Cirvley2011版考研英语写作160篇的范文.doc

秋风清，秋月明,落叶聚还散,寒鸦栖复惊。1.毅力与恒心Directions：Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay， you should 1describe the drawing briefly，2explain its intended meaning， and then3give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. （20 points）背诵范文及高分语言和结构点评As we can see from the picture， a disabled young man is making efforts to climb a hill. By the sweats all over his face， we may deduce that he may have a hard time before. But with his austere perseverance， he is close to his destination：the top of the hill. However， the meaning of the picture goes beyond mountain climbing. Rather， it proves that perseverance is a great element of success： those who persevere will win in the long run because their silent power grows irresistibly greater with time. According to recent studies， the quality many successful people share is persistence. They are willing to spend more time accomplishing a task and to persevere in the face of many difficult odds. Helen Keller is a proof that great things can happen to everyone， even though he or she may be handicapped， if he or she works hard and never gives up. Helen was born blind and deaf. However， throughout all her life， she never lost her heart. Instead， she kept on learning how to read and write and later became a very famous writer.Whether you are strong or weak， you must keep fighting to succeed. No matter who you are or what your position is， you must keep fighting for what you want to achieve. Permanence， perseverance and persistence in spite of all obstacles， discouragements， and impossibilities： it is this that in all things distinguishes the strong soul from the weak.“坚持”的不同表示persist和persevere，学习本文，应注意掌握“坚持”的相关单词的使用方法。在表示坚持做某事时，persist后加in doing sth.而persevere的形式为persevere to do sth.文中表示“残疾”的单词有disabled和handicapped。disabled主要是指肢体上的残疾而丧失某种能力，handicapped则表示生理上的缺陷和智力上的不健全。在日常写作练习中应注意辨别其正确的用法。表示某人天生就的短语：sb. be born+adj；文中的用法为Helen was born blind and deaf.这个句子还可以说成Helen was a born blind and deaf person.此时born为形容词，应学会区分其不同点。No matter+who/ when/ where/ what/how的用法表示无论谁何时何处、什么、怎么等。例如：Dontrust him no matter what he says.无论他说什么，都别相信。文中最后一句是个强调句型Itsthat.句中的in all things还可以说成among other things，表示在所有的当中。范文精译我们从这幅画可以看到，一位残疾人正在奋力登山。从他脸上的汗可以得知他前面的艰辛。但是因为他坚持不懈、不屈不挠的精神，他快到目的地山顶了。但是这幅画的意思超越了爬山。应该这样说，不屈不挠是迈向成功的重要因素：从长远看，那些坚持不懈的人会成功，因为随着时间的推移，这种沉默的力量变得越来越大，挡都挡不住。根据最近的研究表明，许多成功人士共有的一种品质就是坚持不懈。他们愿意花更多的时间成就一件事并且面对很多困难都坚持下来。海伦凯勒就是例证如果努力工作永不言弃，每个人都可以成就伟大的事业，即使他们有残疾。海伦生下时双目失明，而且还听不见。但是她的一生从来没有丧失信心。相反，她一直学习阅读、写作，后来成为非常著名的作家。不管你是强是弱，你必须不断奋斗才能成功。不管你是谁，处境如何，你都必须为你的目标不断奋斗。尽管存在各种障碍、挫折与绝境，有时让人气馁，有时让人放弃，但是只有强者才能够持之以恒、坚持不懈、永不退却，而这是弱者无法做到的。语言注释disable v.使无能；使残废deduce v.推断austere a.严格的，严厉的perseverance n.坚定，不屈不挠destination n.目的地persevere v. 忍耐，熬住irresistibly ad.不可抗拒地odds n.不和，相争handicap n.妨碍，使不利11. permanence n.持久，永久12. persistence n.坚持不懈13. distinguish v.区分，辨别高分佳句No matter who you are or what your position is， you must keep fighting for what you want to achieve. 不管你是谁，处境如何，你都必须为你的目标不懈地奋斗。