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高考写作 1评分标准2内容框架 第四部分 书面表达 满分25分 假设你是卜曼宜 你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机 因有质量问题 要求该公司更换 请根据下列要点 用英文写一封电子邮件 要点 问题 手机不响铃 不能发短信 该产品已售完 无法更换 型号新 无配件 无法维修 3 要求 公司应尽快予以更换 注意 1 词数为100左右 2 参考词汇 配件 sparepart3 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好 不计入你所写词数 4 已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡 WhenIboughtithome Ifoundtherewereseveralproblemsaboutthequalityofthemobilephone Thereisnoringinthenewmobilephone besides itcannotbeusedtosendshortmessages WhenIwantbacktothelocalcompany themanagertoldmethisproducthassoldoutandthatIwasn tabletochangeit What sworse thisstylemobilephoneisanewproduct thereisnosparepartandcan ttoberepaired Theseproblemsworriesmemost Ihopeyourcompanywouldchangeitformeassoonaspossible 分析 基本表达清楚 时态运用恰当 采用了些简单连接手法 内容较连贯 准确性不够 15 第四部分 书面表达 满分25分 假设你是卜曼宜 你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机 因有质量问题 要求该公司更换 请根据下列要点 用英文写一封电子邮件 要点 问题 手机不响铃 不能发短信 该产品已售完 无法更换 型号新 无配件 无法维修 2 要求 公司应尽快予以更换 注意 1 词数为100左右 2 参考词汇 配件 sparepart3 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好 不计入你所写词数 4 已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡 However someproblemsarepresentedwiththismobilephone Inthefirstplace whentherearephonecalls themobilephonejustcan tring Inaddition shortmessagescanneverbesent whenIcamebacktothemallforexchange Iwasdisappointedtobetoldthatthismodelhadbeensoldout Worsestill itisanewmodel thusnosparepartisavailableatthemoment NowherecanIhavethisphonerepaired Maybetherearesomealternativestohandlethiscase butIhopeitcanbedealtwithandsolvedassoonaspossible Inbrief mypersonalviewpointisthatyoureplacethismobilephone I mlookingforwardtoyourreply 分析 全文共九个句子 其中有两个时间状语从句 一个并列句 一个倒装句 一个表语从句 运用了however inthefirstplace inaddition worsestill inbrief五个过渡性词汇 运用了available alternative两个较高级词语 25 1评分标准 keeptothepointaccuracy spellingandgrammar brightpoints words phrasesandsentence natural 2内容框架 1真题一 环境保护一次性筷子的使用 howtomakeyourcontentlogical 2真题二 周末集体活动介绍一个地方 howtomakebrightpointsforyourarticle 3真题三 讨论动物园是否应搬出市区 howtomakeaccuracy 4历年真题翻译练习 真题一 假如你叫李华 是一名高中学生 根据下面内容 写一封倡议书 呼吁人们停止使用一次性筷子 注意 1 开头和结尾已给出 2 字数100左右 3 参考词汇 rejectthrowawaychopsticks 写作步骤 1扩展 逻辑性 分段2翻译 亮点 词与句3检查 错误 假如你叫李华 是一名高中学生 根据下面内容 写一封倡议书 呼吁人们停止使用一次性筷子 注意 1 开头和结尾已给出 2 字数100左右 3 参考词汇 rejectthrowawaychopsticks 目前状态导致结果采取措施 1扩展 砍伐森林会导致很多严重的环境问题 面对这样的情况 我们应该采取一些措施来保护森林了 目前 中国的森林正遭受着严重的破坏 2翻译第一部分 Doyouknowwhysandstormsandlandslidesarehappeningmorefrequentlythaneverinrecentyears Accordingtotherecentstatistics 中国正面临着严重的森林破坏问题 中国的森林覆盖率仅为13 但是中国每年要生产大约450亿双筷子 而这些筷子就需要我们砍伐2500万棵树 有环保主义者警告 照这样的速度 中国可能在20年内就要砍伐所有的森林 面临着森林破坏问题覆盖率大约450亿2500万警告灭绝 beconfrontedwiththeproblemofdeforestationbecoveredwithapproximately45billion25millionwarndieout 中国正面临着严重的森林破坏问题 中国的森林覆盖率仅为13 但是中国每年要生产大约450亿双筷子而这些筷子就需要我们砍伐2500万棵树 有环保主义者警告 照这样的速度 中国可能在20年内就要砍伐所有的森林 Chinaisconfrontedwiththeseriousproblemofdeforestation 13 ofchinaiscoveredwithforest butchinaproducesapproximately45billionpairsofthrowawaychopsticks Thesechopsticksneedustocutdown25milliontrees SomeenvironmentalistswarnthepublicthattheforestofChinawilldieoutafter20yearsbythisspeed Chinaisconfrontedwiththeseriousproblemofforestdestruction 