大学英语四级-作文解析.ppt

ThemegalleryPowerTemplate 大学英语四级写作新评分标准 2分 条理不清 思路紊乱 语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误 且多数为严重错误 5分 基本切题 表达思想不够清楚 连贯性差 有较多的严重语言错误 8分 基本切题 表达思想比较清楚 文字尚连贯 但语言错误较多 其中有少量的严重错误 11分 切题 表达思想清楚 文字连贯 但有少量语言错误 14分 切题 表达思想清楚 文字通顺 连贯性较好 基本无语言错误 大学英语四级写作新评分标准 除了以上五个主要标准之外 评分时还考虑以下三个因素 l 白卷 作文与题目毫不相关 或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想 则给零分 2 字数不足者酌情扣分 81 89个词扣1分 7l 80个词扣2分 61 70个词扣3分 51一60个词扣4分 不足50个词最多只给5分 所计字数不包括卷面上已给主题句 3 只写一段者0 4分 只写两段者0 9分 一 人称 1 少用I we they 当想用somepeoplethat 多用sthiswidelyassumed believedthat 2 人称要一致 用we they等 一用到底 切忌somepeople they we I 时态 1 一般现在时为主体2 使用悬垂结构A Tocatchupwiththisdevelopment weallfeelanurgentandstrongdesiretostudy B Choosinganoccupationtakestime andtherearealotofthingsyouhavetothinkaboutasyoutrytodecidewhatyouwouldliketodo 议论文的灵魂 观点 Arguments 考察我们的观点及对社会上的一些事情的看法和改进的措施如2002年6月的图表分析题StudentsUseofComputers2003年1月的ItPaystoBeHonest 暗合那几年风靡一时的高考作文题目 诚信 2006年1月的问我们对CampusTourism 即大学校园成为旅游景点的看法和观点 同年的6月又考察了arguments 是对OnStudentsSelectingLectures 问学生对自己选择任课教师这一问题的辩证性的看法 四级考试重视我们自己的perspective即观点 而且一般都是辩证性的观点 要格外的注意这一趋势 第一段 按背景 观点提出有些人的观点 Incontemporarysociety thereisagrowingtendencyovertherecentyearsforsb 人 todosth 干什么 Thisissue phenomenonhascausedwidepublicconcern 第二段 用asamatteroffact however提出另一部分人的观点 However peopleseemtofailtotakeintoaccountthefactthat asamatteroffact 最后一段 用personally提出自己的观点及解决方法 最后总结 Frommypart Iaminclinedtosupporttheideathat 永恒的三段论 1 每年 高校许多大学生受到鼓舞去贫困地区支教 2 支教活动的意义 3 我的看法 AidEducationinChina Eachyear collegestudents encouragedtoaidstudentsinthepoverty strickenareas volunteerthemselvesinpoorvillagesforayearandtrytoimproveeducationinpoorareas Aid educationhasbeenbeneficialintwoaspects Ontheonehand collegevolunteersarereallydevotedtothecause Theyhaveopenedtheeyesofstudentsinunderdevelopedregionstotheoutsideworldbybringingthemnewknowledgeandthoughts Asaresult theyareextremelywell receivedbythechildrenthere Ontheotherhand collegestudentshavereceivedarigoroustrainingbyadaptingtotheharshlivingconditions Theyareenjoyingtheappreciationandno distancefriendshipfromthechildren What smore theyaregreatlyinspiredbythemovingandtirelessspiritofthechildren Inmyopinion China seducationaldevelopmentcan tbeisolatedfromeachindividualandwecollegestudentsshouldtaketheleadinresponsetotheappealforofferingaidtochildreninpoorareas 1 现在某些高校校园禁止车辆驶入 2 这种规定的考虑 3 谈谈你的看法 点评 随着人们物质生活的提高 私家车发展迅猛 越来越多的私家车停放在校园 由此产生了一些问题 如空间被占 噪音污染 环境污染等 为此许多学校禁止车辆驶入校园 本预测题与2006年1月名校校园是否对外开放相仿 值得关注 ShouldcarsbeallowedintoCollegeCampus Withtherapiddevelopmentofournationaleconomy privatecarshavebecomeinlargenumber ofcourse quiteafewcarsareheavilydrivenintoCollegeCampus Inasignificantway thesecarsdonottakeupstudents placesforstudy butactuallyaffecttheirdailylifeandstudy forinstance thiscrowdofcarsmaymakenoiseandemitfilthygastochokeustodeath Andthecampusisjammedwithlinesofcarsandseemstobeparkinglotinsteadofanacademicinstitute SocarshavebeenstrictlyprohibitedintomanyCollegeCampuses Itseemsthatthisisnotconveniencetosomepersons indeed butthisisforthesakeofoursafety Thuswhensomeoneenjoysconveniencefrommoderntools don tforgetthatitisdangeroustothestudentsintheCollegeCampus