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1、 一一. . 考试趋势考试趋势 二二. . 试题分析试题分析 三三. . 考题预测考题预测 一一. . 考试趋势考试趋势 从从2004年湖南卷自主命题以年湖南卷自主命题以来，湖南卷英语书面表达的趋势来，湖南卷英语书面表达的趋势有有2点：点： 1. 1. 文章的开放性越来越强文章的开放性越来越强 2. 2. 记叙事件的考查越来越频繁记叙事件的考查越来越频繁 1. 1. 文章的开放性越来越强文章的开放性越来越强 2012年要求构思一件物品失年要求构思一件物品失而复得的经历；而复得的经历； 2013年是根据年是根据4个词：个词：match, winner, loser, result来记叙一来记叙一

2、件事情，开放性更强，要求考生件事情，开放性更强，要求考生组织语言还原题目。因此，考生组织语言还原题目。因此，考生除了从除了从语言语言上加强外，上加强外，思维思维上的上的锻炼与加强必不可少。锻炼与加强必不可少。 2. 2. 记叙事件的考查越来越频繁记叙事件的考查越来越频繁 2013年，年，2012，2011，2010，2009，2007年都是记叙事件年都是记叙事件-湖南高考命题的一个重要趋势湖南高考命题的一个重要趋势。 二二. . 试题分析试题分析 这次作文形式较新颖，要求这次作文形式较新颖，要求用用4个单词描述自己或他人的一个单词描述自己或他人的一次经历（命题老师用心良苦，不次经历（命题老师用

3、心良苦，不走寻常路）。但是，实质上还是走寻常路）。但是，实质上还是回归到记叙一件事情上，因此，回归到记叙一件事情上，因此，难度适中。难度适中。 1. 1. 内容清晰，一目了然内容清晰，一目了然 将文章内容分为将文章内容分为3段：段： 第第1段：写明文章的背景，如本篇文段：写明文章的背景，如本篇文章是写自己或他人的一次经历，那章是写自己或他人的一次经历，那么第一句话可以总写我有一次难忘么第一句话可以总写我有一次难忘的经历的经历; 第第2段：描述具体的事件，根据记叙段：描述具体的事件，根据记叙文起文起-承承-转转-合，我们可以将合，我们可以将4个词个词match, winner, loser, r

4、esult分别放分别放于对应的位置来构思。于对应的位置来构思。 起：起：match-我参加一场比赛；我参加一场比赛； 承承：winner-想要成为赢家，想要成为赢家，我们做了哪些工作；我们做了哪些工作； 转转：loser-我们却失败了；我们却失败了； 合合：result-结果没有那么重要，结果没有那么重要，是是“”更重要。更重要。 2. 2. 语言出彩，为博眼球语言出彩，为博眼球 用一百多个词描述一件事情，用一百多个词描述一件事情，不需要描写得如何曲折离奇、跌不需要描写得如何曲折离奇、跌宕起伏、细致入微。高考作文更宕起伏、细致入微。高考作文更多的是看考生能否用英语将一件多的是看考生能否用英语将

5、一件事情描述清楚，并能运用到不同事情描述清楚，并能运用到不同的句式，借此体现考生驾驭语言的句式，借此体现考生驾驭语言的能力。如一开始，可用如下句的能力。如一开始，可用如下句型：型： Last month, I, together with my teammates, had a basketball match against another basketball team, hoping to win the match and earning great honor for our team. 发生转折的时候可用如下句型：发生转折的时候可用如下句型： Not until the match

6、 was over did we realize that we became the loser at all. 写感想的时候可用如下句型写感想的时候可用如下句型: Only by focusing on correcting our mistakes can we better ourselves in the future. 认真审题认真审题 注意连贯注意连贯 追求优美追求优美 讲究书写讲究书写 有的考生从头到尾都是简单有的考生从头到尾都是简单句句, 在人称上、在每句的词数在人称上、在每句的词数上都基本相同。尽管内容要点上都基本相同。尽管内容要点都很全都很全, 也无语法、词汇错误也无语法

