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读后续写Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn’thelpweepingwhenshethoughtofscoldingfromhermother.Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?”Oh,yes...butIdon’thavemoneyonme,”shereplied.“That’snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.“comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.“Nothing,actuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJenny.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedMother’sfamiliarfaceandweatheredhands.“WhydidInotthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful,butIhaveneverthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme.”Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.__________________Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn’thelpweepingwhenshethoughtofscoldingfromhermother.Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?”Oh,yes...butIdon’thavemoneyonme,”shereplied.“That’snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.“comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.“Nothing,actuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJenny.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedMother’sfamiliarfaceandweatheredhands.“WhydidInotthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful,butIhaveneverthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme.”Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.__________________一、读懂大意,理清脉络主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意,特别要弄清故事的人物,时态(通常是一般过去时),事件(故事的起因和经过),语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致,保持不变),等等。(总结:人物,时态和事件,语言特色不要变)characters人物:Jenny,hermother,thesellertense时态:simplepasttenseevents事件:events事件:1.Jennyquarreledwithhermother,lefthomeandafewhourslater,feltalittlehungry.2.ThesellergaveabowelofnoodlesandJennythankedtheselleralot.3.Theselleraskedherhowmanytimeshermothercookedforherandifshethankedhermother.4.Sherealizedhermistakesanddecidedtogohometomakeanapologytohermother.1.珍妮跟母亲吵架,离家出走,街上游荡几个钟后,感觉饥饿。2.好心人给她一碗面吃,她感动流泪。3.这位陌生人告诉她,母亲将她养大,给她做了无数次饭菜,应当感谢她的母亲。4.珍妮意识到自己错了,决定回家向妈妈道歉。语言特色1.分词短语作状语(1)Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.(2)Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.(3)Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled…2.形容词短语作状语(有的学者认为是补语)Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock惊呆了.3.with的复合结构However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.4.定语从句Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.二、细读首句,构思框架两段首句定一框即根据所给两段的首句确定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量即第二段的框架,由第二段首句与故事正能量结尾,来确定框架。Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.(走到门口,珍妮深吸了一口气)Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.(轻轻一碰她的头发,她的思绪又回来了)从第一段首句可知,珍妮应是鼓起勇气敲门回家,但从第二段首句来看,“轻轻碰她的头发”的应是母亲,因为人物就三个,续写中一般不要随意冒出一个新的人物,除非情节发展的确需要;“思绪回来”说明第一段中,珍妮回家没见母亲(根据常识,母亲可能去找女儿了),在回忆跟母亲吵架的事,或在回忆母亲多年的关爱,等等。构思:Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.(走到门口,珍妮深吸了一口气)根据构思的大致框架,推断故事中人物所见、所思、所说、所做等每段增加五至七个具体细节或叫"57细节法”。鼓足勇气,推门进屋母亲外出,该去何处累而难过,沙发上坐争吵场面,浮现脑海自己粗鲁,愧对其母母亲责骂,皆因关爱自感羞愧,泪流脸颊三、增加细节,开始写作Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.(轻轻一碰她的头发,她的思绪又回来了)头一望,看见母亲到处找你,你在这里母亲虽累,松了口气扑入怀里,道歉致谢母亲听后,喜在心头根据一致性原则,除内容上要语义衔接,上下连贯外,语言风格也要一致,应使用分词语短和形容词作状语,同时注意使用从句。三、增加细节,开始写作审读初稿,注意语义是否衔接,前后是否连贯,事件是否符合逻辑,语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后,整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。四、修改润色,整洁誉写
Paragraph1:Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.Whenshepushedthedooropenandenteredthehouse,shefoundhermotherwasnotin.Tiredandsad,shesankdownontothesofa.“Wherecouldmymotherbe?”shewondered.“Wasshestillangrywithme?”Again,thesceneofthequarrelappearedinhermind.Sherememberedherrudenesstohermother.Realizingthatallthescoldingfromhermotherwasduetothefactthathermotherreallycaredalotabouther,shefeltratherashamed,andtearsbegantorolldownhercheeks.
Paragraph2:Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermind
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