2023届初三上英语单元考试优秀作文选三

2023届初三上英语单元考试优秀作文选三201-202雾霾（haze）是一种大气污染。中国的雾霾越来越严重了。请以“TheHazeinChina”为题，写一篇90词左右的短文，客观地介绍中国雾霾的现状，雾霾的危害以及如何减少雾霾。初三2班陈钰铭TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollution.ThehazeprobleminChinaisbecomingmoreandmoreserious,especiallyinBeijing.Ithascausedmanyproblems.Thehazeismainlycausedbyfactories.Itdoesgreatharmtopeople.Peoplewholiveinthehazealwayshavebreathingproblems.Thehazemakestheairdirtyandpeoplehardlyseeclearlyontheroad.Therefore,moretrafficaccidentshappenbecauseofthehaze.Sincethehazeisharmfultoboththeenvironmentandhumanbeings,wemustdoeverythingwecantoreduceit.Herearesomesuggestions:First,weshouldridebikesmoreofteninsteadofdrivingcars.Thecarsproducetoomuchharmfulgaswhenworking.Second,peopleoughtn’ttoburnwaste,becauseitalsoharmstheairquality.Third,weshouldplantmoretreestocleantheair.Inshort,Ihopethehazeproblemcanbesolvedassoonaspossible.教师点评：1、行文流畅，结构合理清晰。2、擅于使用刚学的新词组来给文章润色。初三年3班林滟雯TheHazeinChinaIfyougotoBeijing,ShanghaiorotherbigcitiesinChinanow,allthatyoucanseewillbegraycloudyskyandsmogeverywhere.Butit’snotsmog;it’sthehaze,akindofharmfulairpollution.ThisterriblephenomenonisbecomingmoreandmoreseriousinChina.Thehazecancausemanykindsofbreathingproblems,evenlungdisease.It’sgreatofharmtopeople’shealth.Sohowcanwedefeatthiskillerofhealth?Firstandforemost,everyonehadbetternotdrivecarsoften,andrideabikeinstead.Second,thefactoriesshouldreducethedischargeofgas.Lastbutnotleast,thegovernmentoughttoplantmoretrees.Ifwecanfollowtherulesabove,ourairwillbeclearerandourworldwillbebetter.教师点评：本文语言流畅，句型多样，能紧扣题目要求，写出自己的观点。比如在阐述观点时，使用了Firstandforemost（首要的是）…,Second,…Lastbutnotleast（最后但同样重要的是）…体现了作者灵活的句式运用能力。初三年4班陈铭尔TheHazeinChina①It’sreportedthatthehazeinChinahasbecomemoreandmoreserious.Theairinmanyplacesisbadbecauseofthehaze.It’simportantforhumanbeingstohavefreshair.However,manypeopleinChinadon’thave.What’sworse,thehazecancausecancer.Howterrible!②So,weshoulddosomethingtochangethesituation.First,wecanplantmoretrees,becausetreescancleantheair.Second,wemuststopusingmanychemicals.InChina,somefactoriesusetoomanychemicalsandtheyproducemuchterriblegas.Third,ourgovernmentcanmakelawsagainstairpollution.Anyonewhobreaksthelawswillbepunished.③Asthesayinggoes,“Notacleanenvironment,thelivingconditionsfavorablemeaningless.”Fromnowon,Let’sdoeverythingwecantoreducethehaze!教师点评：本文非常清晰的阐述了雾霾的现状、危害及解决措施。好的开头（①句）+自然连贯的过度词句（however;what’sworse,句②）+

引用名言的结尾（句③译为：没有一个清洁的环境，再优裕的生活条件也无意义。）=好文章。初三5班王哲轶TheHazeinChinaInrecentyears,thehazehasappearedinmanypartsofChina,includingBeijing.Inacitywhereairpollutionisserious,whenthewindblowsstrongly,thehazemayforminashortwhile.Thehazedoesgreatharmtopeople’shealth.Itcancausepeopletohaveabreathingproblem,evencancer.What’sworse,thetrafficcanbemuchmoredangerousbecausethedriverscannotseeclearly.Asaresult,theremaybemoreaccidentsinsuchbadweather.Tochangethesituation,plantingmoretreesisagoodway.Andpeoplehadbettergooutonfootinsteadofdrivingacar.Ontheotherhand,thegovernmenthasadutytostopfactoriesproducingtoomuchterriblegas.Inshort,solvingtheproblemofhazeneedseveryone’sefforts.教师点评：本文行文流畅，层次分明。文中恰如其分地使用一些好词好句，使得文章读起来脍炙人口。初三6班刘怡昕TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollution,andit’smoreandmoreseriousinChinaespeciallyinBeijing.Itnotonlycausespeopletohavebreathingproblemsbutalsocausestrafficaccidents.Soithasbadeffectsonourhealthaswellasourdailylife.Thegovernmenthasdonesomethingtoreducehaze,butit’snotenough.Moreshouldbedonebyus.First,wecanencourageourfriendstousecarslessandusebicyclesmore.Second,wecanplanttreestomaketheairfresher.Third,wecanwritetothelocalgovernmenttoaskthemtostopfactoriesproducingharmfulgas.Inaword,weshoulddoourbesttoreducehaze.Althoughonepersoncandoabit,manypersonscandoalot.