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2018年01月25日试用3的高中英语组卷一书面表达（共20小题）1假设你是中华中学学生姚平，最近参加了一项研究性学习调研，课题为父母是否以子女为荣通过调研你校学生及其父母，结果发现双方对此问题的看法有差异（数据如图所示）根据图表写一份报告，在报告中，你必须：1描述调研数据；2分析可能导致这一结果的原因2学校即将举办读书节，目前正广泛征集读书节宣传册图片假设你是该校学生潘阳，你已找到以下三幅图片，决定给读书节组委会写一封信，推荐其中一幅，你的信须包括以下内容：1简单描述你想推荐的那幅图片；2阐述你用这幅图片宣传读书节的理由3学校英语报正在酝酿改版，拟从现有的三个栏目（健康、娱乐、文化）中去除一个，并从三个备选栏目（时尚、职业规划、读者反馈）中挑选一个纳入该报假设你是该校学生程飞，给校报编辑写一封电子邮件，表达你的观点邮件须包括以下内容：1你建议去除的栏目及去除的理由；2你建议增加的栏目及增加的理由4请描述如图所示的图片，并谈谈你的感受5Directions：Write an English composition in 120150words according to the instructions given below in Chinese描写一件你珍藏的物品文章要具体说明何时、何地、怎样得到这件物品以及为什么珍藏到现在6你叫Jenny，你的网友Peter（高一学生）即将面临期末考试，近日，他就是否要请家教来帮他复习迎考向你求教，请给Peter回复一封电子邮件，邮件必须包括以下内容：结合你自身的学习经历就是否请家教表达你的观点及理由；就复习迎考给出2条主要建议 7以下是三座城市在就业、娱乐、环境方面的满意度假如你的家庭打算移居到其中的某座城市，请从你和家庭的情况考虑选择一座比较满意的城市，并简要谈谈选择这座城市的理由提示：不必对图表中的数据做详细描写 8你班将召开一次主题班会，探讨高中生在成长过程中遇到的烦恼请根据自己实际生活中遇到的学习、交友、代沟、同龄人攀比等现象进行思考，写一篇发言稿文章需包括：1你在实际生活中遇到的至少两种烦恼及其简要介绍；2你应对这些烦恼所采取的举措和建议 9Directions：Write an English composition in 120150words according to the instructions given below in Chinese假设你班班长打算在寒假组织一次班级活动，有三种方案：一、慈善义卖帮助家庭有困难的同学；二、聘请英语专家介绍有效的学习方法；三、组织一次班级新年派对作为班级的一员，请你根据你的实际情况，在三项方案中选择其一，提出对该项活动的建议并谈谈理由你的写作中必须包括：在三项方案中选择其一；对该方案提出建议；谈谈你提出建议的理由 10假如你是某中学高三（1）班的学生李明，写一封信给学校图书馆负责老师，因为你校图书馆将选择招募课余学生图书管理员信必须包括以下内容：简要介绍个人特长表达希望成为课余学生图书管理员的愿望谈谈你作为课余学生图书管理员，对学校图书馆管理提出一些建议注意：文中请勿提及真实学校Dear Sir/Madam11Directions：Writing an English composition in 120150words according to the instructions given below in Chinese请根据下面的图片，结合你个人的经历，谈谈你的想法12某英文网站正举办征文活动，题目是The Most Useful Skill I Have Ever Learned，请以此写一篇征文你的文章比须包括：这项技能是什么？你是通过什么方式学会的？举例说明为什么你觉得它最有用（注：文中不得出现真实的姓名及学校名称） 13假设你是李华，学校有四个社团正招募新人（如图所示），你希望加入其中一个请你写一篇日记，谈谈你的想法内容必须包括：你希望加入的社团选择该社团的原因你可以为该社团做些什么注意：请勿透露本人真实姓名和学校名称14如图反映了一种常见的现象：拖延症（procrastination）请写一篇作文，内容包括：1给procrastination下定义；2用生活中的例子谈谈你对此现象的看法15最近，网络上针对学习有两种不同的观点，一种是兴趣是最好的老师，另一种是兴趣不是最好的老师请你结合自己的体会，选择你支持的观点，表达自己的看法，并阐述理由注意：作文中不得出现你本人的姓名、班级及学校等真实信息16现有一个中学生志愿者服务的网络平台，这是该平台上显示学生参与活动的流程图：请你据此写一篇短文，你的文章必须包括：简要介绍参与活动的流程谈谈你对通过网络平台参与志愿者服务活动的看法 17学生会正在评选新一届学生会主席，假设你是该校的学生李青，有意参加竞选写一份自荐材料，材料必须包括以下内容：简述个人信息及你所具备的竞选条件（能力、性格、爱好等）如果当选，请你用具体事例阐述你将会为本校学生做些什么？注意：自荐材料中不得使用你所在学校和你的真实名字18Directions：Write an English composition in 120150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese下面两幅图反映的是部分城乡孩子所面临的窘境请就此图谈谈你的想法，你的文章应包括：具体描述两幅图；简要分析造成这两种现象的原因；提出解决问题的建议（注：请勿出现真实姓名和学校）19Directions：Write an English composition in 120150words according to the instructions你是李华，为解决你所在的学校公益社团（public welfare society）的资金短缺问题，请给全校学生写一封募捐信，募集5000元善款信中必须包括：1向全校的捐款号召2你发起这一活动的理由3你准备怎样使用善款的计划（文中不得出现考生姓名，学校等任何真实信息）20下面两幅图反映的是部分城乡孩子所面临的窘境请就此图谈谈你的想法，你的文章应包括：具体描述两幅图；简要分析造成这两种现象的原因；提出解决问题的建议（注：请勿出现真实姓名和学校）2018年01月25日试用3的高中英语组卷参考答案与试题解析一书面表达（共20小题）1假设你是中华中学学生姚平，最近参加了一项研究性学习调研，课题为父母是否以子女为荣通过调研你校学生及其父母，结果发现双方对此问题的看法有差异（数据如图所示）根据图表写一份报告，在报告中，你必须：1描述调研数据；2分析可能导致这一结果的原因【分析】本文为图表作文，考生需要根据数据进行分析，从数据分析原因，得出结论时态主要为一般现在时人称为第一人称和第三人称为主写作要点为：1描述调研数据；2分析可能导致这一结果的原因重要的词汇及短语：make a survey 做调查hold the same opinion 持相同的观点according to根据approve 同意，认可cause 起因，原因figure out 找出lead to 导致subtle 细微的conservative 保守的accustom to 习惯于convey 传递（信息）tendency 趋势conceal 隐藏the current education system 常规的教育体系bias 偏爱，偏见excessively 过分地高分句型：句型一：There seems to betwo causes aswe tried to figure out whatled to this subtle differencethere seems to be 句型，表示看上去似乎有；as 引导时间状语从句，表示伴随，主句和从句的两个动作同时发生；what 引导宾语从句句型二：The current education system excessively emphasizes the value of