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1、2011-2015高考书面表达 -赢取高分策略 校对整理:李东升 原作者：罗征,主讲以下内容,高考大纲要求说明 主要策略 高考作文分析 2011-2015年高考指导,NMET对书面表达的要求,要求考生根据所给情景，用英语写一篇120个单词左右的短文 情景包括目的、对象、时间、地点、内容等；提供情景的形式有图画、图表、提纲等。 本部分满分25分，所需时间约为30分钟。,NMET书面表达评分原则,1、先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定档次。,第五档. 2125分 第四档. 1620分 第三档. 1115分,第二档. 610分 第一档. 15分 0分,语言地道，规范,覆盖所有内容要点,2、主要内容： 内

2、容要点； 词汇和语法的数量和准确性； 上下文的连贯； 语言的得体性,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇,有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,3、拼写和标点是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。,4、词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。,5、如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。,给阅卷人以好的第一直观印象,整体三部分,Heading 点题；一两个句子；概括性；暗示性 2. Body 中心记述部分；层次分明 3. Ending 小结；呼应主题,词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。,运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉

3、 。,使用恰当连接词，对写一篇有“英语味”的文章很重要，能使文章上下衔接自然、紧凑。,增强书面表达效果的技巧,1. Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable. 2.We all think he is a great man. 3.Suddenly I thought out a good idea. 4.The students there neednt pay for their books. 5. As a result the plan was a failure.,The plan turned out to

4、be a failure.,Thanks to the good weather, our journey was comfortable.,一、怎样使用较高级的词汇,We all think highly of him .,A good idea occurred to me.,/ A good idea suddenly struck me.,Books are free for the students there.,6. When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow. 7. She went to Australia in

5、order to study music. 8. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. 9.In our school, there are twenty-six classrooms. 10.You can find my house easily.,She went to Australia for the purpose of studying music.,At the news of his death, she went pale with sorrow.,The more he spoke, the more excited

6、he felt.,Our school is made up of twentysix classrooms.,Youll have no trouble finding my house.,丰富的句式：(常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章的文采。,1. 感叹句 e.g. How happy I was when I received your letter! What a kind boy he is! How disappointed he was ! 2. 强调句 e.g. It was this young boy that helped the old

7、granny. I do hope you can come if possible.,3、 倒装句 e.g. Only in this way can you solve this problem. There comes the police car. Hardly had they got to the station when they met the young man. 4、 省略句 e.g. They read while walking or riding on a bus. Come to me if necessary. 5、 with短语 e.g. I saw a you

8、ng lady walking slowly in the street with a handbag in her hand.,6、 定语从句 e.g. In my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place where we can find much useful information. Lets come to the main teaching building, at the back of which stands the school library. 7、 各种名词性从句 e.g. Thats what I should do. We sh

9、ould do a favour to whoever needs help at present.,8、 各种状语从句 e.g. Time passed quickly before we knew it. The moment we reached the farm, we got down to harvesting. So long as we work harder at our lessons, well catch up sooner or later. Do call me before hand so that I can meet you at the airport. T

10、hey had to wait because the rain was getting more and more heavily.,1 When he arrives, please give me an e-mail.（使用V-ing形式）. 2. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句） 3. Though Im weak, Ill make the effort. (使用倒装句) 4. He did not know what had happened until he had read the n

11、ews in the newspaper.(使用强调句型) 5. I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气）,On his arriving, please give me an e-mail.,What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.,Practice 怎样使用较丰富的句式,Weak as I am, Ill make the effort.,It was not until he had read the news in the news

12、paper that he knew what had happened.,I couldnt have passed the physics exam but for your help.,6. She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. (使用过去分词) 7. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用V-ing形式) 8.I wont believe what he says. （使用状语从句） 9.If you study hard, you wil

13、l make rapid progress. （用并列句） 10He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. (使用倒装句),No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.,Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab.,Singing and laughing, they went back to school.,No matter what he says, I wo

14、nt believe.,Study hard and youll make rapid progress.,高考大纲中常用的连接词 1.表示递进;在同一话题上补充内容 另外，还有：what is more; besides; also; moreover; in addition 2. 表示转折关系 但是， 然而， 相反：but; however; yet; instead; on the other hand; on the contrary.,3. 表示因果关系 因为，因此，所以: since; as; because (of ); so; thus; therefore; as a re

15、sult; 4. 表示条件关系 如果，只要: if ;on condition ( that ); as long as 除非: unless 否则: or else,5. 表示时间关系 当 的时候 : when ; while 在之后: after 在之前: before 直到: until 一就 : as soon as 后来， 然后: later; afterwards 不久: soon 近来: lately; recently 自从 :since 从那时起: from then on,6. 表示特定的顺序关系 首先， 最主要的: above all 其次: secondly 然后: t

