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SCI论文写作实例点评和时态问题这些例子都是我免费帮网友或者师弟师妹们修改SCI论文文章中摘录的一小部分，应该不会涉及版权问题吧。方东明2012.5.25 18:30例1修改前：The simplest way to form metal nanoparticles on silicon substrate was by electron beam evaporation (EBE) of a thin (2-24 nm) metal film, which was then annealed at a moderate temperature, to cause agglomeration by surface tension of the metal film into a random array of nanoparticles. As shown in Fig. 35, this lead to the formation of random arrays of Ag nanoparticles with different diameters (2080nm) and hemispherical shape when the thickness of Ag film deposited with different thickness.修改后：The metal nanoparticles on silicon substrate were easily made by electron beam evaporation (EBE) to form a thin (2-24 nm) metal film, then the film was annealed at a moderate temperature to cause agglomeration by surface tension of the metal film into a random array of nanoparticles, as shown in Fig. 35, leading to the formation of random arrays of Ag nanoparticles with different diameters (2080nm) and hemispherical shape when the thickness of Ag film deposited with different thickness.点评：（1） 这段摘自制作工艺部分。将The metal nanoparticles提到句子前，强调了主体。（2） 修改前句子主语是The simplest way，谓语是was by electron beam evaporation，连起来似乎不通顺。（3） to form a thin (2-24 nm) metal film是状语从句，作为目的。（4） 修改后的句子虽长，但显示了英语水平。对于投稿，不要过分强调长句，尽量用短句，偶尔几个好的长句就可以代表水平。例2修改前：Such as, we coat with a 5m thickness BCB film, the resonance frequency changes to 10.38GHz, indicating a 110MHz shift.修改前：For example, when coated with a 5m thickness BCB film, the resonance frequency of the film changes to 10.38GHz, indicating a 110MHz shift.点评：（1） 修改前主要有两个语法错误，一是such as只连接短语，不连接句子，for example或for instance才连接句子；好像有不少人犯这个错误。二是两个句子并列，并且没有and连接。（2） 修改后句子将前面句子作为条件状语，将the resonance frequency of the film作为主语，更符合文章原意。也就是在写作的时候，一定要强调主语是啥。注意修改后用coated，表示被动。例3修改前：Generally, the MSRR structure can be briefly considered as an LC resonance circuit with a resonance frequency, due to the structure can produce the resonance.修改后：Generally, the MSRR structure can be briefly considered as an LC resonance circuit with a resonance frequency, because the structure can produce the resonance.点评：due to不连接句子例4修改前：We observe that the surface currents dont flow through the all split gap. Moreover the surface current intensity at resonance frequency15.62GHz (Fig. 3(b) is stronger than non-resonance frequency 15GHz (Fig. 3(a).修改后：It is observed that the surface currents dont flow through the all split gap. Moreover, the surface current intensity at resonance frequency15.62GHz (Fig. 3(b) is stronger than that of non-resonance frequency 15GHz (Fig. 3(a).点评：（1） 在SCI论文中一般尽量不要使用We, I, He/She等，这使人感觉强调主观，用it形式主语替代，感觉是强调客观了。如果引用已研究的成果，首次出现的句子就使用人名，后面就用形式主语之类。（2） 在作比较的时候，许多作者常犯这个错误，比较的主体如果在后面被比较的地方省略了，那么看比较主体的单复数，需要加that of或者those of。例5修改前：This is because the height of MEMS beam descends to 2/3 of original height, the MEMS beam will pull down abruptly and contact with strip metal.修改后：Because the MEMS beam is pulled down abruptly and contacts the strip metal, the height of MEMS beam will descends to 2/3 of the original height.点评：因果倒置。这句背景是两个梁或者两个平行板（比如电容）加电压后，受到静电力作用，受到向下“拉力”，如果加到某个电压，可动梁被下拉后，由于Pull-in效应的存在，导致两个梁的间距只有原来间距的三分之二。例6修改前：Usually, these applications need to minimize losses over the operating frequency range.修改后：Usually, the losses over the operating frequency range need to be minimized to meet these applications.点评：一是强调losses，所以放在句首，二是application作为主语和need作为谓语一起不合适。例7修改前：Experiment results show that resonant coupling efficiency does not affect much by changing relative position parameters between two coils in a wide range.修改后：Experiment results also show that the resonant coupling efficiency is not affected much by changing the relative position of the two coils in a wide range.点评：（1） 前面已经说过measured results，所以加了also。（2） relative position parameters说的不明不白，between用的不当。（3） resonant coupling efficiency作为宾语从句的主语，应该使用被动态。例8修改前：Higher actuation voltage induces larger deformation on beam and microspring, and the restoring force increases accordingly.修改后：Higher actuation voltage induces larger deformation of the beam and the microspring, and accordingly increases the restoring force.点评：介词on不当，应用of。而且加冠词the。许多作者很容易漏掉the，而且a和an误用，an一般用在第一个形容词是元音发音开头的词前，注意是发音，不一定非要元音开头。