academic performance，thus forcing children to extensively believe that only by achieving excellent scores can they make their parents proud常规的教育体系过分强调学业表现/价值，导致孩子们过度认为只有取得优异的成绩，才能让父母为自己骄傲句型三：This bias unfairly undermines the significance of talents for art and sports，which easily frustrates children and renders them more likely to underestimate themselves这种偏见不公正地低估了艺术和体育特长的意义，很容易打击到孩子（的信心），因而他们更可能降低对自我的认同【解答】Recently，we made a survey about whether the parents agree that they are proud of their childrenThe result shows that 80% of parents are proud of their children while only 60% of children hold the same opinionAccording to the survey，we can conclude that the number of parents who approved the idea is 20% more than of children（描述调研数据）There seems to be two causes as we tried to figure out what led to this subtle difference【高分句型一】First，conservative Chinese parents are never accustomed to conveying directly how much they are proud of their childrenThis tendency to conceal feelings hardly helps children develop a strong sense of selfconfidence（原因一）Second，the current education system excessively emphasizes the value of academic performance，thus forcing children to extensively believe that only by achieving excellent scores can they make their parents proud【高分句型二】This bias unfairly undermines the significance of talents for art and sports，which easily frustrates children and renders them more likely to underestimate themselves【高分句型三】（原因二）Without the genuine encouragement from parents and the reversal of examoriented educational methods，a kid would never end up with a positive grownup（结论）【点评】数据分析类的作文，需要考生认真观察数据，透过现象看本质，从数据中分析原因，得出结论2学校即将举办读书节，目前正广泛征集读书节宣传册图片假设你是该校学生潘阳，你已找到以下三幅图片，决定给读书节组委会写一封信，推荐其中一幅，你的信须包括以下内容：1简单描述你想推荐的那幅图片；2阐述你用这幅图片宣传读书节的理由【分析】本文采用了图表+提纲类形式，根据文章所给提示信息给读书节组委会写一封信，推荐其中一幅图片，描述图片同时阐述推荐理由，既是提纲作文又是图画类作文时态应该用一般现在时人称用第二和第三人称重要短语：around the corner（即将到来），recommend sth to（推荐什么给），remind sb of sth （提醒某人），as far as Im concerned （就我所知道的而言），turn out to be（结果是），not only，but also（不仅，而且），enhance understanding of.（增强.的理解），take sth into consideration（把.考虑在内）【解答】Dear Sir/Madam，Since the Reading Festival is around the corner，Im writing to recommend a picture which can be used in the brochure to remind the students of the pleasure of readingIn the picture，three students are sitting at the table，discussing heatedly what they have just read【高分句型】It seems that they have had a lot of fun through the discussion（描述图片）Though it is admitted that reading is mostly a personal activity which needs quietness and concentration，as far as Im concerned，it can also be a sharing experience when the same book is being appreciatedJust imagine that you have read a terrific detective story with fascinating and intricate plotsYou are so amazed by the genius of the writer and you cant help sharing it with your classmates or best friends，who turn out to have been deeply impressed as well【高分句型】The moment you mention the book，the passion and enthusiasm about the story will explode which can never be gained on your own【高分句型】My ideal atmosphere of reading is just like that，through which you can not only appreciate the content by yourself，but also have the pleasure of sharing the plots or opinions with your peers，which will ultimately enhance your understanding of the book【高分句型】To sum up，the reason of my recommendation is quite simple and apparent that reading，instead of being dull