写作.ppt

1、Writing,Dear Sir/Madam, Im Li Hua, a Chinese student taking summer courses in your university. Im writing to ask for help. I came here last month and found my courses interesting. But I have some difficulties with note-taking and I have no idea of how to use the library. I was told the Learning Cent

2、er provides help for students and Im anxious to get help from you. I have no class on Tuesday mornings and Friday afternoons.,2011年全国卷书面表达范文,Please let me know which day is OK with you. You may email or phone me. Here are my email address and phone number: ; 12345678. Look forward to your reply. You

3、rs, Lihua,The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children. The picture shows us a touching moment when a little girl comes to greet her working mom. Realizing her mom must be very tired after a days work

4、, the girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder. In response, the mom kneels down to show how happy and thankful she feels. All this reminds me of my mother who has been doing whatever she could to let me have the best.,2011年江苏卷书面表达范文,But, totally engaged in my own study, I seldom pay my attent

5、ion to what mother needs and feels, and always think studying well is the only thing I could do in return. Now I know I can do my bit to help with the everyday washing, bedroom cleaning, or at least prepare breakfast myself, so as to share mothers daily burden. The picture convinces me it is even mo

6、re important to be a good daughter than a “good” student.,How to polish up your writing?,书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求,第五档(21-25分)完全完成了试题规定的任务: 准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无 遗漏。 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 语法结构和词汇有少许错误, 但为尽可能使用 较复杂表达方式所致; 具备较强的语言应用 能力。 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分, 使全文 结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。,第四档(16-20分)完成了试题规定的任务: 比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容 应用语法结构和

7、词汇能满足任务的要求 语法结构和词汇应用基本准确,少许错误主要 是因为尝试较复杂语言结构或词汇所致。 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构 紧凑达到了预期的写作目的。,第三档(11-15分)基本完成了试题规定的任务。 能说出短文的基本内容,但逻辑关系较混乱, 要点有遗漏,没有写自己的认识。 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 有一些语法结构和词汇的错误,但不影响理解。 应用简单的语句间连接成分,使全文内容连贯 整体而言,基本达到了预期的写作目的。,A. 较高级词汇,B. 丰富的语法结构,C. 恰当使用过渡词或过渡句, 使文章结构 紧凑;,D. 段落的优化,The polished poi

8、nts:,1. I used to like reading and writing poems at middle school. 2. Suddenly I thought of a good idea.,I used to take delight in/be fond of reading and writing poems at middle school.,All of a sudden, a good idea occurred to me.,A good idea suddenly struck me.,较高级的词汇、短语,3. You can find my house ea

9、sily.,You have no trouble/difficulty in finding my house.,You can find my house without any difficulty.,4. Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable. 5. In our school, there are twentysix classrooms.,Thanks to the good weather, our journey was comfortable.,Our school is made up of tw

10、entysix classrooms.,Our school consists of twentysix classrooms.,6. The old photo made me think of my happy childhood.,The old photo reminded me of my happy childhood.,1. When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow.,On hearing the bad news of his death, she went pale with sorrow.,丰富的语法结构,2

11、. I was walking along Park Road towards the east. At that time, an elderly man came out of the park on the other side of the street.,I was walking along Park Road towards the east when an elderly man came out of the park on the other side of the street.,3. The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street

12、. It is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. 4. He is surprised that the little girl knows so many things.,The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.,To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.,What surprises him is that the little girl know

13、s so many things.,5. We can achieve our goal only in this way. 6. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.,Only in this way can we achieve our goal.,It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened.,Not until he had read the

14、news in the newspaper did he know what had happened.,使用恰当的连接词,first; firstly; second; secondly; last but not least,and; too; as well as; along with; together with,for example; for instance; like; such as; as to,but; however; while; though; on the contrary,because; since; thanks to; as a result /cons

15、equence (of); thus; therefore,in a word; in short; to sum up; in conclusion,whats more; besides; to make matters worse; whats worse; worse still; furthermore,This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since 1978. People

16、here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look.,段落优化 1,This village is very small, which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. However, it has changed a lot since 1978. People here are leading a richer and happier life than before. Now it is taking on a

17、new look.,As far as I am concerned, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents however busy we are. Whats more, our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live a happy life. Only when all of us care for the aged can we build a harmonious society,段落优化 2,I think, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents though we are bu