雅思小作文流程图讲解+满文例文上课讲义

1、雅思小作文流程图讲解+满文例文【高分范文及深度点评高分范文及深度点评】nThe diagram shows the stages in the process of making chocolate.n【所有的小作文第一句话都要用一般现在时。流程图必备三个词：process整个过程；stage阶段；step步骤】n【流程图特点之一流程图特点之一：介绍过程要使用一般现在时】nChocolate comes from the cacao tree, which is grown in parts of South America, Africa and Indonesia. The tree pr

2、oduces large red pods which contain white cocoa beans.n【开头不能一上来就直接介绍cacao tree，而是通过主题词chocolate引出，否则显得太唐突】n【流程图特点之二流程图特点之二：大量使用定语从句，将有关联的两句话连接。】n【流程图特点之三流程图特点之三：大量使用被动语态】nFirstly，when the pods are ripe, they are harvested, the beans are removed and they are fermented for several days in large wooden

3、 boxes. During the fermenting process, the beans turn brown.n【流程图特点之四流程图特点之四：使用一些表示顺序的连接词】n【三个句子的并列：“句子A, 句子B and 句子C”。n【流程图特点之五流程图特点之五：要适当地添加个别图中没有交代但能从图片中直接读出来的一些内容，否则可能达不到字数要求。但是一定要把握尺度，千万不要加上自己的主观观点，否则会扣分】nNext, the brown beans are spread in the sun to dry. They are then put in large sacks and t

4、ransported by train or lorry. After this, the beans are taken to a chocolate factory where they are roasted in an oven at temperatures of between 250 and 350 degree Celsius.nAfter being roasted, the beans are crushed and the outer shell is removed. This part is not needed for making chocolate. Final

5、ly, the inner part of the bean is pressed and liquid chocolate is produced.n【流程图特点之六流程图特点之六：一般不需要写总结】句型积累n开始阶段nFirst of all/ To begin with/ At the first initial stage/ During the beginning phase/ +S1,S2nThe process starts from +NnN is the first step in .n次阶段nbefore, until, after, oncennext, second,

6、followingnThe next stage isnThe next step in the process is 表示一段时间nIt takes ten days for each egg to become.nThis stage lasts for up to six weeks until.nAfter a period of.Writing task 2nYou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.nThe diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactur

7、ed for the building industry.nSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevantn.nWrite at least 150 words.Brick manufacturing* Clay: type of sticky earth that is used for making bricks, pots, etc. 【满分范文满分范文】nThe process by which bricks are m

8、anufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which was just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger.nThen the lumps of clay are placed on a metal grid in order to break up the big chunks of c

9、lay into much smaller areas, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion further segregates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mixture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut into brick-shaped pieces by means of a wire cutter.nThose fresh bricks a

10、re then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then transferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature oven. First they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200 -1300 . This process is

11、followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber.nOnce the bricks have cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.n(215 words)【考官评语考官评语】nBand 9nThis response fully satisfies the re

12、quirements of the task. All key features of each stage of the process are appropriately and accurately presented. An excellent overview is given at the beginning of the response and this skilfully incorporates part of the rubric, changing the grammatical function, to give a brief summary of the whol

13、e process. The message is very easy to read, with seamless cohesion that attracts no attention. Paragraphing, linking and referencing are all skilfully managed. The language used is very fluent and sophisticated. A wide range of vocabulary and structures are used with full flexibility and accuracy.

14、Only rare minor slips can be found and these do not detract from the high rating.雅思流程图的重点词汇解析：雅思流程图的重点词汇解析： 表述时间：表述时间：nin 10 daysnduring the period of 10 daysnThe process lasts for up to 10 daysnafter 10 daysn10 days passed until something happened.表示然后：表示然后：nthen,nnext, nin the next state, nfollowi

15、ng that, nafter that,nthe next step in the stage is .表示过程：表示过程：nprocess, nprocedure, nformation, nDevelopment表示步骤：表示步骤：nstep, nstage, nphase时间阶段：时间阶段：nafter a period of months/days/minutes, nduring顺序连词顺序连词：nfirst, first of all, in the first stage, initially, to begin withnsecond, then, next, alsonafter that, at the same time, in the meantime, meanwhilenprior to, untilnthe first stage