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湖北省黄冈市2014高考英语作文训练题连载（3）及参考范文【北京市丰台区2014统一模拟】第二节 情景作文(20分) 假设你是红星中学高二 (1)班的学生李华，下面四幅图描述了你们家上周收留流浪狗的真实故事，请根据图片的先后顺序，为校刊“英语园地”写一篇短文。注意：1. 文章的开头已为你写好。 2. 词数不少于60。last friday， 第二节 情景作文(20分)一、评分原则： 1. 本题总分为20分，按5个档次给分。 2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 3. 评分时应考虑：内容要点的完整性、上下文的连贯、词汇和句式的多样性及语言的准确性。 4. 拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。5. 词数少于60，从总分中减去1分。二、内容要点：1. 发现流浪狗并带回家2. 给小狗喂食、洗澡3. 讨论是否留下小狗4. 遛狗、和小狗玩耍三、各档次的给分范围和要求：第一档完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖了所有内容要点；运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇；语法或用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体现了较强的语言运用能力；有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯、结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。18分20分第二档完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖了所有内容要点：运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。达到了预期的写作目的。15分17分第三档基本完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖了内容要点：运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求；语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。基本达到了预期的写作目的。12分14分第四档未恰当完成试题规定的任务。漏掉或未描述清楚主要内容；所用句式和词汇有限；语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。未能清楚地传达信息。6分11分第五档未完成试题规定的任务。明显遗漏主要内容；句式单调、词汇贫乏；语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解。1分5分0分未能传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关。四、possible versions:possible version 1:last friday, on the way home from school, i found a dirty puppy dog lying beside the dustbin. he was so weak that he couldnt open his eyes. i felt sorry for the puppy and carried him home immediately. after feeding him food and milk, i gave him a shower. i was so glad to see the dog recover. he was so lovely and i wanted to keep him. after discussing the situation with my parents, i decided to adopt him. today the dog has become part of our family. we walk him in the park, play with him and take good care of him. he brings us happiness and keeps us company.(111 words)possible version 2: last friday, a chance encounter changed me and my familys life greatly. after school, i was about to enter my apartment building when a little dirty dog, lying beside the dustbin, caught my eye. he looked extremely weak. immediately the homeless dog filled me with sympathy. so i bent down and held him in my arms. i rushed him upstairs and right away fixed him some food. then, i gave him a bath. after the bath he looked energetic and refreshed. what a lovely dog! when my parents got home, i asked if i could keep the dog. to my surprise and happiness, they agreed. from that day, he has become a member of our family. everyone has enjoyed his company. my parents walk him often. he and i play joyfully. looking at the cute, happy dog today. i realize that i did the fight thing. i brought him to a warm, loving home and he has brought us great happiness and laughter. (161 words)记叙文型基础写作1-1 专题导读记叙文是以叙述为主要表达方式，以写人物的经历和事物发展变化为主要内容的一种文体，包括记人记事方面的故事、日记、游记、新闻、通讯等。记叙文通常要将时间、地点、人物、事件的起因、经过和结果六个要素交代清楚。通常使用第一人称或第三人称来写，第一人称主要是用于写自传或本人的经历，第三人称是用于写他人的经历或事迹。写作时要注意以下几点：1注意不要漏掉信息点，但也不要为了生动而随意添加信息。2信息点的表述不一定完全按照题目所给的顺序，可能要适当重组。要特别注意故事发展的线索和时间顺序等。3记叙文写作的时态多数是用一般过去时，但也要注意灵活运用其他时态。4高考中记叙文的话题通常是与中学生的生活阅历有关，如校园生活、旅游、交通、交友等，平时要注意积累这些方面的词汇和短语。典例导练【2011湖北卷改编】请根据以下提示，结合你校园生活中的一个事例，就“与人合作”这一话题，用英语写一篇短文。working in groups at school is an opportunity to learn more about teamwork.teamwork shows us how other peoples roles fit the purpose of the group, and it teaches us to be patient and how to respond to different people.【写作要求】只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。【评分标准】句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。one possible version：years of school life has taught me a lot of things, of which teamwork is the most important for me.in fact, i didnt realize its importance until i was chosen monitor of my class in my senior middle school.at first, i did most of the duties myself while other students cared little about class activities.as a result, i was tired out and depressed so i turned to my teacher, who advised me to cooperate with others.it is working in teams instead of on my own that has freed me of trouble and made my work more efficient.新题预测(二)假设你是王平，李华是你的同窗好友，请根据下列要点，用英文给李华写一篇毕业留言。【写作内容】1简要表述李华在你心目中的印象；2用一到两个相关的事例进行具体描述；3对她表示美好的祝愿。【写作要求】1只能使用5个句子表达全部内容；2开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总句数；3留言中不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。【评分标准】句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。one possible version：june 26, 2010dear li hua，its time to say goodbye.its time to recall those beautiful days we spent together and you ware the very person who gave me a hand when necessary and the most considerate person who knew exactly what i needed.when i suddenly fell ill two years ago, it was you who carried me on your back to a nearby hospital.you took good care of me while i was having an injection.later, you managed to help me with my lessons, without which i would have failed in the examination.i still have hundreds of stories to share with you and have thousands of blessings for you.may all your dreams come true! may our friendship last till the end of the universe!yours，wang ping【写作要求】只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。【评分标准】句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。 one possible version：yesterday my classmates and i went to west mountain and had a picnic.all of us set off at seven oclock from our school gate and rode to the foot of the mountain. after an hours climbing, we reached the top of the mountain and enjoyed the beautiful scenery. running, singing, dancing, playing chess and taking photos, we had a wonderful time there.after the picnic lunch at three oclock, we felt very tired, so we went down the mountain and came home.请根据以下说明，使用5个规范的英语句子描述所给的全部内容。【写作内容】假如你叫孙军，是某市一所中学的学生。老师要求同学们写一篇英文短文，反映学校门前交通拥挤的现象，短文须包括以下要点：【写作要求】必须使用5个句子表达全部的内容。【评分标准】句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。one possible version：beside my school there is a primary school and the gates of the two schools both face the main road.in rush hours, there are so many cars, buses and bikes on the main road that the students have to cross it to school.crowds of people often thread their way through the moving cars and buses.whats worse, some pupi