The Sunshine in My Life~16A09.ppt

TheSunshineinMyLife No 52MiddleSchoolZhouHuijuan 每个人的成长过程中 都有很多影响自己的人 和父母 老师 朋友分享自己的快乐烦恼 互相支持鼓励 让你的生活充满阳光 请以 TheSunshineinMyLife 为题写一篇80词左右的短文 叙述一件你和他 们 一起经历过的事 及这件事给你的感悟 Analysisofwriting Group1 审题体裁 时态 列提纲Beginning Body Ending 每个人的成长过程中 都有很多影响自己的人 和父母 老师 朋友分享自己的快乐烦恼 互相支持鼓励 让你的生活充满阳光 请以 TheSunshineinMyLife 为题写一篇80词左右的短文 叙述一件你和他 们 一起经历过的事 及这件事给你的感悟 审题体裁 情感表达类记叙文时态 过去时 一般现在时列提纲Beginning 交代人物 点题Body 叙述一件发生过的事 你的烦恼 父母 老师或朋友给你的鼓励 Ending 首尾呼应 感悟 Analysisofwriting Group1 TheSunshineinMyLife Mybodypart tellastoryProblemsIhave havedifficultyinlearningEnglishundermuchpressurefailinanexamarguewithsbgetalonginanewplace beill helpmewithlessons takegoodcareofme 时态 过去时 一般现在时body 叙述一件发生过的事 你的烦恼 父母 老师或朋友给你的鼓励 Helpmegetoverit Group2 TheSunshineinMyLife Mybodypart1 Besides motheralwaysencouragesmetostudyhard IrememberonceIfailedanexam Shedidn tcomplaintome Instead inordertocheermeupshetalkedwithmeforalongtimeandtoldmetofacemydifficulty AtlastIgotconfidentagainandbecameatopstudentinmyclasslater 2 OnceIwasexpectedtodobetterintheexam butIfailed Therefore IwastooupsettosayawordwhenIgothome 3 Itwasthesmilewhichwaslikesunlightthatlightedupmywholeworld Atthattime IfeltthatIwasfullofpowertofacethefailurebravely Group3 我的习作 TheSunshineinMyLife Mybodypart4 Ifeelluckytobeherstudent forshealwaysoffersushelpwhenwe reintrouble SoIstillrememberthatdaywhensheencouragedme 5 Myteachershadalongtalkwithme TheytoldmethatIshouldstudyharderratherthanstop 6 Afterthat Irealizedhowdeeplymymotherlovesme 7 Littlebylittle Igotoverthedifficultyandfoundmyconfidenceagain Group3 我的习作 Goodbeginning Asthesayinggoes Thepressurecangiveusthepowertogoahead Butmuchpressureisn tgoodforus Howtorelaxourselveswhilefacingthelearningpressure Hereissomeadvice 名人名言开头 It swellknownthat 众所周知Asweknow 据我们所知Afamouswriter poetsaid 一个著名的作家 诗人说过Aproverbsays 有句谚语说Aseveryoneknows noonecandenythat 众所周知 Group4 好的开头 应做到开门见山 用简单明白的叙述引出文章的话题 使读者了解文章要谈论什么 并饶有兴趣地沿着你的思路读下去 2 Goodmorning Mynameis andIamverygladtostandhereforthemonitorcompetition 3 TodayallthestudentsinourclasswenttoJingyueParktoplanttrees Wehadagoodtime 4 Istillremembermyfirsttriptotherivernearmyhometown 5 Isopportunityreallysomethingluckyinourlife Differentpeoplehavedifferentideasaboutit Goodbeginning Group4 开门见山 揭示主题 交代人物 事情 时间或环境开头 回忆性的开头 疑问型开头 TheSunshineinMyLife Mybeginning1 Onmywayofgrowingup therearemanypeoplearoundme Theylovemeallthetime justlikethesunthatgivesmelightandheat 蒋春嘉 2 Everyonemaymeetdifficultyinhislife Butwiththehelpofothers wewillgetoutofthetroubleandwalktowardssuccess 冯富禹 3 Thereisaveryimportantpersoninmylife Itismymotherthatfillsmylifewithsunlight 郭书成 4 Therearemanypeoplewhohavegreatinfluencesonme Theyprovidemewithsunlightandmakemylifecolorful 程一迪 Group5 6 TheSunshineinMyLife Mybeginning1 She stallwithlongblackcurlyhair Sheisbeautifulandkind She smyEnglishteacherandsheisthesunlightinmylife 王思月 2 Ontheroadofgrowingup manypeoplegivemehelp encouragemeandcomfortme ThepersonIwanttothankismymathteacher