读后续写+我的瘸腿狗 高三英语二轮复习写作专项

2023高三宁波二模我的瘸腿狗读后续写MULU题目评析、故事线01作答示范及参考范文02动物类、竞赛类语料03（动物）语言表述积累04题目评析、故事线

WhenIadoptedhim,hehadbeenrescuedfromdeathinsideatightlytiedblacktrashbagabandonedrightbesideagarbagetruckontheroad.Analertgarbagemannoticedthebagmovingandusedametalrake（耙子）totearopenthebagtolookinside.Therewasmyshakingpuppydog.Therakedamagedthenervesinhisbacksohelimpedalittle,buthecouldrunasfastaslightning.Formydog'sfirstbirthday,IenteredhiminafunrunsponsoredbyourlocalSocietyforthePreventionofCrueltytoAnimals（SPCA）.I’mnotmuchofarunner,buttherunwasonly3kilometers,soIthoughtitwouldbefunforbothofus.Wepracticedforweeks.Onourpracticeruns,hewasalwayseagertogoandusuallydraggedmealongbehindhim.Iworkedonhisleash（拴狗链）mannerssothathewouldn'ttripmeonthebigday.Ifeltwewerereadyforanything.Thefunrunwasdowntownamongthebigbuildings,sothenoiseofbarkingdogsallaroundusrosetoadeafeningpitchatthestartoftherace.Mydogwasfrightenedwhenthestartingtonewentoff.Hehadtroublerunningintherightdirectionwithalltheconfusionaroundus.Soontherunnersbegantothinout,andmydogwasrunningstraightandfast.Wewerepassingpeopleandmakinggreattime.Iwasdreamingofagold-medalfinish.However,whenweweresixblocksfromthefinish,mydogsuddenlystoppedanddroppedtothegroundlikeasackofpotatoes.1almostdislocatedmyshoulderfromthesuddenstopasIwaspulledbackwardbytheleash.Hewaslyingflatonhisbellywithhisheaddowninthemiddleofthecrossroads.AtfirstIthoughtsomethingbadhadhappenedtohim.Hewasshakingandsobbing.Ididaquickcheckandcouldn'tseeanythingwrong.Itriedtogethimup,butherefused.Thepoliceofficerdoingtrafficcontrolimpatientlysignedmetomoveawaysohecouldreleasethecars.

ButIcouldn’tgetmyseventy-five-pounddogtogetup.Anotherhalf

blockofcarryinghimbroughttheanswer—amovinggarbagetruck.故事线人与自然：动物类第一人称视角主题视角梗概作者收养了一条被抛弃在路边垃圾车边的小狗，在狗一岁时报名参加了“快乐奔跑”比赛。比赛期间路边垃圾车的声音让狗狗回忆起被抛弃时的场景造成心理恐惧而不敢前行，最终作者得知了狗狗不跑的原因，帮助狗狗一起跑向终点。背景知识(knowledgebank)1.Whatdoyouknowapetwithahistoryofabuse?Abusedpetsmayneverhaveknownlove,security,orsafetyandarethroughnofaultoftheirown.2.Whatdoeshistoryofabuseinapetmean?Petsthathavebeenabusedmaydisplayalargeemotionalreactiontocertainobjectsorsituations.Forexample,adogthathasahistoryofbeingpunishedwithabeltmaycower,crawlaway,hide,orurinateinplacewhenanewpetparentpicksupabelttowear.Iadoptedanabandoneddog.beginningIenteredbothofusafunrunrace.Before6blocksfromthefinishingline,thedogstoppedrunning.climaxIcarriedhimtowardsthefinishinglineGainingmoreunderstandingaboutabuseddogending故事线WhenIadoptedhim,hehadbeenrescuedfromdeathinsideatightlytiedblacktrashbagabandonedrightbesideagarbagetruckontheroad.Analertgarbagemannoticedthebagmovingandusedametalrake（耙子）totearopenthebagtolookinside.Therewasmyshakingpuppydog.Therakedamagedthenervesinhisbacksohelimpedalittle,buthecouldrunasfastaslightning.Formydog'sfirstbirthday,IenteredhiminafunrunsponsoredbyourlocalSocietyforthePreventionofCrueltytoAnimals（SPCA）.I’mnotmuchofarunner,buttherunwasonly3kilometers,soIthoughtitwouldbefunforbothofus.Wepracticedforweeks.Onourpracticeruns,hewasalwayseagertogoandusuallydraggedmealongbehindhim.Iworkedonhisleash（拴狗链）mannerssothathewouldn'ttripmeonthebigday.Ifeltwewerereadyforanything.Thefunrunwasdowntownamongthebigbuildings,sothenoiseofbarkingdogsallaroundusrosetoadeafeningpitchatthestartoftherace.Mydogwasfrightenedwhenthestartingtonewentoff.Hehadtroublerunningintherightdirectionwithalltheconfusionaroundus.Soontherunnersbegantothinout,andmydogwasrunningstraightandfast.Wewerepassingpeopleandmakinggreattime.Iwasdreamingofagold-medalfinish.However,whenweweresixblocksfromthefinish,mydogsuddenlystoppedanddroppedtothegroundlikeasackofpotatoes.1almostdislocatedmyshoulderfromthesuddenstopasIwaspulledbackwardbytheleash.Hewaslyingflatonhisbellywithhisheaddowninthemiddleofthecrossroads.AtfirstIthoughtsomethingbadhadhappenedtohim.Hewasshakingandsobbing.Ididaquickcheckandcouldn'tseeanythingwrong.Itriedtogethimup,butherefused.Thepoliceofficerdoingtrafficcontrolimpatientlysignedmetomoveawaysohecouldreleasethecars.

