英语人教新目标九年级全一册U7 Writing cy 3稿 改

LearningObjectivesBytheendoftheclass,Iwillbeableto:1.usethelinkingwordstobeautifythecomposition.

4.writedowncommentsofpeers’pletethefirstdraftofwritingwithtargetlanguage.3.

correctthewritingthroughself-checkandcrosscheck.LeadinstressedoutPeterDearClassEight,

How'syourday?I'mwritingtotalkaboutmyfamilyrules.

Therearemanyrulesinmyhouse.First,Iamnotallowedto

smoke.What'smore,Iamnotallowedto

getmyearspiercedeventhoughI'malreadysixteen.Besides,I'mnotallowedtohavepart-timejobs.

Amongalloftherules,IagreetotherulethatIcan'tsmokeinthatsmokingdoesharmtomyliver.Moreover,smokingsetsabadexampletomylittlebrother.However,IdisagreetotherulethatI'mnotallowedtohavepart-timejobs.Frommyperspective,havingpart-timejobscanbroadenourhorizonbecausewecanlearnalotfromtheexperience.Also,wecanmakepocketmoneybyourselvesthisway.Ithinkit'dbebetterifI'mallowedtohaveapart-timejobonweekends.Pleasewritetoshareyourfamilyrulesandyouropinionswithme.

Yours,Peter

WhyisPeterstressedout?Howmanyfamilyrulesarelisted?Whichonedoesheagreeto?Whichonedoeshedisagreeto?What'sthepurposeoftheletter?Whatarethey?Whatarethey?BeforewritingWhatareyourfamilyrules?BrainstormingFirst,Iamnotallowedto

.What'smore,.Besides,.Whichonedoyouagreeto?Why?Iagreetotherulethat

inthat

.It

.Moreover,.Whichonedoyoudisagreeto?Why?Idisagreetotherulethat,

because

.What'smore,.Whatdoyouthinkofthisrule?Asfortheruleyoudisagreeto,howdoyouthinkitshouldbechanged?Frommypointofview,itwouldbebetterif

.change

BeforewritingWritealetterbacktoPetertotalkaboutyourfamilyrulesandyouropinions.Whataspectsshouldbeincludedintheletter?Step1Findout(审）时态：人称：格式：TheSimplePresentTenseThefirstpersonAletter要点：DearClassEight,

How'syourday?I'mwritingtotalkaboutmyfamilyrules.

Therearemanyrulesinmyhouse.First,Iamnotallowedto

smoke.What'smore,Iamnotallowedto

getmyearspiercedeventhoughI'malreadysixteen.Besides,I'mnotallowedtohavepart-timejobs.

Amongalloftherules,IagreetotherulethatIcan'tsmokeinthatsmokingdoesharmtomyliver.Moreover,smokingsetsabadexampletomylittlebrother.However,IdisagreetotherulethatI'mnotallowedtohavepart-timejobs.Frommyperspective,havingpart-timejobscanbroadenourhorizonbecausewecanlearnalotfromtheexperience.Also,wecanmakepocketmoneybyourselvesthisway.Ithinkit'dbebetterifI'mallowedtohaveapart-timejobonweekends.Pleasewritetoshareyourfamilyrulesandyouropinionswithme.

Yours,Peter

ThreefamilyrulesTheoneyouagreetoandtworeasonsTheoneyoudisagreetoandtworeasonsHowtheruleshouldbechangedHope/GreetingsGreetings&purposeHowmanypartsshouldwewrite?Part1:BeginningPart2:BodyPart

3:EndingGreetings&purposeHow'syourday?I'mwritingtoyouto....ThreefamilyrulesTheoneyouagreetoandtworeasonsTheoneyoudisagreetoandtworeasonsHowtheruleshouldbechangedFrommyperspective,rulesaremadeto....I'mlooking....Hope/OpinionsStep2Listout（列）

Amongthethreerules,Ihat....Moreover,....Therearemainlythreerulesinmyhouse.First,...What'smore,...Besides,...However,Idisagreeto...because....Also,....Frommypointofview,it'dbebetterif....Part1:BeginningPart2:BodyPart

3:EndingGreetings&purposeHow'syourday?I'mwritingtoyouto....ThreefamilyrulesTheoneyouagreetoandtworeasonsTheoneyoudisagreetoandtworeasonsHowtheruleshouldbechangedFrommyperspective,rulesaremadeto....I'mlooking....Hope/OpinionsWhilewritingStep3Write10minsTherearemainlythreerulesinmyhouse.First,...What'smore,...Besides,...Amongthethreerules,Ihat....Moreover,....However,Idisagreeto...because....Also,....Frommypointofview,it'dbebetterif....DearPeter,Yours,TomPostwritingStep4BeautifyLinkingwords:also,however,moreover,what'smore,besides......GoodexpressionsTransitionalexpressionsContent1.Abeginningandanending.2.Threeofyourfamilyrules.

3.Theruleyouagreetoandlisttworeasons.4.

Theruleyoudisagreetoandlist2reasons.5.Howtheruleshouldbechanged.

Language6.Thelinkingwordsandsomegoodexpressions.Handwriting7.Beautifulhandwriting.GradingStandards评分标准3'2'3'1'2'Total:15points1'Postwriting3'Ishouldbeallowedtoget

points.Step5Self-checkGrammarmistakes:-0.5eachoneContent1.Abeginningandanending.2.Threeofyourfamilyrules.

3.Theruleyouagreetoandlisttworeasons.4.

Theruleyoudisagreetoandlist2reasons.5.Howtheruleshouldbechanged.

Language6.Thelinkingwordsandsomegoodexpressions.Handwriting7.Beautifulhandwriting.GradingStandards评分标准3'2'3'1'2'Total:15points1'Postwriting3'He/Sheshouldbeallowedtoget

points.Step6CrosscheckGrammarmistakes:-0.5eachoneYouradvice:

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