sheisthesunlightinmylife 赵治开 3 Becauseofothers loveandhelp Wecangrowhappily Thesekindpeoplearealwayslikethesunlight Theymakemylifemorebeautiful 4 Asforme lifeisalwaysfilledwithsunshineandpleasurebecauseofmom slove 薛明睿 5 Lifeisalwaysperfectwithafriend Mary mybestfriendisthesunlightinmylife 张妍 Group5 6 whomakesmylifefullofsunshine whichmakesmylifemorebeautiful Goodending 1 自然结尾 点明主题 Let srememberourschooldays themostpreciousperiodwe veeverexperiencedinourlife 2 首尾呼应 画龙点睛 Wemustdosomethingtoprotectwaterinordertomaketheworldmorebeautiful Group7 文章结尾的作用是概括全文内容 进一步强调或肯定文章的中心思想 使文章意义表达得更加深刻 文章结尾的形式也是多种多样的 常见的有以下几种 Goodending 3 反问结尾 引起深思 4 名句结尾 5 表达祝愿 阐述愿望 Group7 Everybodywasexcitedandallofushadawonderfultimethere It sreallyaveryrelaxingtripforusall isn tit Ibelievewecandobetterinprotectingourworld Wherethereisawillthereisaway Inaword I dliketohelppeoplewhoneedhelp Ifeveryonehelpsoutabit theworldwillbemorecolorful TheSunshineinMyLife Myending1 Herkindwordswerejustlikethesunlightthatmademewarm Thankstomyteacher Igetoutoftroubleandmakemuchprogress 冯富禹 2 Mymothernotonlyletsmecometotheworld butalsoteachesmehowtofaceeverything 郭书成 3 Mom becauseofyourgoodcare Igrowuplittlebylittleandstudybetter Youarethesunlightinmylife 李悦 4 Whateverhappenstoyou yourfamilyarealwayswithyouandencourageyou Theyarethesunshineinmylife 路雨麒 Group8 9 thatmakesmylifewonderful She sthesunlightinmylife TheSunshineinMyLife Myending1 Allinall thankstomymother slovewhichislikethesunlightinmylife Ireceivethepowertofacethefuture 薛明睿 24 2 Thesunlightwentintomyheartatthatmoment Sincethen Iknowthatloveishereandthere justlikethesunlightinourlife 孟欣 23 3 I mverythankfulforwhatshehasdoneforme AndI llstudyhardsothatIcanrepayherinthefuture 4 Throughthatexperience Iunderstandthatfriendshipisofgreatimportancetous Andafriendisthepeoplewhocanhelpyouwhenyouareintroubleandfillyourlifewithpleasure 张妍 Group8 9 TheSunshineinMyLife WheneverI mintrouble myfriend Katealwayshelpsmeout Sheisthesunshineinmylife Lastterm IgotextremelybadgradesthatIcouldhardlyimagine Itstartedtoberainyinmyworld Atthattime sheaskedmetoperforminthecomingconcert Thenwepaidattentiontosingingwellinsteadofworryingaboutmystudy Afterthesuccessfulperformance Ifoundmyconfidencecamebackandtheskywasclearagain Thanksforherhelp It sshethatbringsmesomuchhappinessandhelpsmeknoweveryoneisinthesunshineoflove 佳作欣赏 Group10 Writingskills 方法一 善用词汇句意相同 但不同的表达却可以达到不同的效果 1 Iwishyoucanhelpme I mlookingforwardtoyourhelp 2 Theyarrivedearly Theyarrivedasearlyastheycould 3 Hisdogwassavedatlast Hewasverysurprised Tohissurprise hisdogwassavedatlast 4 IthinklearningEnglishisinteresting IfinditreallyfuntolearnEnglish 5 Weshouldprotecttheenvironment It sourdutytoprotecttheenvironment Writingskills 方法二 活用多种句型 Sheisveryyoung Shecan tcarrytheheavybox Sheistooyoungtocarrytheheavybox Sheissoyoungthatshecan tcarrytheheavybox Sheisnotoldenoughtocarrytheheavybox 1 表示并列或递进 and aswellas both and what 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