高三公开课读后续写how-to-polish-your-writingPPT课件

,1,.,Withagianttearinhereye,thelittlegirllookedupathim.Sheforcedasmile,saying“Thankyou”andwalkedtowardsthedoor.Pappythoughtofhisdaughterandsaidtothegirlloudly,“Howmuchhaveyougottospend?”Hearingthis,thelittlegirlcountedmoneyinherpurse-twodollars.Afterthinkingforafewseconds,Pappysaid,“TodayisChristmasDayandthisisyourluckyday.Thebellcoststwodollars.”Thechildwentout,holdingthespecialbellinherhand.,Gradethestory,2,.,LaterthateveningwhenPappywasclosinguptheshop,heheardafamiliarringing.Hecouldntbelievehisears.Thegirlstoodinthedoorway,ringingthebellhappily.ThenPappygotclosetoherandasked,“Haveyouchangedyourmind,Miss?”“No.MyMommasaysthepresentisforyou.”saidthechild.BeforePappyhadtimetosayanotherword,ayoungwomanwalkedin.ShesaidtoPappy,“Hello,Dad.”,3,.,Howtopolishyourstory?,4,.,润色文章的技巧,properconjunctions,abundantsentencepatterns,advancedwordsandphrases,5,.,Howtopolishyourwords?,“小”心思丰满人物内心Innerthoughtstoportraythefigures“小”词汇增加表达效果Detailedverbstomakeexpressionspowerful“小”细节丰富故事情节Properadvtoenrichyourstory,6,.,Tip1：“小”心思丰满人物内心,悲伤,快乐,2016年10月高考作文23分,7,.,Tip1：“小”心思丰满人物内心,震惊,2017年6月高考作文23分,8,.,Oneday,theBrother,whohadbecomeaMonk,forcedhimselfonthesameroadwherehefoundaccommodationyearsago.Hedecidedtovisitthefamily.Buttheshabbycottagewasnowheretobefound.Heonlyfoundasplendidhouse.Hethoughtthefamilymightdie.Suddenly,amancameout.Themonkrecognizedhim.Itwasthefatherofthefamily.Soheasked,“Haveyoulivedhere?”,Tip1：“小”心思丰满人物内心,9,.,Oneday,theBrother,whohadbecomeaMonk,forcedhimselfonthesameroadwherehefoundaccommodationyearsago.Drivenbyasenseofregret,hedecidedtovisitthefamily.Tohisgreatsurprise,theshabbycottagewasnowheretobefound.Heonlyfoundasplendidhouse.Uponthinkingthefamilymighthavestarvedtodeath,hesighedwithguilt.Suddenly,amancameout.Themonkrecognizedhim.Itwasthefatherofthefamily.Soheasked,“Haveyoulivedhere?”,Tip1：“小”心思丰满人物内心,10,.,Letscompare！,Hedecidedtovisitthefamily.Buttheshabbycottagewasnowheretobefound.Heonlyfoundasplendidhouse.Hethoughtthefamilymightdie.,Drivenbyasenseofregret,hedecidedtovisitthefamily.Tohisgreatsurprise,theshabbycottagewasnowheretobefound.Heonlyfoundasplendidhouse.Uponthinkingthefamilymighthavestarvedtodeath,hesighedwithguilt.,Inconclusion，thedescriptionofinnerthoughtscanmakeourstorymorelogical,reasonable,creativeandpowerful.,11,.,Howtodescribeyourinnerfeelings?,1.Feelinghappy/sad/angry/guilty/depressed,2.Drivenbycuriosity/asenseofregret/sympathy.或者是Deeplytouched/movedby3.,fullofregret/anger/fear/gratitude/sadness4.Toonesdisappointment/surprise/delight/relief/astonishment5.insurprise/relief/anger或者是withsatisfaction/excitement(等于一个副词）6.具体的动作描写standfrozen,jumpwithjoy,tremblewithanger,withtearsfillingoneseyes,withoneseyeswideopen等等,12,.,Letshaveatry!,1.Pappysaidtothegirl,“Howmuchhaveyougottospend?”Drivenbyasenseofsympathy,Pappysaidtothegirl,“Howmuchhaveyougottospend?”2.Thechildwalkedout,holdingthespecialbellinherhands.Thechildwentoutwithgreatjoy,holdingthespecialbellinherhands.,13,.,3.ThenPappygotclosetoherandasked,“Haveyouchangedyourmind,Miss?”Feelingpuzzled,Pappygotclosetoherandasked,“Haveyouchangedyourmind,Miss?”4.ShesaidtoPappy,“Hello,Dad.”Withtearsfillinghereyes,shesaidtoPappycheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”,14,.,Withagianttearinhereye,thelittlegirllookedupathim.Sheforcedasmile,saying“Thankyou”andwalkedtowardsthedoor.Pappythoughtofhisdaughter.Drivenbyasenseofsympathy,Pappysaidtothegirlloudly,“Howmuchhaveyougottospend?”Hearingthis,thelittlegirlcountedmoneyinherpurse-twodollars.Afterthinkingforafewseconds,Pappysaid,“TodayisChristmasDayandthisisyourluckyday.Thebellcoststwodollars.”Thechildwentoutwithgreatjoy,holdingthespecialbellinherhand.,15,.,LaterthateveningwhenPappywasclosinguptheshop,heheardafamiliarringing.Hecouldntbelievehisears.Thegirlstoodinthedoorway,ringingthebellhappily.Feelingpuzzled,Pappygotclosetoherandasked,“Haveyouchangedyourmind,Miss?”“No.MyMommasaysthepresentisforyou.”saidthechild.BeforePappyhadtimetosayanotherword,ayoungwomanwalkedin.Tearsfillinghereyes,shesaidtoPappycheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”,16,.,Tip2：“小”词汇增加表达效果,Brainstorming:,tell,say,whisper,murmur,speak,talk,cryout,shout,respond,reply,explain,scream,roar,announce,declare,yell,callout,17,.,Thegovernment_astateofemergency.“Getoutofmyhouse!”Theofficer_.He_somethinginhissleep.Seeingthefilmstar,thefans_withexcitement.Askedwhyhewaslate,Alex_thathiscarhadbrokendown.,Tip2：“小”词汇增加表达效果,declared,roared,murmured,screamed,explained,18,.,1.Thegirlforcedasmile,saying“Thankyou.”andturnedtowardsthedoor.2.Drivenbyasenseofsympathy,Pappysaidtothegirlloudly,“Howmuchhaveyougottospend,Missy?”,Letshaveatry!,murmuring,calledout,19,.,3.Afterthinkingforafewseconds,Pappysaid,“TodayisChristmasDayandthisisyourluckyDay.”4.“No.MyMommasaysthepresentisforyou.”saidthechild.5.Tearsfillinghereyes,shesaidcheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”,announced,explained,criedout,20,.,Whatyouaresupposedtobearinmind:,只要是记叙文，难以逃脱的动作描写肯定有，动嘴，动手与动脚。除了熟知各种说的表达方式外，请记住各种看，和各种走Eg:see,watch,observe,peep,lookaround,lookback,stareat,glareat,glanceat,catchsightof,losesightof,etcEg:walk,run,wander,dash,strollaround,pacebackandforth,stepinto,makeoneswayto,danceout,etc,21,.,1.Sheforcedasmile,murmuring“Thankyou”andwalkedtowardsthedoor.2Thechildwentoutwithgreatjoy,holdingthespecialbellinherhand.3.BeforePappyhadtimetosayanotherword,ayoungwomanwalkedin.,Tip2：“小”词汇增加表达效果,makeherwayto,dancedout,steppedin,22,.,Withagianttearinhereye,thelittlegirllookedupathim.Sheforcedasmile,murmuring“Thankyou”andmadeherwaytothedoor.Pappythoughtofhisdaughter.Drivenbyasenseofsympathy,Pappycalledout,“Howmuchhaveyougottospend?”Hearingthis,thelittlegirlcountedmoneyinherpurse-twodollars.Afterthinkingforafewseconds,Pappyannounced,“TodayisChristmasDayandthisisyourluckyday.Thebellcoststwodollars.”Thechilddancedoutwithgreatjoy,holdingthespecialbellinherhand.,23,.,LaterthateveningwhenPappywasclosinguptheshop,heheardafamiliarringing.Hecouldntbelievehisears.Thegirlstoodinthedoorway,ringingthebellhappily.Feelingpuzzled,Pappygotclosetoherandasked,“Haveyouchangedyourmind,Miss?”“No.MyMommasaysthepresentisforyou.”explainedthechild.BeforePappyhadtimetosayanotherword,ayoungwomansteppedin.Tearsfillinghereyes,shecriedoutcheerfully,“Hello,Dad.”,24,.,Topic：ashockingknifeattackFromBook5Unit5FirstAidAnneSlade,motherofthree,hadbeenstabbed_withaknife.Shewaslyinginherfrontgardenbleedingvery_.Herhandshad_beencutoff.,Tip3：“小”细节丰富故事情节,repeatedly,heavily,almost,25,.,Withagianttearinhereye,thelittlegirllookedupathim.Sheforcedasmile,murmuring“Thankyou”andmadeherwaytothedoor._,Pappythoughtofhisdaughter.D