2023高考英语专题复习与训练-训练01 读后续写示例与写作训练1

读后续写示例与写作训练1【写作示例】【原文呈现】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Amancamehomefromworklateagain,tiredand

irritated

,tofindhis5-yearoldsonwaitingforhimatthedoor."Daddy,mayIaskyouaquestion?""Yeah,sure,whatisit?"repliedtheman."Daddy,howmuchmoneydoyoumakeanhour?""That'snoneofyourbusiness.Whatmakesyouasksuchathing?"themansaidangrily."Ijustwanttoknow.Pleasetellme,howmuchdoyoumakeanhour?"pleadedthelittleboy."Ifyoumustknow,Imake$20.00anhour.""Oh,"thelittleboyreplied,headbowed.Lookingup,hesaid,"Daddy,mayIborrow$10.00please?"Thefatherwas

furious

."IftheonlyreasonyouwantedtoknowhowmuchmoneyImakeisjustsoyoucanborrowsometobuyasillytoyorsomeothernonsense,thenyoumarchyourselfstraighttoyourroomandgotobed.Thinkaboutwhyyou'rebeingsoselfish.Iworklong,hardhourseverydayanddon'thavetimeforsuchchildishgames."Thelittleboyquietlywenttohisroomandshutthedoor.Themansatdownandstartedtogetevenmadderaboutthelittleboy'squestioning.Howdareheasksuchquestionsonlytogetsomemoney.Afteranhourorso,themanhadcalmeddown,andstartedtothinkhemayhavebeenalittlehardonhisson.Maybetherewassomethinghereallyneededtobuywiththat$10.00andhereallydidn'taskformoneyveryoften.Themanwenttothedoorofthelittleboy'sroomandopenedthedoor."Areyouasleepson?"heasked."Nodaddy,I'mawake,"repliedtheboy."I'vebeenthinking,maybeIwastoohardonyouearlier,"saidtheman."It'sbeenalongdayandItookmy

outonyou.Here'sthat$10.00youaskedfor."Thelittleboysatstraightup,

beaming."Oh,thankyoudaddy"heyelled.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph1:Then,thelittleboyreachingunderhispillow…_______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Afterhearingwhattheboysaid,themanfeltsosorryforwhathehadsaidtohisson._______________________________________________________________________________【思维路径】[核心内容]文本主要内容为：一位父亲工作很晚回到家，他5岁的儿子问他工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元。父亲对此很生气并朝儿子发了火。事后，父亲仔细思考后觉得儿子可能有所困难才开的口，所以最后还是借了钱。[写作思路](1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为父亲theman和他5岁的儿子thelittleboy。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。父亲工作很晚回到家；儿子问父亲工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元；父亲为此生了气并叫儿子回自己房间反思；父亲考虑后觉得儿子事出有因便最后借了这10美元给儿子。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是儿子用他借的10美元和自己已有的零用钱买了父亲一个小时的时间，此件事情让父亲反思自己以前花太少的时间陪儿子了。续写第一段：根据第二段开头提示的句子，小男孩接下来的行为让父亲感到惭愧。所以可能是小男孩拿着借的钱给父亲买了份礼物，也可能是小男孩拿着向父亲借的钱和自己已有的钱买了父亲一个小时的时间。续写第二段：父亲为自己说过的话感到抱歉，可以写父亲之后用实际行动来弥补儿子，也可以写父亲开始反思以前太把重心放在工作上，而忽略了应多花点时间陪陪儿子。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：”Whatwouldtheboydoafterhegotfather’s$10.00?Wouldhejustbuyasillytoyorsomeothernonsenseforhimselfjustlikewhathisfathersaid?Wouldhedosomethingspecialtohisfather?”等。第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：”Howwouldthefatherfeelafterhearingwhattheboysaid?Whatwouldthefatherdo?Whatchangeswouldthefathermake?”等。[参考范文]Then,thelittleboyreachingunderhispillow,hepulledoutsomemore

up

bills.Theman,seeingthattheboyalreadyhadmoney,startedtogetangryagain.Hegrumbledwhytheboywantedmoremoneyevenifhealreadyhadsome.Thelittleboyslowlycountedouthismoney,thenlookedupattheman."BecauseIdidn'thaveenough,butnowIdo,"thelittleboyreplied,"Daddy,Ihave$20.00now.CanIbuyanhourofyourtime?"Afterhearingwhattheboysaid,themanfeltsosorryforwhathehadsaidtohisson.Tearsfilledhiseyesandhegaveadeephugtotheson.Inthepastfewyears,hewasalwaysengagedinworkandneverspentasingleweekendwithhisson.This$20.00isjustashort

