读后续写：遇险类 绝处逢生 讲义-高三英语写作专项

【文本再现】Asanenthusiasticclimber,IwouldmakeanannualtriptothepeakofMountoftheHolyCross.Thisyear,mynewpartnerMerleayoungandathleticdog,climbedwithme.Ihadn’tthoughttwiceabouttakingMerle;actually,Iexpectedhimtobeatmetothepeak.Beforesettingoff,Ifilledmybackpackwithbottledwater,dryfood,and-acanofbeef.

Havingputthecollar(颈圈)-withhisnameandmyphonenumberonMerle,

Istartedmybigadventurewithhim.Severalhourslater,

whilewewererushingtowardsthepeak,

MerlestillseemedenergeticandIalsofeltenergizedbytheclearmountainair.Whenreachingthepeak,IheardashortbarkandthoughtMerlewouldbesecondsbehindme.Hewasincrediblyclosetomeandalwaysfollowedme.Itookaphotooftheview,calledouttoMerle,andheadedbackdownthepath.However,Merlewasnowheretobeseen.“Merle!Merle!”Icalled.“Whereareyou?”Ifeltpanicrisingwithinme,astherewasnosignofhim.ThenIsawsomethingmovinginthebasinbelow.ItwasMerle!Afternearlyanhour,ImadeittothebasinandsawMerlestandingonalargerock.Afeelingofreliefwashedoverme.Soon,Iwascloseenoughtoseethathislegswerebadlyinjured.WhenIwaswithinafewfeetofhim,hedivedintoacrack(缝隙)attheedgeofrocks.Iimmediatelystruggledtoclearsnowandrocksbutcouldonlystickmyheadinthecrack.Seeingnothinginthedarkness,IjustheardthejingleofMerle’scollar.Iyelled.Noresponse.ThenIwenttothesceneofthefallandsawthepathMerlehadtaken.He’dslidabout700feetdowntheuppersnowfield,fallenoffa40-footcliff(峭壁),andthenrolleddownanother100-footclifftothelowersnowfield.“Merlemaybeontheedgeofdeath,”Isaidtomyself.Paragraph1:IreturnedtothecrackandcalledMerleagain.Paragraph2:Threeweekslater,IreceivedacallclaimingtohavefoundMerle.【文本解析】本文是一篇记叙文，讲述了作者和他的狗Merle一起爬山，Merle不幸掉进岩石的缝隙中,作者施救未果,三周后却意外找回

Merle的故事。第1段交代了故事发生的背景，即作者期望和新伙伴Merle一起爬圣十字山;第2-5段为故事的发展阶段:作者发现

Merle

不见后努力找寻，最后发现他掉进了岩石的缝隙中且受伤严重;第6段是故事的高潮部分，主要描述了作者施救Merle的过程。文章运用了大量的动作描写、心理描写和环境描写来塑造人物形象和描述Merle遇到的险境。各种细节描写：动作描写（filledmybackpackwith,putthecollar……;rushingtowardsthepeak;headedback;divedinto;struggledtoclearsnowandrocks;stickmyheadinthecrack;yelled;slid;fallenoff;rolleddown)心理描写：（feelenergetic;feltpanicrisinginsideme;afeelingofreliefrushedoverme)环境描写：（clearmountain;basinbelow;alargerock;700feetdowntheuppersnowfield;a40-footcliff;another100-footcliff;thelowersnowfield)【思路分析】根据前文最后一段及续写第一段提示语可知，作者查明Merle遇险的经过后，又回到了缝隙处，即Merle现在待的地方。那接下来会发生什么呢?Merle的情况如何?作者的心理活动是怎样的?他会采取什么办法救Merle

呢?续写第二段提示语提到三周后，作者接到声称找到了

Merle

的电话。由此可推断，作者那天未能成功救出Merle，所以在续写第一段时需涵盖此内容以保证故事情节的连贯性及逻辑性。续写第二段时应展开合理想象描述作者接到电话后的一系列行为和心理活动。此外,前文提到

Merle

很亲近作者，所以续写时可涉及Merle获救后和作者重逢时的亲昵表现。【下水作文】IreturnedtothecrackandcalledMerleagain.

Stillnoresponse.IopenedthecanofbeefandleftitatthemouthofthecracktoattractMerle,butinvain.Ispentanotherhourcrouchingoutsideuntilthejingleofthecollarstopped.Atthatmoment,IthoughtMerlemighthavedied,soIblamedmyselfforthat.IfonlyIhadn’ttakenMerlewithme!Afterawhilethesunwas

setting,andIhadtoleavethecrackandgohome.Threeweekslater,Ireceivedacallclaimingtohave

foundMerle.

ThoughIcouldn’tbelievemyears,I

immediatelyrushedintomycartopickhimup.WhenI

heardthefamiliarbark,Iknewmy

“lost”friendwasback.Uponseeinghim,Igentlytouchedhisskinnybody.Hewaggedhistailandlickedmyface.Overthe