and isolating，can be full of participation and common interest（阐述推荐该图片的理由）I sincerely hope that you will take my suggestion into consideration and Im looking forward to your early replyYours sincerely，Pan Yang【点评】写好这类图片及提纲式作文的关键是认真分析所给提示信息，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将要点完整地表述出来，并认真看图，围绕主题，提炼要点，发挥想象，语言力求准确、简洁选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等3学校英语报正在酝酿改版，拟从现有的三个栏目（健康、娱乐、文化）中去除一个，并从三个备选栏目（时尚、职业规划、读者反馈）中挑选一个纳入该报假设你是该校学生程飞，给校报编辑写一封电子邮件，表达你的观点邮件须包括以下内容：1你建议去除的栏目及去除的理由；2你建议增加的栏目及增加的理由【分析】本文是一篇提纲作文根据所提供的材料信息，给校报编辑写一封电子邮件，就学校英语报改版，拟从现有的三个栏目（健康、娱乐、文化）中去除一个，并从三个备选栏目（时尚、职业规划、读者反馈）中挑选一个纳入该报事宜发表自己的观点写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主写作要点：1表示对客人的欢迎；2介绍此项活动（如活动目的、内容等）3表达对客人的祝愿；重要短语：reform sth（代表），be replaced by（被代替），share sth with sb（与某人分享某物），needless to say （更不用说），according to （根据），have positive effects on（对有影响），be of great significance（非常有意义），loss of （损失），keep fit（保持健康），contributes to（促成），broaden ones horizons（拓宽某人的视野），in turn （反过来又），be beneficial to （对有益）【高分句型一】1Compared to the entertainment，I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important此处是过去分词作状语，主句为I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important，主句的主语为I与所给动词存在逻辑上的被动关系此处是由连接词that引导的同位语从句，that引导的同位语从句解释说明view的具体内容【高分句型二】2The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life此处是由连接词that引导的表语从句，主语为The main factor，谓语动词为is【高分句型三】3the progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening ones horizons，which in turn is beneficial to ones study and the establishment of philosophy of life此处是由关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句，which在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容【高分句型四】4Here I am in the hope that my advice will add a brilliant touch to the improved version of our school English Post此处是由连接词that引导的同位语从句，连接词that解释说明名词hope的具体内容【解答】Dear Editor，Ive learned that our English Post is being reformed and one of the three columns is to be replaced by a new oneIm writing this email to share with you my opinionsNeedless to say，the columns will definitely be designed according to studentsinterest and have positive effects on their study and life（写信的目的）Compared to the entertainment，I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important【高分句型一】The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life【高分句型二】Consequently，more knowledge of how to keep fit can improve the quality of lifeIn addition，the progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening ones horizons，which in turn is beneficial to ones study and the establishment of philosophy of life【高分句型三】（建议去除的栏目及去除的理由）Furthermore，the career planning should be taken into account in the school English PostOn the one hand，it covers ones career development a great dealOn the other hand，it makes a great difference to ones career success in the future（建议增加的栏目及去除的理由）What has been mentioned above is my personal ideasHere I am in the hope that my advice will add a brilliant touch to the improved version of our school English Post【高分句型四】（希望）Yours sincerely，Cheng Fei【点评】提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型4请描述如图所示的图片，并谈谈你的感受【分析】本文为看图作文，主题是要用积极乐观的心态面对生活写作时可按三段式来写，首先描述图片点明主题，然后分析概述其含义，发表感想基本时态为一般现在时，人称以第三人称为主重要短语：do some actions （做一些动作），look like（看上去像），be faced with （面临，面对），manage to do （成功地做某事），have a positive attitude toward（对有积极的态度），have great influence on（有很大影响），keep peace（保持平静）【解答】As is