toallofusworkingsohardforourliving.Don’tlettimeslipthroughourfingerswithouthavingspentsomequalitytimewiththosewhoreallymattertous.(除给定词外，169words)[范文解析]范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。根据第二段开头提示，小男孩一定做了让父亲很感动的举动。因此小男孩借到钱以后，加上自己已有的零用钱向父亲买了他一个小时的时间。父亲听到儿子的话后，十分感动和抱歉，对自己以前的行为有较大的感触，并进行了反思。最后两句从全文的角度进行概括，突出故事的主题。[提炼归纳]1.合理拓展情节读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中，通过两段开头给的提示进行合理的推断，并通过事先设问的方式构思文章。两段分别以小男孩和父亲为主人公进行不同角度的叙述，符合故事发展的合理结局。2.有效运用连接手段在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectives)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了after来说明事件的先后顺序，inthepastfewyears来转接过去情况的描述，because来引出小男孩借钱的原因。这些连接词的使用可以使文本读上去更有逻辑感，也使文章更加紧凑连贯。【写作演练】1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。BrownieandHarrywereneighbordogsinStowe,abeautifulandpeacefultowninLamoilleCounty,Vermont,UnitedStates,whometeverydaytoplaytogether,runningaftereachotherjoyfully.Likepairsofdogsyoucanfindinmostanyneighborhood,thesetwolovedeachotherandplayedtogethersooftenthattheyhadwornapaththroughthegrassofthefieldbetweentheirrespectivehouses.Oneevening,Brownie'sfamilynoticedthatBrowniehadn'treturnedhomeasusual.Theywentlookingforhimwithnosuccess.Browniestilldidn'tshowupthenextday,and,despitetheireffortstofindhim,bythenextweekhewasstillmissing.Curiously,theotherdog,Harry,showedupatBrownie'shousealoneoneday.Hebarked,jumpedandpestered(纠缠)Brownie'shumanfamily,showingthathewasfilledwithanxiety.Busywiththeirownlives,thefamilyjustignoredthenervouslittleneighbordoganddecidedtoletthemissingdoggo.Harryrefusedtotake“no”forananswer.Ted,Brownie’sowner,wassteadilydisturbedbytheangry,determinedlittledog.OnemorningHarryfollowedTedabout,barkingmoreinsistently,thenrushingtowardanearbyemptylotandback,asiftosay,“Followme,please!I'sveryurgent!”Eventually,TedwentafterthemadHarryacrosstheemptylotasHarrypausedtoracebackandbarkencouragingly.Thelittledogledthemanunderatree,pastsometreejungles,toalonelyspotahalfmilefromthehouse.ThereTedfoundhisbelovedBrownie,andhewasalive,withoneofhisfrontlegsfallingintoasteeltrap.Atthatmoment,TedunderstoodthestrangebehaviorofHarry.Feelingregretful,TednowwishedhehadtakenHarry'searlierappealsseriously.However,HarryhaddonemorethansimplyledBrownie’shumanownertohistrappedfriend.Tednoticedsomethingquiteremarkablebeforehimandwasshockedthattheamountoflovethatthedoghasforhispartnercouldbesooutstanding.Paragraph1:Inacirclearoundtheinjureddog,thereweresomeremainsofmeals._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:BrowniewassavedandtakenhomebyhisownerTed._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,“Itlookslikeyou’vegotaproblem,”Arthursaid.“I’mafraidso.I’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar.”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.”“Notroubleatall.I’dbegladtohelp.”Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitontheground,heturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery(抢劫)!ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoinedthecrowdinfrontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,“Whathappened?”Buteveryonehadadifferentanswer.Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.“Whyisshelookingatmelikethat?”Hethought.“Thesuitcase!ShethinksI’mthebankthief!”Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur_______________________________________________________________________________3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Fromthefirstdayheenteredmyclassroom,WillardP.Frankexistedinhisownworld,shuttingouthisclassmatesandme.Myattemptsatbuildingafriendlyrelationshipwithhimweremetwithcompleteindifference.Icouldseethathisclassmatesfarednobetter.Willardwasstrictlyalonerwhoseemedtohavenodesireorneedtobreakhissilence.ShortlyaftertheThanksgivingholiday,wereceivedwordoftheannualChristmascollectionofmoneyforthelessfortunatepeopleinourschooldistrict.“Christmasisaseasonofgiving,”Itoldmystudents.“Thereareafewstudentsintheschoolwhomightnothaveahappyholidayseason.BycontributingtoourChristmascollection,youwillhelpbuyfood,clothingandtoysfortheseneedypeople.Wewillstartthecollectiontomorrow.”WhenIcalledforthecontributionsthenextday,IdiscoveredthatalmosteveryonehadforgottenexceptforWillardP.Frank.Theboydugdeepintohispantspocketsashewalkedslowlytomydesk.Carefully,hedroppedtwoquartersintothesmallcontainer.“Idon’tneedmilkforlunch,”hemumbled.Foramoment,justamoment,hesmiled.Thenheturnedandwalkedbacktohisdesk.Thatnight,afterschool,Itookourfewcontributionstotheschoolprincipal.Icouldn’thelpsharingtheincidentthathadtakenplace.“Imaybewrong,butIbelieveWillardmightbegettingreadytobecomeapartoftheworldaroundhim,”Itoldtheprincipal.“Yes.”henodded.“Andwemightdowelltohavehimshareabitofhisworldwithus.IjustreceivedalistofthepoorfamiliesinourschoolwhomostneedhelpthroughtheChristmascollection.Here,takealookatit.”AsIgazeddowntoread,IdiscoveredWillardP.Frankandhisfamilywerethetopnamesonthelist.Seeingthis,Idecidedtodosomethingforhim.Paragraph1：OnthatSunday,IpaidavisittoWillard’sfamily.Paragraph2：Thenextday,IhadaspecialclassforWillard.4.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整故事。续写的词数应为150词左右。ThebigTownHallclockwasstrikingmidnightwhenFrankbegantocrossthebridge.Thedarknightairwascoldandalittlewet,andthestreetlampgavelittlelight.Frankwasanxioustogethomeandhisfootstepsrangloudlyonthesilentnight.Whenhereachedthemiddleofthebridge,hethoughthecouldhearsomeonecomingnearbehindhim.Helookedbackbutcouldseenoone.However,thesoundcontinuedandFrankbegantowalkmorequickly.Thenhesloweddownagain,thinkingtherewasnothingtofearinatownasquietasthis.Justthen,heheardshort,quickstepscloselybehindhim.Bythetimehereachedtheothersideofthebridge,hecouldalmostfeelsomeoneathisheels.Heturnedroundandtherestoodamaninalargecoat.Ahatwaspulleddownoverhiseyesandverylittleofhisfacecouldbeseen.Franksaidsomethingabouttheweatherinanefforttobefriendly.ThemandidnotanswerbutaskedroughlywhereOakfieldHousewas.Frankpointedtoabighouseinthedistanceandthestrangercontinuedhisway.ThenFrankwonderedwhythestrangerhadwantedtofindOakfieldHouseatsuchanhour.Heknewthatthepeoplewholivedtherewereveryrich.Almostwithoutrealizingwhathewasdoing,hebeganfollowingthestrangerquickly.ThemanwassoonoutsidethehouseandFranksawhimlookupatthewindows.Alightwasstillonandthemanwaiteduntilitwentout.Whenabouthalfanhourhadpassed,Franksawhimclimbnoiselesslyoverthewallandheardhimdroponthegroundattheotherside.Paragraph1:NowFrankknewwhatthemanwantedtodo.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Frankcouldn’tjuststandinthedarkandwait.