7、、词汇错误, 但得分档次达不到五档但得分档次达不到五档, 只能只能得得17分左右。应该注意变换分左右。应该注意变换句子结构。句子结构。如何算是一篇好文章？覆盖了应有的要点应用了较多的语法结构和词汇有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。要点全词汇,句型 （高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）连接词Part one 例句：例句：让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的小孩十天后让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的小孩十天后回来了，疲惫不堪却很健康。回来了，疲惫不堪却很健康。 第一步：找出句子主干第一步：找出句子主干 小孩小孩回来了回来了 第二步：确定主干的相关词汇第二步：确定主干的相关词汇 让

8、我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的小孩小孩十天后十天后回来了回来了，疲惫不堪却很健康。，疲惫不堪却很健康。child, come back 第三步：翻译句子主干第三步：翻译句子主干 让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的小孩小孩十天后十天后回来了回来了，疲惫不堪却很健康。，疲惫不堪却很健康。The child came back. 考虑：考虑： 时态时态 语态语态The child came back. 让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的小孩小孩十天后十天后回来了回来了，疲惫不堪却很健康。，疲惫不堪却很健康。 第四步：添加

9、修饰成分第四步：添加修饰成分The missing child came back ten days later.To our relief, the missing child came back ten days later. 让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的让我们感到欣慰的是，那个迷路的小孩小孩十天后十天后回来了回来了，疲惫不堪却很健康。，疲惫不堪却很健康。 第四步：添加修饰成分第四步：添加修饰成分To our relief, the missing child came back ten days later, _.tired but healthy. 第二步：确定主干的相关词汇第二步：

10、确定主干的相关词汇第三步：翻译句子主干第三步：翻译句子主干第四步：添加修饰成分第四步：添加修饰成分 第一步：找出句子主干第一步：找出句子主干 Ex.1：（：（2012湖南高考书面表达） 第二天第二天我找回了我找回了那本朋友送我的书那本朋友送我的书 。The next day, I got back the book given by my friend.I got back the book.第二天第二天我找回了我找回了那本朋友送我的那本朋友送我的书书 。 Ex.2：你能用几种方式翻译？你能用几种方式翻译？ 北京是中国的首都，有北京是中国的首都，有3000多年的悠久历史。多年的悠久历史。Bei

11、jing is the capital city of China with a long history of over 3,000 years.Beijing, which is the capital city of China, has a long history of over 3,000 years.Beijing, the capital city of China, has a long history of over 3,000 years.Beijing is the capital city of China and has a long history of over

12、 3,000 years.Part twoWe all _the same chance.I cannot bear it.We want peace.1. 标新立异标新立异 :2. 短语优先：短语优先：I cannot _it.We are _ _ peace. 较高级词汇较高级词汇We all have the same chance.own / possessput up withlooking forwardto3.避免重复：避免重复：I like reading while my brother likes watching foootball matches.I like read

13、ing while my brother _ watching foootball matches.enjoys用较高级词汇进行句型转换用较高级词汇进行句型转换1. As a result the plan was a failure. The plan _ _ to be a failure.turned out2. Some students complained that they had a lot of / much homework to do every day.Some students complained that they had _homework to do ever

14、y day.endless3. The school library is open to all the students from Monday to Friday.Our school _ _ _ _ twentysix classrooms.is made up of4. In our school, there are twenty-six classrooms.All the students _ _ _ the school library from Monday to Friday.have access to6. Luckily, the weather was good,

15、so our journey was comfortable.5. You can find my house easily.Youll _ _ _ finding my house. _ _ the good weather, our journey was comfortable.have no troubleThanks toPart three _is that the little girl knows so many things.使用丰富的语法结构：使用丰富的语法结构：1. As soon as I noticed it, I returned to the library.（介

16、词（介词+v-ing形式）形式）. _, I returned to the library.On noticing itWhat surprises him2. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句）（使用名词性从句） _ _ he spoke, _ _exited he felt.3. The teacher came in and there was a book in his hand. (用用with结构结构)The teacher came in , _.with a book inhis ha

17、nd4. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited.（使用句型结构）（使用句型结构）The more the more5. We didnt finish planting all the trees until 3 oclock.1) 强调句型强调句型 2) 倒装句型倒装句型It was not until 3 oclock that we finished planting all the trees. Not until 3 oclock did we finish planting all the trees. 6. We were ve