13 ofchinaiscoveredwithforest butchinaproducesapproximately45billionpairsofthrowawaychopsticks Thesechopsticksneedustocutdown25milliontrees SomeenvironmentalistswarnthepublicthattheforestofChinawilldieoutafter20yearsbythisspeed Confrontedwiththeseriousproblemofdeforestation 13 ofchinaiscoveredwithforest howeverapproximately45billionpairsofthrowawaychopsticksareproducedbyChinaannually whichmeansthatweneedtocutdown25milliontrees Therefore someenvironmentalistswarnthepublicthattheforestofChinawilldieoutafter20yearsbythisspeed 被动语态 定语从句 连词 分词作状语 第二部分 砍伐森林会导致很多环境问题 例如 水土流失 废气排放增多 温室效应 人类将会遭受一个由自己带来的灾难 砍伐森林水土流失废气排放增多遭受 Excessivedeforestationsoilerosiontheincreaseemissionofcarbondioxidesufferfrom 砍伐森林会导致很多环境问题 例如 水土流失 废气排放增多 温室效应 人类将会遭受一个由自己带来的灾难 Excessivedeforestationwillleadtoaseriesofenvironmentalchanges forinstance soilerosion theincreaseemissionofcarbondioxide especiallythegreenhouseeffect It ssurethatthehumenwillsufferfromadisaterwhichiscausedbyourselves 第三部分 所以 我们是该采取一些措施来保护我们的森林资源了 it stimethatsbdidsth 万能措施一 Thelongtermgoalofenvironmentalprotectionistopreventthecreationofpollutantsandwastesandtoproducedurable recyclablegoods 万能措施二 Inviewofsustainabledevelopment theexploitationofmineralresourcesshouldbeunderstrictgovernment 万能理由三 Mankindshouldjoinhandinhandtocreateaninhabitableworldforthemselvesandtheiroffspring 3检查纠错 Doyouknowwhysandstormsandlandslidesarehappeningmorefrequentlythaneverinrecentyears Accordingtotherecentstatistics they reduetothedisappearingofforests Dearfriends doyouknowtheywereeatlenbyyouwhenusethechopsticks Everyyearitproducts45billionchopsticksfromChina Theforestsonlycover13percentsinChina Theseneed25millionoftrees SomeonewhocarestheenvironmenthasalarmedthatChinamayuseoutallofitsforestsaccordingtothisspeed ItmeansthattheenvironmentofChinawillbreakdownentirely Sopleasethrowawaychopsticksnow usingthethrowawaychopsticksmaykillourforests Chinawhoseforestsonlycovers13 ofitsland produces45000000000throwawaychopstickseveryyear Thisneeds2500milliontreestobecutdown What sworse someenvironmentalistsevenwarnedthatifwecontinueusingthesechopsticksatthisspeed itwillbepossibleforChinatouseupallitsforestresourcesinonly20years Atthattime wehumanbeingscouldnotliveontheplannetanylongerandtherewaybenolivingthingontheearth either Whatafrighteningthingitis Soweshouldnotusethechopsticksanymoreinordertomakeabetterenvironmentforouryoungergenerationandforourselves Dearfriends let stakeactionfromnowon 必备词汇 disaster flood hurricane lighting thunderstorm tornado volcano wave ash furniture feather fur latitude equator longitudebury occur strike ruin erupt eruption current tropical violent previous 常用表达 污染大气无节制地开发资源乱扔垃圾砍伐森林冰川融化土地沙漠化渡过灾难回收再利用垃圾减少废气排放最大化地利用资源 pollutetheatmosphereexploitnaturalresourcesexcessivelylitterarounddeforestthepolesmeltdesertificationsurvivethedisasterrecyclethegarbagereducetheexhaustemissionmaximizetheuseofresources 真题二 仿写 假定你是一名导游 你将接待一个外国旅游团 请你拟定一份100词左右的导游词向客介绍青岛 要点如下 1 青岛位于山东半岛的南端 面积10654平方公里 总人口699万 2 青岛三面环海 大海是青岛的魅力所在 3 古代名人如李白 蒲松龄 康有为等的足迹遍布青岛各地 留下了华美的诗文 4 青岛是一座现代化城市 现代化的工厂和楼房林立 参考词汇 半岛peninsula ParisisthecapitalandlargestcityofFrance situatedontheRiverSeine