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Throughoutlife,wecomeacrossmanypeoplewhoimpactusinaway.Thepersonwholeftagreatimpactonmeismydad.Threemonthsafterturningfourteen,mylifewasgreat.Iwasgettingsettledintoahighschool;mygradeswerealreadystartingoffgreatlyandIwasmakingfriends.OnedayasIcamehomefromschool,Iwalkedintoourlivingroom,findingmymomanddadtalking.Myparentsturnedtomeandtoldmetositdownbecausetherewassomethingimportanttheyhadtotellme.Isoonfoundoutthatmydad’sliver(肝脏)wasfailingandheneededanimmediatetransplant.Iwasshockedandconfused.Hewasworkingandneverlookedsick.Myparentstoldmenottoworrybecauseeverythingwouldbefine.Fourmonthshadpassedandmydadstillhadnotreceivedanewliver;hewasprogressivelygettingworse.Hisbodyseemedtobegettingweaker,butheconstantlysaidhewasfine.Itwasgettinghardformyfamilyandme.Mydadhadtoquithisjobleavingmymomtobetheonlyprovider.Ihadtotakeontheresponsibilityofcleaningthehouse,cookingmealsandcheckingonmydadwhilemymomwasatwork.Ihadtocutbackonhangingwithmyfriendsbecausemydadwasbeginningtogoinandoutofthehospital.Myfocusforschoolwasstartingtoslip.Soweremygrades.Twonightsbeforemyschoolspringbreak,mymomreceivedacallfromthehospitalthatmydadhadbeeninacaraccidentandthathewasinhospital.Surprisingly,mydadhadn’treceivedascratchonhim.Thennextnightmymomreceivedacallfromthedoctorstatingthattherewasaliverthatmatchedmydad’sbodyandthatheneededtogettothehospitalimmediately.Para.1MymomandIrushedtothehospitalandmydadwasbroughtintosurgery.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Pare.2HavingtotakeonsomanyresponsibilityathomeandconstantlywornaboutmydadhashelpedshapedmeintothepersonIamtoday.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案与解析1. 【参考范文】Paragraph1：Inacirclearoundtheinjureddog,thereweresomeremainsofmeals.ItturnedoutthatHarryhadbeenvisitingBrownieregularlyinordertokeephisfriendalive.EverydayHarrytookhalfofhisdogfoodheretoBrownie.Harrytriedhisbesttobegtheownertoaskformoreleftoversandthenhecameoutwiththefood.EachnightHarrystayedwithBrownietoprotecthimfromothermeat-eatinganimals,leaningclosetoBrownietokeephiwarmandencouragehimtokeephisspiritsup.Paragraph2：BrowniewassavedandtakenhomebyhisownerTed.Hisfrontlegwastreatedbyananimalsurgeon.Hewasattendedsocarefullyandverysoonherecovered.EverydayHarrycametoseehimandplayedwithhimhappily.Formanyyearsthereafter,thetwofamiliesstillwatchedthefaithfulfriendshavingfunandchasingeachotherdownthatwell-wornpathbetweentheirhouses.Thetwodogsnotonlysetuptheirownfriendshipbutalsomadethetwofamiliesharmoniousandclosetogether.【解析】本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，两只小狗Brownie和Harry是邻居，每天会一起玩，以至于两家之间的草地上已经被踏出了一条小径。一天傍晚，Brownie突然不见了踪影，它的主人苦寻无果便决定放弃。但Harry却不断到Brownie主人家，狂吠，乱跳，”纠缠”着Brownie的主人一家，通过它坚持不懈的”纠缠”，Brownie的主人跟随着它找到了被困的Brownie。Paragraph1的开头是“在受伤的Brownie四周，有一圈残羹剩饭”，文章中最后一段讲到”Harry不仅仅只是带领Brownie的主人来到它被困的朋友跟前”，由此可知，这些食物是Harry给Brownie带来的，本段应描述在Brownie被困的日子里，Harry是如何带食物给Brownie的，并且上文提到两只小狗的感情十分深厚，在这期间，Harry应该会一直陪伴和保护着Brownie。Paragraph2的开头是“Brownie被它的主人Ted救下并带回家”，由此可知，接下来可能会描述Brownie被带回去接受治疗，伤好后，两只小狗又开始一起开心地嬉戏玩耍，且可以根据情节进一步延伸，如两只小狗的友情也进一步拉近了两家人的距离。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，续写部分与原文内容一致，使之构成一篇完整的短文【范文点评】本续写描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：turnout，takehalfof