Therefore IagreethatcarsarenotallowedintoCollegeCampus Byandlarge withthepriceofcarsfallingsignificantly carswillenteraveragefamilies andmostChinesewillenjoyaluxuriouslifestyleintheirlife However theyarestillprohibitedtodrivetheircarsintoCollegeCampus which Ithink isahardtruthintheeyesofmostpeople 1 信息安全问题日益重要2 信息安全事故可能导致的危害3 如何做到信息安全点评 随着我们步入信息社会和计算机应用的普及 利用计算机犯罪案件不断上升 信息安全事故频繁发生 媒体也不时有大量相关报道 如何保护信息安全成为人们关注的焦点 本预测题为社会热点 值得关注 InformationSecurity Thehumanbeingsaresteppingintotheinformationsociety Theinformationindustrydevelopsveryrapidly sodothehackers trick playingteens exploringchildren fraudsters andseriouswhite collarcriminals Thus informationsecuritybecomesanimpendingimportantissue Incaseofinformationbreach thevictims governmentdepartment anorganizationoraninstitution oracompanywillinevitablysuffergreatorsmallloss Governmentmaybethreatenedwithnationalsecurity Companiesmayloseopportunitiestodevelopnewprojects Andthepublic sandusers confidencewillbedamaged Thenhowtodealwiththisissue Technologyisonlyapartialsolutiontoinformationsecurity What smoreimportantisthatorganizationsandcompaniesshouldpromotetheawarenessoninformationsecuritytoitsstaff However sincenosystemcaneverbe100percentsecure aprevention onlyapproachtoinformationsecuritymanagementisnotenough Companiesandorganizationsshouldadoptadualapproachtoinformationsecuritymanagementbycombingpreventionanddetectiontechniques 1 一些学生赞成讲座式教学2 另一些学生偏爱讨论式教学3 你的看法点评 2007年12月考查了大学生选修课话题 再次证明四级作文命题自2003年以后侧重于校园生活话题 该预测与校园生活联系紧密 为四级作文命题经常关注的话题 本文属于对比观点加作者态度型的议论文写作 LecturesandDiscussions Thereisaheateddebateovertheroleoflecturesanddiscussionsintheclassroom Somepeoplebelievethatlecturescanhelpstudentslearnmorequickly Incontrast othersholdthatdiscussionscanstimulatestudentstolearnbythemselves Thosewhoholdthefirstopinionsuggestthatstudentsattendmorelectures Intheirview bygivinglecturesteachershelpstudentsmastertheknowledgethey veaccumulatedoveryearsofstudyandresearch However othersthinkthatinadiscussion theteacherusuallyguidesthestudentsinsteadofdominatingthem Theyarguethattogetinvolvedinadiscussion studentshavetodeveloptheirabilitytoanalyzeproblemsindependently Inmyopinion Istandonthesideofneitheridea Firstofall eithermethodhasitsdisadvantages Furthermore eachstudenthashisorherpreference Thirdly lecturesatepreferabletodiscussionsintheteachingofsciencesubjects andonthecontrary discussionsarepreferabletolecturesinstudyingthehumanities Therefore weshouldadoptdifferentteachingmethodsaccordingtodifferentsubjects a 社会实践的作用b 可能产生的问题c 提出建议点评 本篇文章属于解释性说明文 就业市场的竞争要求大学生具有丰富的社会实践 才能适应就业市场的竞争 所以现在在校大学生参与社会实践活动频繁 但如何处理好学业和社会实践的关系成为人们关注的话题 本预测题与大学生生活密切相关 也是四级作文关注的重要话题 SocialPractice Socialpracticehasbeenmoreandmorepopularinuniversitiesandcolleges Studentsareaskedtoentersocietyandgetsomeideaofit Surelysocialpracticehasmanyadvantages Firstly socialpracticecanofferstudentsachancetocontactsocietyandmeetdifferentkindsofpeople Inthiswaystudentscangainsomevaluablesocialexperience whichwillbeusefultotheirfuturecareer Secondly studentscanapplywhattheyhavelearnedinclasstopracticalwork thusknowingthemselvesmoreclearly Thirdly socialpracticecanbringthemsomefinancialrewardandmakethemmoreindependentoftheirfamily