Unit5AstorybyMarkTwain

Details,content8,Why？,IthinkTomistoobusytohaveabreak.Youveprobablyimaginedhowtiredthechildrenarebecauseoftoomanycourse.,How?,Sogiveyourchildrenafreeweekend.Parentsshoulddiscusswithchildrentochooseseveralcoursessothattheycanhavemoretimetostudywellandrestwell.,Post-writing：Writingwithpictures,ByPanJing,如今，很多孩子在父母的安排下没有了自己的周末，如下图的Tom，请分析图中的这种现象并谈谈你的看法，以WeekendorNot?为题写一篇不少于60个词的英语短文，向Parents杂志投稿，让父母们通过阅读你的文章能有所启发。,要求：简单描述“Tom”的周末状态，提出你的具体想法并给出建议：短文中不得出现“Tom”以外的人名或任何校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。,8分,上海中考作文评分比例（满分：20分）,Content内容,language语言,structure组织结构,WeekendorNot?Tom,ahard-workingboywhospendshisweekendsonvariousactivities.Buttheseactivitiesmakehimmad.OnSundaymornings,hegoestothemusiccentretolearnguitar.Whenthecourseisfinished,Tomistired.Butitisjustasmallpartofthisday.HeissenttotheMathclubtopractisemath.DifferentkindsofproblemsaretoohardforTomtoworkout.Atnoon,Tomhaslunchrapidlythenrushestothepaintingclub.IthinkTomistoobusytohaveabreak.Youveprobablyimaginedhowtiredyourchildrenare.Sogiveyourchildrenafreeweekend.Thatstherespectbetweenyouandyourchildren.,Score：.,15,如今，很多孩子在父母的安排下没有了自己的周末，如下图的Tom，请分析图中的这种现象并谈谈你的看法，以WeekendorNot?为题写一篇不少于60个词的英语短文，向Parents杂志投稿，让父母们通过阅读你的文章能有所启发。,要求：简单描述“Tom”的周末状态，提出你的具体想法并给出建议：短文中不得出现“Tom”以外的人名或任何校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。,description,ideas,suggestions,content8,3,3,2,1.Tom,ahard-workingboywhospendshisweekendsonvariousactivities.Buttheseactivitiesmakehimmad.2.OnSundaymorning,hegoestothemusiccentretolearnguitar.Whenthecourseisfinished,Tomistired.Butitisjustasmallpartofthisday.HeissenttotheMathclubtopracticemath.DifferentkindsofproblemsaretoohardforTomtoworkout.Atnoon,Tomhaslunchrapidlythenrushestothepaintingclub.,toomuchdescription,toofewideasandsuggestions,3.IthinkTomistoobusytohaveabreak.Youveprobablyimaginedhowtiredthechildrenare.Sogiveyourchildrenafreeweekend.Thatstherespectbetweenyouandyourchildren.,Withoutbalance,content8,Details,Why？,IthinkTomistoobusytohaveabreak.Youveprobablyimaginedhowtiredthechildrenarebecauseoftoomanycourse.,How?,Sogiveyourchildrenafreeweekend.Parentsshoulddiscusswithchildrentochooseseveralcoursessothattheycanhavemoretimetostudywellandrestwell.,IthinkTomisbusyandhehasnotimetorest.Youcanimaginethechildrenareverytired.Youshouldgiveyourchildrenafreeweekend.Thatstherespectbetweenyouandyourchildren.,Inmyopinion,Tomistoobusytohaveabreak.Youveprobablyimaginedhowtiredthechildrenare.SoIsuggestgivingyourchildrenafreeweekendsothattheycanhavemoretimetostudywellandrestwell.Moreover,weshouldshowrespecttoeachother.,Differentexpressions(表达）,structure4,WeekendorNot?Tom,ahard-workingboywhospendshisweekendsonvariousactivities.Buttheseactivitiesmakehimmad.OnSundaymornings,hegoestothemusiccentretolearnguitar.Whenthecourseisfinished,Tomistired.Butitisjustasmallpartofthisday.HeissenttotheMathclubtopractisemath.DifferentkindsofproblemsaretoohardforTomtoworkout.Atnoon,Tomhaslunchrapidlythenrushestothepaintingclub.IthinkTomistoobusytohaveabreak.Youveprobablyimaginedhowtiredyourchildrenare.Sogiveyourchildrenafreeweekend.Thatstherespectbetweenyouandyourchildren.,Finddifferentexpressions,Polish（润色）yourwriting,Checklist1,?,content8,1.Thewritingincludes:descriptionideassuggestions,?,content8,2.Withoutbalance:description:toomuchtoolittlenodetailsideas:toomuchtoofewnodetailssuggestions:toomuchtoofewnodetails,Checkyourwritingwithchecklist1,Choosetheexpressionsyouneed,Polishyourwriting