，comeoutwith，notonly

…butalso…等高级词汇；名词性从句ItturnedoutthatHarryhadbeenvisitingBrownieregularlyinordertokeephisfriendalive.非谓语动词EachnightHarrystayedwithBrownietoprotecthimfromothermeat-eatinganimals,leaningclosetoBrownietokeephiwarmandencouragehimtokeephisspiritsup.等高级句式。2.【参考范文】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Arthurimmediatelyrealizedthattheyoungmanwasthebankrobber.SoArthurdidn’tstop,butcontinuedtorununtilhesawandcaughtataxiinfrontofhim.Hequicklyputthesuitcaseinthecarandsaidtothedriver,“PleasehurrytothePoliceStation.Ihaveacasetoreporttothepolice.Themanshoutingbehindisthebankthief!”ThetaxiracedawaytothePoliceStationlikeanarrow.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthursaidtothepolicewhohadbeenwaitingandwhohadalreadyreceivedtherobberyreport,thissuitcaseisthatofthebankrobber.Itmaybefilledwiththemoneystolenfromthebank,Ihandittoyou.Pleasegetreadytoarresttheman.”【解析】通过审题，我们可看出命题者的要求是根据英语部分所提供的情景，续写一篇150词左右的短文。另外，在情景的后面还有用英语所作的要求，要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；续写完成后，用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。实际上，这类试题给出了一个较为宽松的写作环境。考生应在给定的要求下多发挥想象，合理地编造故事情节，写作时注意时态的正确使用，主要时态为过去时，适当的时候用过去进行时态，尽量做到语句通顺，思路流畅，尽量用自己熟悉的表达，恰当地使用连词进行语句过渡，使文章条理清楚；合理使用副词，使文章更生动具体。如文中immediately，quickly等，文中使用了定语从句ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthursaidtothepolicewhohadbeenwaitingandwhohadalreadyreceivedtherobberyreport使文章更富有层次感。非谓语动词的使用让语句更为简练，如：Itmaybefilledwiththemoneystolenfromthebank.3.【参考范文】Paragraph1：OnthatSunday,IpaidavisittoWillard’sfamily.Onenteringhishouse,Iwassurprisedtofindabarelyemptyroomwithabrokenbedandadirtysofa.Willardtoldmehismotherdiedandthathisfatherwasmissing,leavinghimtolivewithasickgrandma.Whenaskedwhyhehadgiventhetwoquarters,Willardmumbled,“Ijustwanttohelpothersbycontributingmymilkmoney.”Icouldn’thelpburstingintotears,thinkingIshouldhelphimbreakhissilence.Paragraph2：Thenextday,IhadaspecialclassforWillard.Isharedhisstorywiththewholeclassandsaid,“Now,onbehalfofthepeopleinneed,IshouldsaythankstoWillard,youaregreat!”Afterasilence,allthestudentsclapped,saying“Willard,youaregreat!”andtheywalkedtohimandhuggedhimtightly.AfriendrelationshipwasbuiltandWillard’ssilencewasbrokenbyasmileonhisface.【解析】本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，沉默寡言的Willard同学，在感恩节其他同学都忘记带要捐赠的东西时，Willard毅然决然捐出了自己的牛奶费用。作者随后在贫困生名单中发现Willard赫然在列，所以决定帮助Willard。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：星期天我前往Willard家进行家访。上文讲到Willard时贫困家庭，所以这一段落的续写应该是围绕着Willard家有多么贫困所展开。所以应该具体写家中的装潢来体现贫困。第二段的开头：接下来的一天，我决定给Willard一场特别的课。上文说到虽然贫困，但是Willard还是捐出了自己的牛奶钱。所以这一段肯定是要通过这堂课对Willard的奉献精神进行赞扬，以及课堂结束后所带来的结果。续写时要求使用文章中的关键词，所以这就增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉文章的主要大意以及关键词，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。按要求完成写作任务。【范文点评】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：can’thelpdoing;burstintotears;mumble等高级词汇；宾语从句和状语从句的省略Whenaskedwhyhehadgiventhetwoquarters,Willardmumbled,“Ijustwanttohelpothersbycontributingmymilkmoney.”展示了句式的多样性；而非谓语作状语Icouldn’thelpburstingintotears,thinkingIshouldhelphimbreakhissilence.更是写得好；通过这些高级句型，让这篇文章增色不少。4.【参考范文】Paragraph1:NowFrankknewwhatthemanwantedtodo.EveryoneknewthatOakfieldHousewasfilledwithartworkworthmillionsofdollars.ItwascleartoFrankthatthefamilyinsidewasindanger.Wouldthemanhaveaweapon?Wouldhebestrongenoughtooverpowerhimbeforehecouldharmthepeopleinside?Frank’sheartwasracingwithfear.Hereachedforhiscellphonetocallthepolice,butfounditoutofpower.Ifonlyhehadchargedhisphonebeforeleavingtheoffice,butitwastoolate.Paragraph2:Frankcouldn’tjuststandinthedarkandwait.Hehadtodosomething,evenifitmeantriskinghisownlife.Athisfeethesilentlyfoundseveralgood-sizedstones,andhethrewthemwithallhisstrengthrightatthewindowsofthehouse.Theclatterwokeupthepeopleinsidethehouseandalightcameonupstairs.Themanfroze,notquiteknowingwhathadjusthappened.LightscameoneverywhereinthehouseandwithinaminutethenightwasfilledwithsoundsofpolicesirensscreamingtowardsOakfieldHouse.【解析】本篇书面表达是读后续写。根据所给的两个段首句，来续写一个完整的故事。本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，午夜时分Frank走在路上，总感觉有人跟着自己，他放慢脚步，发现一个身穿大衣，帽檐遮脸的人，Frank与其交谈，试图表现出镇定的样子，而那人并不理睬，只顾着问OakfieldHouse怎么走。F