ButIcouldn’tgetmyseventy-five-pounddogtogetup.

Anotherhalf

blockofcarryinghimbroughttheanswer—amovinggarbagetruck.Para1.NarratehowIcarriedthedogtotrytofinishtherace.伏笔点Thegarbagetruckbroughtbackthepainfulmemory.解题作答

主题：人与自然，学会理解心灵受伤的宠物，陪伴它成长。

情节安排续写第一段：听到警察的驱赶，我试图让狗狗从地上站起来继续比赛，但是用尽方法都不成功。路人也开始责怪我把狗狗逼得太紧。最终我只能扛起狗狗，跑向终点。情节安排续写第二段：路边垃圾车的声音终于让我知道狗狗受惊，不肯继续跑动的原因。作者试图安慰狗狗，直到它放松下来。最后作者和狗狗一起跑到了终点，虽然没有获得任何奖项，但是最终作者获得了狗狗的信任。作答示范及参考范文作答示范Onepossibleversion:ButIcouldn’tgetmyseventy-five-pounddogtogetup.TheharderItriedtoscoophimupfromthepavement,themorehefoughtme.Theofficeryellingandcarshonking,Ipulled

him

withallmymight,butinvain.

Finally,Igotmyarmunderhimandliftedhimupinafireman’scarry,throwinghimovermyshoulder.AsIstaggeredtotheroadside,peoplearoundweretakingmydog’sside,laughingIwasrunninghimtoohard.Iwasfuming.Mydogwouldrunalldaylongandhewasn’ttheleastbittired.Anotherhalf-blockofcarryinghimbroughttheanswer—

amovinggarbagetruck.Itssoundmusthavehitmydog’ssensitiveears,sohecriedlouderandclawedatmybackaswedrewclosertoit.IheldontighterandranasfastasIcouldtogetmysweetbabydogawayfromthatscarygarbagetruck.IranwithhimonmyshoulderuntilIfelthimrelaxed,andthenIsethimdown.Hewaggedhistailingratitudeforsavinghimfromthegarbagetruck.Surely,wedidn’twinanymedals,butIwonhistrustforever.ButIcouldn’tgetmyseventy-five-pounddogtogetup.Iwascompletelyhopelessandhelplesswhentheimpatienthornsroaredupintotheskyandmydogremainedassteadfastasarock.Coaxinganddraggingwerenouse.Hewasscaredtothepointthathecouldn’tcontrolhisbladderandstartedtourine.Atthatmoment,Itoughedmyselfupandresolvedtotakehimupandcarriedhimallthewaytothedestinationwithallmystrength.Anotherhalf-blockofcarryinghimbroughttheanswer—

amovinggarbagetruck.

