山东省胶州市高考英语二轮复习 写作赏析精编（8）.doc

山东省胶州市2016高考英语（二轮）写作赏析精编（8）2016书面表达训练假设你是李华，你的美国笔友david最近在学汉语,他给你发来一封电子邮件讲述他对学习汉语兴趣浓厚，但是他在学习汉语的过程中常常因为犯错误而懊恼。请你用英语给他回一封邮件。内容包括： 1. 鼓励他继续努力，正确看待错误；2. 给david提出一些学好汉语的建议(至少两条)；3. 邀请他来中国玩。 注意： 1.词数 120左右；开头已经给出，不计入总次数。 2.不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。 deardavid,im glad to receive your e-mail and happy to know that you are interested in learning chinese. _yours，li hua【参考范文】test 13deardavid, im glad to receive your e-mail and happy to know that you are interested in learning chinese. it is well known that chinese is difficult to learn. one cant avoid making a mistake when learning a foreign language. here are some tips on how to learn chinese. first, dont be afraid to make mistakes. making mistakes is a good way to learn how to say things right. second, if you know a chinese friend, ask he or she to practise with you.third, you should spend more time practising listening to and speaking chinese frequently. i wish you success in learning chinese. i am expecting to hear from you. atlast, iwelcomeyoutocometochina. yours， lihua【广东省高三考前冲刺卷】 基础写作(共1小题，满分15分)随着网络的发展，目前很多人给亲朋好友发电子贺卡。请根据以下提示，阐述电子贺卡的优越性。写作内容1可播放动画和声音；2传递速度快，节省钱；3形式多样，可从网站下载，可自行设计；4有利于环境保护。写作要求只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。评分标准句子结构准确，信息内容完整，语篇连贯。参考词汇：电子贺卡：electronic card；网站：website_基础写作【参考范文】with the development of the internet，more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones at festivals time.compared with the traditional ones，electronic cards are more interesting and lively，for you can get not only pictures but also sound.besides，its faster to send an electronic card and it also can save money.there are many websites online where varieties of cards are available but if none of these cards are of any interest to you，you can design cards of special style.more importantly，with the popularity of electronic cards，less paper is used for making paper cards，which contributes to the environment protection.2016书面表达训练假设你将作为云阳中学高三毕业生代表，请根据以下要点在毕业晚会上用英文作一个告别演讲:1. 感谢家人，朋友和老师。可举例感谢老师（不用真名，一律使用mr. zheng, 并写出原因）。2. 回顾高中三年的生活。列举出你印象深刻的活动。 3. 展望未来。注意：开头与结尾已经给出，所写部分120字左右。 dear teachers, families and graduates, welcome and thank you for joining us tonight at yunyang senior high school graduation ceremony for the class of 2015! 【参考范文】dear teachers, families and graduates, welcome and thank you for joining us tonight at yunyang senior high school graduation ceremony for the class of 2015! first, let me thank all our families and friends for their love and support on behalf of the graduates. i also want to thank our diligent teachers for guiding us through to this moment. my personal thanks to mr zheng, you got me through math when i had given up hope. graduation is a time to go over enjoyable memories which have been made over the past three years. many events become so vivid in my mind at this moment, military training, soccer and basketball games. however, graduation is also a time to look forward to the future in front of us. no matter what you plan next, i hope you can go about it positively. each of you will create your own unique path. lets remember the saying “attitude determines altitude”. please always keep a smile on your face. finally, best wishes to the class of 2015. thank you very much.【北京市东城区2014高考英语调研检测题】书面表达（共两节，35分）第一节（15分）你的美国朋友william下个月即将来北京。请根据以下提示给他写信，告知他到达当日的安排。1. 你去机场接机。2. 送他去酒店。3. 晚上欢迎他来你家共进晚餐。注意：1. 词数不少于50。 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 3. 邮件的开头和结尾已写好，不计入总词数。dear william, _ yours joe【参考答案】第一节（15分）一、评分原则：1本题总分为15分，按4个档次给分。2评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3评分时应考虑：内容是否充实，交际是否得体，语言是否准确。 4拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。5词数少于50，从总分中减去1分。二、各档次的给分范围和要求：第一档（13分15分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。内容完整，条理清楚；交际得体，表达时充分考虑到了交际的需求；体现出较强 的语言运用能力。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第二档（9分12分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。内容、条理和交际等方面基本符合要求；所用语法和词汇满足了任务的要求；语法或用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。基本达到了预期的写作目的。第三档（4分8分）未恰当完成试题规定的任务。内容不完整；所用词汇有限，语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容 的理解。未能清楚地传达信息。第四档（1分3分）未完成试题规定的任务。写了少量相关信息；语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解。0分未能传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关。三、possible version dear william, im so happy that youre coming to beijing next month. ill go to the airport to meet you on the day you arrive. after that, ill send you to the hotel. you can have a rest there after the long flight. my parents and i will be very happy if you can come over to our house for dinner that evening. its a long time since we last met. i cant wait to see you! yours li hua 【北京市东城区2014高考英语调研检测题】假设你是红星中学高二（1）班的学生李华。下面四幅图描述了发生在你上学路上的一件事，请根据图片的先后顺序，为校刊“英语园地”写一篇短文。词数不少于60。 _【参考答案】第二节（20分）一、评分原则：1本题总分为20分，按5个档次给分。 2评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3评分时应考虑：内容要点的完整性、上下文的连贯、词汇和句式的多样性及语言的准确性。4拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。5词数少于60，从总分中减去1分。二、内容要点：1.看到一个外国人在打车 2.外国人和出租车司机交流有困难 3.上前帮助翻译 4. 外国人和出租车司机表示感谢三、各档次的给分范围和要求：第一档（18分20分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖了所有内容要点；运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇；语法或用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体现了较强的语言运用能力；有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯、结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第二档（15分17分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖了所有内容要点；运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。达到了预期的写作目的。第三档（12分14分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖了内容要点；运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求；语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。基本达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（6分11分）未恰当完成试题规定的任务。漏掉或未描述清楚主要内容；所用句式和词汇有限；语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。未能清楚地传达信息。第五档（1分5分）未完成试题规定的任务。明显遗漏主要内容；句式单调、词汇贫乏；语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解。 0分未能传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关。四、one possible version i was walking to school the other day when i saw a foreigner standing by the roadside. a taxi passed by. he stopped it and told the driver where he wanted to go in english. however, the driver didnt understand english. both of them had no idea what to do. seeing that