重庆英语高考书面表达评讲课件.ppt

1、书面表达评讲探讨,重庆市高考英语考试说明中对书面表达的要求：,要求考生根据所给提示与要求进行书面表达。 考生应能： 1.在一定的语境中准确使用英语语法和词汇； 2.使用一定的句型、词汇，清楚、连贯地用英语表达自己的意思。 高考英语书面表达评分标准明确了各个档次的要求和给分范围,其中高分档次的第五档和第四档都有这样的要求:覆盖所有主要内容要点;应用了较多的语法结构和词汇;使用了较复杂的结构或较高级的词汇;有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑连贯。,Open writing,开放式作文,开放式作文试题的要求： 1）文章扣题： 描述有的放矢，突出主题； 2）思维活跃： 发散思维空间，学生从不

2、同的、全新的角度看待分析一个事物或现象。 3）内容健康充实： 内容要点乐观向上，以积极的态度进行表达。,开放作文：,审题最为关键,关注开放作文文章结构,Describe a picture/material/chart,Interpret its implied meaning Point out its implications in our life,Give your own comment/ suggestion/solution,Structure,Interpretation and implication,By providing purpose and reasons or e

3、ffects /attitude/judgment,By providing examples/proverbs/ explanation,By analyzing the practical significance/ reality,漫画的画面 细节 漫画的夸张 寓意 (与现实的矛盾之处）,细节,夸张,寓意,Dont copy others way of solving the problem blindly. Do everything in the right way.,读图与立意,细节,描图和议论时注意抓住漫画所表达的引申含义。 请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于60。 In y

4、our English class，you are asked to describe this picture of a wooden barrel and explain to your classmates how you understand it 1. 审图：一个由不同长度木板构成的木桶，水从最短板处流出。( the wooden barrel effect) 2. 结论：人要全面发展，个别缺点会影响人的成功。 团队要共同发展，个别人落后会影响整体的进步。 文体：议论文 时态：一般现在时 人称：第一人称,Dont be too confident in real life. Be h

5、onest and modest. Dont judge a book by its cover.,3. , a glass bottle, with only a little water in it, is trying to attach a label to its body, to announce to the world it is full. Its expression suggests that its very proud and looking down on the others.,1. In the picture we can see a bottle of le

6、ss water whose label is written full.,2. From the picture we can see that there is a bottle. It has two hands and tries to put an label written “full”on its body. A smile is on the neck of the bottle. Inside the bottle is there a little water.,As a result, it is wise to enrich ourselves with knowled

7、ge and try to make our heads full.,(Description),(Interpretation (2) 紧扣材料，有明确的观点; (3) 词数不少于60; (4) 在答题卡上作答。,communication,写作一(满分15分) 2014年重庆卷 请结合材料，按要求用英文写作。 “My friend falls，I laugh；my phone falls, I cry.” 要求：(1)就此材料发表你的看法； (2)紧扣材料，有明确的观点； (3)词数不少于60； (4)在答题卡上作答。,写作一(满分15分) 2015年重庆一诊考试 请结合材料，按要求用英文

8、写作。 He who loses money,loses much; he who loses a friend, loses much more; he who loses faith, loses all. 要求：(1)就此材料发表你的看法； (2)紧扣材料，有明确的观点； (3)词数不少于60； (4)在答题卡上作答。,Where there is faith, there is hope.,People abuse mobile phones, which makes them ignore the true relationship with their friends.,评分标准：

9、 文章是否扣题-描述与主题一致，自圆其说 结构是否完整-三部分 内容是否健康-乐观向上 逻辑是否清晰-议论要有逻辑性 语言是否准确-用词恰当，无语法错误 交际是否得体-情境，身份等,Outline writing,提纲式作文,书面表达如何写？,五个步骤,1、审题,题材、人称、时态、要点,2、以词及点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句 话的细节要点。,3、连词成句：用连词成句的方法将上述要点 的词语扩展成句子。,4 、连句成文：,注意：,主语和谓语,背景（适当增加时间、地点、条件等）,逻辑关系(非谓语动词）,开头与结尾（亮点句型） 语篇衔接（连接词）,5、检查修改，规范抄写,写作二(满分20分) 20

10、14年重庆卷 青少年研究专家Susan Beacham在自己的英文网站上开辟专栏，邀请大家分享心目中的”最好礼物”。她认为，礼物贵在心意，应为之付出时间和精力。假设你是李华，请用英文发帖，内容应包括： 赞同Susan的看法 你收到或送出的最好的礼物是什么 该礼物的意义 期待大家回复 注意：(1)词数不少于80； (2)符合语言规范； (3)在答题卡上作答； (4)开头已给出(不计人总词数)。 I am a high school student from China._,写作二(满分20分) 2013年重庆卷 调查显示，中国长江江豚 (finless porpoise) 受人类活动影响而频临灭