However someproblemsmayariseifnocorrectguidanceismade Forexample somestudentsgetoverlyinterestedinsocialpracticeandwanttoworkfull timeandearnmoney thusneglectingtheirstudies Andsomestudentsarelikelytogetintouchwiththedarksideofsociety whichwillaffecttheirfuturestudies Inordertocarryoutsocialpracticesmoothly studentsshouldfirstknowitsobjective Theyshouldputtheirstudiesinthefirstplaceandseesocialpracticejustasausefulsupplement sotheyoughttotrytostrikeabalancebetweensocialpracticeandtheirstudies 1 心理健康问题往往是导致疾病的原因2 分析人们产生心理健康问题的原因 可从失业 压力过重 缺乏支持 缺乏人际交往能力等方面分析 3 你认为人们应如何保持心理健康点评 据报道北京高校100多万名在校大学生中 已经有14名自杀身亡 而去年全年 北京自杀死亡的学生为19人 社会对于大学生心理健康问题越来越关注 如何保持心理健康成为社会关注话题 本预测题与校园生活联系紧密 是四级考试关注度较高的话题 值得重视 HowtoKeepPsychologicallyHealthy Oneinfourpeoplewillexperiencesomekindofmentalprobleminthecourseofayear Whenyoufailtomanagetheseproblems theyarelikelytocausevariousmentalillnesses Thecauseofmentalhealthproblemsoftenvaryalotfromonecasetoanother Intoday ssociety agoodnumberofpeoplearesufferingfromheavypressure Otherslackcommunicationskills Inaddition alotofpeopleareignorantofpsychologicalknowledgeabouthowtokeepmentallyfit Therearealotofwaystocurbmentalhealthproblemsandkeeppsychologicallyhealthy Firstly findtherealcauseofyourmentalhealthproblemandseewhetheryoucandosomethingaboutit Secondly learntorelaxyourselfandtakeexercisestoreleasethepressure Lastly youmayfindithelpfultotalktoyourpartnerorfriendaboutyourproblem orseeksupportandadviceformapsychologicalconsultant 1 目前网络教育形成热潮2 你认为这股热潮形成的原因3 你对网络教育的评价点评 英特网的迅速发展改变了人们的生活和学习 工作方式 现代生活节奏快 工作忙导致人们没时间全日制的学习 网络和远程教育正好满足了人们的学习需要 许多大学生利用因特网学习知识 它成为传统教学的有益补充 本预测题贴近时代 也与大学生校园生活相关 值得重视 MyViewonOnlineEducation Beingonlineisnolongersomethingneworfreshinourlife Tosomeextent ithasbecomepartofourdailylife Wecandoalotofthingsonline suchassearchingforinformationandcommunicatingwithfriendsfaraway Butrecentlyanotherhelpfulonlineactivityhasbecomevery in Thatisonlineeducation Whycouldonlineeducationbesopopularwithinsuchashortperiodoftime Amongotherreasons thequickdevelopmentoftheInternetshouldbeanessentialone whichmakesallourdreamsofattendingclassinthedistancepossible Anotherunderlyingreasonisthequickdevelopmentofbothsocietyandtechnology Today modernscienceandtechnologyisdevelopingwithfantasticspeed Tocatchupwiththisdevelopmentweallfeelanurgentandstrongdesiretostudy However duetothegreatpaceofmodernsociety manypeoplearetoobusytostudyfulltimeatschool Onlineeducationjustcomestotheiraid Personally Iappreciatethisnewformofeducation It sindeedahelpfulcomplementtothetraditionaleducationalmeans Itcanprovidedifferentlearnerswithmoreflexibleandversatilewaysoflearning Bestofall withonlineeducation wecansticktoourjobsandatthesametimestudyandabsorbthelatestknowledge 1 选择职业是一个人要面对的众多难题之一 2 需要花时间去选择职业 3 选择职业时可以向多人寻求建议和帮助 ChoosinganOccupation Oneofthemostimportantproblemsayoungpersonfacesisdecidingwhattodo Therearesomepeople ofcourse whofromthetimetheyaresixyearsold know thattheywanttobedoctorsorpilotsorfirefighters butthemajorityofusdonotgetaroundtomakingadecisionaboutanoccupationorcareeruntilsomebodyorsomethingforcesustofacetheproblem Choosinganoccupationtakestime