教师点评：本文语句通顺，中心明确，表达正确。连词运用得恰到好处。结尾简洁有力，画龙点睛！初三7班庄煜权TheHazeinChinaAsweknow,thehazeinChinahasappearedformanyyears.Ithasbecomeoneofthemostseriousproblemsinmanybigcities.Thehazeisakindofairpollution.Itisharmfultopeople’shealthandmakesusbeinabadmood.Wecanhardlybreatheasusualbecauseofit.What’sworse,itmaycausemoreaccidentsbecausedriverscan’tseeclearlyontheroad.Whatshouldwedotoreducethehaze?First,Ithinkweshouldcometounderstandtheimportanceofprotectingtheenvironment.Second,thegovernmentshouldtakemeasurestostopthechemicalfactoriesfromproducingtheterriblegas.Third,weshouldpassmorelawsagainstthehaze.Inshort,weshoulddoeverythingwecantoreducethehazeandprotectourenvironment.Let’sbegreenerpeople.教师点评：1、本文条理清晰，内容紧扣主题，结构合理。2、正确地使用了一些已学词组（划线部分），做到学以致用。初三8班叶宁忻TheHazeinChinaThehazeisakindofairpollution.Nowadays,thehazeinChinaisgettingmoreandmoreserious,especiallyinsomedevelopedcitiessuchasBeijing,TianjinandShanghai.Thehazedoesgreatharmtopeoplebecauseitmaycausepeopletocough,getasorethroatandevenmaycauselungcancer.Ontheotherhand,therearemoreaccidentsbecausepeoplecan’tseeclearlywhenwalkingordrivingontheroad.So,whatshouldwedotoreducethehaze?First,weshouldplantmoretreesandstoppeoplefromcuttingthemdown.Second,weshouldridebikesorwalkinsteadofdrivingcarsbecausecarswillproduceterriblegaswhentheyareworking.Third,everyoneshouldcometounderstandthedangerofthehazeandtheimportanceofreducingit.Althoughwehavepassedlawsagainsttheairpollution,westillhavealongwaytogo.Let’stryourbesttomaketheaircleanerandfresher.教师点评：1.文章结构合理清晰，贴合题意。2.划线句子优美，词组使用恰当合理，句子间条理清晰。初三9班吴昕怡TheHazeinChinaWiththedevelopmentofscience,moreandmoreenvironmentalproblemsareappearing.Suchasairpollution.Ithascausedthehaze.Andthehazeismoreandmoreserious.Especiallyinbigcities.Hazeisharmfultohumans’lives.Ifsomeonewalksonthestreetinthiskindofweather,hecanhardlyseeanything.Asaresult,therewillbemoreaccidentsthanbefore.Ofcourse,hazewouldalsomakepeoplefeeluncomfortableandunpleasant.Andhowcanwereducethehaze?Herearesomesuggestions.First,weshouldhavealowcarbonlife.Itmeansthatweshouldoftenwalkorridebikestoworkorgotoschoolinsteadofdrivingcars.Second,peopleshouldn’tburngas,oilandcoaltoomuch,Besides,scientistscandiscoverbetterenergyforhumans.Finally,weshouldplantmoretreestoreducecarbondioxide,Ifeveryonecandoeverythingwecantoprotecttheenvironment,theearthwillbecomenicerandnicer.教师点评：1.关于如何做的这一段条理清晰，内容贴合主题。2.多处用到本学期学的内容，学以致用。初三10班谢舒阳TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollutionandit’sveryseriousinsomebigcitiesinChina,includingBeijing,Shanghai.Asweknow,hazeisbadforhumans’health.Itcannotonlycausepeopletohaveapainintheirthroatoreyesbutevencausecancer.Besides,badairwillmakepeoplefeeluncomfortableandunpleasant.Whatshouldwedotosolvethisproblem?First,weshouldreducetheterriblegasmadebyfactoriesandcars.Second,weshouldn’tcutdowntoomanytreesandweshouldplantmoretreesinstead.Treescanmaketheairfresher.Third,everyoneshouldtryhisorherbesttoprotecttheenvironment.Weshouldwalktoschoolifyouhaveenoughtime.Hazeisharmfultopeople’shealth.Wemustdoeverythingwecantoreduceit.Let’sbecomegreenerpeopleandourworldwillbecomebetterandbetter.教师点评：1.文章内容紧扣主题，结构合理，中间的过渡段使得文章条理更清晰。2.划线部分可借鉴。