上海松江洞泾学校九年级班.ppt

RevisionofWriting ByHeShunzhiMay8 2008 I WritingAnEvent AnUnforgettableDayIsawanunforgettablethingtheotherday Itwas10a m Anoldladywalkedoutofthebankwithahandbaginherhand Soshewasstandinginfrontofthebank Suddenlyamanrobbedtheoldladyofherhandbag Heranawayquickly Theoldladyshouted Stopthief Stopthief Someoneimmediatelydialed110 Twoyoungmenbegantorunafterthethief Innotime thethiefwascaughtandthepolicemenarrived Theoldladythankedtheyoungmenagainandagain IthinkthetwoyoungmenwerebraveandIshouldlearnfromthem Questions When Where Who What How Discussion MyBirthdayParty Questions Whendidyouhavetheparty Wheredidyouhaveit Whomdidyouinvite Whatdidyoudoattheparty Howdidyoufeel MyBirthdayPartyLastSundaywasmy16thbirthday Ihadapartyathome Iinvitedmanyfriendstomyhome Theygavemealotoflovelypresents Tomgavemeabook Alicegavemeacard Wewatchedsomecartoonstogetherandplayedsomeinterestinggames Thenmymothermadeusanicecake Myfriendssang HappyBirthday andweatethecakehappily Wehadagoodtimeattheparty Ifeltveryhappy 80words GroupA PlantingTreesGroupB OurSportsMeetingGroupC ATriptoShanghaiZoo PlantingTreesMarch12isTree plantingDay OnMarch12thisyear wewenttoanewparktoplanttrees Look Thesunwasshining Howhardwewereworking Someweredigging somewereputtingthetreesintheholes otherswerecarryingwaterandwateringthetrees Thoughwewereverytired wefelthappy becauseweknowthattreesareourfriendsandthebestpollutionfighters Nextspringwewillagaingotheretoplanttrees 80words OurSportsMeetingLastFridayourschoolheldasportsmeeting Manystudentsinourclassenteredforit LiPinrunsfast sohetookpartinthe800 meterrace Hewonthesecondplace WeiFangtookpartinthediscus throwingandshewonthethirdplace Ijoinedinthehighjump UnfortunatelyIdidnotwinanyprize Ifeltunhappy Butmyclassmatestoldmenottoworryaboutthat Theysaidthatitismoreimportanttotakepartinitthantowinit 87words ATriptoShanghaiZoo YesterdaywemadeatriptoShanghaiZoo Wegatheredattheschoolgatefirstandthenwewenttherebybus Thereweremanykindsofanimalsofanimalsatthezoo Wetooksomephotoswiththeelephants Butwelikedthemonkeysbest becausemonkeyswereverycleverandnaughty Theymadeuslaughalot Wehadapicniconthegrassandplayedsomegames Wehadagoodtime IreallylikedthetriptoShanghaiZoo 80words II WritingAnOpinion WeshouldnotwatchtoomuchTVIthinkweshouldnotwatchtoomuchTV Firstly itisnotgoodforoureyes IfwesitinfrontoftheTVsetforalongtime wewillbecomeshortsightedveryeasilyandquickly Secondly someTVprogramsarenotsuitableforus Theymaycauseustodobadthings Thirdly WatchingTVfortoomuchtimemeanswastingalotoftime Wewillhavenotimetofinishourhomework Soinmyopinion weshouldnotwatchTVforalongtime 91words WhatistheTopicSentence WhataretheSupportingSentences WhatistheConcludingSentence Discussion Itisunnecessaryforastudenttouseamobile TopicSentence SupportingSentences ConcludingSentence Itisunnecessaryforastudenttouseamobile Nowadaysmoreandmorestudentshavegotmobilephones ButIthinkitisunnecessaryforastudenttouseamobile First moststudentsusemobilestosendshortmessageseachotherorevenplaygames Itisawasteoftime Secondly buyingamobilewillcostmuchmoney Weareonlyconsumers Thirdly ifweneedtocommunicatewithourparents wecanaskourteacherforhelp Soinshort itisnotnecessaryforustousemobiles 82words GroupA TheImportanceofKeepingHealthy GroupB TheEarthisOurFriend GroupC TheweatherinShanghai TheImportanceofKeepingHealthyEveryonewantstobehealthy becauseitisveryimportant Ifwearehealthy wecandousefulthingsforourcountry Buthowtokeephealthy First weshouldhaveagooddiet Weshouldeatnotonlyfishandmeat butalsofruitandvegetables Wehadbetterhavelessjunkfood Secondly weshouldhavesportseveryday itisgoodforourhealth Finally wemusthavegoodhabits forexample weshouldnotsmoke Howimportantitistobehealthy 84words TheearthisourfriendItiscommonknowledgethattheearthisourfriend First wehaveonlyoneearththatweliveon Secondly itprovidesuswitheverythingweneedsuchasfoodandclothes Soeveryoneshoulddohelpfulthingsforher Forexample wemuststoppollutingtheriversandlakes Weshouldplantmoretreesandgrasstomakeourenvironmentniceandclear Pleaserememberwehaveonlyoneearth Weshouldprotecther Sheisourfriend 80words TheweatherinShanghai WeliketheweatherinShanghai Itisneithertoohotnortoocold Inspring itiswarm Treesturngreenandflowerscomeout Insummer itishot Wecangoswimming Sometimesitrainshard Inautumn theweatheriscool Leavesbegintofall Andwehavealotoffruit Inwinter itiscold Whenitsnows wecangoouttoplaywithit TheweatherinShanghaiisverynice Weloveitverymuch 82words III Writingaletter 上海松江洞泾学校九年级 1 班李平收松江七中初三 2 班魏芳寄 WeiFangClassTwo GradeNineNo 7MiddleSchoolSongjiang ShanghaiLiPingClassOne GradeNineDongjingSchoolSongjiang Sha