16、hen; next 最后: finally; in the end 7. 换一种方法表述 换句话说: in other words; that is to say;,8. 进行举例说明 例如，比如: for instance; for example; like; such as 9. 用于陈述事实 实际上: in fact; actually; as a matter of fact 跟你说实话 : to tell you the truth,10. 对一个话题进行总结 总而言之，总的来说: on the whole; in short; all in all; in general; in

17、 a word 其它常用到的副词 Therefore ; otherwise ; finally ; furthermore ;Thus ; namely ; although ; afterwards ; personally;,On one side of the road there is a new classroom building.On the other side,where the playground used to be now stands another new buildingour library. (NMET1999 范文),As far as I know,

18、everyone is happy about this new arrangement of things.(NMET2001 范文),Whats more, I can go to bed earlier. (NMET2001 范文),三、怎样使用恰当的连接词,Practice 1 请在下列句子中（间）填上恰当的关联词或意思有联系的短语。 Xiao Ming was walking in the street _ he heard someone cry for help. 2. He advised that I hire a car _ I could travel around in

19、 the west . 3. It was not long _ the police came . _he heard the cry for help, he jumped into the water to save the girl.,when,in order that,before,As soon as,5. Do you agree with my arrangement ? _ , do write to me soon. 6. We can go downtown and do some shopping. _, we can pay a visit to some plac

20、es of interest. I shared the cost of the gas with my friends ._, I saved $80. 8. Eating sugar is bad for our teeth. _ , it may make us fat.,If not/so,In addition,As a result,Whats worse,Practice 书面表达：,Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school !, This village is a small one with/which has nearly 10

21、0 families and about 500 people.,It used to be very poor., However,it has changed a lot since 1978 ,and has been developing very fast.,People here live a much better life than before .,书面表达：,Now it is taking,on a new look.,In the past, the school here was very small and most children couldnt afford

22、to go to school. ,But now it has been rebuilt and, which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village.,All the school-age children can study here., Whats more,they enjoy free education., May you enjoy your stay here,the newly built teaching building,/ May you have a pleasant time here!,Tha

23、nk you.,Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school ! This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. However, it has changed a lot since 1978 and has been developing very fast. People here live a much better life than before . Now it is

24、taking on a new look. In the past, the school here was very small and most children couldnt afford to go to school. But now it has been rebuilt and the newly built teaching building which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village. All the school-age children can study here. Whats more,

25、they enjoy free education. May you enjoy your stay here / May you have a pleasant time here! Thank you.,2001年春季高考作文 给澳大利亚的朋友写一封信，谈谈减负给学生的学习和生活带来的变化。 I will tell you the changes of my life. Before, we had many classes every day. I had to do a lot of homework after school. I went to bed at 11:30 in th

26、e evening. I had no time to play. I was very tired. Now I can visit museums. I can learn computer and drawing. In the evening, I can read books and newspapers and watch TV. I go to bed at 10:00 now.,17分,高考满分作文 Im very pleased to tell you the changes in my life since our homework has reduced. Before

27、that, learning during the day was very simple. Having class and doing homework was the only thing we should do. In the evening, we also had a lot of homework to do. We could not go to bed until 11:30. Nevertheless, since reducing the learning load, my life has become much more interesting. I often v

28、isit museums and computer rooms and draw pictures in my spare time. In the evening, I also have time to watch TV and read newspapers. I no longer stay up late; on the contrary, I go to bed at about 10 pm. In short, I am quite satisfied with my life now.,2009 【全国卷I海南、宁夏】 【试题回放】假定你是李华，正在英国接受英语培训，住在一户英

29、国人家里。今天你的房东Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你准备外出，请给Mrs. Wilson 写一留言条，内容包括： 1外出购物 2替房东还书 3Tracy 来电话留言：1）咖啡屋（Bolton Coffee）见面取消 2）此事已告知Susan 3) 尽快回电 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。,2009高考英语满分作文,Mrs. Wilson, Im going out shopping, and wont be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me t

30、o return to the City Library. At about 1 oclock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldnt meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to

31、 call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change. Yours, Li Hua,书面表达常用语句,书信 Thanks for your last letter. I am writing just to inform you In reply to your last letter, I am writing to explain the two questions as follows: ,开 头,Looking forward to your reply/hearing

32、from you! Thanks for your consideration. Do remember me to your parents!,结 尾,2. 叙事 It is quite obvious/clear that ( 很显然) There is no doubt that (毫无疑问) Take as an example. (以为例） On one hand, on the other hand (一方面，另一方面) Only in this way shall we (只有这样我们才能) As far asis concerned, I prefer(就而言，我更) Meas