andtherearealotofthingsyouhavetothinkaboutasyoutrytodecidewhatyouwouldliketodo Youmayfindthatyouwillhavetotakespecialcoursestoqualifyforaparticularkindofwork oryoumayfindoutthatyouwillneedtogetactualworkexperiencetogainenoughknowledgetoqualifyforaparticularjob Fortunately therearealotofpeopleyoucanturntoforadviceandhelpinmakingyourdecision Atmostschools thereareteacherswhoareprofessionallyqualifiedtogiveyoudetailedinformationaboutjobqualifications Andyoucantalkoveryourideaswithfamilymembersandfriendswhoarealwaysreadytolistenandtooffersuggestions 1 近几年出现了大学生就业难的现象2 产生这种现象的原因 如大学生追求的目标过高 专业不对口等 3 如何解决这一问题 改变就业观念 大学生再培训等 点评 本预测题为社会热点话题 近年来大学生就业难日益成为各级政府及社会各方面关注的焦点 媒体也广泛报道了大学生就业形势严峻 呼吁全社会共同努力 此外 该预测题也与大学生就业密切相关 也是四级作文选题重点之一 CollegeStudents JobHunting Inrecentyears collegestudentsfinditincreasinglydifficulttogetajob Itsoundsstrangesinceyoungcollegestudentsareusuallyintelligent well educatedphenomenon aspirantandeagertobringtheirtalentintofullplay Thenwhatunderliesthestrangephenomenon Thereareseveralreasonsforthis Tobeginwith nowadayscollegestudentsaimtoohigh Alltheywantare good jobswhichcouldoffergoodsalary comfortableworkingconditions highsocialstatusamongothers Consequently mostcollegestudentsareunwillingtoacceptvacantjobstheyconsidernot good enough Anotherreasonisthatthereisabiggapbetweenthemajorssomestudentsstudyinschoolandthedemandsofvacantjobs Socompaniesthinksomestudentsarenotfitforthejobs Solutiontotheproblemrequireseffortsonboththesocietyandthestudents Thecompaniesshouldvaluethestudents talentandknowledgewhilethelattershouldnotmerelyaimatmaterialgains Theyshouldbedown to earthinbuildinguptheircareer Furthermore theyshouldfacetheirweakpointssoastoimprovethemselvesandbemorecompetent 1 越来越多的人使用信用卡 信用卡有哪些好处2 信用卡的弊端3 你自己的观点点评 这是一篇议论文 关于信用卡的利弊 可以分成三部分 第一部分 信用卡的好处 比如说应急等 第二部分 信用卡的一些弊端 比如说鼓励一些无用的消费 第三部分 你自己的观点 理性使用 CreditCards PersonalcreditcardsarebecomingmorecommoninChina Banksandotherfinancialinstitutionsareencouragingtheircustomerstochangethewaytheybuythings Creditcards otherwiseknownas plasticmoney arebeingofferedonverygoodtermstoencouragethechange Consumerswillbeableto buynow paylater andmanyseethisasanadvantage Butpeopleneedtobecareful Therearedangersassociatedwithcreditcards Somepeoplefinditveryeasytoexceedtheirbudget Theyaretemptedtopurchasegoodsthattheydonotreallyneed andcanbecomequicklyoverburdenedbydebt Thecreditcardsoftenchargeahighrateofinterest whichexacerbatestheproblemsforthesepeople However usedwiselycreditcardscanimprovethequalityofpeople slives Theycangivepeopleaccesstomoneytomeetsuddenunplannedexpenses Properlyhandled theycanletpeoplecontroltheirexpenditureandthemonthlystatementsprovidearecordofwheretheirmoneyhasgone 应用类 1 简要介绍自己并说明应征该职位2 告知公司为什么对此感兴趣3 简述你为何是合适人选点评 本文属于书信体应用文 要求写一封求职信 找工作是四级命题作文关注的话题之一 2001年1月和1995年6月都考查了求职面试的话题 本预测题要求写一封求职信 既与求职话题相关 又是书信体作文 符合四级作文命题思路和考查重点 AnApplicationLetter DearSirorMadam IamLiMing awould begraduatefromNinjingUniversity MymajorisEnglish Throughthejobadvertisement IhavelearnedthatyouarehuntingaqualifiedindividualforapersonalsecretarytotheGeneralManagerofyouresteemedcompany IamfullyconvincedthatIamtherightpersonforthejob Irealizethatmyfuturebossisextremelybusy However it