高中英语读后续写

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Introduction:书面表达---读后续写

提供一篇350词以内的材料，要求考生依据材料内容、所给段落开头语及所标关键词续写一篇150词左右的短文。将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。续写部分为2段。原文给出10处左右的标有下划线的关键词语，所续写短文应使用5个以上。（满分25分）短文内容和情节词汇和语句1词数:3502体裁：记叙文或夹叙夹议为主3故事逻辑性强，有情节，有起伏Introduction:测试要求和特点1有自由空间2合乎情理和逻辑--有效续写1至少使用5个以上的关键词2每段段首句已给3字数：150±20words半限定写作---“戴着镣铐跳舞”第五档（21-25分）（1）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的段落开头语衔接合理。（2）内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。（3）所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确。（4）有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所续写短文结构紧凑。Introduction:阅卷评分标准阅卷时考虑以下几个方面：1与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;2内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用程度;3应用语法结构结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;4上下文的连贯。相关性：情节与原文的相关性--情节一定要回照原文；开放性：续写的特性--构思在逻辑上一定要合理，--多种可能性择其优而续写所续部分：高立意、正能量、传递积极的情感态度原文与后续的融洽度；后续两段间的融洽度；段落开头语与后续语的融洽度。逻辑权重高于内容、语言和情感；前后逻辑要一致，内容不偏离主旨；逻辑靠内容支撑，内容靠语言表达；Introduction:融洽度高，衔接合理五个一致：1要与原文的主题或作者的本来意图保持一致。2要与原文的体裁、结构、写作手法保持一致。3要与原文在人称，主体时态上保持一致。4要与人物的思想行为、性格特点保持一致。5要与原文的语言特点和叙事风格保持一致。Introduction:与原文的融合度Introduction:解题思路搞清原文剧情回扣原文，结合段首句确定剧情走向融入关键词，想象细节拟写草稿丰富细节，润色阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。AfunnythinghaeonetryingtostartacarHetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmovingArthurturnedandlooedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholooedworriedArthursto,”Arthursaid“I’mafraidsoI’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelanlooedatthetwosuitcasesinthebacseatandthensaid,“ThansIfyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelegetthesesuitcasesintoatai”“NotroubleatallI’dbegladtohelangotoutandtoooneofthesuitcasesfromthebacseatAfterItwasfromthebanTherehadbeenarobbery抢劫!omentbeforeNowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofalldirectionsCarsstoaninfrontofhimShelooedatthesuitcaseandthenathimArthurwassureliethat”hethought“Thesuitcase!ShethinsI’mthebanthief!”Arthurlooedaroundatthecrowdofefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun注意：1所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。anshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_________________________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur__________________________________________________________Introduction:搞清原文剧情---六要素whenwhowherewhyhowwhat确定文章的主体时态确定发生地点，激活环境词汇用第几人称叙述，确定“入戏”人物，各自扮演何种角色通过逻辑，确定故事发展的可能性确定故事发展的每个阶段:开始的写作部分考查点，通过以上要素，确定续写内容Steents情节基调“AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworoneday”。funny:“趣”Afunnythingcauseamusement,laughter,etc

有趣的，可笑的ahappyendingSteents阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。AfunnythinghaeonetryingtostartacarHetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmovingArthurturnedandlooedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholooedworriedArthursto,”Arthursaid“I’mafraidsoI’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelanlooedatthetwosuitcasesinthebacseatandthensaid,“ThansIfyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelegetthesesuitcasesintoatai”“NotroubleatallI’dbegladtohelangotoutandtoooneofthesuitcasesfromthebacseatAfterItwasfromthebanTherehadbeenarobbery抢劫!omentbeforeNowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofalldirectionsCarsstoaninfrontofhimShelooedatthesuitcaseandthenathimArthurwassureliethat”hethought“Thesuitcase!ShethinsI’mthebanthief!”Arthurlooedaroundatthecrowdofefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorunSteainidea--6wquestions_______,when______wasonhiswaytoworwalingalong__________,hehele,abanrobberyhaewerecuriousandconfusedArthurwaledinto_____________andshemistoohimforthe________becausehewasstillcarryingthesuitcaseHewassurprisedand_________sohestartedto___OnedayArthurParAvenueayoungmansuitcasebanthiefrunfrightenedquietayoungwoman

