高中英语 module 6 the tang poemssection ⅴ writing-改写诗歌教学案 外研版选修8

Module 6 The Tang PoemsSection Writing-改写诗歌一、写作要领改写诗歌时，应遵循以下原则：1要忠实于原作的中心思想。这就要求想象和联想要符合原作精神，不能任意想象，漫无边际。2适当拓展，服务主题。诗歌用词比较精练、含蓄，感情色彩较浓厚，也就是说它们的内在含义比较丰富，改写时，有发挥想象的余地，可以把原作简洁的词句拓展成具体的景象，形成一篇与主题相关的文章。3避免简单翻译，要有创作性。改写是再创作的过程，并不是单纯的翻译诗歌，不能仅就诗歌的内容进行简单的扩充，而是要进一步展开种种想象，使人物形象有血有肉，栩栩如生，使故事情节更加完整生动。4丰富想象，适当添加。改写时可将原文中没有的东西，如人物的表情、动作、语言、神态和行为等都加进去，在没有改变原作主题思想的基础上，写成一篇完整的文章。总之，诗歌改写应该把握原文的主题，用通俗易懂的语言进行创作，加入自己的语言，使文章符合主题，流畅易懂。二、增分佳句1Young as we are, we come to realize that as long as we try, nothing is impossible.2She often encourages me to face everything, sad or happy.3I think my mothers love is forever like the sun shining me or music comforting and inspiring me all my life.4I think she is kindhearted, easygoing and goodlooking.5Lily is the girl with blonde hair.题目要求请根据下面的英文短诗，展开适当的想象，写一篇短文。My Teacher Mr MooreTheres a teacher Mr Moore.Who is lovely and thirtyfour.Always encouraging us to try.He leads us to a world of “why”We all admire him more and more.注意：1.不得照抄短诗原文；2必须结合短诗的内容，发挥想象，适当展开；3必须突出短诗的主题，结构完整，语意连贯；4短文不能写成诗歌形式；5词数100左右。第一步：审题构思很关键一、审题1确定体裁：本文为一篇改写诗歌；2确定中心人称：本文主要人称为第三人称；3确定主体时态：本文应使用一般现在时。二、构思第一部分：总体概括Mr Moore给人的印象。第二部分：详细记叙Mr Moore的教学方法以及在教学过程中他要我们学会的东西。第三部分：篇尾总结 Mr Moore是一位博学的老师。第二步：核心词汇想周全1impress_sb.most给某人深刻印象2compared_with 与相比较3pay_more_attention_to 更加注意4way_of_teaching 教学方法5various 各种各样的6put_forward 提出7analyze 分析第三步：由词扩句雏形现1在我所有老师当中，Mr Moore 给我留下最深刻的印象。(who定语从句)Of_all_my_teachers,_Mr_Moore_is_the_one_who_impresses_me_most.2他34岁，却看上去要年轻一些。他是我们学校最受欢迎的老师之一。(one of最高级名词复数)Though_he_is_34,_he_looks_very_young_for_his_age._And_hes_one_of_the_most_popular_teachers_in_our_school.3不像其他老师，Mr Moore更加注意他的教学方法。(unlike)Unlike_other_teachers,_Mr_Moore_pays_more_attention_to_his_way_of_teaching.4他认为我们应该学会如何分析和解决问题。(and并列句)In_his_opinion,_we_should_know_“what”_and_understand_“why”5无论何时提出问题，他都不立即给出答案，而是鼓励我们独立思考。(instead of doing, whenever, put forward)Instead_of_giving_us_answers_immediately,_he_encourages_us_to_think_by_ourselves_whenever_he_puts_forward_questions.6他是一位学者，我们都非常钦佩他。(and并列句)He_is_a_learned_person_and_we_all_admire_him_a_great_deal.第四步：句式升级造亮点1用“比较级形式”改写句1Of_all_my_teachers,_there_is_no_other_teacher_who_impresses_me_more_than_Mr_Moore.2用compared with .改写句3Compared_with_other_teachers,_Mr_Moore_pays_more_attention_to_his_way_of_teaching.3用not only .but also改写句4In_his_opinion,_we_should_not_only_know_“what”，_but_also_understand_“why”4用such .that改写句6He_is_such_a_learned_person_that_we_all_admire_him_a_great_deal.第五步：过渡衔接联成篇Of_all_my_teachers,_there_is_no_other_teacher_who_impresses_me_more_than_Mr_Moore._Though_he_is_34,_he_looks_very_young_for_his_age._And_hes_one_of_the_most_popular_teachers_in_our_school.Compared_with_other_teachers,_Mr_Moore_pays_more_attention_to_his_way_of_teaching._He_tries_various_ways_to_make_his_classes_lively_and_interesting._In_his_opinion,_we_should_not_only_know_“what”，_but_also_understand_“why”_So_instead_of_giving_us_answers_immediately,_he_encourages_us_to_think_by_ourselves_whenever_he_puts_forward_questions._With_his_help,_weve_learned_how_to_analyze_and_settle_problems._What_a_wonderful_world_of_