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2017新高考英语写作的几点注意事项 1 读后续写评分原则 1 本题总分25分 按5个档次给分 2 评分时 先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其档次 然后以该档次的要求来衡量 确定或调整档次 最后给分 3 词数少于130的 从总分中减去2分4 评分时应从以下四个方面考虑 1 与所给短文和段落开头语的衔接程度2 内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况3 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性4 上下文的连贯性5 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面 评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑 6 如书写较差以至影响交际 可将分数降低一个档次 2 读后续写的几种基本形式 浙江省衢州一中 3 读后续写的要点 浙江省衢州一中 4 Example 5 Paragraph1 What sworse myteachercalledmyfatheraftertheexamandtoldhimaboutmycheating Paragraph2 Hearingmywords myfatherdecidedtogivemeanotherchance 6 意境的设计缺陷 平淡没悬念和高潮情感渲染不够 不能引起读者的共鸣结尾拔的不高 限制了文章的高度人物角色不明 语气不符合角色以自我为中心 缺乏一些人文素养在内 如 爱的传递 奉献 善良 正义 宽容等 7 2017新高考概要写作的几点注意事项 8 概要写作指导的 9 本题总分为25分 按5个档次给分 评分时 先根据所写概要的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次 然后以该档次的要去来衡量 确定或调整档次 最后给分 词数少于40的和多于80的 从总分中减去2分 评分时 应主要从以下四个方面考虑 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面 评分时 应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑 如书写较差以致影响交际 可将分数降低一个档次 概要写作评分解读 10 1 对原文要点的理解和呈现情况2 应用语法结构和词汇的准确性3 上下文的连贯性4 对各要点表达的独立性情况 11 评分时 应主要从以下四个方面考虑 对原文要点的理解和呈现情况 应用语法结构和词汇的准确性 上下文的连贯性 对各要点表达的独立性情况 第五档评分标准的启示 12 写作的重难点 要点的完全准确提取用自己的语言有效的概括 13 概要写作疑难点 如何进行概要写作改写句子如何用自己的语言来概写句子 14 疑难一 如何概写Example 1 Hiscourageinbattlemightwithoutexaggerationbecallediron like Hewasverybraveinbattle 2 Hewashardupformoneyandwasbeingpressedbyhiscreditor Hewasinfinancialdifficulties 3 SheboughthomeseveralChineseandEnglishnovels afewcopesofTimeandNewsweekandsometextbooks Sheintendedtoreadallofthemduringthewintervacation Shebroughthomealotofbookstoreadduringthevacation 15 疑难二 如何在不改变题材原句的意义上改写要点 example摘自全国统一考试英语科考试说明P24 16 例7 选自全国统一考试英语科考试说明P24 Gettingridofdirt intheopinionofmostpeople isagoodthing However thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt Intheearly16thcentury peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths By1538 theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom SodidthekingofEnglandin1546 ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway HenryIV KingofFrance wasfamouslydirty Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath thekingorderedthat toavoidtheattackofdisease thenoblemanshouldnotgoout Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong lived dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury Scientificallyspeaking cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease Yet itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWar Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite clothseversofter surfacestoshine Hasthehatefordirt however gonetoofar Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays Manyfirst timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease Onthecontrary MaryRuebush anAmericanimmunologist 免疫学家 encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground 17 Transitionalwords Gettingridofdirt intheopinionofmostpeople isagoodthing However thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt Intheearly16thcentury peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths By1538 theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom SodidthekingofEnglandin1546 ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway HenryIV KingofFrance wasfamouslydirty Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath thekingorderedthat toavoidtheattackofdisease thenoblemanshouldnotgoout Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong lived dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury Scientificallyspeaking cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease Yet itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWar Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite clothseversofter surfacestoshine Hasthehatefordirt however gonetoofar Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays Manyfirst timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease Onthecontrary MaryRuebush anAmericanimmunologist 免疫学家 encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground 18 要点1 nothingfixed attitudestodirt 19 Intheearly16thcentury peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths By1538 theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom SodidthekingofEnglandin1546 ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway HenryIV KingofFrance wasfamouslydirty Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath thekingorderedthat toavoidtheattackofdisease thenoblemanshouldnotgoout P W之keywords 20 要点2 dirtontheskin blockoutdisease alongtime Europe livedwithdirt People suchasEuropeans thoughtdirtdefendedtheirbodiesagainsttheattackofdisease People suchasEuropeans hadlongconsidereddirtontheskinhelpedresistillness Foralongtimeinhistory peopleofsomeEuropeancountries suchasFrance believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill 选自考试说明范文 People suchasEuropeans usedtoregarddirtontheskinasabarrieragainstdisease 21 P W之keywords Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong lived dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury Scientificallyspeaking cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease Yet itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWar Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite clothseversofter surfacestoshine Hasthehatefordirt however gonetoofar 22 要点3 cleaningawaydirt good standardsofcleanliness movedbeyondscience Itwasnotuntilthe18thcenturythatpeolecametobelievewashingoffdirtbenefitedhealth butovertimetheyhavebecometooparticularaboutcleanliness Peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago Peoplehavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankeepushealthy 选自考试说明范文 Centurieslater peoplecametoadoptascientificviewondirt andconsidereditahealthypracticetoremovedirtofftheskin whichlater however leadstoanobsessionwithcleanliness 23 P W之keywords Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays Manyfirst timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease Onthecontrary MaryRuebush anAmericanimmunologist 免疫学家 encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground 24 W S之要点4 playinthedirt buildupastrongimmunesystem gainingsomeground Somebelievekidsshouldbeencouagedtoplaywithdirt whichmayhelpstrenghthentheirimmunesystem Somesocietiesbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem 选自考试说明范文 Somepeoplesharethebeliefthatexposingkidstodirtmayboosttheirimmunesystem 25 transitionalwords Gettingridofdirt intheopinionofmostpeople isagoodthing However thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt Intheearly16thcentury peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths By1538 theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom SodidthekingofEnglandin1546 ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway HenryIV KingofFrance wasfamouslydirty Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath thekingorderedthat toavoidtheattackofdisease thenoblemanshouldnotgoout Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong lived dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury Scientificallyspeaking cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease Yet itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWar Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite clothseversofter surfacestoshine Hasthehatefordirt however gonetoofar Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays Manyfirst timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease Onthecontrary MaryRuebush anAmericanimmunologist 免疫学家 encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground 26 S P Peoplehavemixedopinionstowardsdirtonourskin Foralongtimeinhistory peopleofsomeEuropeancountries suchasFrance believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill However peoplebegantocha