33、ures/Action should be taken to(必须采取措施去) For the reasons given above, I feel that(鉴于以上原因，我觉得 What these people fail to consider is that(这些人没有想到的是.) Undoubtedly there is a long way to go before(毫无疑问要 还有很长的路要走）,Therefore, I strongly recommend that (因此， 我强烈建议 All the facts show that（所有的事实显示) I like not

34、only because but also because(我喜欢 不仅因为而且因为) I am writing to you to inquire about(我写信给你想询问) I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with/at(我给你 写信表示我对的不满） I apologize to you for(我为向你道歉） I am grateful to you for(我为向你表示感谢） Mr. Green, my best friend, is teaching Mr. Green, a favorite teacher from the

35、 USA, is teaching,信头,信内地址、姓名,称呼,正 文,结束语,签名,附言、附件,（Enc:/Encl:),Letter writing,A Letter,Nov 5, 2001 Wuzheng Middle School Zhejiang P.R.C.,Jack Tongxiang High School,Dear Mary,Body,Yours, Jack,亲人、家属：Yours lovingly ; Yours affectionately 朋友、平辈：Sincerely yours Yours sincerely 上级、长者：Yours respectfully Res

36、pectfully yours 单位、部门：Yours sincerely Yours faithfully,结束语Closing,信封正面,发信人姓名 发信人地址,收信人姓名 收信人地址,信封背面,发信人姓名 发信人地址,June 5th , 2000 Dear Mr. Zhao, I am sorry that I am unable to attend school during the following week because of the Sports Meet. The school expects me to play an important part in it . An

37、d I will be back to class in a week . I hope you will excuse my absence .(in fact , I take a French leave) Yours respectfully Charles Encl: the PE Teachers certificate (证明）,便 条（病/事假条）,（NOTICE/ANNOUNCEMENT),口头通知： Ladies and Gentlemen, May I have you attention please? 正 文 书面通知： NOTICE In celebration o

38、f May Day , there will be - 正 文 School Office April 25th , 2000,通知、通告,Wednesday May 5th Cloudy It is nearly a month since I began keeping diaries. I find it a very good exercise in English composition. I got back my essay on A Visit to the Park . It was marked with A.There were only three mistakes i

39、n it: one in grammar and two in idiom. Im happy to see that I can now express myself in English more usually than ever before. ,日记 Diary,热点一：国庆60周年,新中国成立60周年来，我国发生了翻天覆地的变化，请你据此写一篇120字的英语作文，谈谈自己的感想。 要求: 1. 列出生活中反映一两件家乡变化的事, 如购新车、住新房等。 2. 列出最近发生的一两件国家大事, 如成功举办奥运、“神舟七号” 顺利升空等。 3. 要表达出你的喜悦和自豪之情，并谈谈你的感想。

40、,范文,Great changes have taken place since our country was founded 60 years ago. In the past we lived in the small and old houses and now we move into new broad ones which are more than one hundred square meters. At the same time, many families have own their new cars. Besides, our country hosted the

41、29th Olympic Games successfully in 2008 and we took the first place in winning gold medals. Another inspiring event was that the Shenzhou was sent into space smoothly, which shows our scientific research get great achievements. We are very happy and proud of all these achievements. I am sure our cou

42、ntry will become even stronger and richer. I love our motherland very much. Lets work hard to make contribution to our country in the future.,热点二：上海世博会,2009年5月1日世博会志愿者招募仪式正式启动，志愿者是办好世博会的一支重要的工作力量。另外，志愿者或做家教，教小孩子阅读、算术，或打扫公园与街道，或到医院或疗养院帮忙。你愿意做志愿者吗？请陈述理由写一篇100字左右的短文。,热点三：低碳经济下的环境保护,“低碳经济”是一个具有广泛社会性的经济前

43、沿理念，最早是在2003年英国政府发布的能源白皮书我们能源的未来：创建低碳经济正式提出的。低碳经济包括低碳发展、低碳产业、低碳技术和低碳生活等经济形态，是指在不影响经济发展的前提下，通过技术创新和制度创新，降低能源和资源消耗，尽可能最大限度地减少温室气体和污染物的排放，实现减缓气候变化的目标，促进人类的可持续发展。 Protection of Environment1. 目前环保还存在着许多问题。2. 为了保护环境，3. 各国政府做了大量的工作。4. 我的看法。,范文,There are still many problems of environmental protection in re

44、cent years. One of the most serious problems is the serious pollution of air, water and soil. the polluted air does great harm to peoples health. The polluted water causes diseases and death. What is more, vegetation had been greatly reduced with the rapid growth of modern cities. To protect the env

45、ironment, governments of many countries have done a lot. Legislative steps have been introduced to control air pollution, to protect the forest and sea resources and to stop any environmental pollution. Therefore, governments are playing the most important role in the environmental protection today. In my opinion, to protect environment, the government must take even more concrete measures. First, it should let people fully realize the importance of environmental