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WritingAssignmentTASK2TopicShouldteachersandparentsusepunishmentinchildeducation?

布局谋篇第一段（引言段）首先指出成人应该帮助孩子如何区分是非，以及惩罚可以是一种教育手段，然后指出我们应合理适度的运用惩罚。第二段（主体段）谈论如何良好的使用惩罚，以及滥用惩罚所造成的危害。第三段（结尾段）再次强调指出孩提时代是青少年儿童精神发展的关键时期，父母和老师有必要严格的区分运用惩罚的优劣性。经典词汇1.区分是非distinguishrightfromwrong2.一种可以接受的方式anacceptableway3.划分界线makethedistinction经典词汇4.对孩子施加惩罚inflictpunishmentonchildren5.恰当、适度地使用…usesth.appropriatelyandmoderately6.被给予优先考虑begivenpriority经典词汇7.乱丢垃圾litterup8.清理教室tidyuptheclassroom9.被广泛地采用beusedextensively经典词汇10.对某人产生不良影响affectsb.inanegativewayhaveanegativeeffectonsb.11.进行体罚imposecorporalpunishment12.激起某人的怒火和反抗provokeone’sangerandprotest经典词汇13.建立某人的思维方式establishone’swayofthinking14.精神发展的一个阶段astageofmentaldevelopment15.温和的惩罚mildpunishment经典词汇16.给某人一个教训teachsbagoodlesson17.在某人的心灵上笼罩阴影castashadowonone’sheart18.进行区分drawthelineShouldteachersandparentsusepunishmentinchildeducation?

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usepunishmentinchildeducation?

Itisgenerallybelievedthatadultsshouldhelpchildrentodistinguishrightfromwrong.Andpunishmentisanacceptablewayofmakingthatdistinction.However,whenadultswanttoinflictpunishmentontheirchildrenasamethodofeducation,theyshoulduseitappropriatelyandmoderately.Inthefirstplace,gooduseofpunishmentshouldbegivenpriority.It’scrucialtogiveyoungchildreninstructionswhentheyhavemadesomemistakes.Forinstance,ifachildlittersupintheclassroom,histeachermayaskhimtocleantheclassroomonhisown.Bytidyinguptheclassroom,thechildgetstoknowthesignificanceofprotectingpublicenvironment.用比较具体的例子来支撑自己的观点从正面论述

However,ifpunishmentisusedextensively,itwillaffectthechildreninanegativeway.Ifparentsandteachersimposesmanycorporalpunishments,theycouldonlyprovokechildren’sangerandprotest.从反面论述

Toconclude,childhoodisthegoldentimeforteenagerstoestablishtheirwaysofthinking.Inthisstageofmentaldevelopment,mildpunishmentgivesthemmanybenefitsandteachesthemagoodlessonaswell.However,baduseofpunishmentwouldcastashadowintheirinnocenthearts.Itisessentialforadultstoknowwheretodrawtheline.总结部分与主体段落相呼应，分别从正反两方面再次强调自己的观点。切记：不要重复前面用过的语句。Alongwiththeadvanceofthesociety,thepunishmentinchildeducationhasbecomethetalkofteachersandparents.Asamatteroffact,youcanhardlyavoidexposingyourselftothediscussionaboutitevenifyouwanttoturnadeafeartoit.Alongwiththeadvanceofsociety,thepunishmentinchildeducationhasbecomethetalkofteachersandparents.Asamatteroffact,youcanhardlyavoidexposingyourselftothediscussionaboutitevenifyouwanttoturnadeafeartoit.句型1句型2Thereisnodenyingthefactthatpraiseandpunishchildrenisimportantinchildren’slife.However,it’sextremelydifficultforustoimagineshouldteachersandparentsusepunishmentinchildeducation.Foronething,it’sbeneficialforchildtofindtheirmistakes,foranother,ifthepunishmentisnotappropriate,itmustbeadmittedthatit’snegativeforchildren’seducation.Onlyiftheteachersandparentsuseproperpunishmentinchildeducationcanwesolveitverywell.句型4句型5句型3Thereisnodoubtthattheproperpunishmenthaveaprofoundinfluenceonchildren’slives.句型6CorrecttheseexpressionsandsentencesToconclusion…正确的表达常用这两种：

Inconclusion,…Toconclude,…类似的表示“总结”的表达：

Insummary,…Tosumup,…另一方面：inanotherwayontheotherhandTherearemanypeopleagainstit.Therearemanypeoplewhoareagainstit.…telltheyhowtodoisright

…tellthemhowtheyshoulddothisandthat.theanotherpeople“其他人”该怎么表达？othersotherpeoplesomeothersdobadsomethingdosomethingbadpunishmentachildshouldn’tseverityseverity的词性是？对应的形容词是？severepunishmentsshouldn’tpunishachildtooseverelyThisproblemmustseehowtheyuseit.

Itdependsonhowtheyuseit.…makesureangryfeelingisnotthroughtochildren.…makesuretheywon’ttakeouttheirangeronchildren.迁怒于某人Intheonehand,usepunishmenttochildreneffectstheygrowup