广东省深圳市宝安区高考英语二轮复习 书面表达学生观摩选编（3）.doc

书面表达学生观摩选编（3）书面表达 (满分30分) 请你以“my best friend”为题，写一篇短文介绍你的好朋友王佳。要点如下：1、你的好朋友王佳是英语课代表（english representative），英语成绩好, 课堂表现出色。2、她高一时英语演讲比赛获奖，还代表学校参加了在上海举办的英语辩论赛（the english debating competition），英语交际能力强。3、她生活态度乐观向上,充满热情注意：1词数：120个词左右。2.不可逐条翻译，可适当扩展。 my best friend_【参考范文】one possible version:wang jia is my best friend who is the english representative in our class. in my mind, she is outstanding in the english class with a great sense of reflection and always willing to share.in senior one, wang jia successfully got the prize at the final english speaking contest. whats more, she represented the school to attend the english debating competition in shanghai. she is the girl who has great english communicating ability. besides, she always puts her enthusiasm into her study and homework. she has an optimism attitude to life, and never gives up. i am glad to have such a nice friend and have the opportunity to study together with her. i fully believe wang jia has the potential to be successful and i hope our friendship will last forever.写作（满分30分）近年来，随着私家车的增加，城市交通越来越拥挤。在中、小学生上学或放学时，校门口以及学校附近拥挤问题更加严重。这给学生、教师、家长和其他市民带来许多不便。尤其值得注意的是，学校附近的交通堵塞也存在不可忽略的隐患。为此，这引起了不少民众的担忧。你作为一名在校学生，署名张小明，根据以下要点写一封英语信，向本校英语报投稿。1为什么要写这封英语信。2你们学校门口及附近交通拥挤的原因。3提出二至三条建议。注意：词数120-150左右。dear editor,_yours, zhang xiaoming【参考范文】dear editor,im zhang xiaoming, a student from grade 3i am writing to discuss the traffic problem near our school gate.with so many parents coming to pick up their children, traffic jams are frequent near the school gate, causing much inconvenience to us students as well as our teachers and passers-bymany people have been worrying about the hidden traffic problemsso i strongly recommend some effective and urgent measures be takenfirst, we should encourage students to ride their bicycles or walk to school by themselves instead of taking cars, which will not only help reduce the jam but benefit students health as wellit is also a good idea to allow junior students to leave school 10 minutes earlier than othersbesides, cars should not be allowed to park near the school gate.i do hope my suggestions can be considered and the problem can be solved soon. yours, zhang xiaoming 书面表达（满分25分） 距离高考剩下不到100天的时间了，紧张的备考已经拉开序幕，但是很多同学还不知如何处理学习、健身、休息与高考备考之间的关系。请根据这一话题写一篇英语短文，谈一谈你对这一问题的看法和建议。注意：1.词数120字左右，开头语已为你写好； 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。how to get prepared for the college entrance exams the college entrance examination is drawing near. _【参考范文】the college entrance examination is drawing near. however, most students of senior three dont know how to connect rest, doing exercise with study. in their eyes they should sacrifice their rest time in order to get high scores, which results in poor health and low efficiency of learning. (48)just as a famous saying goes: all work and no play makes jack a dull boy. we should be aware that nothing is more valuable than health which is a foundation of success. therefore, on the one hand, we should make preparations for the exam fully and systematically. on the other hand, we should relieve stress by means of relaxation and doing sports. (111)in conclusion, only when we have adequate rest and doing some sports can we study more efficiently. (128)基础写作1-3探究点三 “超量信息”型广东高考英语基础写作的特点之一是：信息要经过处理才能够写成文章。处理的方式有两种：第一种比较简单， 我们称为“非信息选择”型， 考生只需要把题目要求的全部信息表达出来就可以了。第二种是“超量信息”型， 考生必须要进行“选择性写作”， 不需要也不能够把题目全部信息表达出来，这种的难度较大。“超量信息”型基础写作的最大特征是题目含有不需要的信息， 这种信息必须予以摒弃。如果含有这种不需要的信息， 其结果是“该写的没写， 不该写的写了”， 分数就会很低。 【举例说明】请根据以下你在研究性学习中搜集到的小明学习英文写作的方法和心得， 挑选相关信息，写一篇文章作为演讲稿。【写作内容】小明说， 要背诵范文， 这样可以运用英语思维进行模仿性写作；要多阅读英文文章， 这样可以吸收语言材料；要听英文广播， 这样可以提高听力水平；要学习语法， 这样可以正确表达；要多写日记， 这样可以在练中学；要多练习口语， 这样可以提高口头技能；要参考别人的作文， 这样可以取长补短。【写作要求】1必须紧扣题目怎样学习英文写作；2必须使用5个规范的英语句子， 组织成连贯的短文；3开头、结尾已经写好， 不计入总句数。 【评分标准】句子结构准确， 信息内容完整， 篇章结构连贯。ladies and gentlemen, now i would like to tell you how i learn english writing. thats all.thank you. 【评论点拨】1信息的筛选根据题目要求， “怎样学习英文写作”只涉及与写作有关的材料， 这是一个非常重要的要求， 言下之意就是说， “听英文广播”与“练习口语”不属于学习英文写作的方法。那么， 有效的信息只有5个， 分别是：背诵范文、多阅读英文文章、学习语法、多写日记和参考别人的作文， 另外加上这些做法的目的。2信息的组合根据题目的提示， 现在用表格把内容排列如下， 当然次序可以调整：经过信息的筛选和重新组合， 文章就比较通顺了。 【学生样本】ladies and gentlemen，now i would like to tell you how i learn english writing.firstly, i will recite the model articles so that i can imitate writing by english thoughts.secondly, i will read more english article to absorb more language material.thirdly, i will learn grammar to express in the right way.whats more, in order to learn by doing, i will write some diary.in addition, i will refer to others articles so that i can gain the advantages to mend my disadvantages.thats all.thank you. 【参考范文】ladies and gentlemen, now i would like to tell you how i learn english writing.i often recite good english articles, which helps me think in english when i imitate english writing.i also read english articles widely to take in as many language materials as possible.besid