到老人提着沉重的袋子吃力行走，立刻跑过去接过袋子，还送老人回了附近的家。Shefoundthekidlost，askedhisname，calledthebroadcast，andstayedwithhimtillhismomcame.她发现那个孩子迷路了，先问了孩子的名字，接着联系了广播寻人，还陪着孩子，直到他妈妈来。Noticingthebikefell，heliftedit，fixedtheloosechain，andhelpedtheownerrideitsafely.他看到自行车倒了，就把车扶起来，修好松动的链条，还帮车主安全骑上了车。Shegotaflattire，andaskedapasserbyforhelp，whofetchedatoolandchangedthetireforher.她的车胎爆了，便向一位路人求助，那位路人拿来工具，帮她换好了轮胎。Thedriverheldmyhandstightly，sayinginanexcitedvoice，“Thankyou.Withoutyourhelp，Iwouldhavebeentrappedinthisabandonedarea.”司机紧紧地握着我的手，激动地说：“谢谢你。没有你的帮助，我就会被困在这个废弃的地方。”Seeingeverythingreturntonormal，hesighedwithrelief.看到一切恢复正常，他松了一口气。3．结尾升华Sogratefultohimwastheladythatshecouldn’tthankhimtoomuch.这位女士对他感激不尽，怎么感谢他都觉得不够。ItislovethatmakestheworldgoroundandBernardfeltitdeepinhislittleheart.正是爱让世界转动，伯纳德幼小的心灵深处感受到了这一点。Fromthenon，Imadeupmymindtopasson“love”toothers.Justasasayinggoes，“Rosesgiven，fragranceinhand.”从那以后，我下定决心向别人传递“爱”。俗话说：“予人玫瑰，手留余香。”Itdawnedonmethatasimpleactcouldmaketheworldsomuchbetter.我恍然大悟，一个简单的举动可以使世界变得如此美好。NotuntilthendidIrealizethatitwaskindnessandlovethatmadeourworldsowarmandbeautiful.直到那时候，我才意识到，正是爱和善意让我们的世界如此温暖美丽。NotonlydidhekeepinmindthehelpofMeredith’sfamily，buthealsodidwhateverhecouldtohelpthoseinneed.他不仅把梅瑞狄斯一家的帮助记在心里了，而且他也尽他所能去帮助那些有需要的人。Withgratefultearshanginginhereyes，shekeptexpressinghergratitude：“Thankyousomuch！”她含着感激的泪水，不停地表达感激之情：“太感谢你了！”对点练习根据汉语提示补全短文LastSaturday，Mikegotlostwhilehiking—stuckintheendlessforest,1.hetrembledwithfrightandhelplessness—untilheheardagirl’scrybyabrokenbridge.2.Thegirl’sphonehaddied，andatthebrokenbridge,3.herlegsshookbadly，despaircomingasshecouldn’tcrosstherushingriver.Mikeusedhisstill-functionalphonetocallforhelp，andalsosharedwaterwithher.Inthedarkforest,4.Mike’slegsweakened，andhishandsbecameclammyashetriedtoseekhelp.Whentherescueteamarrived，thegirl,5.withgratefultearshanginginhereyes，keptexpressinghergratitude：“Thankyousomuch！”ItdawnedonMikethat6.asimpleactcouldmaketheworldbetter，andhedecidedtopasson“love”．Asthesayinggoes，“Rosesgiven，fragranceinhand.”上周六，迈克徒步时迷了路——困在了一望无际的森林里，他因恐惧和无助而发抖——直到他在一座断桥边听到了一个女孩的哭声。女孩的手机没电了，站在断桥旁，她的腿抖得厉害；由于无法渡过湍急的河流，绝望感渐渐涌上了心头。迈克用自己还能使用的手机求救，还把水分给了女孩。在漆黑的森林里，迈克尝试求救时，双腿变得虚软，手心也变得湿冷。当救援队赶到时，女孩眼里含着感激的泪水，不停地表达谢意：“太感谢你了！”迈克恍然大悟，一个简单的举动就能让世界变得更美好，于是他决定传递这份“爱”。俗话说：“予人玫瑰，手留余香。”(2024·新课标Ⅰ&Ⅱ)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ImetGunteronacold，wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm，myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane，Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing，buthesaidhehadn’theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem，soIexplainedagainmoreslowly，buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup，Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury，Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally，withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully，therewasalongqueue(队列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus，turnedaround，andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.