家庭诙谐故事之给小狗洗澡讲义（202312杭州四校联考续写解析）-高考英语复习作文专项

题目ItwasahotdayinFlorida.Theschoolyearhadjustendedanditwastimeforsummervacation.WehadjustgottenalittleblackdogwhowenamedOneEyed.Wechosethatnamebecausehecouldonlyseeoutofoneeye.Everybodywantedtodosomethingforthedog:feedhim,teachhimtricksandtakelongwalkswithhim.Everybodywassohappytohavethisactive,playfulandshaggynewadditiontoourfamily.Everybody,thatis,exceptmymomandme.Allmymomsawwhenshelookedatthedogwassomeoneelsetocleanup

after.Shedding,messy,muddy,hepouncedalloverthehouse.AllMomseemedtocareaboutwasgettingthehousecleaned.MymombegantoputClorox(高乐氏漂白水)inthebathtub.TherewasnomessingwithMomwhenshestartedcleaning,soIdecidedtomoveoutoftheway,Actually,gettingoutofthewayisamoveI’dbeenpracticingforalongtime.Beingtheyoungestinmyfamilyhashaditsadvantages,ofcourse.MorethanafewtimesIwasspoiledoreveryonesaidIwasthecutest.Butbeingtheyoungestalsocamewithitsfairshareoftroubles.“You’retooyoung!”“You’llmessthisup!”they’doftensay.IknewthatmyfamilylovedmebutIcouldn’twaittoshowthemIcoulddothingsbymyself.EverytimeIaskedmybrotherormysisterifIcouldpetOneEyed,theywouldshout,“No!”ortellmethatIhadgermsandifItouchedOneEyed,hewoulddie!Ireallybelievedthem.OnceIevenconfessedtomymomthatItouchedthedogwhennoonenoticed.Atfirst,mymomseemedveryconfusedaboutwhatIwastellingher,butthensherealized.Mymomscoldedmybrotherandsister,“Youbetterstopteasingyourlittlebrother!”Littlebrother!That’sexactlywhatIwas.Thatreallygotmybloodboiling.Secretly,Idecided,“I’llshowthemwhatalittlekidcando.”注意：1.

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请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Thatafternoon,Itookthedogandsneakedintothebathroom.

Paragraph2:Ithoughtmymomwouldpunishme,butshewasjuststandingthereandlaughing.

Analysisofplot这篇文章讲述了在佛罗里达度过炎热夏日的故事。学年结束了，暑假开始了。家里迎来了一只小黑狗，取名为OneEved(独眼)，因为它只有一只眼睛能看见。家人们都很开心，想要喂养、教它技巧，并和它一起散步。但除了妈妈和主人公之外，其他人都很开心有这个活跃、好玩且毛茸茸的新成员。主人公是家里最小的，经常被认为太小而被忽视，但他决心要证明自己能独立完成事情。推测题目：IFlushedIttocleansthbycausingwatertopassthroughit.五要素分析：时间Theschoolyearhadjustendedanditwastimeforsummervacation.地点Florida人物theauthor,mymom,mybrother.mysister新添加人物alittleblackdogwhowenamedOneEyedEmotionalChanges：这个故事中包含了家庭成员间的欢乐、挑战和争执。家人对于新成员的到来感到高兴和兴奋，但主人公和他的妈妈对于照顾这只狗所带来的麻烦感到困扰。主人公作为家里最小的成员，面临着被忽视和被低估的情感，但他内心充满了决心和渴望被认可的渴望。整个故事通过孩子的视角展现了勇气、挑战和成长的情感线。同学写作面临的苦难：同学们比较擅长写心灵鸡汤或者文章有明显矛盾或冲突类的文章，对于本篇这种家庭诙谐幽默小故事反而手足无措，比如浙江考过的“南瓜”卡头，还有感恩节父亲切火鸡腿摔倒。原文心理描写：Psychologicaldescription1.Everybodywassohappytohavethisactive,playfulandshaggynewadditiontoourfamily.Everybody,thatis,exceptmymomandme.2.ButbeingtheyoungestalsocamewithitsfairshareofknewthatmyfamilylovedmebutIcouldn'twaittoshowthemIcoulddothingsbymyself.3.EverytimeIaskedmybrotherormysisterifIcouldpetOneEyed,theywouldshout,“No!”ortellmethatIhadgermsandifItouchedOneEyed,hewoulddie!4.Allmymomsawwhenshelookedatthedogwassomeoneelsetocleanup

after.Shedding,messy,muddy,hepouncedalloverthehouse.AllMomseemedtocareaboutwasgettingthehousecleaned.MymombegantoputClorox(高乐氏漂白水)inthebathtub.下水文：Paragraph1:Thatafternoon,Itookthedogandsneakedintobathroom.Havingclosedthedoorbehindus,l,withdetermination,turnedtoOneEyed,“1willgiveyouarefreshingshower!”Seeminglyabitconfused,OneEyedstaredatme,wagginghistailAsIfilledthetubwithwarmwaterandguidedhiminside,he,withoutanyhesitationjumpedinwithasplash.IlatheredhimwiththeshampooandscrubbedthedirtoffhimasMomhaddone.EverythingwasgoingjustasIhadhopeduntilincamemybrother'svoice,“OneEyed!”Immediately,thedogsprangtohisfeet,shookhisbodyandjumpedoutofthetub,waterandfoamssplatteringallover.Worsestill,hebarkedfranticallyatthedoor.Myheartsankwhenthedoorwasopened,andmomstoodbehindit.(125w)Paragraph2:Ithoughtmymomwouldpunishme,butshewasjuststandingthereandlaughing.Ihungmyheaddown,avoidinganyeyecontactwithmom.Insteadofscoldingmeforthechaos,mymomsteppedforwardandwipedfoamsfrommyforehead.“Sorry,mom.ljustwanttodomypartforthefamily.”lapologized.Withalovingpatonmyshouldershereassuredme,“Youdidgreat.Now,let'scleanupthismesstogethershallwe?”Inodded.Laterthatday,l,togetherwithmom,gotthebathroomandOneEyedcleaned.Finishingthis,IrealizedthatIcouldprovemyselfcapableevenastheyoungestandmymomwastheretocheermeoneverystepoftheway.(107w)参考范文：Thatafternoon,Itookthedogandsneakedintothebathroom.“I'mgoingtogiveyouabath!"Iannounced.OneEyedlookedatmestrangely,obviouslynotunderstandingwhatIwassaying.Itookmysister’sshampooandpouredthewholebottleintothebathtub.ThenIcoaxedthedoginandstartedscrubbingthedirtoffhimwithourtowels.However,thingsquicklygotmessy.Soapandwatersplashedeverywhere;bubblesfloatedliketiny,soapysnowflakes.OneEyedshookhimselfvigorouslyandbarkedexcitedly,soonturningthebathroomintoawetbattleground.Itshouldhavebeenmysecretmission,butnow,itturnedintoadisaster!Panicking,Iranouttoseekhelp,onlytofindmymomatthedoor.(111w)

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