维词资料：2016年10月浙江高考英语开放写作---荒野冒险读后续写(元宵)(共9张PPT).pptx

荒野冒险 读后续写,步 骤 1,概括已知信息：标明核心词、核心句， 梳理语篇内容的推进方向。,Jane and her husband, Tom,driven three hours to campa lake in the forest.quarrel walked awayloststop for the nightrose at the break of dayto a streamdrank and ate a few berrieshope it would lead her to the lakeheard a helicopterUnfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see herA few minutes later, another helicopter yellow blouse,汉语：驱车野营生嫌隙，迷失山林心焚急；,挨饿恐惧度长夜，两架飞机失机会。,步 骤 2,按人物、环境、情节动词等分类划线词：,步 骤 3 紧扣语境构思情节，分析：,1. 据第一段开头”dark”可知，- 2. 据第二段开头”woke up”可知，-。 3. 第二段情节可能：-,Jane, Tom,walked, climbed,lake, stream,Helicopter, yellow blouse,To her great joy, at a distance,情节1（搭建本段空白处前后桥梁） 情节2,步 骤 3 紧扣语境构思情节，分析：,据第一段开头DARK可知， 2. 据第二段开头WOKE UP可知， 3. 第二段情节可能：,又要在荒野再过一晚。环境描写。大量心理活动，后悔？想念？期待？坚持？夜里有没有遇到蛇、老虎、狮子？,第一段应有JANE入睡的情节。,醒来看到TOM；OR醒来在医院；OR贵人相助OR直升机救援；OR独自找到湖。,dark again. -Jane tired, hungry-frightened-thought to herself-if only-miss Tomtomorrow guide the helicopter-lie beside the stream-tigers-hold her breathquietslept,It was day break when Jane woke up. -ate berries and drank some water-catch sight of a fisherman at a distance-climbed to an open area together- To her great joy-helicopteryellow blouse-rescuers-the warmest hug-smile satisfied smiles,步 骤 4,(分析原文写作风格，特殊语法结构有时间状语从句，结果状语从句，条件状语从句，宾语从句，DOING,直接引语，虚拟语气，倒装，疑问句，感叹句，介词短语等),初稿,1,But no more helicopter came and it wasgetting dark again.,Jane was so tired and hungry that she didnt have any power at all. Whats worse, she was extremely frightened. She thought to herself, “If only I had not quarrelled with Tom. Where is Tom? He must have made the emergency call. What I need is enough courage. If I continue my spirits tomorrow, I will be likely to guide the helicopter.” Lying beside the stream, she fell asleep very soon. Suddenly, she was woken up by the wild shouts of several tigers, which made her scared to death. After she held her breath for a few minutes,gradually everything was quiet again. In the terrible darkness, she slept again.,It was daybreak when Jane woke up.,除使用原文已有从句等复杂语法结构外， 还使用主语从句，定语从句等复杂语法结构。,She caught sight of a fisherman at a distance. Walking nearer, she told him the whole story. Together, they climbed to an open area. To her great joy ，a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. The fisherman helped her flag her yellow blouse wildly. This did catch the helicopters attention! Jane was rescued. Bursting into tears, she told Tom that she missed him so much. Never would she do such a foolish thing. Tom gave her the warmest and longest hug she had ever received. People around smiled satisfied smiles.,步 骤 5 核查字数、下划线标明原文给出的5个以上关键词语、连接词、标点、语法,可能能版本(201 words)删词，尽量不减少特殊语法结构。 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. Jane was so tired, hungry, and extremely frightened. She thought to herself, “If only I had not quarreled with Tom. Where is Tom? He must have made the emergency call. What indeed is enough courage. If I continue my spirits tomorrow, I will be likely to guide the helicopter.” Lying beside the stream, she fell asleep very soon. Suddenly, she heard the shouts of tigers, which made her scared to death. After she held her breath for a few minutes, everything was quiet again. In the terrible darkness, she slept again.,It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She caught sight of a fisherman at a distance, with whose help she climbed to an open area. To her great joy, a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. The fisherman helped flag her yellow blouse wildly. This did catch the rescuers attention! Jane was rescued. Seeing Tom, she told him how much she missed him. Never would they be away from each other. Tom gave her the warmest and longest hug she had ever received. People around smiled satisfied smiles. (174 words),（砍柴老人，湖泊，直升机 ） But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. The temperature got lower at night than in the daytime. Jane put on her yellow blouse. At that moment, tiredness surrounded her. She felt exhausted both physically and emotionally. But she continued walking forward because she really wanted to meet Tom as soon as possible. She walked slowly and carefully in darkness. Following the stream for about two hours, Jane couldnt support her physical strength, so she found a flat ground to spend the long and hard night. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She felt hungry and tired. After a short adjustment, she began the hard trip. A few hours later, she caught sight of an old man cutting woods. To her great joy, the old man, who was very familiar with the geographical characteristics, informed her of the way to the lake. Seeing the lake meant seeing hope in the a