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1、月考作文评析之 情景作文写作 -Kent,情景作文写作,1. 理解评分标准 2. 写作过程 1）审题-确定要点-列提纲 2）完善文章结构 3）写出合理句子 4）关联词，过渡句 5）准确用词,情景作文 （25分） 今年暑假7月26日你参加了一次“伦敦游学”活动, 请根据以下五幅图, 写一篇英文汇报, 在班内介绍你的游学过活动。 注意：1.汇报的开头和结尾已经为你写好。 2.词数100左右。 3.参考词汇： Big Ben 大本钟 London Eye伦敦眼摩天轮 home-stay family 住宿家庭 Good morning, everyone. It was an honor to ha

2、ve been selected to go on a study tour to Britain.,审文字,情景作文 （25分） 今年暑假7月26日参加了一次“伦敦游学”活动, 请根据以下五幅图的, 写一篇英文汇报, 在班内介绍你的游学活动。 注意：1.汇报的开头和结尾已经为你写好。 2.词数100左右。 3.提示词语： Big Ben 大本钟 London Eye伦敦眼摩天轮 home-stay family 住宿家庭 Good morning, everyone. It was an honor to have been selected to go on a study tour to

3、 Britain.,审文字,话题：一次“伦敦游学”活动 体裁：叙事 (在班内介绍你们的游学活动) 时态：一般过去时（刚刚参加了） 人称：第一人称 （你）,审文字,内容要点和细节 （整体设计layout） 1到达（受到欢迎、接机） 2入住（home-stay family、吃饭） 3学习（听讲座、了解大学） 4游览（Big Ben、London Eye） 5. 送别（farewell party、唱歌、跳舞）,开头（引出下文）,结尾（收获、感受）,开头,Now Id like to share my precious experiences during the tour. The valuab

4、le experience, which was really unforgettable and meaningful, will always be treasured in my heart.,结尾,The short trip really allowed me to improve my English, extend my knowledge and broaden my horizons. It will be forever cherished in my memory.,审图1,要点：到达机场 细节：接待家庭到机场迎接、 受到欢迎 arrived at Heathrow Ai

5、rport were warmly welcomed by home-stay families had been waiting for a long time shook hands,Which one is better?,On the morning of July 26th, we arrived at Heathrow Airport where we were warmly welcomed by our home-stay families. On the morning of July 26th, I felt delighted to meet with my home-s

6、tay families at the Heathrow Airport, who welcomed us warmly, shaking hands with me.(不好的句子）,审图2,要点：入住 细节：与接待家庭共同进餐， 交谈 went to home-stay family had traditional English food and chatted happily (were interested in) Chinese customs taught me how to use a fork and knife,要点：学习 细节：听讲座、了解大学 had classes we

7、nt to Westminster College to attend a lecture about the school listened to a speech, introducing British policy, British colleges and famous buildings took notes listened attentively / with full attention,审图3,要点：游览 细节：Big Ben、London Eye visited some famous scenic spots such as Big Ben and London Eye

8、 took photos gave an introduction of sights,审图4,要点：送别 细节: 唱歌、演奏 held a farewell party played the guitar sang songs and danced to music was greatly impressed by couldnt help but shed tears,审图5,如何将各部分内容有机联系起来？ 开头 1到达（受到欢迎、接机） 2入住（home-stay family、吃饭） 3学习（听讲座、了解大学） 4游览（Big Ben、London Eye） 5. 送别（farewel

9、l party、唱歌、跳舞） 结尾,Transitional verbs,To start with, first , second, On the next day, After the speech,. Time flew and our activity came to an end on the fifth day.,When I got off the plane, After having a short rest at home, On the work days, At/during the weekends, When I was about to come back to

10、China,Good morning, everyone. It was an honor to have been selected to go on a study tour to Britain. I am pleased to have the chance to say something about it. On the morning of July 26, we arrived at Heathrow Airport where we were warmly welcomed by our home-stay families. Soon we went to differen

11、t families where we had traditional English food and chatted happily. Later we went to Westminster College to attend a presentation about the school. A professor gave us a vivid and interesting introduction and we learned a lot about that college.,In the following days we visited some famous scenic

12、spots such as Big Ben and London Eye. We took many photos there. On the last day they had a farewell party at which students from China and Britain gave fantastic performances including songs and dances. From the study tour, we have improved our speaking skills, and also weve got a better understand

13、ing of British culture. Thats all. Thank you.,一档作文 Good morning, everyone. It was an honor to have been selected to go on a study tour to Britain. Now Id like to share my precious experiences during the tour. As soon as I arrived at Heathrow Airport on July 26th, I was warmly welcomed by my home-sta

14、y family. After feasting my eyes on the fabulous views along the way home, I was treated to British-styled food cooked by the hostess. Though clumsy with my knife and fork, I was impressed by the delicious food and humorous casual chats during the meal. So friendly and easygoing was the family that

15、we got along quite well with each other.,The next day, I, together with my classmates, attended a lecture about Westminster College given by a well-known professor. With the help of the professors vivid presentation, we got a good knowledge of the college and learnt a lot about the differences betwe

16、en Chinese and British teaching methodology. Then, my family showed us around London. Not only did those famous spots, like Big Ben and London Eye, left me with a deep impression, but the beauty of the foreign culture and well-protected environment also attracted us while we were walking along the s

17、treets.,Time passing quickly, soon came the time of departure. It came as a surprise when our home-stay family threw a farewell party to wish us a safe and sound trip home. My classmate danced, and I sang while playing the guitar to express our gratitude to them. I couldnt help but shed tears. The s

18、hort trip really allowed me to improve my English, extend my knowledge and broaden my horizons. It will be forever cherished in my memory.,Good morning, everyone. It was an honor to have been selected to go on a study tour to Britain. The valuable experience, which was really unforgettable and meani

19、ngful, will always be treasured in my heart. We arrived at Heathrow Airport after a long flight, where I met my home-stay family. So kind and hospitable were they that they gave me a warm welcome. After that we went straight back home and the family served me with a delicious meal. We talked about a

20、 lot of differences between China and Britain as we enjoyed the feast.,The next day, our one-week course began. I was really absorbed in the lessons which mainly focused on English culture and spoken English. The study in Westminster College really enriched my mind and broadened my horizon. Apart from study, we visited some most famous places of interest in London during the weekends. Wandering along the streets that date back to centuries ago, we saw Big Ben and London Eye as our teache