Permanence， perseverance and persistence in spite of all obstacles， discouragements， and impossibilities： it is this that in all things distinguishes the strong soul from the weak. 尽管存在各种障碍、挫折与绝境，有时让人气馁，有时让人放弃，但是只有强者才能够持之以恒、坚持不懈、永不退却，这是弱者无法做到的。写作思路写作提示语中有三个要求，因此写作应该围绕这三个要求展开。第一段，描绘漫画的内容。重点说明登山需要毅力和恒心。第二段，展开图画的寓意，不仅登山需要毅力，生活事业要获得成功，也需要毅力；接着文章以美国作家海伦为例说明毅力和成功的关系。最后一段，作者发表评论。作者首先通过模仿英语名言：Whether you are a lion or a goat， you must sprint to survive. （不管你是狮子还是山羊，你要生存就必须会快跑。）改写Whether you are strong or weak， you must keep fighting to succeed.（不管你是强壮还是软弱，你必须不断奋斗才能成功。）2.爱心捐赠Directions：Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing.In your essay，you should1describe the drawing briefly，2explain its intended meaning，and then3give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.（20 points）背诵范文及高分语言和结构点评As is shown in the picture，on a cold snowy day，a donation box from a charity is beginning to thaw the snow and ice around it.It is not difficult to find the symbolic meaning of the picture：nowadays donation can play an important role in disaster relief and in helping the poor and the disabled.The picture reminds us of the fact that in the recent earthquake in Sichuan，China，people at home and abroad donated a large sum of money to the quake victims. As we know，the strong quake flattened tens of thousands of houses and other buildings.It is reported that a sizable majority of people in the devastated zones lost their homes and property. Many people were buried in the rubbles and lost their lives.However，the donations help them pick up the pieces， and give them composure，confidence and courage to live on.The value of life lies not only in devotion but also in donation. So what counts most in life is what we do for others. Contributing money and other necessities to people who are in great need reflects individuals sense of social responsibility. It also generates a feeling that is beyond words and is difficult to obtain no matter how rich one is. Therefore，I strongly advocate that everybody offers a hand to others.Only with our love and contribution，I am sure，would our society become more beautiful and more harmonious.it作形式主语，真正的主语是不定式短语to find；冒号的使用，则引出具体的同位语成分，同位语中动句词helping和名词短语disaster relief并列，共同作固定搭配play an impontant role in sth.中介词in的宾语；其中the poor和the disabled是构成表示一类人的特殊用法，即the+形容词，类似的有the old，the young。固定搭配remind sb. of sth.使某人想起类似或相关的事，可用于引出具体事例，其中that引导同位语说明fact，关于“大量、很多”的表达，文中用a large sum of，其他表达为a large/ great number of，尽量避免使用much，many等简单词汇。It is reported that为固定句型，也可转化为短语表达according to reports，使句式更加灵活，a sizable majority替代了简单词汇most，综合体现了考生的语言功底。习语表达pick up the pieces指在受挫后的恢复和改进，在文中就具体事例来说则指恢复自信，重新站起来，考生一般想到最直接的表达可能是stand up again，而句中习语的运用则给评阅老师留下一个很好的印象。特色在于主语和表语均使用what引导的从句，因而使得句子简炼，前后工整对仗，这点值得考生模仿学习。动名词短语contributing作主语，其中who引导定语从句修饰people，这两点主要体现了句式结构的多样化，是评阅老师的关注点之一。句首状语由only+with引导的介词词组构成，因此谓语需局部倒装，助动词would提至主语之前。考生一般只了解only为首的句子需倒装，但如何做到局部或全部倒装，还不清楚，此处的局部倒装则要求考生在基本语法上避免出错。范文精译这幅漫画表现的是，在寒冷的雪天，赈灾捐款箱融化了周围的冰雪。我们不难发现画的象征意义：目前捐赠在赈灾、帮助穷人和残疾人方面起到了重要的作用。这幅画让我们想起在中国四川最近发生的地震灾难中，国内外人士捐献了巨资帮助灾区人民。我们知道，强烈的地震毁掉了成千上万所房子和其他建筑物。据报道，绝大多数的受灾人民失去了他们的家园和财产。许多人被埋在大石头下面失去了宝贵的生命。但是，捐赠帮助受灾人民重新站起来，帮助他们镇静、自信、勇敢