高考英语作文的润色与提高ppt课件

高考英语作文的润色与提高,以应用文为主,专题一：优秀作文的基本特征,优秀高考英语作文的六个基本特征,1、层次不乱2、句式多变3、亮点若干3、巧妙串联4、蠢错不犯6、整洁卷面,层次不乱,开头：引出话题（第一段）,主体：陈述观点或给出建议（第二段）,结尾：呼应、总结（第三段）,.,题目：假设你是李华，你的朋友Liz刚刚进入高中，在交友上面存在一些问题，请你根据如下提示，帮她度过难关。要交朋友首先要做一个朋友。要和朋友同甘共苦；患难之中的朋友才是真的朋友。友谊需要时间和投入(effort).,.,DearLiz,_Yours,LiHua,.,层次不乱,开头：引入话题,主体：陈述观点或给出建议,结尾：呼应、总结,通常只需要2-3句话。提出话题，并说明你有建议。,.,第一段：引出话题,通常只需要2-3句话。,Imsorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinmakingfriends.Asfarasimconcerned/Formypart/Inmyopinion,therearesomewaystosolvethisproblem.,.,层次不乱,开头：引入话题,主体：陈述观点或给出建议,结尾：呼应、总结,通常只需要2-3句话。提出话题，并说明你有建议。,每一个观点或建议之间要保持层次清晰，加上适当的过渡词语。,.,第二段：陈述观点或建议,Tobeginwith,youshouldbeafriend.Then,youneed.Lastly,itisalsoimportanttodo.Firstandforemost,youshouldbeafriend.Secondly,youneed.Lastbutnotleast,itisalsoimportanttodo.,.,层次不乱,开头：引入话题,主体：陈述观点或给出建议,结尾：呼应、总结,通常只需要2-3句话。,每一个观点或建议之间要保持层次清晰，加上适当的过渡词语。,总结，并提出美好愿景。,.,第三段：呼应、总结，或者表达愿景。,Allinall/Inshort/Inconclusion/Inaword,youcanimproveyourpresentsituation.Andibelieve,withyourtrying,youcanovercome.,.,DearLiz,Imsorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinmakingfriends.Asfarasimconcerned/Formypart/Inmyopinion,therearesomewaysto.Firstandforemost/Tobeginwith,youshouldbeafriend.Secondly,youneed.Lastbutnotleast,itisalsoimportanttodo.Allinall/Inshort/Inconclusion/Inaword,youcanimproveyourpresentsituation.AndIbelieve,withyourtrying,youcanovercome.Yours,LiHua,句式多变,长短变化,主、被动变化,主语变化,同义词变化,同功能句型变化,横向比较变化,亮点若干,高中词汇,高中常见短语,高级句型,各种复合句,倒装句,强调句型,虚拟语气句型,非谓语动词结构,巧妙串联,起：,firstofall,tobeginwith,aboveall.,承：,inaddition,besides.,转：,however,ontheotherhand.,合：,inmyopinion,allinall,inaword.,蠢错不犯：,初中二年级学生就应该掌握的基本语言表达能力。,1.Iverylikethebook.2.Hewasveryangrily.3.Therehavemanystudentintheclassroom.4.Thecarisyellowcolor.,整洁卷面,英文书写大方、圆润、自然；,词与词间距适当,字母大小适当,无大面积涂改,不影响交际,.,专题二肃清基础语言错误,中学生英语写作中常见的14种语言错误：,1.主谓不一致,MyfatherandIlikesgoingfishingbythelake.Largequantitiesofsoilhasbeenwashedaway.,2.时态、语态混用,Lastnight,Ihadenjoyedaparty.Thepaintingonthewalldamagedseriously.,was,3.句子成分残缺,Istoodupandsawthereaboy.Theyoungmanrunninginthestreet.,was,was,4.习惯搭配误用,Ionceheardfromtheanimallikethis.Wepassedawaythebuilding.,of,by,5.名词单、复数不分,Imademanyfriendinthesummercamp.WecangetsomeinformationsfromtheInternet.,6.动词单、复数不分,Ourteacheroftensaythatsuccesslieinhardwork.Mr.Smith,togetherwithsomestudents,arecomingtoourschool.,7.赘词现象多发,Ihopeyoucanreturnbacktoourschoolsoon.WellholdapartyonnextSunday.,8.近义词的误用,Theschoolrequeststhatallthestudentsshouldweartheschooluniform.Iquarreledwithmyteacheraboutmygrades.,9.基本词汇拼写错误,IfliedtoNewYorkdirectlyfromBeijing.Thiswillbedoneimmediatly.,10.前后人称不一致,Theboywasborninapoorfamilybutsheworkshard.Wewatchedafewmoviesandwelovedit.,11.动词原形作主语/宾语,Takeawalkafterdinnerisverygoodforyou.Atthatmoment,Ididntfeelliketakeawalk.,12.逻辑主语与主句主语不一致,Preparingdinner,thedoorbellrang.Walkinginthestreet,acarhitanoldman.,13.一个简单句出现两个谓语,Therewasnoworktodo,hewentbackhome.Ireceivedyouremail,Iwasveryexcited.,being,When,and,14.