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箱子里所属人Youngman身份可能情节发展1Moneytheyoungmanthief碰巧抓住抢劫犯（即结尾1）2notthief碰巧把刚从银行取钱赶路的人当劫犯，最后到警局传来抓到劫犯消息3anothermanthief碰巧碰到一个刚偷了其他人钱的小偷，最后到警局传来抓到劫犯并找回银行失钱的消息，最后在Arthur帮助下抓到另一个小偷4notthief路遇一个路人帮人搬运装满钱的行李箱，而Arthur错把路人当劫犯，最后澄清消除误会5Otherthingstheyoungmanthief错把普通小偷当劫犯，最后帮助抓到该小偷6notthief错把路人当劫犯（即结尾2）7anothermanthief碰巧碰到一个刚偷了其他人东西的小偷，最后到警局传来抓到劫犯并找回银行失钱的消息，最后在Arthur帮助下抓到另一个小偷8notthief路遇一个路人帮人搬运普通行李箱，而Arthur错把路人当劫犯，最后澄清消除误会Step2Gatherideas故事发展Theyoungman：looworried/inabighurry/shoutingbehindArthur：gladtohelindedrunwithoutanotherthoughtBacground：alongloudnoiseofanalarmfromthebanayoungmanArthurRunafterStop,stop!…TothePSSteaepredictions故事框架The10underlinedeywordsorphrasesWhereplaceWhocharacterWhateventParAvenue,thebantheyoungman,people,thebanthiefsuitcase,inthebacseat,loudnoiseofanalarm,robbery,theshoutsSteaepredictions故事框架anshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_______________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur_______________________________________________顺延故事发展创意故事结尾顺延逆转1WhatwouldArthurdowhenheheardtheshoutingThenwhatwouldtheyoungmando2WhowouldtaeataiWhatwouldtheanbeBeginningcharacterandsettingProcessClimathemainorconflictEndingatimetosolvethe/howthingsendupStoryMountainSteaepredictions故事框架Step4:Draftacontinuation起草续篇可能意识到那个年轻人就是银行小偷。Arthurmightrealiethattheyoungmanwasthebanthief2他乘出租车去了警察局。Hetooataiandwenttotheanshoutingbehindmeisthebanthief!’’Avenue发生了什么。Arthurtoldtheanwasthebanthief,andtherewasalargesumofmoneyinsidethesuitcase6人们很高兴抢劫犯被抓住了。PeoplewerehappythattherobberwascaughtStep5:PolishyourwritingAddsomedetailsUsedifferentstructuresUsetransitionalwords1想想他的行为，他意识到那个年轻人就是银行小偷。（分词做状语）Thiningaboutthewaytheyoungmanhadbehaved,herealiedtheyoungmanmightbethebanthief2他一坐上出租车就告诉司机在他后面叫喊的那个人就是银行小偷（themoment）Themomenthegotintothetai,hetoldthedriverthemanshoutingbehindhimwasthebanthief3结果证明那个年轻人就是银行小偷，而且箱子里装的就是一大笔钱。（完全倒装）Itturnedoutthattheyoungmanwasthebanthief,andinsidethesuitcaseswasalargesumofmoneyIntroduction:润色，标出关键词润色包括连接词的使用、句型和词汇的升级替换标出关键词（下划线，题型要求。在使用关键词语时根据时态和语态的需要，可以改变动词的形式，可以改变名词的单复数，但不要改变关键词语在原文中的含义和词性。）【Possibleversion1】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanbehindhimshouting,“Stoanhadbehaved,herealiedtheyoungmanmightbethebanrobberSo,Arthurranfastandstoomenthegotintothetai,hetoldthedriverthemanshoutingbehindhimwasthebanthiefandasedhimtodrivetothenearestantotheanHehadfollowedArthurinanothertaiItturnedoutthattheyoungmanwasinnocent,andinsidethesuitcaseswasjustsomeclothingArthurfeltembarrassed,buttheenthanedhimanyway【Possibleversion2】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanbehindhimshouting,“Stoemoment,ArthursuddenlyrealiedthattheyoungmanmightbethebanrobberSo,Arthurdidn’tstoanshoutingbehindmeisthebanthief!’’ThetairacedawayasfastasthewindThetaistoofmoneyinside,asArthurhadeanandtheothersuitcaseLater,withthisinformation,thepolicecaughttherobberThepoliceandthebanboththanedArthurPeoplewerehappythattherobberwascaught续写中常出现的问题一、书写潦草，卷面涂改；二、上下文的连贯性差；三、错词错句多，好词好句少；四、没有丰富和生动的细节推动情节的发展；五、与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度差；六、没有使用5个或5个以上原文中的划线词语，没有划出所用的划线词语。Writing：阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。JennywastheonlychildinherfamilyShehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandshe

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