概要写作(Nancy月考作文讲评)

高考新题型之概要写作Summary《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明》概要写作：提供一篇350词以内的短文，要求考生基于该短文写出一篇60词左右的内容概要。（满分25分）本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。评分时，先根据所写概要的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要去来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。词数少于40的和多于80的，从总分中减去2分。评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑...拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。1概要写作评分解读评分原则本题总分为25分，分5个档次给分第五档

(21-25)理解准确,涵盖全部要点。

能准确使用相应的语法结构和词汇。

有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑。

完全使用自己的言语。﹏﹏﹏﹏﹏﹏﹏completecorrectcoherentconcise:nocopying4C原则completecorrectHowtopolishyoursummarytomeetthe4Crequirementsofcriteriacompletecorrectcoherentconcise

WritingStep3:Makeasummaryandpolishit

学生习作常见错误1:

Writingstep3:Meetthe4crequirements

ofcriteria(tobecomplete)学生习作常见错误1:

Incomplete要点遗落Thefirst:thephenomenon---thepopularityofcellphonesThelast

:properuseWritingstep3:Meetthe4crequirements

ofcriteria(tobecoherent)学生习作常见错误2:

Cellphonesareoneofthegreatestinventionsofmoderntechnology.Butjustastherearealwaystwosidesofacoin,theyhavemanyadvantagesanddisadvantages.Theirmainadvantageistomakeourlifeeasierandmoreconvenient.Ontheotherhand,theyhaveabadeffectonourlife.Tobehonest,whethertheyareausefulinstrumentoradangerousweaponisdecidedbyushuman.Incoherence过渡不自然Transitionalwords:学生习作常见错误3:

Painandpleasurearearesultofmoderntechnology.(FromZH,Class6)Theadvancedtechnologyhascausedadangerthatwekeepignoring.GetcheaperandcheaperNotconcise引用原文词句Nocopying不得直接引用原文的句子Writingstep3:Meetthe4crequirements

ofcriteria(tobeconcise)学生习作常见错误3:

Technologyhasadvantagesanddisadvantages,suchascellphones.(FromWQ,Class5)Weshouldmakefulluseofcellphones---Notconcise内容理解有误2)Tobeexact概括内容要准确Tobebrief概括内容需精要学生习作常见错误3:

Suchas---ToomanyexamplesNotconcise使用太多细节，语言不够概括3)Tobebrief概括内容需精要Waystomakethesentencesconcise(4skills)

Arecellphonesausefulinstrumentoradangerousweapon?Theanswerliesinourhands.同义替换法Arecellphonesahelpfultooloraharmfuldevice?Itdependsonourselves.正话反说或反话正说法It’suptoourselvestousecellphonesinaproperway.句式变化法▲Willcellphonesbringconvenienceordangertous?

▲Willcellphonesbenefitorharmus?▲

Itdependsonourselveswhethercellphoneswillbenefitorharmus.

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Whethercellphonesareusefulordangerousdependsonourselves.词性转换法

学生习作常见错误4:

Wedon’tallowmobilephonestoinsteadofourlife.(FromWT,Class6)UsecellphonesmodestlyIncorrect语法词汇不准确1)VarietiesofgrammaticalmistakesWritingstep3:Meetthe4crequirements

ofcriteria(tobeconcise)学生习作常见错误4:

Itisharmfulforchildrenandleadtoworsethings,suchasroadaccidents.Soitneedsourselvestoletthecellphoneausefultechnology.

(FromZLT,Class4)Incorrect汉式表达2)Chinglish

中国式不地道英语Howtopolishyoursummarytomeetthe4CrequirementsofcriteriaCompleteCorrectCoherentConcise1.nocopying2.tobeexact

3.tobebrief

Writingstep4:Revise4“C”

WritingStep5:ClearlycopyyourdrafttothepaperCellphonesareoneofthegreatestinventionsofmoderntechnology.Butjustastherearealwaystwosidesofacoin,theyhavemanyadvantagesanddisadvantages.Theirmainadvantageistomakeourlifeeasierandmoreconvenient.Ontheotherhand,theyhaveabadeffectonourlife