读后续写：The+spirit+of+neighborliness+讲义-2023届高三英语写作专项

读后续写材料IWhenIwasyoung,IlivedinasmallvillageinMelaka.Thespiritofneighborlinesswasverystrongthen.Thevillagehadavarietyoftradestoservetheneedsofthevillagers.Therewasabarber,tailor,coffeeshopowner,grocer,andsoon,Allofuswerequitepoorbutwegotby.However,onefamilywhichcouldbeconsideredaslivingamarginalexistencewastheLimfamilylivinginthebicycleshopoppositeourdwelling.2Mr.Lim,thebicyclemechanic,hadalargebroodofchildren-twelvetobeexact.MymotherwasaKind-heartedsoul.Often,shewouldremarkthathischildrenweredressedinraggedclothesandlookedmalnourished（营养不良的）.Myfamilywasrelativelybetteroffinthevillage.MyparentswouldbringoverwhateverfoodwecouldsparetotheLimfamily.31rememberoneparticularyearwhentimeswereveryhard,Evenmyfamilyhadtomakedowithtwomealsaday.WestoppedthepracticeofgivingfoodtoMr,Lim,Oneday,Inoticedmymotherlookingtroubled.ShehadlearnedthattheLimfamilyhadnotbeeneatingforthepasttwodays.Shedecidedtosacrificeaportionofourmealstothefamilydespitetheprotests（流ix）frommybrothersthatweretoohungry.Fortunatelytheleanspell（因难时期）didnotlastlong,andthechildreninourfamilyresumedourthreemealsadayagain.4Astimewenton,thenumberofcustomersatLim'sshophadincreasedrapidly.BusinessathisshoptookofflikearocketasJapanesebikeswereveryusefulandpopularfortransport.Theyweremuchbetteroffthanbefore.51twasatthistimethatmyfather'shealthwasworsening.Wewereconfusedbythemysteriousillnesshewassufferingfrom,Becauseoflackofattentiontohisprovisionshop（食品店）,thebusinessbecameworse.Myfatherthensoldourfamilycartopayoffthemountingbills.MybrothersandIhadtostopschoolingbecausewecouldnotaffordthefees.文本分析OIReadforvocabularythespiritofneighborliness睦邻友好的精神liveamarginalexistence过着边缘生活liveinthebicycleshopoppositeourdwellingdwelling住宅，住所thebicyclemechanic自行车修理工alargebroodofchildren一大窝的孩子weredressedinraggedclothes穿着破烂的衣服wasrelativelybetteroff相对生活宽裕makedowithtwomealsaday勉强凑合着一天两顿饭sacrificeaportionofourmeals把我们饭食的一份给送人了resumeourthreemealsaday重新开始一天三餐payoffthemountingbills还清堆积如山的债务wecouldnotaffordthefees我们担负不起那些费用02Readforappreciation2.3-4MyparentswouldbringoverwhateverfoodwecouldsparetotheLimfamily.whatever引导宾语从句3.1Irememberoneparticularyearwhentimeswereveryhard.when引导定语从句5.1Itwasatthistimethatmyfather'shealthwasworsening.运用强调句型续写第一段首句：Theysaythatonegooddeeddeservesanother.人们说，善有善报。03Readforplots写作•分析ANALYSISOFWRITINGTECHNIQUES01运用逆推法推导丰富故事情节在构思两段话的情节时，借助逆推法，通过续写文本第二段首句推导续写文本第一段末句的可能情节，以达成两段话的相互衔接。01续写第一段情节推导情节三：根据第二段首句，可推知第一段末句应该写Lim先生为我家提供帮助。情节一：根据第一段首句和情节三，可推知Lim先生看到我们兄弟几人不上学很好奇（伴随Lim先生好奇的独立主格结构）。情节二：我和Lim先生展开对话（伴随我情绪爆发的描写）02续写第二段情节推导情节一：我们兄弟几人重新返校上课；Lim先生还送给妈妈一辆日式自行车便于她医院和店里两头跑。情节二：我很好奇Lim先生为什么对我们家那么好，并从他人口中得知真相（伴随充满疑问的独立主格结构）。情节三（结局）：升华主题——邻里友好。03注意事项为了在情节合理的基础上使文本词汇和句法结构运用的更加高级，需有意识的加入人物的情感描写和动作描写，这样才能把高级句式结构充分发挥出来。02利用原文本已知信息增强续写文本的逻辑性要充分挖掘原文本中的已知信息，对续写文本进行逻辑衔接。01续写第一段原文本第一段末句提及我们兄弟几人因家境衰败辍学,续写文本情节一可以呼应Lim先生看到我们不去上学的情节。02续写第二段原文本第四段提及Lim先生店里的日式自行车是非常便利的交通工具，情节一可以设置送给妈妈一辆日式自行车的情节；原文本第五段提及爸爸由于mysteriousillness住院，情节二可借此导入我好奇爸爸为什么突然生病一一原文本第三段提及我们兄弟几人抱怨一天只有两顿饭，爸爸却把一部分饭食送给了Lim先生一家人一一这使得爸爸把自己那顿饭省出来给了我们几个兄弟而自己营养不良(malnourished),续写情节与原文本多处可以呼应衔接。原创参考范文01Paragraph1Paragraph1:Theysaythatonegooddeeddeservesanother.OnemorningMr.LimsawmybrothersandIenteringourhousewithalunchboxinmyhand,curiositysuddenlyfloodinghim."Heyboys!Whydon'tyougotoschool?askedMr.Lim.Hearingthosewords,Icouldnolongercontainmyself,tearspouringdownmyeyesFather'sillandourfamilyisheavilyindebt.Wehadtodropoutofschool!”Ipouredoutallmysorrow.WhenMr.Limgotthewholestory,hecomfortedus,promisingtohelpmyfamilypullthroughthehardtime.(gowords)02Paragraph2Paragraph2:WiththehelpofMr.Lim,thesituationinmyfamilytookaturnforthebetter.MybrothersandIwereabletogobacktoschooljeavingmymotheralonetotakecareofmyfather,whichMr.Linhadforeseen.HegaveusaJapanesebike,makingitconvenientforourbusymothertoshuttlebetweenthehospitalandthestore.Doubtsswirlinginmyhead,IwonderedwhyMr.Linwassokindtous,untilonedayIgotthewordthatDadfsmysteriousillnesswascausedbymalnourishment—hehadbeensparinghisshareoffoodforus.Myparentshavealwaystaughtmetobeneighborly-whoknowsthatasmallactofkindnessmaynotmakeabigdifferenceinthefuture?(115words)原创参考范文解析ANALYSIS解析利用各种高级表达提升语言的丰富性:l.OnemorningMr.LimsawmybrothersandIenteringourhousewithalunchboxinmyhand,curiositysuddenlyfloodinghim.curiositysuddenlyfloodinghim为独立主格结构2.1couldnolongercontainmyself,tearspouringdownmyeyes.containoneself抑制不住自己（的感情）tearspouringdownmyeyes为独立主格结构pouredoutallmysorrow.倾诉悲伤（的经历）.WhenMr.Limgotthewholestorygetthewholestory知道了事情的来龙去脉.MybrothersandIwereabletogobacktoschool,leavingmymotheralonetotakecareofmyfatherleaving结