高中英语作文讲解

书面表达（满分25分）假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resume）。给外教MrJenkins写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式（format）。注意：1.词数100左右;2.可以适当增加细节，已使行文连贯。DearMSJenkins,ImLiHuafromEnglishwritingclass.Imwritingtoaskforyourhelp.Imapplyingforapart-timejobinaforeigncompanyinmycityduringthesummervacation,andIhavejustcompletedmyapplicationletterandresume.However,IamnotquitesureofthelanguageandtheformatIveused.Iknowyouhaveaverybusyschedule,butIdbeverygratefulifyoucouldtakesometimetogothroughthemandmakenecessarychanges.Pleasefindmyapplicationletterandresumeintheattachment（附件）.Thankyouforyourkindness!(102Words)Yours,LiHUa,佳作欣赏-2016高考全国I卷作文范文,2016高考全国I卷作文范文鉴赏。=用词的地道=句式的高级=句句之间的衔接,经典累积,我知道你很忙，但如果你能拿出些时间来浏览一下他们并作出必要的改变我会很感激。,然而，并且，但是,askforyourhelp;applyfor;makechanges,Iknowyouhaveaverybusyschedule,butIdbeverygratefulifyoucouldtakesometimetogothroughthemandmakenecessarychanges.,however-and-;but;,Writing写出优质句子，突破作文高分,学习目标1.能够鉴赏范文，掌握文中有用的句型和好的表达形式。2.通过合作讲解：能够写出正确的简单句能够创作出精彩高档句3.掌握如何评价一份作文。,怎样译出地道的简单句？,第二步：找出修饰成分，添加修饰成分。,第一步：找出句子主干，翻译句子主干。,例句：为了逃避挨骂，那个淘气的男孩没关水龙头就跑了。,第一步：找出句子主干，翻译句子主干。,男孩跑了,注意：时态和语态,Theboyranaway.,=Thatnaughtyboyranaway.,=Thatnaughtyboyranawaywithoutturningoffthewater.,=Inordertoescapebeingscolded,thenaughtyboyranawaywithoutturningoffthewater.,为了逃避挨骂，那个淘气的男孩没关水龙头就跑了。,第二步：找出修饰成分，添加修饰成分,词汇可以衡量英语水平,丰富的句式可以使文章增色生辉。,恰当的连接词，使文章有“英语味”，上下衔接自然。,如何写出精彩的高档句子突破书面表达的高分？,1.短语优先：,我们想要和平。她决定好好学习。,Welookforwardto/callonpeace.,Wewantpeace.,Shedecidedtostudyhard.,Shewasdeterminedtodevoteherselftostudying.,2.弃旧取新:,Thereisatempleontopofthemountain.Thereisacleanriverinthecity,Acleanriverwindsthroughthecity.,Ontopofthemountainstandsatemple.,1.SuddenlyIthoughtofagoodidea.2.Youcanfindmyhouseeasily.3.Whenhespoke,hefeltmoreandmoreexcited.4.Whatwecandoistostudyhard.5.Theteachersuggestedthatweshouldpayattentiontogrammar.,一、怎样使用较高级的词汇,Agoodideasuddenlyoccurredtome.,Youllhavenotroublefindingmyhouse.,Themorehespoke,themoreexcitedhefelt.,Whatwecandoistodevoteourselvestostudy.,Theteachergaveusasuggestionthatweshouldattachgreatimportancetogrammar.,1.感叹句HowhappyIwaswhenIreceivedyourletter!2.倒装句NotonlycanithelpyoutoformthegoodhabitofstudyingEnglishbutalsoitcanimproveyourwritingabilityandskills.3.省略句Whilewalkingthedog,Iwitnessedacaraccident.,4.it做形式主语或宾语Itisofgreatbenefittokeepdiarieseveryday.5.定语从句Inmysparetime,IregularlytakepartintheEnglishcorner,whereIcanexpressmyselffreely.6.名词性从句WhatisthemostimportantisthatIoftensurfonanEnglishwebsite-EnjoyReading.,6.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomuch.（使用名词性从句）7.Hedidntrealizethetruthuntilhecameback.(使用强调句型)8.Shewalkedoutofthelabandmanystudentsfollowedher.(使用过去分词)9.Whenyourealizetheimportanceofforeignlanguages,youcanlearnthemwell.(使用倒装句)10.Helayonthegroundandhiseyeswerefixedontheceiling.（使用with复合结构）,Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomuch.,二、怎样使用较丰富的句式,Itwasnotuntilhecamebackthatherealizedthetruth.,Shewalkedoutofthelab,followedbymanystudents.,Onlywhenyourealizetheimportanceofforeignlanguagescanyoulearnthemwell.,Helayonthegroundwithhiseyesfixedontheceiling.,11.Hismotherlostworkandhisfatherwasputintoprison.,三、怎样巧妙使用关联词,Hismotherlostwork,andtomakethingsworse,hisfatherwasputintoprison.,可以使文章衔接紧凑，有“英语味”的一些关联词(1)表示对比的连接词:onthecontrary(2)表示时间的连接词:inthemeanwhile，afterwards,eventually，intheend，(3)表示顺序的连接词:firstofall，tobeginwith，lastbutnottheleast(4)表示递进的连接词:whatismore，inaddition(5)表示原因的连接词:dueto，thanksto，owingto(6)用于总结的连接词:onthewhole，inaword，inbrief，(7)表达个人观点的短语:AsfarasImconcerned,inonesopinion/view,可以使文章衔接紧凑，有“英语味”的一些关联词(1)正相反(2)在此期间(3)后来(4)起初，首先(5)另外，还有(6)