Itisoneofthemostbeautifulcitiesintheworldandisvisitiedbymorethaneightmilliontouristseveryyear coveranareaofwithapopulationof QingdaoisabeautifulcityofChina situatedinthesouthofShandongpeninsula coveringanareaof10 654squarekilometersandwithapopulationof6 99million FranceisEurope sthirdlargestcountryandfacestheUnitedKingdomacosstheEnglishChannel FlorenceisanItaliancitywhichbecamefamousbecauseoftheRenaissance Qingdaofacestheseawhichbecomesfamousbecauseoftheblueseawater ManyofFlorence smostbeautifulpaintingsandsculptureswereproducedbygreatartistssuchasLeonardodaVinciandMichelangelo Greece sbestwriterslivedinancientAthens Theirworkhasinfluencedwriterseversince poetessaycelebrity China sbestwriterstravelledaroundancientQingdao ManyofChina smostbeautifulessaysandpoemswereproducedbygreatartistssuchasLiBai PuSonglinandKangYouwei internationalpossessmodern QingdaoisabeautifulcityofChina situatedinthesouthofShandongpeninsula coveringanareaof10 654spuarekilometersandwithapopulationof6 99million Qingdaofacestheseawhichbecomesfamousbecauseoftheblueseawater China sbestwriterstravelledaroundancientQingdao ManyofChina smostbeautifulessaysandpoemswereproducedbygreatartistssuchasLiBai PuSonglinandKangYouwei Qingdaoisainternationalcity whichpossessesagreatmanymodernbuildingsandfactories 1连接词2框架词3内容词 1连接词汇表列举 forexample forinstance thatistosay表补充 besides inaddition moreover表对比 on the onehand ontheotherhand inspiteof表原因 becauseof thanksto dueto owingto asaresultof表结果 therefore thus asaresult so表结论 toconclude inaword inbrief tosumupinanutshellinconclusion表转折 however nevertheless yet different moreandmore face emphasize many discussion attention happen realize various varyfrom growing increasing confront attachimportanceto vast aoverwhelmingmajorityof quiteafew anarmyof anoceanof aseaof amultitudeof debate controversy focus occur beawareof think believe hold argue maitain harbortheideathat taketheattitudethat holdtheviewthat itiswidelysharedthat itisuniversallyackowledgedthat tomymind asfarasIamconcerned important essential vital significant notable support beinfavorof approveof disagree disapproveof frownonsth like prefer feelinclinedto bekeenon befondof appealto good benefical positive favorable perfect pleasurable bad dreadful unfavorable poor adverse 内容词汇 Solve dealwith copewith handle resolve address tackle Damage hurt injure harm impair undermine jeopardize Give offer render impart provide supply afford Develop cultivate foster Advantage merit virtue benefit upside strength Disadvantage demerit drawback downside weakness Puzzle bewilder perplex baffle Protect conserve preserve Key crucial critical important significant vital substantial indispensable imperative Assure ensure guarantee pledge Eliminate clear remove clearup takeaway smoothaway Leadto bringabout resultin cause sparkoff conduceto procure induce generate Allege assert declare claim Useful helpful beneficial profitable rewarding advantageous Influence impact effect Clear obvious evident self evident manifest apparent crystal clear Comprise takeup accountfor constitute consistof makeup occupy hold compose Comparedwith comparedto incomparisonwith incomparisonto bycomparisonwith