Theblaringsirensong,theclunkingtires,andthedisgustingsmell,allseemedtobringhimbackthoseearlypainfulmemories.He

clungontometightly,untilthetruckwentoutofsight.Thenbothofus,exhaustedbythisincident,limpedacrossthefinishinglinetogether.Stillhuffingandpuffing,Iflungmyarmsaroundmydogandlaughed,“Wemadeit!”ButIcouldn’tgetmyseventy-five-pounddogtogetup.Hewaswailingandtryingtododgeawayfrommypullinghimup.Futiletomakehimmoveandforcedbyblaringhorns,Imadeadecisiontotakehimwithmybarehandstowardsthesideoftheroadandnottoblockthetraffic.Still,hislegsfailedtostandup.Aflashofgivingupcrossedmymind,butIconvincedmyselftocarryonandheldhimtotheend,nomatterwhat.Anotherhalf-blockofcarryinghimbroughttheanswer—

amovinggarbagetruck.Hiswhiningandbarkingbecamelouder,andIheldhimtightlytomychest,rubbinghisfurryheadtocomforthimuntilthegarbagetruckwentfaraway.Thenhejumpeddowntothegroundandlickedmyhandstoexpresshisgratitudetowardsmyunderstandingabouthissituation.Woundwouldbehealedbypatienceandaffection,whichwasfarmoremeaningfulthanthewinningmedal.动物类、竞赛类语料1）Davidran.

（2022年新高考1卷:跑步动作）

David’sshoes

poundedoddlyandheavily

acrossthegroundcausingmudtoslashuphislegs.

大卫的鞋子奇怪地重重地砸在地上，导致泥溅到他的腿上.

Davidstretchedhislimbs,pushinghisarmsbackandforth,ashe

jettedtowardsthedestination.Threemoreleapsandhemadeit.Hebreathedheavilyandstoppedmomentarilytocatchhisbreath.

大卫伸展四肢，前后摆着手臂，向目的地飞跑。三步飞奔，他成功了。他喘着粗气，马上停下，吸气。David在跑步比赛时(2022年新高考1卷:比赛全情投入）ThoughDavid

wenthuffingandpuffingdowntheunevenroute,hisheadliftedandchinup.尽管大卫在不平的道路上气喘吁吁，但他的头还是抬起了，下巴也抬起了服务他人胜于比赛胜负（2022年4月广东六校第四次联考）1）Seeingtheimpactandpowerthatmymusicbroughttoothers,Ifelttriumphantthatcouldn’tbegainedfromtheusualrecital.看到我的音乐给别人带来的冲击和力量，我感到胜利，这是平时的独奏会无法获得的。友谊与比赛(2021年11月高三9+1联盟)

Truefriendsweretheonesthatwecouldaffordtobestupidwith.真正的朋友是我们可以忍受的愚蠢的朋友。比赛后的含义(2022年新高考1卷）Ifyoucan’tfly,thenrun.Ifyoucan’trun,thenwalk.Ifyoucan’twalk,thencrawl.Butwhateveryoudo,justkeepmovingforward.如果你不会飞，那就跑吧。如果你不能跑，那就走路。如果你不能走路，那就爬行。但无论你做什么，都要继续前进。Adoggrowls(低声吼叫；咆哮)whenit’sangryandwagsitstailwhenit’spleased.狗生气时候叫，高兴时摇尾巴。☆Apuppywaslookingdownatherwithlargeroundeyes,andgentystretchingoutonepawtryingto

touchher.一只小狗正睁着滚圆的大眼睛朝下看着她,并且轻轻地伸出一只爪子,想碰碰她。☆Ayellowdog,tiedatthefootofatree,beganatfirsttowaghistailandthentobarkforjoy.拴在树下的一条黄狗开始先是摇动尾巴,后来高兴地汪汪叫。☆Atthesound,thedogstruggledtohisfeetandsaggeredon.Buthecouldmanageonlyafewsteps.

Thenhesankdownagain.一听这声音,狗挣扎着站了起来,踉踉跄地地向前走。但它只勉强走了几步,然后又趴了下去。（动物）语言表述积累1.Hecouldrunasfastaslightning.他能跑得像闪电一样快。2.Mydogsuddenlystoppedanddroppedtothegroundlikeasackofpotatoes.我的狗突然停了下来，像一袋土豆一样掉到了地上。3.Hewaslyingflatonhisbellywithhisheaddowninthemiddleofthecrossroads.他平躺在十字路口中间，头朝