中式英语,Nextweekhaveaparty.IsorryyouIcantwithyougoBeijing.,有则改之，无则加勉；用心则易，无心则难。,专题三：第一反应与克制第一反应,他是个好人。,第一反应测试：,Heisagoodman.,generous,humorous,interesting,smart,gentle,warm-hearted,hospitable,easy-going,devoted,open-minded,modest,friendly,对不起，我不能和你一起去北京了。,ImsorrythatIcantgotoBeijingwithyou.,WouldyouacceptmyheartfeltapologythatIcantmakeittoBeijingwithyouaswehaveplanned?,IsorryyouIcantwithyougoBeijing.,存点钱是很重要的。,Thereisnodenying/Itisbeyondanydisputethatdepositingsomemoneyinthebankiscrucial.,Sometimes,whetheryouhavemoneyathandmeansthedifferenceoflifeordeathforalovedone.,专题四：打动人心的句型和打翻人胃的句型,审题：“十年后的我”-“感性的、充满想象的”切忌：套用了太多所谓的“万能句式”，破坏了这种“感性”，使之变得“太理性”、“太刚”了：（1）运用了大量的表示顺序的词句(太过理性)：Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;Myfuturelifeisasfollows.,.,审题：“十年后的我”-“感性的、充满想象的”切忌：套用了太多所谓的“万能句式”，破坏了这种“感性”，使之变得“太理性”、“太刚”了：（1）运用了大量的表示顺序的词句(太过理性)：Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;Myfuturelifeisasfollows.,（2）运用了大量的表达强烈观点句式（语气太刚）：IholdthepointofviewthatThereisnodoubtthatIstronglybelievethatIamfirmlyconvincedthat(therewillbeexcitingandwonderfulchangesin/itgivesmeastrongbody)ItgoeswithoutsayingthatWhatIwanttostressisthat(healthisveryimportanttous),（3）运用了大量的总结、转换、强调、转折等语气、句式，不够得体。Allinall,/Generallyspeaking,Asamatteroffact,Asformysparetime,AsfarasIamconcerned,Ihopebecomeadoctor.Whenitcomestomyownfamily,itoccurstomethatIwillhave2children.Itisknowntousthatfamilyisthemostimportantthinginourlife.Ontheonehand,ontheotherhand,.,注意：在结构清楚，逻辑通顺的基础上，要注意句型的多变，句子的优美。,（1）运用大量的强调句和倒装句，给人非常生涩的感觉。Inmysparetime,soactiveamIthatIwillgofishingwithmyfamily.Itisaftertenyearsthat（2）在同一篇短文里，堆砌了大量同样的句式：ItsIthatwanttobeateacher;ItisIthatamfondonchildren.ItisIthatlikemakingalotoffriends.ItisfamouscitythatIllgoto（3）中式英语，意思相差较大,或完全不达意。LoverOrganizeafamilyIhopemywillbelittlespeakEnglish.,那些能稍微充满想象的句子，就显得难能可贵：Mytwosonssurroundingmesmilelikesunshine.Onweekends,Iwilltakemyfamilytothebeachtohavearest,enjoyingthesunrises.gooutforapicnic,huggingthenatureandstrengtheningouremotioncleverandoptimistic,mydaughterisgoingtobethesortofgirlwhospreadsunshinetoothersthroughhersmile.Lovecanadddelightfulcolortolife.,.,MyChineseDreamTomakeourmotherlandbecomemoreandmorepowerful,teenagersshouldplayaroleinrealizingChinesedream.Recently,ourclasshasheldameetingaboutthis.ThereIwilldiscusshowIunderstandChinesedream.Maybeeveryonehasadream,whateveritis.Dreamislikewater,whichcanwaterourheart;dreamislikesunshine,whichcanmeltthesnow;dreamislikewind,whichcanblowawayfoginfrontofoureyes.WhenIwasachild,Iwantedtobeadoctor,whocansavethedyingpeople.AndnowIwanttomakemyfanilyliveabetterlife.Onmywaytodream,Iknowtherewillbesometroubles.Howeverhardthesituationis,whateverIdointhefuture,Iwontgiveup.Asthesayinggoes,“Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.”Wecantchangethepast,but,wecanchangeourfuture.,.,DearLiz,Imsorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinma