高中英语学生写作常见错误分析课件.ppt

,兴国县第三中学 邱冬华,英语写作常见错误分析,高考作文主要弱点: 1.中国式英语多; 2. 语法概念模糊,语用失误多; 3. 拼写错误多; 4. 词汇量少,词汇概念不清; 5.句子不完整及累赘； 6. 审题马虎,叙述不着点子;,教师心目中的好文章: 1.书写工整漂亮。 2有内容,涉及基本要点; 3. 句子没毛病,无语法错误或语用失误; 4. 句法上,简单句与复合句或复杂句相间; 5. 连贯性好; 6. 词汇档次较高; 7. 表达功能或意念时,用语得体,有骨头,且有血有肉.,一、从高考阅卷看孩子练英语书法的重要性,书写分，（15）评分标准中明确规定，书写差，以致影响交际要将分数降一个档次，一个档次为5分。 英语书法,过好英语书写关这个话题.可能有人认为我这个高中老师谈这个问题也太小儿科了.且慢,待我说了一个实际情况你再作结论.,英语书写的规范整洁漂亮,应该是一个老话题.但自从2007年我们地区的市级考试实施网上阅卷以来,其重要性显得尤为明显.所谓的网上阅卷.就是把学生的试卷扫描以后,进入电脑.以互联网的形式,让阅卷老师在电脑上打分,于统计工作带来很大的便利.一份字迹清楚饱满漂亮的试卷,其在电脑显示屏上看上去是很清晰的.阅卷老师阅卷时看了觉得心情舒畅.分数稍微给高点是在情理之中的事.但一份书写差劲的试卷就糊了.所以.在我们江苏省英语高考的新的试卷评分标准中对书面表达的细则规定:书写模糊不清可降一个等级计分.一个等级就是5分.这种无须多少智力因素去左右的分数,失了岂不可惜.,一份字迹模糊的试卷,即使考生的实际水平很高,很有可能要吃亏的.即使容许你查分,到时也是哑巴吃黄连有苦说不出的.何况仲裁老师又不是你亲娘舅.是亲娘舅可能要申请回避的哦.,二、简单单词拼写错误,2、our school is very beatiful.,3 The house is being buit now.,1、Our monter is very hard- working, and he is always the frist to come to our classroom and the last to leave.,monitor,first,beautiful,built,4 、I am very glad to recive your letter.,5 、Last Thusday , we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing.,6、 Thank you for your litter asking about the rebuilt primary school.,receive,Thursday,letter,二、中国式英语多。如：,例1如翻译这句“我们学校将要建造一个植物花园，学校将种植不同种类的树木和花草。很多学生将这句翻译为” Our school wants to improve our environment and our school will build a botanical garden 。,提示：当句子主语不好表达时用被动语态或者灵活变换主语，如上句改为We will plant different kinds of trees ,flowers and grass in and around our school ,A botanical garden will be built for us to visit and practice in .,例2Today, Money to everybody is very importance, ours eat, cloth, live, go etc. 改为： Today, money to everybody is very important. Including our eating, wearing, living, going etc.,1.不一致所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致，它还包括了数的不一致， 时态不一致及代词不一致等 例、When one have money , he can do what he want to .,三语法概念模糊,语用失误多具体表现为不一致及“综合性语言错误”，诸如时态，语态，标点符号，大小写等方面的错误。,(人一旦有了钱，他就能想干什么就干什么),剖析：one是单数第三人称，因而本句的have应改为has ;同理，want应改为wants.本句是典型的主谓不一致 改为： Once one has money ,he can do what he wants (to do),例2. 1.To do well in college, good grades are essential. 剖析：句中不定式短语 “to do well in college” 的逻辑主语不清楚 改为：To do well in college, a student needs good grades .2 .Be ill ,she had to look after her sick mother at home. (使用非谓语动词时，非谓语动词的逻辑主语和句子主语要保持一致)。,例3They started working at once, clean the windows and sweeping the floor. （并列词要保持一致） 例4，They said it is such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever. （主从句的时态要保持一致） 例5，After graduate from high school,he went to work in a small company.,cleaning,was,graduating,2、语法概念模糊,1、There is no need worried about it. 改为： There is no need to worry about it 2、We may think that our parents are not believe in us. 改为We may think that our parents do not believe in us. 3、We should try to spend more time to talk with them. 改为,We should try to spend more time talking with them.,4 Everything was done,they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people. 改为： Everything done,they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people 5 The old womam has three sons ,all of them are doctors.(句法错误) 改为： The old womam has three sons ,all of whom are doctors。,三.句子不完整（Sentence Fragments）,例 There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV ,radio ,newspaper and so on .,剖析：本句后半部分“for example by TV ,radio, newspaper and so on .”不是一个完整的句子，仅为一些不连贯的词语，不能独立成句,改为：There are many ways to know society ,for example ,by TV ,radio ,and newspaper.,2.考生在尝试写一些从句和复杂的 句子结构。但往往忘记了写主句从而导致句子的不完整 1).Hang Kang which has many beautiful places of interest and is famous for its theme park. 改为： .Hang Kang which has many beautiful places of interest is famous for its theme park. 2)It is known to us all,so we must seize the time and cherish our life.（改法较多） 3 )Jane Austin who was born and brought up in a village She wrote many famous novels 。 改为： Jane Austin who was born and brought up in a village wrote many famous novels 。,例2，We believe you will success in passing the driving examination.,四.词性误用(Misuse of Parts of Speech),“词性误用”常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；名词当动词用等,例例 None can negative the importance of money.,剖析：negative 系形容词，误作动词。,改为：None can deny the importance of money.,改为： We believe you will succeed in passing the driving examination.,例3，Id like to wish her a happily birthday to express my thanks to you for your hard working. 改为; Id like to wish her a happy birthday to express my thanks to you for your hard work. 例4, We all think its our duty to protection and beautiful our environment. 改为;We all think its our duty to protect and beautify our environment.,本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同位语从句，我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为：In spite of his laziness, I like him.,五.累赘(Redundancy),言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词；写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组；能用词组的不用从句或句子。如：,例1In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.,例2 For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.,剖析：整个句子可以大大简化。改为： Diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.,例3 My name is Li Hua and I am a student who study in Xing Hua Middle School.,改为: My name is Li Hua and I am a student of Xing Hua Middle School.,找错误,Welcome to the column:”English Writing”! In order that improve your English writing skills and learning well, we expext all of you to post your articles on the column.You can write anything that you are famliar to and send them to us .Afterwards, teachers can give you some advices on what you written online.In this way,Im sure you can make more progresses.The students whose writing are excellent will be awarding. The first prize: an MP4,f