2023年10月浙江强基高三英语读后续写生日惊喜讲义高考英语作文复习专项

读后续写原文Sally’sbirthdaywasapproaching,andtheexcitementthatusuallyfilledherheartwasnowreplacedwith

disappointmentandstress.Turningelevenwasabigdeal,andshehadalwayscelebratedit

withagrandpartysurroundedbyherfriends.

However,

thisyearwasdifferent.Theburdenofexcessivehomework

andher

parents’strugglingbusiness

weighedheavilyonher,forcingSallyto

makethedifficultdecisionofnothavingabirthdayparty,eventhoughitwasaneventsheenjoyeddearlyeveryyear.Oneday,duringbreak,herbestfriend,

Jane,

withacuriouslookinhereyes,approached.“Areyougoingtohaveabirthdaypartythisyear?”Janeasked,sensingSally’ssadness.“No,”Sally

sighedandrepliedsadly,

“There’sjust

toomuchgoingon

andmyparentsaregoingthroughfinancialdifficulties.”Shesmiledweakly,tryingtoconcealher

immensedisappointmentandstress,

butJanesawthrough

herpretence(假装)easily.Janenoddedthoughtfullyanddidnotsayanything.Afterthebreak,Sallysaw

hertalkingtooneoftheirclassmates,

Sarah,secretively.Curious,Sallywentovertothem,butassoonasJanesawher,shequicklywalkedaway.SallywasstartledbyJane’sstrangeactionsandturnedtowardsSarah.“Whatdidshesay?”Sallyasked.However,SarahsimplyshruggedandwalkedawaywithJane,leavingSallystandingthere,feelingleftoutandanxious.Whatishappening?Sallywonderedanxiously.Aretheykeepingsomethingfromme?AsSally’sbirthdaydrewnearer,Janewasoftenfoundchattingsoftlywithherotherclassmates.WheneverSallywentovertothem,theywouldjustwalkawayortellherthattheyweretalkingaboutasecretwhichSallywasnotallowedtoknow.Janehasneverkeptsecretsfrommebefore,Sallythought.

Herheartfell.Evenherfriendswere

distancingthemselvesfromher!Sheswungbetweenconfusionandsadness

witheachpassingmoment,desperatelytryingtofigureoutwhatwashappening.

Whywereherfriends

distancingthemselvesfromher?Andwhatweretheyhiding?

续写段首句：P1:OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.P2:TearssprangfromSally’seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiantsmile.

解题思路step1:

根据读原文时所划关键信息确定故事问题/矛盾（通常有两层：①事情本身；②

通过事情所表达的情感/思想）读原文时需划的关键信息主要包括：①负面否定信息

②与前者形成对比的信息

③反复出现信息

④问题信息

⑤转折信息

本文主要问题/矛盾：1浅层：生日派对是否举办；朋友为何有那些行为举动是否疏远我2深层：关于友情的感悟

step2:

根据题目已给的段首句与主要矛盾确定每段发展到什么程度P1:

Sally惊喜地看到朋友们为其精心准备的生日派对P2:

事情层面的矛盾在第一段都已解决，为了突出中心主旨，可以在第二段聚焦描写Sally与文中具体描写过的Jane或Sarah之间的互动，最后引出对友情的感悟

step3：

每段具体设计：确定描写对象，从行为动作/语言、心理感受/神态表情两大方面交替描写各个对象，必要处添加环境等其他描写

设计示例：

P1：

描写对象——Sally、

朋友同学们Sally：

好奇

困惑，走进教室

试图开灯同学们：亮起灯

欢呼

从角落窜出

表达祝福

拍手

唱歌

拿着蛋糕走进Sally环境：教室精心布置

生日蛋糕放在桌上

Sally：明白了一切

P2:描写对象——Sally、JaneSally：激动惊讶

语塞Jane：走进

拥抱

说话（具体语言内容

结合文章线索设置，最好能突出文章中心主旨）

Sally：感动；通过语言+动作（鞠躬等）表达感谢感悟:

对友情的感悟

谨记：1.必写高级句式：

非谓

、独立主格、定从、

名从、

倒装、

强调2.多从原文找线索，利用相关词汇，提高与原文的契合度

英文写作示例

P1:OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.Captured

by

infinite

curiosityandconfusion（利用非谓结构将情绪描写与行为动作描写结合到一句话）,shegentlyopenedthedoorand

attemptedto

reachthelightswitch.However,beforeshetouchedtheswitch,thedarknessandsilencewerebrokenbyraysofflashlightandcheersfromherclassmateswhowerejusthidinginthecornersofclassroom.“Happybirthdaytoyou!Sally.”“Wishyoua

memorable

birthday!”Theywereclapping,singingand

approaching

toherwithcandlesandpresentsinhands.

Whatfurtheramazedher（疑问词引导的名从）wasthat

theclassroomwas

elaborately

decoratedandabigcakeof

multiple

layerswasonhertable.Atthismoment,allconfusionandsadnesswere

erased

.

P2:TearssprangfromSally’seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiantsmile.SoshockedwasSallythat（倒装）sheevencouldn’tspeakanythingforashortmoment.Then,Janesteppedforwardandhuggedhertightly,whisperinginSally’sear,“Iknowyouaregoingthroughalotrecently,butyouhaveus,yourfriends,onyourbirthdayandeveryday.”（突出友情

凸显中心主旨的语言内容）

“Thankyou,Jane.Thankyou,dearfriends.ThisisundoubtedlythemostpreciousbirthdaypartyI’veeverhad.”Sallybowedandexpressedhersincereappreciationtoeveryone,

extremewarmthoverflowinginherheart（独立主格结构）.Itwasonthisbirthdaythat

（强调句）she

becameconvinced

herfriendshadneverdistancedthemselvesfromherandtheywereeven

themostfortingsunshineonthosechillingtoughdays.下水文：P1:OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.Whenshehesitatedtoentertheroomduetofear,awaveoffearandnervousnesssweptoverher,andherheartpounded.Shegropedtoturnonthelightswitch,butbeforeherhandcouldfindit,achorusofcheersbrokethesilence.It'samazing,it'sunbelievable!"Thestudents,ledbyJane,jumpedoutofvarioushidingplaces.Theroomwaswelllit,andSally'seyeswidenedinsurprise,incredulous.Theclassroomisdecoratedwithballoonsandribbons,thereisaveryexquisitecakeonthetable,andthereisapileofgiftswaitingtobeopenedinthecorner.P2:TearssprangfromSally’seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiantsmile.SheturnedtoJane,whocouldn'tclosehermouthatthemoment.Weknowyoucan'tholdapa