2024版高考英语复习写作提升：必须会用的读后续写5步建构技法

写作专项提升第四讲必须会用的读后续写5步

建构技法英语典型例题(2021新高考全国Ⅰ卷)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。A

MOTHER’S

DAY

SURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhentheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意:续写词数应为150左右。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________五步建构,续写成功第一步

抓大意,定主题速读所给信息,了解文章大意,确定写作主题。文章大意一对双胞胎在母亲节为母亲做早饭,给母亲惊喜写作主题表达孩子对母亲的爱第二步

理双情,思细节梳理文章情节和情感两条线索,确定续写情节和情感。Parts情节情感已给信息计划为母亲做早饭excited如何准备做早饭curious/pleased做早饭遭受失败anxious/panicky/calm续写第一段父亲了解孩子的意图delighted/proud父亲和孩子共同做早饭excited/delighted续写第二段孩子带早饭上楼excited母亲惊喜moved第三步

四句话,建框架借助四句话,建构续写框架,明确续写方向。位置与功能内容Para.1第二句承上启下“Don’tpanic!”hehandedeachoneawettowel,helpingthemcleanthemessquickly.段尾句Everythingsettled,Fatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.Para.2第二句Meetingtheirsmilingeyes,Motherfeltconfuseduntiltheypresentedthebreakfastandsaid,“HappyMother’sDay!”段尾句回扣主题WhatabigsurpriseonMother’sDay!第四步

活表达,定语言原文使用了定语从句、感叹句、非谓语动词、名词性从句、状语从句、并列复合句等高级表达手段,在续写部分要灵活沿用这些手法为自己的写作增光添彩。第五步

巧衔接,保流畅在叙述事情的发展时可采用时间状语从句、非谓语动词、副词等形式进行连接,以使行文流畅自然。【满分作文】As

the

twins

looked

around

them

in

disappointment,their

father

appeared.

“Don’tpanic!”hehandedeachoneawettowel,helpingthemcleanthemessquickly.Afterthat,Jeffstammeredouttheirplan,withhisfaceflushing.

However,Fatherlaughed,“Soundsgreat!Let’sdoittogether!”Hearingthis,

JennaandJeffalmostjumpedtotheirfeet,joyineyes.Underhiscarefulguidance,itdidn’ttakelongbeforetheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Everythingsettled,Fatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.The

twins

carried

the

breakfast

upstairs

and

woke

their

mother

up.Meetingtheirsmilingeyes,Motherfeltconfuseduntiltheypresentedthebreakfastandsaid,“HappyMother’sDay!”Mothergavethematighthug,

saying,“Unbelievable!Youcancook!It’sthebiggestsurprisethatIhavereceived.”Herfacelitupwithhappiness.“Theyhaveknownhowtotakecareofothers,”Fathersaidinresponsetoherexcitement,winkingatJennaandJeff.

Theycouldn’thelpgiggling.WhatabigsurpriseonMother’sDay!跟踪训练(2022新高考全国Ⅰ卷)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路线)throughthethickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallforten-year-olds.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意:续写词数应为150左右。Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________We

sat

down

next

to

each

other,but

David

wouldn’t

look

at

me.Ireachedoutmyhandandpattedhimontheshouldergently,sayingthathewasagreatboywithstrongdeterminationandthatfacedwithdifficultieshealwaystriedhisbesttoovercome