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Understanding Unity(声明匹配):Essay 1Teenage Prankslooking back at some of the things I did as a teenager makes me break out in a sweat。the purpose of each adventure was fun，But occasionally things got out of hand .in my search for good times，I was invlved in three notable pranks，ranging from fairly harmless to fairly serious。The first prank proved that good，clear fun does not have to be dull。as a high school student，I was credited with making the world s largest dessert。with several friends，I spent an entire year collecting boxes of jell-o(吉卢果冻)。entering our school s indoor pool one night，We turned the water temperature up as high as it would go and poured in box after box of the straw berrerthe next morning，School offices arrived to find the pool filled with thirten thousand gallons of the quivering rubbery stuff。No one was hurt by the prank，But we did suffer through three days of a massive clean up。Not all my pranks were harmless，and one invoited risking my life。as soon as I got my drivers license，I wanted to join the f libers club 。membership in this club was limited to those who could make their cars fly a distance of as least ten feet。the资格测试站点was an old quarry(采石场)field where friends and I had built a ramp made of dirt .I drove my battered Ford pinto up this Ramp as fast as it would go。the pinto flexw ten feet but one of the tires exploded when I landed .the car rolled on its side，and I luckiy escaped with only a brised arm。Risking my life was bad enough，but there was another prank where other people could have been hurt，too.on this occasion，I accidentallytwo of my friends and I were sitting on a hill，sharing a few beers。it was a warm summer night，And there was absolutly nothing to do。the idea came like a thunder clap。web collected a supply of large plastic trash bags，Emergency highway flares，And a half tank of helium left overfilling the bags with helium，We tied them closed with wire and suspended sever al burning flares below each bag。our UFOs leaped into the air like an army of invading marians stein)。rising and darting in the blackness，they conv inced even us。our fun turned into horror，though，As we watched the balloons begin to drop onto the wooded valley of expeensive houses below。soon，a brush fire started and quickly sobered，we hurried off to call the fire department anonymously。Every so often，I think back on the things that I did as a teenager。I chuckled at the innoment pranks and feel lucky that I didn t harm my self or others with the not-so-innoment ones . those years were filledtoday Im older，wiserand maybe just a little more boring。Essay 2:Problems of my Adolescencein the unreal world of television situation comedies，teenagers are carefree，smart，funny，wise cracking，secure kids . in finfsas a teen、I suffered.every day、I battled the terrible physical、family、and social troubles of adolescence。For one thing，I had to deal with a demoralizing physical problem-acne . some days，I would wake up in the morning with a red bump the size ofsince I worried constantly about my appearance anyway，Acne outbreaks could turn me into a crying，scraming maniac。plastering on a layer of orange-colored clearail，which didnt fool anybody，I would slink into school，hoping that the boy I had a crushwithin the last few years、however、Treatment s for acne have improved . now、skins doctor s press cribe special drugs that clear up pimplearan acne attack could shatter whatever small amount of self-esteem I had managed to build up。In addition to fighting acne，I felt compelled to fight my family。as a teenager，I need to be independent . at that time，The most important thing in life was to be close to My friends and to try out new，moremy little brother，for instance，turned into my enemy。we are close now，though.in fact，Eddie recently painted my new apartment for me。Eddie used to barge into my room，listen to my phone conversions，And read my secret letters。I would threaton to tie him up and leave him in a garbage dump pster。he would scram，my mother would yell，And all hell would breakloose . my parents，too，were enemies . they would not let me stay out latesso I tried to get revenge on them by being miserable，sulkey，and sarcastic at home。Worst of all，I had to face the social troubles of being a teenager。things that were supposed to be fun，like dates and dances，Were actually horrible。on the few occasions when I had a real date，I agonized over everyhing - my hair，myweight，my pimples。after a date，I would come home，raid the kitchen，And drown my insecuries in a sea of junk food。dances were also streessful events。my friends and I would sneak a couple of beers just to get up the Nerve to walk into the school gym .now I realize that teenage drinking is dangerous。I read recently that the number one killer of teenagers is drunnk d rivbing . at dances，I never relaxed .it was too important to look exactly right，to act really cool，and to pretend I was having fun。Im glad Im