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1、精选优质文档-倾情为你奉上读后续写范文欣赏第二节 读后续写（满分25分） 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake

2、, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest

3、and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. “Help!” No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane wa

4、s so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Qui

5、ckly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefu

6、lly along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came

7、back again. But no more helicopters came and it was dark.   _It was daybreak when Jane woke up.  _ 续写批改要求： 语言-功能与目的是否完成了交际任务，即意义的表达。作者表达的与读者理解的是否一致。写的东西是否有意义, 正确和完整性。融洽度：人物，地点，事件等与前文相符合。晚上Jane做了什么？从 Jane的角

8、度去写。这样衔接才合理。 “文气”读起来通畅、舒服。关键词对续写起框定和引导作用： 人物Jane / Tom 环境 the forest 器物 helicopter / yellow blouse 动作 walked / climbed 内容如何丰富：1）同义词 、 反义词替换，主动被动替换 ； with的复合结构，Ving作状语等。 2）故事情节上下功夫。注意： 不要刻意地使用所谓的高频词汇与语法结构。 写作是为了意义的妥切传达，不是简单的堆砌华丽辞藻。 15分为及格分 批卷时：先确定档次，再定给分。以语言为主，情节次之。 全抄的零分，拼凑的有意义的，给12分。 少于130个字的扣2分。考生

9、作文 1 (22分，原卷摘录 ) But no helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane was sad. She sat by the stream, resting her aching feet. If I hadnt quarreled with Tom, I wouldnt have to be here. Jane thought regretfully, with tears welling up in her eyes. She wanted to say sorry to Tom for losing her t

10、emper. However, the only thing she could do was lie by the stream and wait for help. It was getting late and Jane fell asleep. It was daybreak when Jane woke up.She stood up to find something to eat. She walked and walked until she came to an open area where water and berries were available. Suddenl

11、y, she heard a helicopter. She took off her yellow blouse and began shaking it widely, hoping someone could see her. She shouted out “Tom”. The helicopter slowed down and landed on the ground. With the door open, Tom ran out. Seeing Jane, he was so excited and couldnt contain his joy. He hugged Jane

12、 tightly. “Tom, I wont lose my temper again. I want to stay with you forever.” Jane said in tears. 考生作文 2 (16分，原卷摘录) But no helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane was too tired to walk. Then she sat on a stone, drinking and eating a few berries. Although it was dark, she could also see

13、 the stream. She shouted, “ Tom, Im waiting for you here, I love you!” And she believed that her family will come soon when she wake up tomorrow. Eventually, she slept quietly and smiled. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Fortunately, it seemed that there was a helicopter coming at a distance. She

14、stood up and walked towards the sound. She followed the sound and shouted; “Help me! Im here!”. While climbing to an open area, she watched a helicopter, she waved her yellow blouse and shouted, “Hey, please help me, stop! stop!. To her great joy, the helicopter stopped. A few minutes later, she hea

15、rd that there are many people walking to her, Eventually, Tom ran to her quickly and hugged her “Jane, Im coming!” They smiled with the tear running out. 考生作文 3 (8分，原卷摘录) But no helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane started shouting, But she was tired very much. She didnt have power t

16、o shout right away. She started climbing the small mountain after resting. She heard a helicopter again. She responded. And then, Jane heard something to her. Right away Tom was running to her. Jane started crying, But she was too toyed to speak. Tom took her wife to home. It was daybreak when Jane

17、woke up. Jane cried, said. “ I am sorry, Tom. I miss you. I want to tell you how much I love you. I am grateful, Thanks for you can fing me. You never give up me. I shouldnt walk away alone.” Finally, they kissed 第二节：读后续写（满分 25 分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。It was an Art lesson. Rachel sat at the

18、desk watching her classmates busy preparing the water jars and paints. She understood why Mrs. Weston asked her to sit down and got Lisa to fetch everything for her. It was always a disaster when Rachel tried to do Art! Rachel sighed and reached out to dip her brush in some black paint andoh, no! Sh

19、e knocked over the jar. The water spread across the desk and drowned the paper. Lisa called Mrs. Weston to see what Rachel had done. Rachel went red in the face. She jumped to her feet to get a cloth. Her chair fell over backwards. She turned round and her paintbrush caught Lisa across the face, giv

20、ing her a black moustache. Lisa was so surprised that she fell back against a wire bookstand. It came crashing down and the books went all over the floor. How clumsy （笨拙的）! Rachel thought as she went home on the bus. The bus stopped outside her house. She jumped up and her elbow (肘部) knocked a woman

21、s hat right over her eyes. Oh, no! Rachel said sorry, got off and ran indoors. Mum wasnt in the kitchen but lay in bed as she caught an awful cold. Rachel offered to make a cup of tea but Mum would rather wait for Dad. Rachel sighed. She understood Mum was afraid she would spill (溅出) it.“But would y

22、ou go to Mrs. Willow for some cold cure?” asked Mum. Rachel turned to the door at once. “But Rachel, Mrs. Willows house is full of beautiful things, so if she asks you to come in, youd better say no.” Rachel sighed and ran out.Mrs. Willow was an old lady with white hair and sharp blue eyes living in

23、 an old house. She opened the door and invited her in. Rachel said why she came and that she preferred to wait outside remembering her mothers warning. Mrs. Willow insisted Rachel come inside. Rachel took a deep breath and stepped in. She looked round Mrs. Willows sitting room and saw at once why Mu

24、m had been worried. 注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:There were beautiful things everywherepretty china figures(瓷雕) and delicate vases. _Paragraph 2:With a smile Mrs. Willow comforted her saying it had been broken before._Pos

25、sible Version One:There were beautiful things everywherepretty china figures and delicate vases. Rachel stood very still, afraid of knocking something over. Mrs. Willow handed Rachel a small brown bottle. Rachel couldnt wait to get away, feeling any minute there would be a disaster. She thanked her

26、and turned to the door when something brushed against her leg. Rachel was so surprised that she jumped backwards. It was a cat! But her elbow hit a vase and it fell to the floor, broken. How awkward! ( 72 words ) With a smile Mrs. Willow comforted her saying it had been broken before. Rachel sighed

27、and stared at her. “I did, when I was young. You couldnt have been as clumsy as I was,” Mrs. Willow said, her sharp blue eyes shining. “Keep telling yourself you are a swan and it will work.” Rachel doubtfully said that several times. After they cleared up the vase, they drank tea from china cups an

28、d ate cakes off delicate plates and Rachel didnt break another thing. It was a kind of magic. Rachel smiled.(78 words )( With a smile Mrs. Willow comforted her saying it had been broken before. Rachel sighed and stared at her. “No worry at all. Itll be perfect after being mended,” Mrs. Willow said,

29、her sharp blue eyes shining. “Nobody grows up without being clumsy.” Rachel let out a long sigh and for the first time she felt good about her clumsy self. She believed what Mrs. Willow said must have the same magic as her special cold cure. To her amazement, she returned home with the bottle of medicine safe and sound. ) ( 78 words )Possible Version Two:There were beautiful things everywherepretty china figures and delicate