初三11班林雅铭TheHazeinChinaAsweallknow,thehazeisakindofairpollutionanditisharmfultoourhealth.However,thehazehasbecomemoreandmoreseriousinChina.Inrecentyears,manybigcitiesinChinaespeciallyBeijinghavefoughtagainstthehaze.Manypeoplelivinginthesecitieshavebreathingproblems.Becauseofthehaze,wemayhavenochancetoseetheclearandbluesky.Anditreallydoesgreatharmtopeople’shealth.Itmightcausepeopletohavecancer.Sowemustdosomethingusefultoimprovethesituation.Wecangotoschoolbybusinsteadoftakingcars.Andthegovernmentshouldstopthechemicalfactoriesfromproducingterriblegas.Let’stryourbesttomaketheenvironmentbetterandbetter!教师点评：1.文章结构合理，条理清晰，紧扣主题。2.能恰当运用所学词组或句型，做到学以致用。初三12班吴少颖TheHazeinChinaThehazeisakindofairpollution.ThehazeinChinaisbecomingworseandworse.InmanypartsofChina,theskyisgrayandtheairisbad.Withtheincreaseinpopulationandthedevelopmentofindustry,thehazehasbecomeaseriousproblem.Itdoesgreatharmtopeople’shealth.Wemaycoughandbecomesick.It’shardforustobreathe.Thehazecancausebreathingproblemsandevencancer.Wemustdosomethingtochangethesituation.Forexample,weshouldplantmoretreesanddoourbesttoprotecttheenvironment.It’simportantforthegovernmenttostopthefactoriesfromproducingterriblegas.Let’sdoeverythingwecantoreducethehaze!教师点评：1.能根据现实情况点出雾霾的危害性，并倡议大家重视环境保护。2.能恰当运用所学词组或句型，做到学以致用。初三（14）郑昊TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollution.It’sawfulandunhealthyforus.Thehazeinchinaismoreandmoreterriblenow.ThehazehasaffectedmanyareasofChina,especiallyinsomedevelopedcitiessuchasBeijing,Tianjingandsoon.“Thehazeisakiller.”somescientistssaid.Asamatteroffact,thehazehascausedmanyproblems.First,thehazeisharmfultoourhearth,itcanhurtourlungsalot.Second,thehazecanalsocausesometrafficaccidentsbecausethedriverscan’tseeanythingclearly.Third,manypeoplecomefromothercountriesdon’twanttovisitChinaagainbecauseoftheterriblehaze.Ifwecansolvethisproblem,ourcountrymustbemorepopulararoundtheworld.Then,howtosolveit?Quiteafewpeoplehavedifferentanswers.Ourgovernmentcandisencouragefactoriespollutingtheenvironment.Peopleshoulddrivecarsless.Wecanplantmoretrees.AlltheChineseshouldpayattentiontoprotectingourcountryfromthehaze.Stopthehazefromhurtingtheenvironment.Let’sdoeverythingwecan!IbelievethatChinawillbemoreandmorebeautiful.教师点评：本文结构合理，紧扣主题。行文很有条理，过渡衔接得好，表述清楚到位。要是能在多运用些有亮点的句子会更加完美。初三15班黄诗洋TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollution.ThehazeismoreandmoreseriousinChina,especiallyinnorthernareas.Thehazedoesgreatharmtopeople,animalsandplants.Anditcancausebreathingproblemsandsoreeyes.ManypeopleinnorthernareasofChinacan’tgooutbecauseofthehaze.Thehazeisveryharmfultous.Soweshouldtryoutbesttoreduceit.Ihavesomesuggestions.First,weshouldgotoschoolorworkbybike.It’sgoodfortheenvironment.Second,weshouldn’tburntoomuchoil,coalorwood.Finally,weshouldstopthefactoriesfromproducingterriblegas.Ithinkifwedoourbesttoreducethehaze,theenvironmentwillbebetter.教师点评：1、本文条理清晰，内容紧扣主题，结构合理。2、正确地使用了一些已学词组（划线部分），做到学以致用。初三17班陈千红TheHazeinChinaAsweknow,akindofairpollutioncalledhazeisbecomingworseandworseinChina.ItoftenappearsinmanybigcitiessuchasBeijing.Becauseofhaze,peoplealwaysbreathehardlyandcan’tseeanythingoutsideclearly.It’sbadforpeople’shealthandit’sdangerousforustowalkordriveonthestreet.Worstofall,hazecanevencausecancerandsomepeoplemaylosetheirlives.Itreallyisaseriousproblemthatwemustdealwith.First,weshouldreducetheterriblegasproducedbycarsandfactories.Second,wehadbetterridebikesorwalkinsteadofdriving.Last,weshouldplantmoretrees.Now,ourgovernmentistakingmanymeasurestosolvethisproblem.AndIbelieveourenvironmentwillbecomebetter.教师点评：本文结构清晰，脉络分明，分段合理，语言流畅自然。2.能够正确合适的使用所学的短语和定语从句，学以致用。初三18班陈琳炟TheHazeinChinaThehazeisakindofairpollution.ThehazeinChin