bycomparisonto Show reveal illustrate demonstrate depict present represent describe Approximately almost about around nearly roughly 真题三 假设你是李华 最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论北京动物园是否应该迁出市区 以下是你所在班级的讨论情况 请你给该报写一封信 反映讨论结果 扩展 第一段引话题 第二段正反议论 第三段总结 第一段引话题 Whenaskedabouttheiropinionofcareerandfamily peoplealwaysresponddifferently Somepeopledeemitmoreimportanttopursuetheircareer whiletherearealwaysotherpeoplewhoarguethatfamilyshouldbethenumberoneinone slife Punctualityisanecessaryhabitinallpublicaffairsincivilizedsociety Withoutit nothingcouldeverbebroughttoaconclusion everythingwouldbeinastateofchaos Nocreaturehasreceivedmorepraiseandabusethanthecommongardensnail Cookedinwine snailsareagreatluxuryinvariouspartsoftheworld 第2段正反议论 Theothersideofthepictureisquitetheopposite Oneman smeatisanotherman spoison Somepeopletaketheattitudethat canproducepositiveeffectsonusinmorethanoneway FirstofallFurthermoreWhat smore Othersharbortheideathat maybringaboutnegativeimpactsonus ForonethingForanother 第三段总结 个人观点 Perhapsthereisanelementoftruthinboththesepictures Iholdthat 讨论 cellphonecareerandfamily Whenaskedabouttheiropinionofcareerandfamily peoplealwaysresponddifferently Somepeopledeemitmoreimportanttopursuetheircareer whiletherearealwaysotherpeoplewhoarguethatfamilyshouldbethenumberoneinone slife Itgoeswithoutanyquestionthatcareerplaysakeyroleinourlife Intheveryfirstplace careercangiveusanaimtoliveon Withoutcareer muchofourlivingtimewillbecertainlywasted What smore careercanprovideuswithameanstoliveon Mostofthepeopleearntheirincomefromajob Ontheotherhand familyisalsoanindispensablepartoflife asmanypeoplewilladmit Familyisalwaysregardedasaplacewherewecanescapefromtroublesinlife Inaddition wecanobtainasenseofbelongingtofromfamily Withoutit anyonewillfeellonelyanddesperate Inmyopinion careerandfamilyarenotinoppositiontoeachother Rather theycanenhanceeachothersothatone slifecanbecomebetterandbetter Therefore it snotachoicebetweenrightandwrong butonebetweenidealandpractical 1北京动物园建于1906年 有一段很重要的历史 定语从句和分词作状语 Beijingzoowasbuiltin1906andithasaveryimportanthistory Beijingzoo whichwasbuiltin1906 hasaveryimportanthistory Builtin1906 Beijingzoohasaveryimportanthistory datebackto 这个公寓位于芳草街 离建新华文学校只有一站 LocatedonFangcaoStreet thisflatisonlyonestationfromJianxinHuawenSchoolbybusNo 11 江城位于长江边 风景优美 适合居住 SettledalongthebanksofChina slongestriver theYangtzeriver Jiangchengisabeautifultownforpeopletolivein 2我们之所以要去种树 是因为树可以给我们提供新鲜的空气 原因句型 Thereasonwhy 句子 isthat 句子 的原因是 Thereasonwhywehavetogrowtreesisthattheycanprovideuswithfreshair Thereasonwhywehavetogrowtreesisthattheycansupplyfreshairforus thereasonswhyIholdtheviewthatnameisveryessentialtoindividualsareasfollows 3草样年华这本书太有趣了 我看了好多遍还是大笑不止 倒装句 So 形容词 be 主词 that 句子 如此 以致于 SointerestingisthebooknamedTheAgeofYouththatIreaditmanytimesandcan thelplaughing Neverhadadreamcometrue Impossibleisnothing ONLYsodoI soIdo neitherdoIas 4时间是如此珍贵 我们经不起浪费它 Sopreciousistimethatwecan taffordtowasteit 5尽管一些西亚国家很富有 但是他们的民主制度是很难令人满意的 Adj as Subject 主词 be S V 虽然 RichasthecountriesinwestAsiaare thedemocracythereisbynomeanssatisfactory bynomeans innoway onnoaccount一点也不 我们绝对不能忽略知识的价值 Onnoaccountcanwe V 我们绝对不能 On