杭州二模读后续写母子合奏 讲义 高三英语二轮复习

高三杭州英语二模读后续写Wewereinourlate20swithachildwhenmyhusband,Ralph,finallygraduatedfromcollege."OK,nowIdeserveapiano,"Iblurtedoutwhenhesatdownforlunchjustbeforethegraduationceremony.Alookofsurprisecrossedhisface."Wecouldneveraffordapiano.Aftersomanyyearsofhardwork,wegotyouthroughschool.NowIdeserveapiano,"Irepeated.Severalmonthslater,Ralph,withhelp,movedtheuprightpianoweboughtfor$100intoourcottage'stinyarcheddiningroom.

Itsmelledalittlemusty,buthadgreattone.Ralphstartedgraduateschool,

leavingnomoneyforprivatepianolessons.ThefirstthingthatcametomymindwasSantaMonicaCityCollege-maybeitofferedpianolessons.Skimmingthecatalog,IdancedaroundtheroomwhenIfoundaclassatthesametimetheboyswereatpreschool.

Practicing,however,wasnotsoeasy.

Four-yearoldredheadedDennycrawledoutofbedintheeveningonaregularbasis.Thatwasmytimetopractice.He'dpadoutofthebedroominhissleeperand

climbuponthebenchwithme.

Soonhebegan

plinking(发出叮铃声)onthehighkeys.

Itriedtoignorehim.

Helistenedtotheechoesofthekeysand

plinkedsomemore.

DoingallIcoulddotokeepfocusedonmyownpracticing,Icontinuedtoignorehim.Thispracticepatternbecameanevening

routine.

Afterawhile,Ididn'tevenhearhimanymore.Ralphstudied.Denny

plinkedonthehighkeys,

andIfocusedonmypiecefortheend-of-the-termrecital(独会).Thateveningcame.

However,

Ralphsaidhewasbusypreparingforthemidtermsandcouldn'twatchDenny.Pacingbackandforth,Ishookmyheadtryingtofigureoutwhattodo.Timewasrunningout.IbundledupDenny-withhissleeperon-anddroveofftotherecitalwithhim."We'llsitinthefrontrow,Denny,"Iwhispered."YouhavetobeveryquietandlistenwhenIamplaying."Henodded,said"Uh-huh,"andwesatdown.续写：P1:Dennyheldmyhand,

but

thenmyturncame.P2:Asmallbodyclimbedontothepianobenchnexttome构思：Step1：根据所划关键信息

确定主要矛盾/问题：演奏中有孩子打扰，是否能顺利完成，结果如何Step2:

根据续写第二段首句确定第一段发展到什么程度P1:我在台上演奏中，并将发现Denny要上台根据全文主要矛盾确定第二段结局P2:圆满完成演奏Step3:

构思每段中间过程P1：

确定该段描写对象

I，Denny交替描写（主要从行为动作和心理感受两方面写）:I:（行为动作）摸头、抱、安慰道（重要演奏耐心安静地听）、亲（心理感受）略带着急Denny：（行为动作）点头、微笑、坐好（心理感受）勉强不舍I：走上台，开始演奏投入，可写手指动作，身体动作（比如随音乐摆动），听到声音P2:

描写对象I，Denny，audienceI:（行为动作）意识到是什么情况、继续弹琴、眼睛与孩子对视、微笑、ignorehim（利用原文线索）（心理感受）尽量淡定从容，尽量专注于演奏Denny：（行为动作）plink（一定利用原文反复出现的线索）I：心里有点紧张担心，结束牵起手鞠躬观众：掌声欢呼I：看着孩子感受PossibleVersion:Dennyheldmyhand,butthenmyturncame.

Awaveofanxietyandtensionsurgedinmyheart,butobviouslyitwasnotatimetogetannoyedathim.Instead,withpatience,Ipattedhimonhishead,huggedhimgentlyandcomforted,“itismom’sturntoplay.Ibelieveyouwillmakeittolistenquietlyandofferyourloudestapplausetome,right?”

ReluctantasDennywas,hestillnodded,smiledandstraightenedhisbackonseat.Withasmileofreliefshiningonface,Isteppedtothepianoandstartedthislongexpectedrecital.Myfingersdancingonthoseamazingblackandwhitekeys,mybodyswingingwiththemusic,Igotcompletelyfocusedonandimmersedinmyplaying.However,suddenly,fromtheaudiencecamesomehiss.Asmallbodyclimbedontothepianobenchnexttome.

Instantly,Irealizedwhatwashappening.Tryingbesttohavemynervecontrolled,IjustcastashortbutgentleglimpseatDennyandcontinuedfocusingonmyplaying,ignoringhispresenceasIdidduringpractice.AndDennyplinkedonthehighkeysnaturallyandjoyfullyasifthiswasanotherregularpracticeathome.Finally,myplayingcametoanend,whichseemedtobeunprecedentedlylongertoday.AsItookoverDenny’shandandbowedtotheaudience,hardlycould