“Wemadeit，”hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes，butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment，Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There，attheentrance，wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar，madeamadrunforthemachine，andpoppedmycardin，onlytoreadthemessage：“Outoforder.Sorry.”注意：续写词数应为150个左右。IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Fourdayslater，whenIwasbackinVienna，IcalledGunteraspromised.写作指导第一步厘清文本六要素WhoI；GunterWhenonacold，wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptemberWherefromtheairporttothebusstationinViennaWhatIhadtroublepayingforthetaxifare.Why(1)Ihadzerocash.(2)Bankcardcouldn’tbeused.(3)Thecashmachinedidn’thelp.HowItoldGuntermytroubleandaskedhimforhelp.第二步了解文本故事概要AMemorableEveningwithGunterImetGunter1.onacold，wetSeptemberevening.IwasheadingtoPragueforaconference：flytoViennafirst，thentakeabus.Butastorm2.delayed(delay)myflightby1.5hours—Ilandedjust30minutesbefore3.thelastbusleft.Irushedofftheplane，andhoppedintoGunter’staxirightaway.ItoldGunterIneededtogotothebusstation，4.buthe’dneverheardofit.Irepeatedslower，yethestilllooked5.confused(confuse)．JustasIwasabouttogiveup，Guntertookouthisphone，calledafriend，andafteralongtalk，hestarteddriving.Wearrivedatthestationwithonly2minutesleft，and6.luckily(luck)，therewasstillaqueueforthebus.Guntersmiledandsaid，“Wemade7.it.”ThenIrealisedIhadnocash—onlyaPortuguesebankcard.Guntertrieditmanytimes，butthemachinedidn’twork.8.Helplessness(helpless)hitmeasthebusqueuegot9.shorter(short)．Gunterthenpointedtoacashmachineinthewaitinghall.Irantoitandinsertedmycard，only10.tosee(see)：“Outoforder.Sorry.”第三步把握文本双线和主题ThemeKindness&Help，Humanconnection，GratitudeStoryMountainStagePlotLineEmotionLine(Feelings)BeginningIwasinahurryto1.catchthelastbustoPraguebecauseofthedelayedflight.2.Anxious，UrgentRisingI3.jumpedintoataxiandGunteragreedtotakemeto4.thebusstationdespitethelanguagebarrier.Frustrated→5.HopefulClimaxIarrivedatthebusstationjustintimebutfoundIhad6.zerocash.Thankful→7.HelplessResolutionGunterhelpedmewithmybankcard，butthecardmachinedidnot8.playalong，andthecashmachinewas9.outoforder.DesperateEnding？？第四步构建续写故事情节根据首句关键信息连环发问Paragraph1：Iranbacktoeq\x(Gunter)andtoldhimeq\x(thebadnews).1．衔接句1：WhatwasGunter’sreactiontothenews?2．过渡情节：(1)WhatdidGunterdo?(2)HowdidIfeel?3．衔接句2：WhatdidIpromise?Paragraph2：Fourdayslater，whenIeq\x(wasback)inVienna，Icalledeq\x(Gunter)aspromised.1．衔接句3：WhatdidIsay?2．过渡情节：(1)Whathappenedafterwemet?(2)HowdidGunterreacttotheextramoney?续写结尾：HowdidIfeelafterallthis?3．主旨升华：WhatdidIlearnfromthisunforgettableexperience?第五步构思佳句润色语言1．“这台自动取款机坏了。”我勉强说道，语气里的失望显而易见。(独立主格结构)“Thecashmachineisn’tworking，”Imanagedtosay，disappointmentevidentlyinmyvoice.2．他难以置信地看着我，但震惊的表情很快转为理解。(无灵主语)Helookedatmeindisbelief，buthisshockedexpressionquicklygavewaytounderstanding.3．我向他露出歉意的微笑，说明自己马上要启程了，恳求他允许晚点付款，并询问了他的电话号码。(动作链)Flashinghimanapologeticsmile，Iclarifiedmydeparture，beggedhimforadelayedpaymentandalsoaskedforhisphonenumber.4．我满心感激地冲向公交车，匆忙回头瞥了一眼，只见冈特正挥手和我道别。