湖南省湘潭凤凰中学高三英语 Improvement of writing from the perspective of comment on routine writing复习学案(1).doc

湖南省湘潭凤凰中学2015届高三英语 improvement of writing from the perspective of comment on routine writing复习学案学习现状：写过很多作文，依然写不出好句子。原因分析：长期以来，作文重前期指导，轻后期点评。写作后的评析较笼统，我们单独与老师进行精细面批的机会较少，领会不了老师的书面批改意图，也没有系统梳理过自身错误。以至于长时间写作水平无法提高。学习目标：通过合作学习，反思探究，结合本次作文评析，梳理出自身作文中的典型错误、可雕琢词句，进一步提升写作技能。学习重点：定语从句、非谓语动词等高级句式在作文中的运用。学习难点：如何将定语从句、非谓语动词等高级句式运用至作文。lead-inlets appreciate a composition written by one student.directions: write an english composition according to the instructions given below.假如你是李华，你的好朋友张军在来信中向你倾诉了他的烦恼。由于要代表学校参加游泳比赛，他的压力很大。请用英语给他写一封回信，就如何减轻压力，提出至少三条合理的建议并说明理由。step one write correct sentencesstep (1) 改错句，谁最快 1. i hope my suggest can help you. (陈泉来) 2. as long as you try your best, you will success.(郭倩云) 错误类型1：3. i want provide some suggestions for you.(左文权) 4. i intend tell you. (肖剑锋) 5. there have some advice for you.(李维纳) 错误类型2：6. im try to solve your problem more than you can help.(赵桓鑫) 7. when i felt pressure, i usually listen to some light music.(朱婵) 错误类型3：8. everyone have some troubles in our life.(赵桓鑫) 9. school choose you to take part in competition.(包赞娟) 错误类型4：step (2) 考考你 我认为你可以取得好成绩。 _step two write proper sentencesstep (1) analyze我认为你可以取得好成绩。 i think you can get good grades. _step (2) conclude：step (3) practice1. it is necessary for you to keep great sleeping.(王翠婉) 2. you can also talk with your teacherand he will tell you many things, too.(冯婉露)3. it doesnt matter. dont think too much.(冯婉露) 4. i want to tell you some advice.(詹丽雯)step (3) 考考你我想给你提些建议。这能帮你放松自己。_step three write artistic sentencesstep (1) 佳句欣赏.1. next, you can turn to someone who has rich experience in swimming. (李玉) 2. first you should take a break, which does good to your body, as well as your mind.(周亦豪) 3. i have received and read your letter, in which you mentioned you must take part in the swimming competition under high pressure.(刘洁) 4. it is known that big pressure can destroy a person.(李艳芳)5. learning how to relax yourself is one of the important ways.(王凤婷) 6. i will always encourage you, telling you not to give up.(周友林) step (3) practice 11. you should be confident. this is the most important tip.(马锦涛) 2. you can also talk with your lead teacherand he will tell you many things, too.(冯婉露) 3. next, you can turn to someone who has rich experience in swimming. this can help you a lot.(李玉) step (4) practice 11. 我们俱乐部举行了很多活动，这些活动极大帮助了学生。(2010,湖南)2. 丢失钱包让我很沮丧。(2012,湖南)final conclusion 1. write correct sentences(避免词性混淆、固定搭配、时态及主谓不一致等常见错误)2. write proper sentences(短语优先、取词精准)3. write artistic sentences(巧妙运用从句、非谓语动词)step four put method into practicestep (1) re-write directions: write an english composition according to the instructions given below.进入高三以来，同学们倍感学习任务重，压力大。一些同学争分夺秒，甚至连课间十分钟的休息时间也在学习。针对这一现象，请你以a ten-minute break为题，写一篇词数不少于120的短文，含一下要点：1. 这一现象表明了部分学生的压力过大。2. 十分钟的课间休息是必要的，因为3. 主要的短时休息方式有4. 我通常是怎样利用这十分钟的。 a ten-minute break since the new term started, we have felt the pressure from our heavy task_ step (2). lets commentthe shining pointsmistakesordinary sentences课外探究appreciate other beautiful sentences around us.1. first you should take a break, which does good to your body, as well as your mind.(周亦豪)2. you have to grasp every minute to practice swimming.(陈云艳)3. it shows us a universal truth: nothing is difficult if you put your heart into it.(陈泉来)4. ive been thinking about the question you wrote in the letter.(李艳芳)5. you have been a great source of pleasure and pride for me.(周友林)6. im happy that you can take part in the swimming contest standing for your school.(谭玉麟)7. under great pressure, you have to attend the swimming game as a representative of the school team.(郭倩云)8. i know you want to stand for the school to