高考英语 书面表达（文字提纲式作文）练习讲评三课件.ppt

2012届高考英语书面表达 文字提纲式作文 练习讲评二 注意 1 对所给要点 逐一陈述 适当发挥 但不要简单翻译 2 词数150左右 开头和结尾以及提示句已经写好 不计入总词数 3 信中不得提及考生所在班级及本人姓名 goodafternoon everyone thetopicofmyspeechtodayis myattitudetopursuitoffashioninschool 最近你发现你们学校有些同学追求时髦和高档消费 请你根据下表中所提供的信息 写一篇题为 myattitudetopursuitoffashioninschool 的英文演讲稿 讲评 一 认真审题 确立话题 归纳要点 通过审题 我们知道本文的话题为 myattitudetopursuitoffashioninschool 围绕这个话题 列出有关现象和原因方面的要点 我们学校有些同学追求时髦和高档消费 发型明星式的 衣服鞋子名牌的 手机 电脑高档的 追求美 爱面子 感觉很酷 我的看法 二 理顺要点 增加细节 连贯表达 本篇书面表达的文字提纲实际上就是按照表达顺序提供的 所以不存在理顺要点的环节 至于所要增加的要点实际上就是 我的看法 追求时髦 实际是价值观的的问题 围绕这个问题来谈谈自己的看法 如 作为学生应该有正确的价值观 根据穿的用的我们可以这样来谈谈看法 外表酷不等于行为美 是什么才能赢得别人的尊重 作为学生当然是成绩而不是穿的用的是名牌 我们应该怎么做 三 化解难点 灵活表达 词能达意 本篇所给要点和增加的细节比较多 有些要点和细节表达起来还比较棘手 1 化解难点 高档消费liveaveryexpensivelifespendmuchmoremoneyonwhattheywearluxuryconsumption 发型明星式的havehairstyleslikethoseoffamousstarsimitatefilmstarstomakethemselvesupwiththesimilarhairstyles 衣服鞋子名牌的weartopbrandofclothesandshoes 手机 电脑高档的useexpensivemobilephonesandcomputers 高档 不可以用 highquality 来表达 追求美thepursuitofbeautyseekbeauty 爱面子tobesensitiveaboutone sreputationtobekeenonface saving 2 变点为句 我们学校有些同学追求时髦和高档消费inourschooltherearesomestudentswhoarekeenonfashionandliveaveryexpensivelife inourschoolthereisahotpursuitoffashion somestudentsliveaveryexpensivelife inourschoolthereisahotpursuitoffashionandluxuryconsumption 发型明星式的 theyimitatefilmstarstomakethemselvesupwiththesimilarhairstyles theyhavehairstyleslikethoseoffamousstars 衣服鞋子名牌的wearingtopbrandofclothesandshoesistheirfavorite theyweartopbrandofclothesandshoes 手机 电脑高档的theyhaveveryexpensivemobilephonesandcomputers theyuseexpensivemobilephonesandcomputers 追求美theyarefondofseekingbeauty theyhopetolooksmartandspecial 爱面子theyaresensitiveabouttheirreputation theyhighlyvalueothers respectandrecognition 感觉很酷theyfeelcool itmakesthemfeelcool 作为学生应该有正确的价值观westudentsshouldholdtherightvalues 外表酷不等于行为美 作为学生当然是成绩而不是穿的用的是名牌 ourcoolappearancedoesnotmeanthatwebehavewell asforusstudents whatachievementswehavemaderatherthanwhatbrandwearewearingmakesusrespectable 四 错落有致 连接恰当 发挥有度 连接恰当 整理成文goodafternoon everyone thetopicofmyspeechtodayis myattitudetopursuitoffashioninschool nowinourschooltherearesomestudentswhoarekeenonfashionandliveaveryexpensivelife theynotonlyimitatefilmstarstomakethemselvesupwiththesimilarhairstylesbutalsoweartopbrandofclothesandshoesistheirfavorite besides theyhaveveryexpensivemobilephonesandcomputers inmyopinion thereasonwhytheydosoisthattheywanttoseekbeautyandwouldliketobesensitiveabouttheirreputation inaddition theyfeelverycooltodoso asfarasi mconcerned westudentsshouldholdtherightvalues ourcoolappearancedoesnotmeanthatwebehavewell asforusstudents itiswhatachievementswehavemaderatherthanwhatbrandwearewearingthatmakesusrespectable ithinkweshouldn tspendsomuchmoneyonwhatwewearbutshouldsavethemoneytohelpthosewhostillcan tmakeendsmeet thankyouforlistening 参考范文 goodafternoon everyone thetopicofmyspeechtodayis myattitudetopursuitoffashioninschool nowinourschoolthereisahotpursuitoffashion somestudentsliveaveryexpensivelife theyhavehairstyleslikethoseoffamousstarsandweartopbrandofclothesandshoes someuseexpensivemobilephonesandcomputers personally iunderstandwhytheydoso firstly theyhopetolooksmartandspecial secondly theyhighlyvalueothers respectandrecognition inaddition itmakesthemfeelcool inmyopinion westudentsshouldholdtherightvalues itishowwebehaveratherthanhowweappearthatmakesuscool itiswhatachievementswehavemaderatherthanwhatbrandwearewearingthatmakesusrespectable itishowmuchwecareforothersratherthanhowmuchwespendongiftsandluxuriesthatmakeuscharming ithinkitwillmakegreatsensetosavethemoneytohelpthosewhostillcan tmakeendsmeet thankyouforlistening 同步练习 高中生在成长的过程中会碰到一些烦恼 就这一话题你班正积极筹备召开一次主题班会 请你依据下表进行必要的思考 并用英语准备一篇到会发言的材料 词数150左右 注意 1 开头已写好 不计入总词数 2 语言通顺 结构严谨 boysandgirls wehighschoolstudentsdohavesomegrowingpains butwecangetridofthemcorrectlyandwisely 参考范文 boys and girls wehighschoolstudentsdohavesomegrowingpains butwecangetridofthemcorrectlyandwisely first someofusareupsetabouttheirbodystylesandlooks it sunnecessaryandit snotimportantatall weneedn tcareaboutit itisone sinnerbeautythatmatters second wesometimesseemtobemisunderstoodbyourteachers parentsandclassmates facingthis wecanfindapropertimetohaveaheart to hearttalkwiththem tryingtoremovethemisunderstanding someofushavefewerfriends ithinkbeingopen mindedandfriendlywilldoyougood third wemayfallbehindothers whichmakesusst