读后续写微技能之动作描写课件-高三英语一轮复习

ContinuationWritingSkillsfortheDescriptionofaseriesofactions读后续写微技巧———动作描写Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?细节描写(detaileddescription)主要有五类：环境、动作、心理、情绪、语言(environment、action、psychology、emotionandlanguage)2Step1:Leadin

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strategiestocreateaseriesofactions.

5分解动作，建构画面Example1憨豆先生试图在考试中作弊。Mr.beanattemptedtocheatintheexam.Duringtheexam,Mr.beanlookedaround,foundeveryonewritingpapersseriously,

slowlymovedtowardshisdeskmate,andattemptedtoglanceathisanswers.在考试期间，憨豆先生环顾四周（lookaround），发现(find)每个人都在认真写试卷，然后他的身体慢慢地向他同桌移动(move)，试图瞥一眼（glanceat）他的答案。Structure:

S+V1...,V2...,V3....andV4.............动作1动作2动作3动作4动作分解后的画面：6Example27Thestepsweshouldtaketoeathotstrips(辣条)Step1:Step2:Step3:tearupthepackagesqueezeoutonestriptakeabigbite撕开包装挤出一根大咬一口8

形成动作链：刚才汤姆吃了辣条（全过程）。Justnow,Tomtoreupthepackage,squeezedoutonestripandtookabigbite.Structure1:

S+V1...,V2...,andV3....

动作1动作2动作39Justnow,Tomtoreupthepackage,squeezingoutonestripandtakingabigbite.Structure2:

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....orDoing...anddoing....,S+V3

动作1动作2动作302

Strategy2:generalwords→specificwordsabstractwords→concretewords

101.Olivewentintotheroom,tookhisbag,andwentoutagain.dashed/rangrabbed/grasped/seizedrushedExample1:generalwords→specificwords通用词汇→明确的词汇11Olivedashed/ranintotheroom,grabbed/grasped/seizedhisbag,andrushedoutagain.Example2:abstractwords→concretewords抽象词汇→具体词汇2.Thecakelookssodelicious.这蛋糕看起来很美味。

Thecakemakes

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这个蛋糕使我流口水。mymouthwater1203Strategy3:ActionScenes动作面13TheEventOrder(外研社必修一Unit5AnEncounterwithNature):12345①Iwalkedthroughaforest.②Iadmiredthelandscape.③IfeltIwasbeingwatched.④Isawaviolentbear.

⑤Itookaphotoofthebear.⑥Thebearranaway.15frozeTimestoodstillMylegsstartedshakingrecoveredfromtheshockfrighteningbutmagicalexperienceStep3:Summary(Mind-map)

Strategy1.actionchains：S+V1...,V2...,andV3....

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....orDoing...,anddoing...,S+V3

Strategy2.①:generalwords→specificwords

②:abstractwords→concretewords

Strategy3.actionscenes：

Combinethedescriptionsofactions,facialexpressions,psychologytogethertocreateasceneofactions.Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?16患有脑疾的小男孩David参加越野比赛，赛前他信心动摇想要放弃，“我“鼓励他积极面对困难，战胜自我，David接受了我的建议，尽管困难重重他依然勇敢地完成了比赛，赢得其了同学们的喝彩。(选自2022年高考全国1卷)Para2：IwatchedasDavidmovedtothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.He①__________________________________（转过头来看着我）andI②__________________________（我竖起大拇指向他示意，我为他感到骄傲）He③_________________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口气，准备比赛，眼里充满决心）.Withabang,everyrunner④______________(跑得像箭一样快).He⑤________________________________________________（尽管脚步异常，还是用尽全身力气跑）.Eventually，hefinishedtherunning.AsDavid,thelastone,madeittothefinishingline,⑥__________________________.(时间像静止了一样)Thunderousapplausebrokeout,withthenameDavidechoingagainandagain.1718患有脑疾的小男孩David参加越野比赛，赛前他信心动摇想要放弃，“我“鼓励他积极面对困难，战胜自我，David接受了我的建议，尽管困难重重他依然勇敢地完成了比赛，赢得其了同学们的喝彩。(选自2022年高考全国1卷)请运用所学技巧续写故事第二段：Para2：IwatchedasDavidmovedtothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.He①______________________（转过头来看着我）andI②________________________________________________（我竖起大拇指向他示意，我为他感到骄傲）.He③_______________________________________________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口气，准备比赛，眼里充满决心）.Withabang,everyrunner④_______________(跑得像箭一样快).He⑤________________________________________________（尽管脚步异常，还是用尽全身力气跑）.Eventually

，hefinishedtherunning.AsDavid,thelastone,madeittothefinishingline,⑥_______________________.(时间像静止了一样)Thunderousapplausebrokeout,withthenameDavidechoingagainandagain.turnedhisheadaroundtolookatmesignaledtohimwithathumbs-up,fe