课件《unit1高一英语写作训练》

1、,写 作 指 导,例 题 分 析,写 后 评 价,作 者 信 息,Exit,书面表达如何写？,五个步骤,1、审题,题材、人称、时态、要点,2、列要点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句 话的细节要点。,3、连词成句：用连词成句的方法将上述要点 的词语扩展成句子。,4 连句成文：,注意：,主语和谓语,背景（适当增加时间、地点条件等）,逻辑关系,开头与结尾 语篇衔接,5、检查修改，规范抄写,信头,信内地址、姓名,称呼,正 文,结束语,签名,附言、附件,（Enc:/Encl:),Letter writing,英语书信常用语句,Thanks for your last letter. I am writing

2、 just to inform you In reply to your last letter, I am writing to explain the two questions as follows: ,开 头,Looking forward to your reply/hearing from you! Thanks for your consideration. Do remember me to your parents!,结 尾,亲人、家属：Yours lovingly 朋友、平辈：Sincerely yours Yours sincerely 上级、长者：Yours respe

3、ctfully Respectfully yours 单位、部门：Yours sincerely Yours faithfully,结束语Closing,例题作文： 假设你是李华， 给澳大利亚悉尼一中的朋友Mary写一封信，谈谈减负给学生的学习和生活带来的变化。 提示： （1）减负前作业多，夜11：00睡觉； （2）减负后，空闲时间可以参观博物馆、学习电脑、画画、看电视、读报，夜10：00睡觉。,Pre-writing:,(1)Brainstorm: 减负前：,播放时，在视频画面上单击，可暂停。再次单击，继续播放。,视频: 过重的学业负担,减负后：,播放时，在视频画面上单击，可暂停。再次单击，

4、继续播放。,视频: 丰富的课外生活,(2) Group discussion: Do you think your life will change if your homework has been reduced ?,(3) Generate ideas:,Otc 2, 2009 No.10 Middle School Nanyang City P.R.C.,(2)No.1 High School Sydney, Australia,Dear Mary,(3),(4)Body,Yours,(5) LiHua,While-writing: 1）审题构思 ： a、人称 ：第一人称 b、时态 ：

5、一般现在时、一般过去时 （2）列出要点： a、减负前后生活变化； b、减负前作业多，夜11：00睡觉； c、减负后，空闲时间可以参观博物馆、学习电脑、画画、看电视、读报，夜10：00睡觉。,（3）翻译要点： a、tell you the changes of my life b、 do a lot of homework c、went to bed at 11:00 d、visit museums e 、learn computer and draw pictures f、 read books and newspapers and watch TV. g 、go to bed at 10:0

6、0,(4) 连词成句： Im very pleased to tell you the changes in my life； our homework has reduced. I had to do a lot of homework after school； We could not go to bed until 11:00； I can learn computer and drawing； I can read books and newspapers and watch TV； I go to bed at 10:00 now (5) 连句成文： 添加适当的联词，如：since

7、 ，Before that，often ，no longer ，on the contrary，In short，not until,Post-writing: (1)Self-evaluation（自我评价） （2）Group-evaluation(小组评价）,A: 17 分,Dear Mary, I will tell you the changes of my life. Before, we had many classes every day. I had to do a lot of homework after school. I went to bed at 11:00 in

8、the evening. I had no time to play. I was very tired. Now I can visit museums. I can learn computer and drawing. In the evening, I can read books and newspapers and watch TV. I go to bed at 10:00 now. Yours sincerely LiHua,Compare :A文B文,B 文 ： (满分作文) Dear Mary, Im very pleased to tell you the changes

9、 in my life since our homework has reduced. Before that, learning during the day was very simple. Having class and doing homework was the only thing we should do. In the evening, we also had a lot of homework to do. We could not go to bed until 11:00. Nevertheless, since reducing the learning load,

10、my life has become much more interesting. I often visit museums and computer rooms and draw pictures in my spare time. In the evening, I also have time to watch TV and read newspapers. I no longer stay up late; on the contrary, I go to bed at about 10 pm. In short, I am quite satisfied with my life

11、now. Yours sincerely LiHua,词汇,句型 （高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）,1.覆盖了所有的要点 2. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 3. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑,要点全,连接词,Summary:如何算是一篇好文章？,4、拼写和标点是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。 5、词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。 6、如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。,Homework： 假设你是李华， 给澳大利亚悉尼一中的朋友Mary写一封信，谈谈上高中以来，学习英语的变化。以前老师上课满堂灌，学生不但听烦了，更主要的是

12、学了很多，但不会运用，现在老师改变了教学方法，给学生以充分的研究、讨论和实践的空间，取得了良好的教学效果，深受学生的欢迎。将上述内容写成一篇英语书信。 要点提示： 过去，我们坐在教室里听老师讲，老师讲了很多语法，句子结构(sentence pattern)知识等，我们感到累，不会运用。 现在，老师留给我们更多的时间学习，练习英语，我们经常在课堂上分组学习，共同探讨问题，我们尝试用英语交流，取得了良好的效果。 词数100-120。,Dear Mary, In the past, we were always sitting in the classroom listening to the te

13、acher. The teacher was always explaining too much about sentence patterns, grammar and so on. We all felt tired of what we were taught and not able to remember everything. Even worse, we couldnt use the language. Now our teacher has changed the way of teaching. Sometimes she gives us time to do things or to practice English; sometimes she lets us get information and give information in English. And she often lets us work in pairs or in g