Filledwithgratitude，Idashedtothebus，stealingaquickglancebackatGunterwavingmegoodbye.5．他刚挂掉电话，就开车来车站接我了。(hardly...when...倒装句)Hardlyhadhehungupthephonewhenhedrovetothestationtopickmeup.6．我们相谈甚欢，我向他表达了深深的感激，提出要支付他往返的车程费用，还准备给一笔丰厚的小费，但他谦逊地拒绝了。(现在分词短语作伴随状语)OurconversationflowedmerrilyandIexpressedmyprofoundgratitude，offeringtocoverthecostoftheroundtrip，plusageneroustipthathedeclinedhumbly.7．这次经历让我明白：无论我们遇到什么阻碍，善意的举动都能将我们彼此连接，也能彰显人性中最美好的一面。(whatever引导的让步状语从句)Thisexperiencewasareminderthatwhateverobstaclesweencounter，actsofkindnesshavethepowertoconnectusallandbringoutthebestinhumanity.范文赏读IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.“Thecashmachineisn’tworking，”Imanagedtosay，disappointmentevidentlyinmyvoice.Helookedatmeindisbelief，buthisshockedexpressionquicklygavewaytounderstanding.Then，heglancedatthenearlyemptybusqueueandbackatme，hisgazesteady.“Don’tworry，”hecomforted.Flashinghimanapologeticsmile，Iclarifiedmydeparture，beggedhimforadelayedpaymentandalsoaskedforhisphonenumber.“Noproblem！”hesmiled.Filledwithgratitude，Idashedtothebus，stealingaquickglancebackatGunterwavingmegoodbye.Fourdayslater，whenIwasbackinVienna，IcalledGunteraspromised.Hardlyhadhehungupthephonewhenhedrovetothestationtopickmeup.Iwasalittlesurprisedbutverydelighted.Beamingawarmsmileathim，IgavehimabighugthemomentIsawhim.“That’sgreat！”Ishouted.OurconversationflowedmerrilyandIexpressedmyprofoundgratitude，offeringtocoverthecostoftheroundtrip，plusageneroustipthathedeclinedhumbly.Wewerechattingforhalfaday，yetitfeltlikeonlyafewminuteshadflownby.Thisexperiencewasareminderthatwhateverobstaclesweencounter，actsofkindnesshavethepowertoconnectusallandbringoutthebestinhumanity.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Icamefromapoorfamily.Myparentsdidn’tearnmuchmoney.Everynight，Isawthemworkinglate.Theylookedtired，buttheyalwayssmiledandmadeourhomefulloflove.Iwasahighschoolfreshmanwholovedbeautifulthings.There’saschoolballcomingup，andIreallywantedanicedress.Ioftenlookedatthedresseswhichwereshininginstorewindows.ItouchedtheglassandwishedIcouldhavehadadresslikethat.MyparentsstartedsavingmoneyformeaftertheysawhowmuchIwantedadress.Theyworkedharderandchosecheaperthings.Oneday，mymomgavemeanoldenvelopewithmoneyinside.Irecognizedtheenvelopewhichcontainedaletterofadmissionfrommyhighschoolafewmonthsago.Mymother’seyeswerefullofhope.“Thisisforyourdress，”shesaidwithjoy.Iheldtheenvelopetightlyandfelthowmuchmyparentscaredaboutme.Ipromisedtofindabeautifuldressfortheballtomakethemproudofme.Igotonthebustotheshoppingarea.Myheartwasbeatingfastwithexcitement.Thebuswascrowded，andIstoodneartheback.Suddenly，Iheardsomenoise.“Youdidn’tpayforyourticket，”theconductorsaidtoaman.Themanlookedanxious.“Iforgotmywallet.Mydaughterisinthehospital，andIwasinahurry，”heexplained.Isawhowworriedhewasandhowhishandswereshaking.Ireallywantedthatdress，butIcouldn’tletthefathergetintotrouble.Ihesitatedforamoment，tookadeepbreathandpaidfortheman’sticket.Then，withoutthinkingtoomuch，Ihandedtheenvelopewiththerestofthemoneytotheman.“YourdaughterneedsyoumorethanIneedadress，”Isaidsoftly.Themanlookedatme