18、ry tired, but we benefited from this activity.(使用使用as引导让步状语从句引导让步状语从句) 7. He is the most considerate person, and he knows exactly what I need. (使用定语从句使用定语从句) He is the most considerate person _. _, we benefited from this activity.Tired as we wereknows exactly what I needwho8. I was delighted when I

19、found my watch. (感叹句感叹句)_ when I found my watch.How delighted I wasRewrite the sentences 1. They arrived at the school. They felt the happy atmosphere. 方法一方法一. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档When they arrived at the school, they felt the happy atmosphere. Arriving at the school, they felt the happy atm

20、osphere. 2. I will be given another chance. I will succeed.Given another chance, I will succeed.If I am given another chance, I will succeed.3. He wants to improve his English. He studies hard. In order to improve his English, he studies hard.方法一方法一. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档Complete the sentence

21、s with non-predicate (非谓语动词非谓语动词)1.听到这个消息听到这个消息,他们变的很激动他们变的很激动. _the news, they got excited.2. 尽管被告知许多遍尽管被告知许多遍,他仍然重复这个他仍然重复这个错错. _many times, he still repeated the mistake. Hearing Having been told3.除非被邀请发言除非被邀请发言,你应该在会议你应该在会议上保持沉默上保持沉默. Unless _to speak, you should keep silent at the meeting.invit

22、ed方法二方法二. 巧用多种结构增强句子的表现力巧用多种结构增强句子的表现力1. He didnt realize his foolishness until he returned home. Not until It was thatComplete the sentences he returned home did he realize his foolishness.not until he returned home he realized .2.We can save the earth by changing the way we live. Only by changing

23、the way we live can we save the earth.3.He is clever but he does not work hard. as/though4. The clock tower stands on the other side of the street. On the other side of the streetClever he is, he does not work hard.stands the clock tower5. When he arrives, please give me an e-mail.（使用介词）（使用介词）.6. To

24、 his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词（使用名词性从句）性从句）7.I wont believe what he says. （使用状语从句）（使用状语从句）On his arriving, please give me an e-mail.What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.No matter what he says, I wont believe.8. My father sat in the sofa. He was s

25、moking and reading a newspaper. (with结构结构)9. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited.(越越)My father was smoking in the My father was smoking in the sofa with a newspaper in his sofa with a newspaper in his handhandThe more he spoke, the more The more he spoke, the more excited he felt.excited he

26、 felt.10.The Chinese artists were to perform here that night.The news cheered everyone of us.(同位语从句同位语从句)The news that the Chinese artists were to perform here that night cheered everyone. 方法三方法三.使用高级词汇、词组以增加文采使用高级词汇、词组以增加文采 1.Dont worry about your expensesfor university education, and we will try t

27、o help you. and we will make the greatesteffort /do our best / try every meansto help you.2.At that time the taxi driver had to ask the tourist for help.3.As a result the plan was a failure. .At that time the taxi driver had no choice but to turn to the tourist.The plan turned out to be a failure.I

28、came up with a good idea.4.I had a good idea.A good idea occurred to / struck / came to me. （2013湖南高考书面表达）湖南高考书面表达）Once there is a winner, there will be a loser- such is the result of almost every match. In my life, there is an experience making me lost in thought. Last month, I, together with my te

29、ammates, had a basketball match against another basketball team, _(希望赢得比赛的胜利、为我们队赢得希望赢得比赛的胜利、为我们队赢得荣誉。荣誉。v-ing形式形式 ). Having put all our effforts to practice playing basketball whenever we had time, we were strongly desired to be the winner. However, hoping to win the match and earn great honor for

30、our team _. (直到比赛结束我们才意识到我直到比赛结束我们才意识到我们失败了。们失败了。倒装句倒装句). All of us felt disappointed, believing that honor never belonged to us. _ _(教教练的话使我们受到了极大的教育。练的话使我们受到了极大的教育。强调句强调句). He claimed that instead of being focused on the result, we should focus more on the process and correct our mistake, _ _(这才会帮助我们以后得到更大的提升。这才会帮助我们以后得到更大的提升。定语从句定语从句). not until the match was over did we realize that we became the loserIt was our coachs words that educated us a lotwhich would help improve us more in the future From this experience, I am convinced that a result is not