比如a universal，不用an universal。a unique，不用an unique。用an one，an 0.1um，an equal，an almost infinite ，an infinite，an innumerable，an unlimited，an unqualified，an ineligible，an illegal，an incompetent等等。强调下是第一个形容词元音发音开头，比如a sad, solitary, inadequate man（一个忧愁，孤独，不会生活的男人）。例9修改前：However the shear strength reduced to 31.7 MPa at 360 , for all interlayer material are liquid at 360 and 7 MPa with Au - Sn weight percentage Au : Sn=46 : 54, liquid are flow to unbonded area, reduce the thickness of interlayer to decrease shear strength.修改后：However, the shear strength reduced to 31.7 MPa at the bonding temperature 360 . This is because that all interlayer materials of Au-Sn in this work were liquid at 360 , thus 7 MPa with Au - Sn weight percentage Au : Sn=46 : 54 was liquid and flowed to unbonded area, reducing the thickness of interlayer and decreasing the shear strength.点评：（1） 修改前的段落明显是几个句子杂糅在一起的，中间无and，moreover，thus等连接过渡词。英语强调句子独立或者几个句子间有并列、转折等关系。（2） 修改句子适当的用thus作为连接结果状语句子，用现在分词reducing/decreasing表合金成分成为liquid的结果。例10修改前：Recently, twinning-induced plasticity (TWIP) steel has received much attention, because the steel has excellent combinations of outstanding ductility（50100%）and high tensile strength （7001200 Mpa）due to massive mechanical twinning and dislocation motion during plastic deformation. 修改后：Due to the massive mechanical twinning and dislocation motion during plastic deformation, twinning-induced plasticity (TWIP) steel has excellent combination of outstanding ductility（50100%）and high tensile strength (7001200Mpa). So recently more and more researchers pay attention to TWIP steel and have done systematic researches about TWIP steel.点评：修改的句子首先强调TWIP steel材料的特性，正是由于这些特性，才导致该材料excellent combination of outstanding ductility，由此引起更多研究人员的更多关注并研究。一定要注意因果以及事情发展顺序。另外在摘要和正文中，缩写的，第一次一定要写出该缩写词全名，后面就可以用缩写词。除非大家都知道的缩写词，比如IC，RF等或者本领域本行业大家都熟悉的词，可以不写出全名。例11修改前：It would get nearly homogeneous austenitic microstructure for promoting the occurring of TWIP effect. Generally, the usual practice is to anneal the cold-rolled steel by isothermal holding at the austenite temperature. The basic researches of annealing technologic optimization of TWIP steel are readily available in many academic articles. Annealing technologic microstructures and mechanical properties are highly interrelated in the TWIP steel. 修改后：Nearly homogeneous austenitic microstructure would be gained if the TWIP effect is promoted. Generally, the usual practice to promote TWIP effect is to anneal the cold-rolled steel by isothermal holding at the austenite temperature. The basic researches of technological annealing optimization of TWIP steel are readily available in many academic articles .Technological annealing microstructures and mechanical properties highly affect the performance of TWIP steel. 点评：（1） 修改前句子用for不对，修改后用if作为假设。（2） to promote TWIP effect作为不定式补充说明下。（3） technological annealing这么用法，主要是因为英语不像汉语，名词前最贴近的才是最强调的，这里强调annealing。（4） highly interrelated指的不明不白，而且interrelate这个词大家少见，建议作者写作论文时使用常见的词，如果一些词意重复次数较多，可以换类似词。例12修改前：On the other hand, cost is always an important factor determining applications.修改后：On the other hand, cost is always an important factor that limits its applications.点评：（1） 用词不当。cost不起决定作用，只是限制因素之一。（2） 用that从句作factor的非限制性从句。例13修改前：SiC material because of its excellent mechanical property and chemical stability, it becomes the preferred material for MEMS sensors under harsh environment such as high temperature or high pressure, in which the SiC MEMS capacitive pressure sensor have been studied the most, but there are few people focus on the processing circuit. Compared to piezoresistive pressure sensor, there are many advantages of this device, such as high accuracy, low temperature coefficient, low power consumption and low noise et al.修改后：Because of its excellent mechanical property and chemical stability, SiC material becomes the preferred material for MEMS sensors under harsh environment, such as high temperature or high pressure. Many SiC MEMS capacitive pressure sensors have been reported in literatures, however, there are few works focus on the processing circuit of MEMS sensors. Compared to piezoresistive pressure sensors, SiC MEMS capacitive pressure sensors have many advantages, such as high accuracy, low temperature coefficient, low power consumption and low noise, etc.