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技法三打造读后续写的龙头凤尾技法点拨一、高分开头如何写好读后续写，在高考中博取阅卷老师的眼球，获得梦寐以求的高分？如何让学生的作品在高考中脱颖而出？这是很多老师和学生一直不懈努力的课题。一个好的故事开头就好比是一个香味十足的诱饵，诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地读完。而一个拙劣的故事开头，一定会让读者大倒胃口，昏昏欲睡。妙招1巧用形容词/副词(短语)①Happilyandexcitedly,theywenttothesupermarketforwhattheyneeded.②Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.妙招2巧用分词(短语)Seeingthemessinthekitchen,heimmediatelyunderstoodwhathadhappened,buthewasn'tupset.妙招3巧用高级句式①Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Mybrothercameupwithanideathathecouldcutthepumpkinwithaknife.(同位语从句)②Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Ithoveredoverthecamp,causingstrongwindthatblewthebearunsteadyonhisfeet.(非谓语动词＋定语从句)妙招4巧用倒装结构Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.HardlyhadthelittledogcomeoutwhenPoppycameovertolickitasifitwerealong-lostfriend.妙招5巧用强调句结构ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.Itwasmybrotherwhodidthatforamusement.二、漂亮结尾5法读后续写不能虎头蛇尾，在篇末也要用心设计。由于文章的故事性、情节性强，所以续写的结尾可以是自然的升华议论，亦可以是其他方式结尾。常见的结尾方式有画面定格、对话收尾、主题升华、结尾留白和首尾呼应等。妙招1画面定格法(1)人物动作的画面定格Slowly,almostreluctantly,sheplacedherarmwithapparentlyunaccustomedaffectionaroundhermother'sshouldersandgentlyguidedherbackintothecrowd.慢慢地，几乎是不情愿地，她用胳膊搂住母亲的肩膀，带着明显不习惯的慈爱，轻轻地领着她回到人群中。(2)特殊寓意的写景画面Lookingup,IsawthesunshinebrighterthanIeverknewbefore.抬头一看，我看到太阳比我以前所知道的还要明亮。妙招2对话收尾法Whenaskedhowthereunionwithhisfatherwillchangehislife,Chestersaid,“Igotfamilyeverywhere,soitmightleadtomanymoretripsnow.”当被问及与父亲团聚将如何改变他的生活时，切斯特说：“我到处都有家人，所以现在可能会导致更多的旅行。”妙招3主题升华法Asaproverbsays,“Everycoinhastwosides.”Makingfulluseofyourstrengthisyourachievement.Pleaserememberthatinnocasewillyougiveupespeciallyintrouble.Godisfairtoeveryone.正如谚语所说，“事物都有两面性。”充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。请记住，无论如何你都不要放弃，尤其是在麻烦中。上帝对每个人都是公平的。(借用名言警句来升华主题)妙招4结尾留白法“Wouldyoubeinterestedinjoiningmeinabitetoeat？”Iasked.“I'dloveto，”shereplied,hereyessparklinglikediamonds.And,thiswasthebeginningoftheendtomymonthsofheartbreakfollowingBetsy'sdeath.“你有兴趣和我一起吃点东西吗？”我问道。“我很乐意去，”她回答，眼睛像钻石一样闪闪发光。这是我在贝特西死后几个月的心碎终于开始慢慢愈合。(故事结尾留白，给予读者想象空间)妙招5首尾呼应法开头：Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.结尾：NeverhadIhadsuchathrillingyetdangerousvacationbefore.ThespecialtriptotheWildWestwasdeeplyengravedinmymind.真题体验(2023·浙江1月卷)Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend'sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鸟),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛网)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygoodbye.”注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。Paragraph1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Paragraph2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.【解题示范】第一步：精读短文，掌握关键信息。本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者被邀请去一个农场野餐，发现一所房子里有只蜂鸟被蜘蛛网困住了。作者把蜂鸟救了，带出去的时候它迟迟不肯飞走，当作者走到一条布满黑莓的小路时，它开始动了，却仍然不肯离去，徘徊着，后来终于飞走了。当作者准备离开农场时，蜂鸟又飞到作者面前，好像是在和作者告别。第二步：根据已知，构思续写思路。1．由第一段首句内容“几个星期后，我又去了农场。”可知，第一段可描写作者回到农场时所看到的和所想到的。2．由第二段首句内容“我正要离开，这时蜂鸟出现了。”可知，第二段可描写蜂鸟是如何对作者的以及作者的感想。第三步：结合情景，添加具体细节。根据题目所提供两段首句构思的续写思路，继而思考续写线索：想起救蜂鸟的时候——回到那个房子——想到那只蜂鸟——看见蜂鸟——蜂鸟的表现——作者的感想。第四步拟写草稿，修改错词病句。在搭建好写作框架和基本内容后，开始着手打草稿，对罗列的要点进行重新筛选和整合，适当拓展要点，尽量使用表意准确、形象生动、符合以英语为母语的人的习惯表达方式的高级词汇，同时应注意长短句结合，让句式灵活多变，以体现考生深厚的语言功底，使文章更出彩。如行为类：①思绪回到……：thoughtsdriftbackto/thoughtsreturnto②匆匆回到：rushbackto/hurrybackto③盯着：eyeslockedon/eyesstaringat；情绪类：①宽慰：feelasurgeofrelief/feelrelieved②感激：grateful/thankful；高分句式：AsmycarneareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthehummingbirdfromthespider'sweb.(由as引导的时间状语从句和when引导的限制性定语从句)，Itwasagreatcomfortthattheoriginalholeinthewindowwasnowheretobefound.(由that引导的主语从句)等。第五步润色成篇，规范誊写文章。在誊写文章时，还需要对语言进行修饰、润色，恰当运用衔接手段，以使文本紧凑流畅。【范文】Paragraph1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.AsmycarneareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthehummingbirdfromthespider'sweb.Irushedbacktothedesertedhouse.Itwasagreatcomfortthattheorigin