11、绝，目前总数不足1000只。假设你是李华，现请用英文给WWF(世界自然保护基金组织)写一封信，请他们关注这一状况并提供帮助。内容应包括:,说明写信目的 简述江豚现状 希望WWF如何帮助（比如：资助江豚保护项目等） 表示感谢并期待回复 注意：（1）词数不少于80； （2）在答题卡上作答 （3）书信格式及开头均已给出（不计入总词数）。 Dear Sir or Madam, Im a student from Chongqing, China. _ Yours sincerely, Li Hua,写作二(满分20分) 假如你是某公司的产品推销员，请用英语介绍下面的产品： 1. 产品名称：NOAH-D

12、ICT 2. 产地： 中国深圳 3. 厂家：Chengxin Company Ltd. 4. 产品特点：电子词典，储存百万单词和短语,实 现中英互译，仿真人发音，提供电子书籍下载功能。采 用20年的研究成果，由高级电脑科技控制，轻金属制成，体小，易携带，易操作，价格合理。 注意：词数不少于80词。,five steps for the writing practice:,Step 1: examine the topic Style:_ tense:_ person:_,说明文 （Introductory Writing ）,present,third,Step 2: list the mai

13、n points 1. 产品名称 named NOAH-DICT / the product whose name is NOAH-DICT 产地 make/ produce in Shenzhen 3. 电子词典 electronic dictionary / e-dictionary 4. 储存百万单词和词汇 store millions of words and phrases with a capacity of millions of words and phrases 实现中英互译 perform a two-way translation 仿真人发音 imitate / rese

14、mble a real persons pronunciation 7. 提供电子书籍下载功能 provide / have the function of downloading electronic books,Step 2: list the main points 采用20年的研究成果 adopt / apply the technical result accumulate by 20-year research 由高级电脑科技控制 control by high / advanced technology 轻金属制成 be made of light metal 11. 体小 sm

15、all in size / its volume is very small 12. 易携带 easy to carry / it is convenient to carry 13. 易操作 easy to operate 14. 价格合理 price is reasonable / sell at an attractive price,Step 3: make some sentences: 产品名称 产地 电子词典 NOAH-DICT is an electronic dictionary made in Shenzhen. 储存百万单词和词汇 The dictionary can s

16、tore 1 million words and phrases. 3. 实现中英互译 The dictionary can make a two-way translation between Chinese and English come true. 4. 仿真人发音 5. 提供电子书籍下载功能 6. 采用20年的研究成果 It is the technical result of the companys 20-year research. 7.由高级电脑科技控制 8. 轻金属制成 体小 易携带 It is made of light metal and its volume is s

17、mall, so it is convenient to carry. 9.易操作 价格合理 It is easy to operate and its price is reasonable.,The dictionary can imitate a real persons pronunciation.,It also provides the function of downloading e-books.,It is controlled by advanced computer technology.,Step 4: Connect the sentences and make so

18、me polishment. Step 5: Copy it out carefully and clearly.,One possible version(参考范文) NOAH-DICT is a very powerful e-dictionary made in Shenzhen, China. It is the latest product of Chengxin Company Ltd. with a large vocabulary of 1 million words and terms stored in it. So you can look up any word you

19、 meet in your Senior period. Whats more, the e-dictionary can perform a two-way translation between Chinese and English, which helps you study more efficiently. Additionally, it can perfectly imitate a real persons pronunciation. It also provides the function of downloading e-books. NOAH-DICT is con

20、trolled by advanced computer technology, which is the technical result of the companys 20-year research. The body of the NOAH-DICT is made of light metal. Therefore it is small in size and very convenient to carry. Besides, it is easy to operate. The price is reasonable. It is a wise choice for Engl

21、ish learners.,第五档（很好）：（17-20分）要点完整，表达清楚，无重大语法错误。 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 -覆盖所有内容要点。 -应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 -语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或词汇所致； 具备较强的语言运用能力。 -有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 第四档（好）：（13-16分）表达基本清楚，缺少个别要点，有些语法错误。 完成了试题规定的任务。 -覆盖主要内容。 -应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 -语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因为尝试较复杂语 法结构或词汇所致。 -应

22、用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 达到了预期的写作目的。 第三档（适当）：（9-12分）尚能表达，缺少多个要点，语法错误较多。 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 -基本覆盖主要内容。 -应用的语法结构或词汇能基本满足任务的要求。 -有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。 -应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。,高 考 短 文 写 作 评 分 标 准,学生作品 A new product named NOAH-DICT has been put on sale lately. It is a kind of electrical dict

23、ionary produced by Chengxin Company Ltd, which is located in Shenzhen China. The new product has many advantages, one of which is that the dictionary contains millions of words and phrases, and it can translate Chinese into English each other in a voice which resembles extremely real peoples voice.