点评：修改前的段落明显是句子杂糅，逗号到底。另外，et al是“人等”，etc和and so on才是“事等”。例14修改前：In this paper, a high sensitivity micromachined electric field sensor based on silicon on insulator (SOI) is presented. Different from most of the vibrating MEMS electric field sensor reported previously, the sensor herein is based on the grounded shutter covering the sidewall of the sense electrodes under an incident field.修改后：In this paper, a micromachined electric field sensor with high sensitivity based on Silicon on Insulator (SOI) fabrication technology is presented. Different from most previous literatures of the vibrating MEMS electric field sensors, the sensor in this paper is worked based on the mechanism that the grounded shutter covers the sidewall of the sense electrodes to and fro under an incident electric field.点评：（1） sensitivity不是形容词，不作定语；修改文用with结构。（2） 我们知道reported previously是sensor的定语，但这种英语说法不对。（3） based on是强调工作原理机制，但说sensor base on不行，应该是work base on。例15修改前：The test result is shown in Figure 6, and in the graph vertical axe range is kept the same as Figure 5.修改后：The test result of the attenuation is shown in Figure 6, where the vertical axe range is kept the same as Figure 5.点评：一个where就简洁明了。例16修改前：The thermal drift is a foundational characteristic of electrostatic comb-driven micro sensor used in addressing sensing stability problems. It associated a number of performance such as zero point, sensitivity, vibration amplitude and so forth.修改后：The thermal drift is a foundational characteristic of the electrostatic comb-driven micro sensors because it affects the performaces and stability of the micro sensors, such as the zero point, sensitivity, vibration amplitude and so forth.点评：（1） used in addressing sensing让人不明所以。（2） 原句的It指代不明。SCI论文写作的时态问题：这个大家问得很多，有时用现在式有时用过去式，大家看不同期刊文献，那些已发表的文章时态也是不一，有的作者用现在式，有的作者用过去式。总的来说： 摘要：主要过去式 简介：现在式（但文献回顾用过去式） 方法：过去式 结果：过去 讨论：现在式 结论：过去式 这不是必须严格遵守的规定。（1）涉及介绍本文研究现状和目的时，一般用现在时，比如This paper presents，This paper studies等。（2）涉及所采用的试验、仿真等手段和方法，要用过去时，比如The SEM tools were adopted to simulate，We used surface micromachined technology to fabricate。（3）如果强调本文研究将来的意义或应用前景，则需要用将来时，比如This method will be a promising way in the fabrication , The sensors will be widely applied in the fields of in the future.等（4） 结果和结论表述要用过去时。如果是普遍规律所导致的结果，则用现在时。（5）如果强调还在持续的状态，则要用完成时。比如have been developed，have paid attention to等。当然，作者会碰到一些特别的情况，必须使用特定的动词时态。以下是广告：文档下载网址：视频讲解paper(学术论文)示意图画法：/mems/f . per-drawing-fdm.rarorigin8制作粒径分布的视频（自做的），旧版和新版视频:http:/115.com/file/c28m5d1v#Origin8精美PPT动画1，08年美新杯传感器大赛之前的作品，照片轮播、电影播放等效果。 下载网址：/f/10890795.html精美PPT动画2，有圣诞树动画，圣诞送给女友合适：） 。下载网址：/f/10890843.htmlPPT精美模板组合（50多页）更新的下载网址：/f/10882432.htmlOrigin8.0中文教程（二维绘图，带PDF书签，网上发布）下载网址：/f/15327759.html/f/10644462.html上海交通大学饮水思源paper（论文）板实用手册（第二版）下载网址：/book/paper_guide.rar/f/10704286.htmlOrigin坐标轴和坐标标注方法指南(配图）下载网址：/f/10882955.html最新SCI期刊目录（6606种SCI期刊，期刊名缩写、全名、ISSN、学科分区大类加小类、影响因子等）下载网址：/f/10882860.html留学美国下载网址：/f/10882600.html如何制作漂亮PPT下载网址：/view/cb2a57db50e2524de5187e33.html/f/13357803.html文献检索和文章收录号等信息查询下载网址：/view/d6803703de80d4d8d15a4fd4.html/f/13446405.html研究生如何做好科研（PPT版）下载网址：/f/13563968.html其它下载请点击下面网址：http:/cinn.cc/class.php?c_id=9小木虫上发的精品帖子：“2011年经验谈系列”之一如何制作漂亮PPT（附下载网址，13M）/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=2844755“2011年经验谈系列”之二文献检索和文章收录号等信息查询（附paper超级QQ群号）/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=2851583&pid=917537&page=1#pid917537“2011年经验谈系列”之三视频讲解paper(学术论文)示意图画法/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=2854473“2011年经验谈系列”之四研究生如何做好科研（PPT版） /bbs/viewthread.php?tid=2874014文章被IEEE T- ED录用，写下过程，散些金币(666个)/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=2174350&fpage=2上海交通大学饮水思源paper（论文）板实用手册（第二版）出炉/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=674559【原创】【自著】Origin8.0中文教程（二维绘图上、中、下） 附安装软件和详细安装说明/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1628128&fpage=1最新SCI期刊目录Excel版（6606种，缩写、全名、ISSN、大类加小类、影响因子等）/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1686585我给国外期刊文章的审稿结果和审稿意见/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1145750SCI、EI和ISTP收录号的查询方法（总结）/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=660421原创Origin坐标轴和坐标标注方法指南（配图）/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=783196Elsevier期刊出版过程、论文发表、编辑建议和主编演讲（6.4M）