读后续写遇险类+溺水救援 讲义 高三英语二轮复习

原文如下：

ItwastheEasterholidays,andschoolwasclosedfortwoweeks.Forme,theEasterholidaysweresoboringthatitwasimpossibletofindsomethingfuntodo.MymomhadsuggestedthatIdosomestudiessincethepromotiontestwascomingup.However,Ididn’tfollowmymother’ssuggestion.Instead,Iwentoutsidetoseekoutmyfriendstoplaywith.WhenIhadsuccessfullycontactedsomeofmyfriends,noneofthemseemedtobemuchinaplayfulmood,butonefriendJimmyagreedtoplaywithme.Hesuggestedwegodowntotheriverandjustrelaxthere.Theriverwasnotfarfrommyhome,andwearrivedtherequickly.

Justrelaxingontheriverbankwithnothingbutsomewastelogs,itwasn’tfunforusatfirst.Clearlywhatwasonourmindswastojumpintotheriverandjusttakeaswimintheclearcoolwater.Sowetookoffourclothesdowntoourunderwearandwalkedintotheshallowpartofthewater.Thewaterwastrulycoolandrefreshingandwewerestartingtohavefunthen,playingandlaughing,aswesplashedthecoolwaterontoeachother’sfaces.

Thenwestartedtochaseeachotheraroundontheriverbankandthenweranstraightintotheriver.Wewerehavingsomuchfunthatwedidn’tnoticedangerwasaroundthecorner.BeforeJimmycouldknowit,andbeforehecoulddoanythingtokeephisbalance,helosthisfootingonatreebranch,whichwasintheshallowpartofthewater,andslipped,bringinghiswholeentirebodyintothedeepwater.Hetriedtoresurfacefromthewaterbutfounditextremelyhardtokeephisheadabovethewater.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。IwasscaredtoseehimstrugglinginthewaterbutIknewI

mustrescuehim.

Afterawhile,Jimmyrecoveredfrom

panic

andthanked

mymomandtheneighbors.

文本分析故事大意：

本文讲述的是作者在假期不听妈妈的话在家复习备考，反而邀好友跑去河边玩耍，然后两人下河玩水，结果好友落水。（和上一篇续写：“偷跑去沙滩玩球溺水”内容相似）读后续写情节设计：

从第一段给出的首句

Iwasscaredtosee

him

strugglinginthewaterbutIknewI

mustrescuehim.不难知道第一段应续写“我”努力做了什么救好友，回顾原文的第二段提到河边的somewastelogs，抓住这一伏笔，我往下写“我”尝试扔木头救好友，同时向附近的妈妈和邻居呼救；再根据第二段首句出现的mymomandtheneighbors，可知第一段结尾应该写妈妈和邻居的到来援救。第二段续写被救起之后感激后怕等心理活动，同时升华主题“安全第一”。（我认为这里的第二段和上一篇续写的第二段内容完全可以一样）

基于以上分析，续写如下IwasscaredtoseehimstrugglinginthewaterbutIknewImustrescuehim.Shoutingforhelp.Ilookedaroundonlytofindnobody.Almostimmediately.Imadeaphonecalltomymum,“Mum,Jimmyisdrowningintherivernearourhome.Help!”“Dosomethingtohelphimfloat!Iamcomingtorescue.”Itrieddesperatelytocalmdownandperformedasmymuminstructed.castingawastelogtowardsJimmy.Luckily,Jimmymanagedtograspthelog,andmumsoonarrivedalongwithourneighborswhospranginandpulledJimmyout.Afterawhile,Jimmyrecoveredfrompanicandthankedmymomandtheneighbors.Wehuggedtightly,fearfultearstricklingdownourfaces.Ashamedandregretful,Ihungmyhead.apologizingtomum,Sorry,hadIfollowedyouradvice,wewouldn'thaveexperiencesuchaterrifyingrisk.”Muchtomysurprise.mumdidn'tblameme,insteadshepattedgentlyonmyshoulder,“Doremembertoputsafetyfirstnexttime.”Backhome,Iappliedmyselftopreparingforthecomingtest.notfeelingboringanymore.

再来感受下本篇续写第二段和上一篇续写第二段的相似度：

本篇续写第二段“我”和好友紧紧拥抱在一起，后怕又惭愧，意识到不该不听妈妈建议，明白安全第一；而妈妈并没有太多责备。上一篇续写第二段“我”被救在医院醒来，感到后怕又惭愧，明白不该偷跑出去玩，而妈妈也没太多责备。

所以这两篇续写的第二段使用了虚拟结构“hadIfollowedyouradvice,wewouldn't

haveexperienced...和butfor...,wewouldn'thavedone...

”来表示后悔后怕；使用“therebeingnoblame,...","...didn'tblame...,instead,...”来表达妈妈的态度;使用“拥抱”，“哭泣”，“轻拍”，“低头”等动作和情感表达短语。附参考范文：Paragraph1:

IwasscaredtoseehimstrugglinginthewaterbutIknewI

mustrescuehim.

Itookadeepbreathtokeepcalm.Looking

around,Ifoundawastelog,Ithrewittohimimmediatelyand

askedhimtoholdit.AtthesametimeIyelledforhelp,

hopingsomeonecouldcometoourrescue.Luckily,mymom

heardmycries,rushedoutofthehouseandracedtowardsus.

Shejumpedintothewaterandreachedoutherhandstopull

him.

Severalneighborsalsoquicklyjoinedtherescue.They

managedtogetJimmyoutofthewater.Finally,Jimmywas

saved,

paleandshivering.Paragraph2:

Afterawhile,Jimmyrecoveredfrom

panic

andthanked

mymomandtheneighbors.

Wehuggedeachotherintears.I

thoughtmymomwouldscoldme.Butshejustheldusinher

armstightly.Shewarnedusitwasdangeroustoswiminthe

river.

Bothofusfeltashamedandpromisednevertodo

thatagain.ThiswasreallyaspecialEaster,

oneIwouldnever

forget.ForJimmy,hehadanarrowescapefromdrowning.

Forme,

Ifeltthekindnessofmyneighbors.场景：溺水drowningCharacteristics：失去意识：loseconsciousness

无法呼吸：can'tbreatheTreatment：把溺水的人拉出水面pullthedrowningmanoutofwater让受害者仰卧laythevictimontheground进行心肺复苏performCPR按压胸部push

downthecenterofhischest抬起下巴liftuphis

chin进行人工呼吸performmouth-to-mouth

rescuebreathing/blowairin

检查看他是否呼吸

check

toseeifheisbreathing叫救护车callforanambulance溺水场景Thewaveshadpulledthemfromthepoolandintotheopensea.

海浪已经把他们卷出了泳池，拖进了外海。

Whenwefinallyreachedthem,theywerealmostlifeless,bobbingaroundinthewaterlikepuppets,paleandmotionless.

最终我们靠近了他们，已然奄奄一息，像木偶在水中上下波动，面无血色，一动不动。

施救场景Withoutthinking,I