24、Whats more, more information and books can be downloaded if necessary. The product is researched by twenty years efforts, and it is the high technology that controls the dictionary, which makes you get information more quickly. It is convienient for you to take because it is made of light metal and

25、in small size. It not only can be operated easily but also the price is reasonable. I believe that the new product will be a good friend in your life.,【高分的理由】1. 各种句式及结构的合理运用,【高分的理由】3. 要点全面，时态正确,学生作品 A new product named NOAH-DICT has been put on sale lately. It is a kind of electrical dictionary prod

26、uced by Chengxin Company Ltd, which is located in Shenzhen China. The new product has many advantages, one of which is that the dictionary contains millions of words and phrases, and it can translate Chinese into English each other in a voice which resembles extremely real peoples voice. Whats more,

27、 more information and books can be downloaded if necessary. The product is researched by twenty years efforts, and it is the high technology that controls the dictionary, which makes you get information more quickly. It is convienient for you to take because it is made of light metal and in small si

28、ze. It not only can be operated easily but also the price is reasonable. I believe that the new product will be a good friend in your life.,【美中不足】,【分数不理想的原因】,3. 过渡衔接不自然,4. 卷面不整洁,学生作品佳句欣赏,Our company has produced a new product named NOAH-DICT, which is made in Shenzhen, China. Designed by Chengxin co

29、mpany Ltd, the electronic dictionary named NOAH-DICT was produced in Shenzhen, China. The new product is an electronic dictionary which can store millions of words as well as expressions. This kind of electronic dictionary contains millions of words and expressions which are essential for both middl

30、e school students and college students. Two decades of hard work with thousands of failures, our researchers make the breakthrough eventually, that is, the NOAH-DICT. What deserves attention is that the product is the achievement of nearly 20 years research.,It is more a small computer than a normal

31、 dictionary. It has so many functions that it is almost as smart as a computer. Downloading e-books is also available for you. It provides the function of downloading the electronic books to broaden your horizons. The volume of NOAH-DICT is small, thus it can be carried and operated easily. Wherever

32、 you go you can carry it conveniently for its small size. Whats the most important is that its price is very reasonable.,学生作品佳句欣赏,Common mistakes in our writing(学生出现的集中错误),Drifting off the topic（偏题） or leaving out some required information（要点不全） Simple and direct translation / Chinglish expressions

33、Improper sentence patterns and improper words 主要是electric, electrical和electronic 的误用 Spelling mistakes,长单词的正确拼写: convenient, pronunciation 易混淆单词的运用: metal 2.邮件格式已为你给出； 3.邮件不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。,09年高考书面表达（重庆卷） 国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括: 自我介绍 写信目

34、的 话题：我们应该感恩（thankful). 推荐理由 预祝活动成功 注意：1.词数100左右; 2.邮件格式已为你给出； 3.邮件中不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。,三段式,总,分,总,自我介绍 写信目的,话题（我们应该感恩） 列举理由,预祝活动成功,in brief,in detail,in brief,Step2 wording,拼写 词性 近义词 同音词 单复数 冠词 大小写,Simple mistakes leave a bad impression!,step3 sentencing 成句,1 简单句,2 并列句,3 复合句,4 非谓语形式,5 特殊结构,时态，语态,别忘了并

35、列连词,No Chinglish!,各种从句及连词的正确选择,主语一致,避生就熟！,强调句型；倒装； 独立主格结构,1. My name is Li Hua. I am a student and I study in XinHua Middle School. 2. I often visit your web, and from it I know you are looking for topics from students all over the world. 3. We should thankful is a good theme. 4. Our father and moth

36、er through thick and thin raise us, we should be thankful to them. 5. Our teacher teaches us how to study, leading a lot of knowledge into our head,we should thank to them. 6. Only with a thankful heart, we can realize how beautiful life is. 7. I really hope you can choose my theme. 8. I wish the ac

37、tivity will have a successful end.,1. My name is Li Hua. I am a student and I study in XinHua Middle School.,2. I often visit your web, and from it I know you are looking for topics from students all over the world.,I am Li hua, (who is) a student from Xin Hua Middle school.,Improve your sentences.,

38、I often visit your website, where I got the news that youre looking for topics from students all over the world.,3.We should be thankful is a good topic.,That we should be grateful is a good idea.,4.Our father and mother through thick and thin raise us, we should be thankful to them.,It is our paren

39、ts who brought us up through thick and thin, so we should thank them.,The reason why we should be grateful to our parents is that they brought us up through thick and thin.,5.Our teachers teach us how to study, leading a lot of knowledge into our head. we should thank them.,We owe our teachers thank

40、s, for we couldnt be who we are now without their hard work.,6.As a Chinese, we should be thankful, and only with a thankful heart, we can realize how beautiful life is.,Thankfulness is also our traditional Chinese virtue.,Only with a thankful heart, can we fully realize how beautiful life is.,7.I r

41、eally hope you can choose my topic.,I would really appreciate it, if my topic is chosen. Hopefully, my topic will be chosen.,8. I wish the activity will have an successful end.,Wish the activity a great success. Wish the activity successful. May your activity succeed.,Step4 成篇 That we should be than

42、kful is a good idea. It is our parents who brought us up through thick and thin, so we should thank them. We owe our teachers thanks, for we couldnt be who we are now without their hard work. Thankfulness is also our traditional Chinese virtue. Where there is thankfulness, there are hopes to make th

43、e world better. Only with a thankful heart, can we fully realize how beautiful life is.,In my opinion,firstly,besides,Whats more,Necessary conjunctions make a pieces a writing more smoothly developed.,Now, Lets check whether our writing has been improved in content, structure and language ? 我们的文章亮起来了么？,Im Lihua, a student from Xin Hua Middle School. I often visit your website