安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2020届高考英语 考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作外教旁批写作 (1)

安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2020届高考英语考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作（二）典例最近，你们班上将要组织一场以“To be selfconfident”为题的主题班会。你是英语课代表，请根据以下内容写一篇不少于120词的文章作为发言稿。开头已为你写好(不计入总词数)。提示：1.简述自信的重要性。2假设你以前缺乏信心(1)谁给了你鼓励？ (2) 什么事让你改变了一切？3可适当加入自己的评论。Girls and boys，Life is but a hard and bitter journey.【写作策略】1仔细审题：(1)体裁：发言稿。(2)时态：一般现在时与一般过去时。(3)人称：第一人称。2确定结构：(1)自信重要性。(2)自身经历。(3)自己的评论。3筛选词汇：(lack of ；selfconfident; success; encourage ；try my best to；等。)4句型搜索：( Id like to.；I feel strongly that.等。)5组句成篇：(When.; Later; Since then.等。)【范文赏析】Girls and boys，Life is but ahardandbitterjourney.Therefore，I would like to say，“No matter what happens，be selfconfident.”When I was 14，Isuffered from a lack of confidence.I didnt dare to answer teachers questions in class and was afraid of speaking in public.Later，something happened and changed my life.It was a speech contest held in our school.My mother persuaded me to participate because she had great confidence in me.IchoseatopicmostappropriatetomeSelfconfidence and Success.I tried my best to recite my whole speech and practiced it more than 100 times before a mirror.With my mothers great love and encouragement，I won the first prize in the contest.Since then，I have felt strongly that selfconfidence is the first step towards success.So，friends，be confident and you will have a bright future.【名师点评】是非常重要的句式，平实地道地表达笔者思想。准确真实地再现了缺乏自信时笔者自身的感受。母亲的鼓励促成了自己的超越。自己的努力与勤奋是获得成功的关键因素之一。总体评价：语言运用得体，过渡自然；情感真挚，情景真实，有较强的感染力。【写作指导】Elegance(优雅)(原文)Soso(普通)(1)Therefore，I would like to say，“No matter what happens，be selfconfident.”So I think we should be selfconfident when anything happens.(2)When I was 14，I suffered from a lack of confidence.When I was 14，I was not confident at all and I experienced much disappointment.(3)My mother persuaded me to participate because she had great confidence in me.My mother asked me to take part in it and she had great confidence in me.(4)With my mothers great love and encouragement，I won the first prize in the contest！Because I worked hard and my mother loved and encouraged me ，I won the first prize in the contest！(5)So，friends，be confident and you will have a bright future.So，friends，be confident and have a bright future.【临摹翻译】1. 范文佳句：Therefore，I would like to say，“No matter what happens，be selfconfident.”临摹翻译：在我看来，无论发生什么事，我们都必须同样努力工作。In my opinion，no matter what happens，we should work hard the same.2范文佳句：When I was 14，I suffered from a lack of confidence.临摹翻译：现在的学生苦于大量的作业和睡眠时间不足。Many_students_nowadays_suffer_from_too_much_homework_and_lack_of_enough_sleep_time.3范文佳句：My mother persuaded me to participate because she had great confidence in me.临摹翻译：老师最终说服他报名参加下周举行的英语演讲比赛。The_teacher_persuaded_him_to_enter_for_the_English_speech_contest_to_be_held_next_month_at_last.4范文佳句：With my mothers great love and encouragement, I won the first prize in the contest!临摹翻译：在老师的帮助下，我的写作能力自去年以来得以很大的提高。With_the_help_of_my_teacher, my_writing_ability_has_been_greatly_improved_since_last_year.5范文佳句：Since then, I have felt strongly that selfconfidence is the first step towards success.临摹翻译：自从他来到这里，他每天都花一个小时练习英语口语。Since_he_came_here，he_has_spent_an_hour_practicin