vividly shown in the picture，an old granny who looks ugly in a wheelchair does some actionsThe actions reflect on the wall，which makes her look like a young beautiful girl（描述图片）【高分句型】The picture conveys that some people are positive when they are faced with lifeThey are always so energetic and enterprising that they manage to finish most of tasks wellLife returns color to those people who have positive and optimistic attitudes toward life（联系实际，反映问题）【高分句型】Now that a positive attitude can lead us a better life，how can we develop a positive attitude？For one thing，we should hold a dream about future to provide our life a clear directionFor another，it is necessary for us to be confident which is the energy of life，perhaps the beauty of life【高分句型】Whether we can find it have a great influence on our attitude towards life，so we should keep peace in our heart to find the beauty of lifeIn my opinion，if we can do like that mentioned above，better life will hug us tightly（观点）【点评】写作看图作文时，首先认真看图，结合图片和文字，确定所要表达的主题是什么，然后围绕主题，提炼要点，合理想象，对译出的要点通过合理的组合，加上必要的连接词使表达连贯同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型5Directions：Write an English composition in 120150words according to the instructions given below in Chinese描写一件你珍藏的物品文章要具体说明何时、何地、怎样得到这件物品以及为什么珍藏到现在【分析】高分句型：句型一：The reason why I still keep it in my memory is that it reminds me of an old saying：there must be a use for ones talentThe reason why是以reason为先行词，关系副词why引导的定语从句在that引导的表语从句中含有短语remind sbof sth使某人想起某物句型二：When I was ten years old，there was an old man living in my neighborhoodwhen引导时间状语从句，在从句中作状语living是现在分词作后置定语，与其逻辑主语man是主动关系【解答】In my drawer，there is a deliberate wooden toy horse（开门见山，指出珍藏的物品）It was a gift from an old man in my neighborhood when I was still veryyoungThe reason why I still keep it in my memory is that it reminds me of anold saying：there must be a use for ones talent【高分句型一】When I was ten years old，therewas an old man living in my neighborhood【高分句型一】He didnt have theopportunity to study in school，but he learned how to make wood furnitureEverytime people went to ask him to solve some problems of furniture，he waswilling to help themTo my surprise，in his spare time，he would make some toys with small piece s of woodSome ofthem were sold to the toy store and others were given to us（具体说明何时、何地、怎样得到这件物品）The moment I see the lovely toy horse made by this old man，I wouldremember the happy childhoodThe old man impressed me deeply with his talent andkindnessFrom the little horse toy，we can see whatever kind of talent you have，you canfind your own method to display your talent and bring love to others（这件物品为什么珍藏到现在的原因）【点评】本文要求描写一件你珍藏的物品，要具体说明何时、何地、怎样得到这件物品以及为什么珍藏到现在所以在写作时必须审好题，不能遗漏任何一条在准确表述内容的基础上，争取多用些从句，非谓语和短语使文章生动，上档次6你叫Jenny，你的网友Peter（高一学生）即将面临期末考试，近日，他就是否要请家教来帮他复习迎考向你求教，请给Peter回复一封电子邮件，邮件必须包括以下内容：结合你自身的学习经历就是否请家教表达你的观点及理由；就复习迎考给出2条主要建议Hearing that youre wondering whether you should invite a tutor to help you prepare for the coming final examination，Im shocked and Ill give you an exactNoA tutor costs high，usually 150 yuan or more per hour，which you may not be able to affordBesides，having studied that detailed information of tutor classes from my classmates，I find that most of the information is similar to that of schools，which is even with little or no extended materials，so its absolutely no use if you listen to the teachers with full attention in the school and review what is on your notebook carefully after classWhats more，a tutor may make you depend fully onhim and lose your selfmotivation on study，which is exactly the truth of studyWithout it，you may never learn betterAnd thats why I say theres no need for you to invite a home tutorWhen it comes to preparing for the exam，Id like to give you two suggestionsFirst，review the points which youre poor atYou will achieve twice the result with half the effort if reviewing the notes accompanied with several particular exercisesSecond，check all the notes and make sure that youve captured all the detailsTry hard and I believe you can achieve a good score in the exam【分析】本文是一篇提纲作文根据所提供的材料信息，写一封电子邮件，就即将面临期末考试的高一学生Peter是否要请家教来帮他来复习迎考表达观点并提供建议写作要点包括：1结合自身学习经历表达观点及理由； 2就复习迎考提出主要建议写作时人称以第一人称和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主重要短语：invitesb to do （邀请某人做某事），prepare for （为作准备），be able to do（能够做某事），be similar to （与相似），dependon （取决于，依赖），be of no use （没有用处），When it comes to（当谈到，涉及到），bepoor at （在薄弱），be accompanied with（带有，兼有），captureall the details（掌握所有细节），achievea good score（取得好成绩）【高分句型】1Hearing that youre wondering whether you should invite a tutor to help you prepare for the coming final examination，Im shocked and Ill give you an exactNo这里是由现在分词hearing作状语，主句为Im shocked and Ill give you an exactNo，主句的主语为I与所给动词hear存在逻辑上的主动关系2A tutor costs high，usually 150 yuan or more per hour，which you may not be able to afford这里是由which引导的非限制性定语从句，which在从句中作宾语，指代前面的名词150 yuan or more per hour3I find that most of the information is similar to that of schools，which is even with little or no extended materials，so its absolutely no use if you listen to the teachers with full attention in the school and review what is on your notebook carefully after class这里是由which引导的非限制性定语从句，which在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容这里是代词that可指代前面的名词the information，that=the+名词这里是由连词so引导的句子，与前面的句子I find that most of the information is similar to that of schools，which is even with little or no extended materials构成因果关系【解答】Hearing thatyoure wondering whether you should invite a tutor to help you prepare for thecoming final examination，Im shocked and Ill give you an exactNo【高分句型】（表达观点）A tutor costshigh，usually 150 yuan or more per hour，which you may not be able to afford【高分句型】Besides，having studied that detailed informationof tutor classes from my classmates，I find that most of the information issimilar to that of schools，which is even with little or no extendedmaterials，so its absolutely no use if you listen to the teachers with fullattention in the school and review what is on your notebook carefully afterclass【高分句型】Whats more，a tutor may make you dependfully on him and lose your selfmotivation on study，which isexactly the truth of study【高分句型】Withoutit，you may never learn betterAnd thats why I say theres no need for you toinvite a home tutor（理由） When itcomes to preparing for the exam，Id like to give you two suggestionsFirst，review the points which youre poor atYou will achieve twice the result withhalf the effort if reviewing the notes accompanied with several particularexercisesSecond，check all the notes and make sure that youve captured all thedetails【高分句型】（建议） Try hard and I believe you can achieve agood score in the exam（结尾总结概括）【点评】提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型7以下是三座城市在就业、娱乐、环境方面的满意度假如你的家庭打算移居到其中的某座城市，请从你和家庭的情况考虑选择一座比较满意的城市，并简要谈谈选择这座城市的理由提示：不必对图表中的数据做详细描写 【分析】本文是图表作文，根据文章图表和所